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1、高考英语书面表达特训高考英语书面表达特训 单俊刚2010.12.122010.12.12一、弄清一个概念1. 1. 优秀英语作文的标准是什么？优秀英语作文的标准是什么？极优档（3030分）（很少）分）（很少）上 档（18-2918-29分）分）一优秀（一优秀（26262929） 要点全面，紧扣主题，观点表达充分，能有效使用连接成分，具备较强的要点全面，紧扣主题，观点表达充分，能有效使用连接成分，具备较强的书面表达能力。语言小错（拼写，标点）少于四个，不能有一处大错。书面表达能力。语言小错（拼写，标点）少于四个，不能有一处大错。二良好（二良好（22-2522-25） 要点全面紧扣主题，观点表达较

2、充分，语言有少量错误，（大错不超过三要点全面紧扣主题，观点表达较充分，语言有少量错误，（大错不超过三个。）但基本不影响意思表达。个。）但基本不影响意思表达。三一般（三一般（18182121） 要点全面，紧扣主题。语言表达基本充分，语言错误影响部分意思的表达，要点全面，紧扣主题。语言表达基本充分，语言错误影响部分意思的表达，但但多数多数句子基本正确。句子基本正确。说明：说明：作文要达到及格线（作文要达到及格线（18分）以上，必须要点全。也就是说，如果缺要点最分）以上，必须要点全。也就是说，如果缺要点最多只能得多只能得17分。但又同时规定，对于语言表达特别好的作文可以突破这个限制，分。但又同时规定

3、，对于语言表达特别好的作文可以突破这个限制，划入良好档，但最多不得超过划入良好档，但最多不得超过22分。关于时态，每出现一处时态错误，均以大错分。关于时态，每出现一处时态错误，均以大错论处。论处。下 档（017分）四四 较差较差（13-1713-17）能够写出基本要点，行文不连贯，语言错误较多，能够写出基本要点，行文不连贯，语言错误较多，半数半数句子基本正确句子基本正确五五差差(6-12)(6-12)能够写出部分要点，能够写出部分与内容相关的可读句。能够写出部分要点，能够写出部分与内容相关的可读句。六六很差很差（0-50-5）只能写出与内容相关的词语，没有有效信息，抄写其他文章或只写出部分单只

4、能写出与内容相关的词语，没有有效信息，抄写其他文章或只写出部分单词。词。一、弄清一个概念1. 1. 优秀英语作文的标准是什么？优秀英语作文的标准是什么？补充说明：补充说明：1. 1. 关于大错小错问题：关于大错小错问题：小错：单词拼写，冠词，大小写，标点符号错误。小错：单词拼写，冠词，大小写，标点符号错误。大错：搭配错误，词语用错，（介词，名词，动词，形容词副词，主谓一致，非谓大错：搭配错误，词语用错，（介词，名词，动词，形容词副词，主谓一致，非谓语动词，句式结构）语动词，句式结构） 2. 字数少于字数少于120，减去，减去2分。分。3. 书写差，减去书写差，减去2分，如影响交际，将分数降低一

5、个档次。分，如影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。 总结总结：什么样的作文是一篇好作文：什么样的作文是一篇好作文 无遗漏信息点，即要点全面无遗漏信息点，即要点全面 篇章条理清晰：分段和过渡词篇章条理清晰：分段和过渡词 句式复杂多样句式复杂多样 地道的高级词汇和恰当的词组地道的高级词汇和恰当的词组接下来，我们具体感知一下优秀作文的要素。接下来，我们具体感知一下优秀作文的要素。二、感知典型范例二、感知典型范例词汇层面词汇层面1 adj. 聪明的、脑筋好的聪明的、脑筋好的 clever wise wise smart smart bright bright intelligentintelligent二、

6、感知典型范例词汇层面词汇层面2adj.adj.令人惊奇的令人惊奇的 surprisingamazingamazingastonishingastonishing 他昨天下午来的。他昨天下午来的。1. he came here yesterday afternoon.2. he didnt come here until yesterday afternoon.3. not until yesterday afternoon did he come here.4. it was yesterday afternoon that he came here.二、感知典型范例句型层面句型层面1 令她吃

