高考英语一轮复习+海滩酒吧老板的救赎：拯救少年与丢失的戒指+课件

高考英语读后续写语篇练习海滩酒吧老板的救赎：拯救少年与丢失的戒指1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part1题目呈现3续写原文AworriedcallcameintoJimmyGill’sbarthispastMarch.Anewlymarriedwomanwhohadspenttheafternoonatthebeachbarcouldn’tfindherwallet.Shedidn’tcareaboutherID,creditcards,or$150incash-butherweddingringwasputinside.Gilldidn’tliketheideathatatheftcouldhaveoccurredathisplace.Sohesetouttofindthewallet.Hespenthoursscanningfootage(影片片段）from16differentsurveillance(监控)，cameras,watchingthewoman’severystepinthebaruntilshewenttositonabenchoutsideandleftwhenherridearrived.Withinminutes,ayoungmaninajacketapproachedthebench,putsomethinghurriedinhispocket,andwalkedoff.Gillpostedacliponthebar’sFacebookpage.“Ididn’twanttoaccusehim,”hesaid.“Ijustaskedifanybodyknewwhotheguywas.”4续写原文Withinhours,Gillgotatextfrom17-year-oldRiversPrather,who’dheardaboutthepostfromoneofhisfriends.PratheradmittedhavingtakenthewalletandtoldGillhe’ddoneitbecausehehadn’teatenintwodays.Hesaidhesawtheringbutthoughtitwasfake,sohetookthemoneyandthrewthewalletoffthedock(码头)intotheocean.Thenheboughtasandwich.Gill,unsurewhetherhebelievedPrather,toldtheteentomeethimatthedock.There,theygottotalking,andPratherrevealedthathewasn’tgettingalongwithhisfamilyandhadbeenlivinginthewoodsforaweek.Gill,afatheroftwowithanotherontheway,lookcloselyatPrather-hissmallbuild,hispalecheeks-andsawhimforwhathewas:moreofakidthanacriminal.Butthepolicewerealreadyonthecase,andbecauseofthemissingring,Prathercouldbefacingcharges.“Hewouldbegoingtojail,”Gillsays.“Ihadtohelphimsomehow.”5段首句Para1：Thenextday,Gillhiredtwodiverstosearchthewaters.Para2：Suddenlyadivercameoutofthewater.6Part2题目分析7续写原文分析8这篇续写以故事情节发展为线索，海滩酒吧的老板Gill接到投诉，一位女士的钱包被偷，里面有她的订婚戒指。Gill查了酒吧的监控，找到了线索，并将视频片段传到网上，想通过网络的力量找到拿走钱包的人。几小时后，一个叫Prather的17岁少年主动联系了他。两人见面后，Prather讲述了拿走钱包的缘由，作为两个孩子的父亲，Gill决定不追究其责任,觉得Prather更是一个孩子。但警察正在跟踪此案，Prather有可能面临严重的指控。Gill决定帮助这个少年，他请了两个潜水员去Prather扔钱包的地方搜寻。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点9续写思路分析Para1:Thenextday,Gillhiredtwodiverstosearchthewaters.由第一段首句内容“第二天Gill请了两个潜水员去Prather扔钱包的地方搜寻。”可知第一段描写潜水员在水里搜钱包的情况，以及岸上等待搜寻结果的警察、Gill和Parther的情况。10续写思路分析Para2：Suddenlyadivercameoutofthewater.由第二段首句内容“突然，一个潜水员露出水面。”可知第二段描述搜寻情况，按照读后续写积极向上的导向，应该是找到了戒指，Prather免除指控。11续写素材续写素材潜水员搜寻——一直没搜到——警察审问Prather——潜水员搜到戒指——失主解除指控——Gill继续帮助Prather12续写素材续写素材行为类①.审问：question/interrogate②.撤销指控：dropthecharge/cancelthecharge③.恢复：getononeselffoot/recover④.突然大哭：burstintotears/burstoutcrying情绪类①.担心：beworriedabout/troubleabout/grewworried②.开心：morethandelighted/extremelyhappy13续写素材续写素材[高分句型1]Gillgrewworried,especiallywhenthepolicebeginquestioningPeter,tryingtogethimtoadmitkeepingthering.（运用了when引导的时间状语从句；运用了现在分词短语作的伴随状语）[高分句型2]Hetoldtheteenhecouldstaywithhisfamilyuntiltheboygotonhisfeetagain.（运用了省略that的宾语从句；运用了until引导的时间状语从句）14Part3范文呈现15范文呈现Thenextday,Gillhiredtwodiverstosearchthewaters.Apolicewaswaitingforthemthere.Acrowdhadtogethertowatchthetwodiverssearchinthestrongcurrent.Morethananhourpassedwithnosignofthering.Gillgrewworried,especiallywhenthepolicebeginquestioningPeter,tryingtogethimtoadmitkeepingthering.16范文呈现Suddenlyadivercameoutofthewater.Inhishandwasthewallet,andinsidewasthering.Cheersbrokeoutinthecrowd.WhenGillcalledthewallet’sowner,thewomanburstintotears.ShewasmorethandelightedandpromptlydroppedthechargeagainstthePratherforstealingthering.Butitwasn'toverforGill.He’dbeentroubledaboutPrathersleepinginthecoldwoods.GillknewhishomewasbigenoughtogivePratheraplacetoliveinforawhile.Hetoldtheteenhecouldstaywithhisfamilyuntiltheboygotonhisfeetagain.17范文译文第二天，吉尔雇了两名潜水员在水中搜寻。警察在那里等着他们。一群人聚集在一起观看两名潜水员在湍急的水流中搜寻。一个多小时过去了，戒指还没有出现。吉尔越来越担心，尤其是当警察开始审问彼得，试图让他承认持有戒指时。突然，一名潜水员从水中走了出来。他手里拿着钱包，里面是戒指。人群中爆发出欢呼声。当吉尔打电话给钱包的主人时，