7、惊的是，小女孩知道这么多事情。令她吃惊的是，小女孩知道这么多事情。1. he is surprised that the little girl knows so many things.2. to his surprise , the little girl knows so many things.3. what surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.二、感知典型范例句型层面句型层面2二、感知典型范例段落层面段落层面1this village is very small. it has nearly 100 f

8、amilies and about 500 people. it used to be very poor. it has changed a lot since 1978 . people here are richer than before. now it is taking on a new look.this village is very small，which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. it used to be very poor. however, it has changed a lot since 1978

9、 . people here are leading a richer and happier life than before. now it is taking on a new look.二、感知典型范例段落层面段落层面2i think, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents though we are busy. our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them

10、live happily. we can build a harmonious society only when all of us care for the aged.as far as i am concerned, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents however busy we are. whats more, our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help the

11、m live a happy life. only when all of us care for the aged can we build a harmonious society二、感知典型范例篇章层面篇章层面1卷面不整洁卷面不整洁; ; 涂改较多涂改较多; ;语言错误语言错误多多; ;层次不清层次不清; ;得得1111分分二、感知典型范例篇章层面篇章层面2字数不够或未能传达读字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息，不得分。者任何信息，不得分。书写书写对比鲜明对比鲜明 poor poor篇章层面篇章层面3excellentexcellent三、阅卷老师忠告1.网上阅卷对卷面要求提高。网上阅卷对卷

12、面要求提高。 阅卷教师看电脑屏评分，屏幕上视觉比纸上印象阅卷教师看电脑屏评分，屏幕上视觉比纸上印象更突出，更突出，每行高度约为直线格的每行高度约为直线格的2/3的作文视觉效果的作文视觉效果最佳，此类作文错误少并用有效连接成分就能高分。最佳，此类作文错误少并用有效连接成分就能高分。2.中等水平学生容易成为中等水平学生容易成为最吃亏学生群最吃亏学生群。 高考阅卷特点高考阅卷特点，决定了阅卷时间短、速度快、赋，决定了阅卷时间短、速度快、赋分中庸。两极的考生优劣分明，容易赋分，而中等分中庸。两极的考生优劣分明，容易赋分，而中等学生，如果出现学生，如果出现书写潦草或低级错误容易出现得分书写潦草或低级错误

13、容易出现得分趋低情况，成为最吃亏的一个群体趋低情况，成为最吃亏的一个群体。3.书面表达是提高平均分最大的潜力股书面表达是提高平均分最大的潜力股。 平均分：平均分：15分分 峰值：峰值：1719分分 提升空间巨大提升空间巨大四、明确写作步骤 1. cross-question(审题审题) main idea style verb tense person2. seize the major points /key words (抓要点抓要点)figure out the outline(提纲提纲)4. ensure the fluency (添加过渡，确保添加过渡，确保连贯）连贯）conjunc

14、tions/ conjunctive adverbspassage5. error correcting ( 查错改错查错改错)3. sentences connection (连句成文连句成文)words/phrases sentencespassage四、明确写作步骤抄抄改改连连扩扩抓抓审审书面书面表达表达五、培养几种技能a)simple sentence(简单句简单句):hearing the news, he was happy. b) compound sentence a（并列句）（并列句）:he gave me a book but i forgot to bring it ba

15、ck home. c) compound sentence b（复合句）（复合句）:what he is doing has nothing to do with me.“规范的英语句子规范的英语句子”就是我们经常讲就是我们经常讲的三种句子：的三种句子：1.学会使用规范的英语句子here are 3 ways to make sentences:i.巧妙运用短语，写出规范的简单句：巧妙运用短语，写出规范的简单句：1)借助名词短语做同位语借助名词短语做同位语如：如：李立，男，李立，男，19岁，岁，1991年生；籍贯：年生；籍贯：广东。广东。li li, a boy of 19, was born

16、 in guangdong in 1991.2)借助介词短语做定语借助介词短语做定语 如：如：李飞李飞, 男，男，10岁，棕色短发，穿白色茄克。岁，棕色短发，穿白色茄克。li fei is a ten-year-old boy with short brown hair and in a white jacket.如：如：有了有了tom的帮助，我们很快就找到的帮助，我们很快就找到了他们的村子。了他们的村子。with the help of tom, we soon found their village.4)借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语 如：如：他们站在大树下，

17、等待着总统的到来。他们站在大树下，等待着总统的到来。they were standing under the big tree, waiting for the president.standing under the big tree, they were waiting for the president.3)借助介词短语做状语借助介词短语做状语ii. ii. 巧用连接词，写出规范的并列句：巧用连接词，写出规范的并列句： 如：如：他给我很多钱，我不要。他给我很多钱，我不要。i was just walking down the street corner when i saw you. 如

18、：如：我刚走到拐角处，就见到你了。我刚走到拐角处，就见到你了。 he gave me a lot of money but i refused. iii. iii. 用好从句和引导词写出规范的复合句：用好从句和引导词写出规范的复合句：1) 名词性从句名词性从句如：如：老师生气。原因：王力迟到。老师生气。原因：王力迟到。that wang li came late to school made the teacher very angry.2) 定语从句定语从句如：如：中国中国,地处亚洲东部；特点：地大物博、人口地处亚洲东部；特点：地大物博、人口众多。众多。 china, which lies

19、in the east of asia, is a great country with a large area and population as well as rich natural resources. i was deeply moved by this, because i know lei feng is still living in our hearts.3) 状语从句状语从句如：如：雷锋还活在我们心中，我深受感动。雷锋还活在我们心中，我深受感动。2、灵活运用九种句式 有意识的将下列句式结构运用到作文中去，有意识的将下列句式结构运用到作文中去，可以迅速地让我们的作文靓起来

20、。重要的是可以迅速地让我们的作文靓起来。重要的是我们要学会如何灵活的变通、巧妙地运用到我们要学会如何灵活的变通、巧妙地运用到考试作文中去。考试作文中去。1. people grow rice in the south of china. rice is grown in the south of china. 2. they have printed one and a half million copies of the dictionary since 1986. one and a half million copies of the dictionary have been print

21、ed since 1986.一、主动句与被动句的互换。一、主动句与被动句的互换。二、将陈述句改为倒装句。二、将陈述句改为倒装句。1.i could hardly understand the importance of english at that time. hardly could i understand the importance of english at that time. 2. we did not realize our mistakes until at that time. not until at that time did we realize our mista

22、kes.三、将简单句改为强调句三、将简单句改为强调句1. smoking did great harm to his health. it was smoking that did great harm to his health. 2. our money is earned through hard work by our parents. it is through hard work that our money is earned by our parents.3. he went there yesterday. he did go there yesterday.四、将两个简单句

23、合并为并列句四、将两个简单句合并为并列句1.you can do it. i can do it. one of us must do it. you i must do it.2.i want to buy this bike. i dont have enough money. i want to buy this bike, i dont have enough money.eitherorbut五、将两个简单句合并为复合句五、将两个简单句合并为复合句1. 同位语和同位语从句同位语和同位语从句1) liu xiang is an excellent athlete. he won the

24、 first prize in mens 110 hurdle race in the 2004 olympic games. _, _, won the first prize in mens 110 hurdle race in the 2004 olympic games.2) the word is true. the president will give our school a speech. _ is true _ the president will give our school a speech.liu xiangan excellent athleteitthat2.

25、定语从句定语从句 1) the 2008 olympic games will be held in beijing, and its slogan is one world, one dream, the 2008 olympic games, _ _2) in my opinion, the great wall and the summer palace are well worth visiting. in my opinion, the great wall and the summer palace _3) yesterday, we went to the east gate,

26、and we bought a lot of clothes. yesterday, we went to the east gate, _ _one dream, will be held in beijing.are the two places which are well worth visiting.where we bought awhose slogan is one world,lot of clothes.3. 主语从句主语从句1) his wonderful performance on the stage impressed me. most was his wonder

27、ful performance on the stage.2) it satisfied me. the dining hall provides us with a large variety of kinds of dishes. the dining hall provides us with a large variety of kinds of dishes.3) i learned from the story that as long as we have patience, confidence and perseverance, we can realize our drea

28、ms. as long as we have patience, confidence and perseverance, we can realize our dreams.what impressed mewhat satisfied me is thatwhat i have learnt from the story is that 推荐句型推荐句型 what surprises astonished satisfied impressed me is that what i would like to suggest advise put forward is that what m

29、atters most is that what i learnconclude from the story is that4. 表语从句表语从句推荐句型：推荐句型： is no longer what it used to be.1) 我的家乡不再像以前那样了。我的家乡不再像以前那样了。 my hometown is no longer what it used to be.2) 他不再是以前那样了。他不再是以前那样了。 he is no longer what he used to be.5. 状语从句状语从句 结果、程度结果、程度 sothat ; such that 让步让步 no

30、matter how what when where. =whatever, however, whenever, wherever 时间时间 was doingwhen , as soon as, the moment, the next time, every time1)不管前面有多少困难，我们都要学会独立的不管前面有多少困难，我们都要学会独立的克服他们。克服他们。 _ _, we should learn to overcome them independently. 2) 我正沿着马路走，突然我听到有人叫我。我正沿着马路走，突然我听到有人叫我。 i _ along the road

31、_ suddenly i heard my name called.no matter how many difficulties therewas walkingwhenare ahead of us,六、将两个简单句合并为一个由六、将两个简单句合并为一个由which引导的非限引导的非限制性定语从句制性定语从句1. recently many students spend their money on unnecessary things. different people have different opinions about it. recently many students sp

32、end their money on unnecessary things, about different people have different opinions.2. many boys learn to smoke. it does harm to their health. many boys learn to smoke, _ _whichwhich does harm totheir health.七、七、it 作形式主语或形式宾语句型作形式主语或形式宾语句型1. you pretend to know what you dont know. its no good. its

33、 no good pretending to know what you dont know.2. it is easy to get on with pam. i find. i find it easy to get on with pam.八、分词结构代替状语从句八、分词结构代替状语从句1. if you work harder, you will do better in the exam next time. _, you will do better in the exam next time.2. because my friend was frightened of losin

34、g his job, he said nothing to the police. _, my friend said nothing to the police.working hard frightened of losing his job 九、九、 将状语从句或并列句中的其中一个分句将状语从句或并列句中的其中一个分句变成变成with 引导的短语或者复合结构引导的短语或者复合结构。 with + 宾语宾语+ adj./ adv./ 介词短语介词短语/ to dodoingdone 常用句型常用句型 with a population of. with a total area of wi

35、th a long history of years1) 这个地区占地这个地区占地2000平方千米，人口平方千米，人口10万。万。 this area covers an area of 2000 square kilometers, _2)我们学校周围种了很多花，吸引了大量的我们学校周围种了很多花，吸引了大量的学生来参观。学生来参观。 _, it attracts a large number of people.3) 我们学校是一所有我们学校是一所有100多年历史的名校。多年历史的名校。 our school is a famous one _ _ with a population of

36、 100,000. with many flowers surrounding our school with a history of over 100 years. 4）没有做完作业，这个小孩不敢去上学。）没有做完作业，这个小孩不敢去上学。 _, the boy dared not go to school.5) 这两个男人早早就睡了，蜡烛烧了一晚上。这两个男人早早就睡了，蜡烛烧了一晚上。 the two men went to bed early, _ _.6) 他睡觉的时候嘴巴张得大大的。他睡觉的时候嘴巴张得大大的。 he sleep _.with candles burning a

37、night long with homework not finished with his mouth wide open 六、牢记典型模板六、牢记典型模板(一一) 观点论证型观点论证型结构模板结构模板1 (1)it is well known that 论点. (2)the truth is deep and profound./the truth of it is self-evident. (3) 正确性表现. (4)总结论点. (5)many remarkable factors/reasons contribute to this argument. (6)first of all

38、, 论据一. (7)whats more/moreover, 论据二. (8)for example, 支持论据二的事例. in addition/besides, 论据三. (10)all mentioned above tell us that 重申观点. (11)therefore, there is no denying that 正确态度或做法. (12)in short, 总结全文. 结构模板结构模板2 (1)论点, which has been generally accepted. (2) 论点含义. (3)the truth of it is deep and profoun

39、d. (4)there are numerous examples supporting this argument. /many remarkable examples contribute to this argument. (5)a case in point is 例证一. (6)this is close to suggest例证一的道理. (7)for another example, 例证二. (8)moreover, 例证三. (9)judging from the evidence offered, we might safely draw the conclusion th

40、at重申观点. but one thing we have to notice is 需要注意的问题. (11)in short, 总结全文. (二二) 问题解决型问题解决型结构模板结构模板1 (1)nowadays, it is generally accepted that 总述问题. (2)表现一. (3)表现二. (4)there are many reasons accounting for 该问题./special attention should be paid to the fact that该问题 is bringing great damage. (5)on the one

41、 hand/for one thing, 原因一/危害一. (6)on the other hand/for another, 原因二/危害二. (7)therefore, it is high time that 解决该问题. (8)many a way can be adopted to解决该问题. /many a factor plays an important role in解决该问题. (9)firstly/first of all, 方法一/因素一. (10)secondly/in addition, 方法二/因素二. (11)thirdly/besides/moreover,

42、方法三/因素三. (12)only through these ways/only in this way 该问题才能够解决.结构模板结构模板2 (1)recently, there has been a discussion about总述该问题. / nowadays, it has become a common phenomenon总述该问题. (2) 危害一/原因一 . additionally , 危害二/原因二 . (4)therefore, it is high time that解决该问题. (5)the following ways can be adopted to解决该

43、问题. /some effective measures have been taken to解决该问题. /many a factor plays an important role in解决该问题. (6)firstly/first of all, 方法一/因素一. (7)secondly/in addition, 方法二/因素二. (8)thirdly/besides/moreover, 方法三/因素三. (9)only through these ways/only in this way该问题才能够解决. (10)there is no doubt that解决该问题的意义. (11

44、)as for me, 我的建议或看法. (12) 总结观点. (三三) 现象解释型现象解释型结构模板结构模板1 (1)from the chart/graph/table/picture, we clearly learn that 总述社会现象/事实, which has aroused great/common concern. (2)what impresses us most is 图表中重点数据. (3)there are many reasons accounting for 现象或变化. (4)first of all/to begin with, 原因一. (5)what i

45、s more/moreover, 原因二. (6)进一步说明原因二. (7) in addition/besides, 原因三 . (8)therefore/as a result, 总结原因导致的结果. (9)as to me/as far as i am concerned, 我的观点. (10)for one thing/on the one hand, 影响一/问题一. (11) for another/on the other hand, 影响二/问题二. thus/in brief/to conclude, 总结观点.结构模板结构模板2 (1)as is shown/describ

46、ed/depicted in the cartoon/picture, 图表内容概括(2)in the first picture, 描述图表一内容(如果是一个图表，则左或上半部分)(3) as is shown in the second drawing/following pictures, 描述图表二内容(如果是二个图表，则或右或下半部分)(4)it is safe to draw the conclusion that揭示寓意(或主题句，回应主题但不是主题句的重复)(描述图表段描述图表段) (5)there are many reasons responsible for this p

47、henomenon/case/instance and the following are the typical ones. (6)the first reason is that 理由一理由一(7)the second reason is that理由二理由二(8)the third mason is that/a case in point is that/the typical example is that 理由三理由三(说明原因段说明原因段) (9)in order to improve the situation/to sum up the above argument/conf

48、ronted with such an issue/a problem, we should find several solutions to it/need to take sox positive measures. (10)on the one hand/for one thing we should方法建议方法建议一一(11)on the other hand/for another, 方法建方法建议二议二(12)therefore/thus/only in this way, can总总结句结句 (个人观点段个人观点段)模板示例模板示例study the following pic

49、tures carefullyand write an essay of about 150 words.your essay should cover all the information provided and meet the requirement below:1. interpret the following pictures.2. give your reasons to this phenomenon. (1)as is shown in the picture, the situation of college students employment is worseni

50、ng, as it is hard for them to be accepted by an employer upon graduation. (2) in the two bar pictures we can see that the number of both college graduates and post graduates increased from 1990 to 2001. (3)as is shown in the following pictures, nearly 50,000, or 10% of college graduates in the city

51、become jobless in the year 2001. (4)it is safe to draw the conclusion that college students, once the god favored few, are now in their hard times. (5)there are many reasons responsible for this phenomenon and the following are the typical ones. (6)the first reason is that the citys economic structu

52、re is changing so fast that many college graduates are not ready for the challenge. (7) the second reason is that type of economy has been changed to the knowledge economy that features high and new technologies and modern management. the requirement to graduates is more and more high. (8)the third

53、reason is that many universities failed to change their education plans to meet the societys needs, so that they will not be able to produce students fully prepared. as a result, it is not hard to see that many students cannot find a job that matches their majors. (9)in order to improve the situatio

54、n, we should find several solutions to it. (10) for one thing, the unemployment rate will continue to fall as more and more graduates choose to further their education. (11)for another, college graduates should be encouraged to take the post which may not matches their majors and keep learning in th

55、e process of practice. (12) only in this way, can college students find job opportunities in the society.(四四) 对比选择型对比选择型结构模板结构模板1 (1)when it comes to 事物事物/问题问题, there is no complete agreement among people. (2)some people take it for granted that 一种观点一种观点. (3)however, others maintain that 另一种观点另一种观点.

56、 (4)those people who hold the former opinion believe 观点一理由一观点一理由一. (5)in a addition, 观点一理观点一理由二由二. (6)therefore 总结观点一总结观点一. (7)however, still others advocate the latter opinion because they hold 观点二理由一观点二理由一. (8)besides, they argue that 观点二理由二观点二理由二. (9)so, 总结观点二总结观点二. (10)weighing up these two argu

57、ments, 我的看法我的看法. (11)for one thing, 个人看法的依个人看法的依据一据一. (12)for another, 个人看法的依据二个人看法的依据二. (13)taking above-mentioned factors into consideration, we/ i may reasonably conclude that 重申观点重申观点.结构模板结构模板2 (1)different people have different views on 看法/问题. (2)some prefer 一种看法/观点. (3)others tend to 另一种看法/观点.

58、 (4)as to me, i agree to the first/second opinion. (5)of course, 我不赞同观点的合理性. (6)for example, 支持其合理性的例子. (7)but in my opinion, 我不赞同观点的不足. (8)the following reasons can account for my argument. (9)firstly, 支持观点的理由一. (10)a good example to illustrate is支持理由一的例子. (11)in addition/moreover/whats more, 支持观点的

59、理由二. (12)to conclude/from the foregoing, 重申观点. 结构模板结构模板3 (1)when asked about/when it comes to 事物/问题, different people will offer different opinions. (2)some people take it for granted that 观点一 . (3)in their opinion, 观点一的理由一. (4)besides, 观点一的理由二 . (5)however, others hold 观点二 . (6)they maintain 观点二理由一

60、. (7)and 观点二理由二. (8)weighing up these two arguments, 我的观点. (9)for one thing/on the one hand, 理由一. (10)for another/on the other hand, 理由二. (11)for instance, as stated above, 总结全文.(五五) 漫画作文漫画作文结构模板结构模板1 (1)it is shown/depicted/described in the picture that 图表内容总括. (2)进一步阐述图表内容. (3)as is symbolically r