重庆英语高考书面表达评讲课件

书面表达评讲探讨重庆市高考英语考试说明中对书面表达的要求：

要求考生根据所给提示与要求进行书面表达。

考生应能：

1.在一定的语境中准确使用英语语法和词汇；

2.使用一定的句型、词汇，清楚、连贯地用英语表达自己的意思。

高考英语书面表达评分标准明确了各个档次的要求和给分范围,其中高分档次的第五档和第四档都有这样的要求:覆盖所有主要内容要点;应用了较多的语法结构和词汇;使用了较复杂的结构或较高级的词汇;有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑连贯。Open

writing

开放式作文开放式作文试题的要求：1）文章扣题：描述有的放矢，突出主题；2）思维活跃：发散思维空间，学生从不同的、全新的角度看待分析一个事物或现象。3）内容健康充实：内容要点乐观向上，以积极的态度进行表达。开放作文：

审题最为关键关注开放作文文章结构Describeapicture/material/chart

Interpretitsimplied

meaning

PointoutitsimplicationsinourlifeGiveyourowncomment/

suggestion/solutionStructureInterpretationandimplicationByprovidingpurposeandreasonsoreffects/attitude/judgmentByprovidingexamples/proverbs/explanationByanalyzingthepracticalsignificance/reality漫画的画面细节漫画的夸张寓意

(与现实的矛盾之处）细节夸张寓意Don’tcopyother’swayofsolvingtheproblemblindly.Doeverythingintherightway.读图与立意细节描图和议论时注意抓住漫画所表达的引申含义。请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于60。InyourEnglishclass，youareaskedtodescribethispictureofawoodenbarrelandexplaintoyourclassmateshowyouunderstandit． 1.审图：一个由不同长度木板构成的木桶，水从最短板处流出。(thewoodenbarreleffect)2.结论：人要全面发展，个别缺点会影响人的成功。团队要共同发展，个别人落后会影响整体的进步。文体：议论文 时态：一般现在时 人称：第一人称Don’tbetooconfidentinreallife.Behonestandmodest.Don’tjudgeabookbyitscover.3.…,aglassbottle,withonlyalittlewaterinit,istryingtoattachalabeltoitsbody,toannouncetotheworlditisfull.Itsexpressionsuggeststhatit’sveryproudandlookingdownontheothers.1.Inthepicturewecanseeabottleoflesswaterwhoselabeliswrittenfull.2.Fromthepicturewecanseethatthereisabottle.Ithastwohandsandtriestoputanlabelwritten“full”onitsbody.Asmileisontheneckofthebottle.Insidethebottleistherealittlewater.Asaresult,

itiswisetoenrichourselveswithknowledgeandtrytomakeourheadsfull.(Description)(Interpretation&Implication)(Suggestion)AnalysisFortheWholePassageAsisshowninthepicture,thereisahalf-emptybottleisgoingtostickalabelonitsbody,feeling

proudandconfident.(details)Thepictureseemstobereflectingakindofsocialphenomenon.Wemightoftenmeetsomepeoplewholookconfident,tryingtoimpressotherswiththeir“rich”knowledge.(reality/purpose)However,justlikethebottleinthepicture,whattheyreallyknowisjustalittle.Thereisnodoubtthattheyneedtolearnmorebecause

whattheyhaveintheirmindisfarfromenough.(result)AsanoldChinesesayinggoes,“emptybottlesmakestheloudestnoise.”(proverb)写作一(满分15分)

2013年重庆卷

请结合材料，按要求用英文写作。

Amothersaid,“Mysonisalwaysonthephone,sleeping,outwithhisfriends,orinhisroom.Heneverhastimetotalktome.”要求:(1)就此材料发表你的看法;(2)紧扣材料，有明确的观点;

(3)词数不少于60;

(4)在答题卡上作答。communication写作一(满分15分)

2014年重庆卷请结合材料，按要求用英文写作。“Myfriendfalls，Ilaugh；myphonefalls,Icry.”要求：(1)就此材料发表你的看法；(2)紧扣材料，有明确的观点；(3)词数不少于60；(4)在答题卡上作答。写作一(满分15分)

2015年重庆一诊考试

请结合材料，按要求用英文写作。Hewholosesmoney,losesmuch;hewholosesafriend,losesmuchmore;hewholosesfaith,losesall.要求：(1)就此材料发表你的看法；(2)紧扣材料，有明确的观点；(3)词数不少于60；(4)在答题卡上作答。Wherethereisfaith,thereishope.Peopleabusemobilephones,whichmakesthemignorethetruerelationshipwiththeirfriends.评分标准：文章是否扣题----描述与主题一致，自圆其说结构是否完整----三部分内容是否健康----乐观向上逻辑是否清晰----议论要有逻辑性语言是否准确----用词恰当，无语法错误交际是否得体----情境，身份等Outlinewriting

提纲式作文书面表达如何写？五个步骤1、审题文字信息图画信息题材、人称、时态、要点2、以词及点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句

话的细节要点。3、连词成句：用连词成句的方法将上述要点

的词语扩展成句子。4、连句成文：注意：①主语和谓语②背景（适当增加时间、地点、条件等）③逻辑关系(非谓语动词）④开头与结尾（亮点句型）⑤语篇衔接（连接词）5、检查修改，规范抄写写作二(满分20分)

2014年重庆卷

青少年研究专家SusanBeacham在自己的英文网站上开辟专栏，邀请大家分享心目中的”最好礼物”。她认为，礼物贵在心意，应为之付出时间和精力。假设你是李华，请用英文发帖，内容应包括：●赞同Susan的看法●你收到或送出的最好的礼物是什么●该礼物的意义●期待大家回复注意：(1)词数不少于80；(2)符合语言规范；(3)在答题卡上作答；(4)开头已给出(不计人总词数)。

Iamahighschoolstudentfrom

China._______________________________________写作二(满分20分)2013年重庆卷调查显示，中国长江江豚(finlessporpoise)受人类活动影响而频临灭绝，目前总数不足1000只。假设你是李华，现请用英文给WWF(世界自然保护基金组织)写一封信，请他们关注这一状况并提供帮助。内容应包括:●说明写信目的●简述江豚现状●希望WWF如何帮助（比如：资助江豚保护项目等）●表示感谢并期待回复注意：（1）词数不少于80；（2）在答题卡上作答（3）书信格式及开头均已给出（不计入总词数）。

DearSirorMadam, I’mastudentfromChongqing,China.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yourssincerely, LiHua写作二(满分20分)

假如你是某公司的产品推销员，请用英语介绍下面的产品：1.产品名称：NOAH-DICT2.产地：中国深圳3.厂家：ChengxinCompanyLtd.4.产品特点：电子词典，储存百万单词和短语,实现中英互译，仿真人发音，提供电子书籍下载功能。采用20年的研究成果，由高级电脑科技控制，轻金属制成，体小，易携带，易操作，价格合理。注意：词数不少于80词。fivestepsforthewritingpractice:

Step1:examinethetopicStyle:__________________________________

tense:______________person:___________说明文（IntroductoryWriting）

presentthirdStep2:listthemainpoints1.产品名称namedNOAH-DICT/theproductwhosenameisNOAH-DICT产地make/produceinShenzhen3.电子词典electronicdictionary/e-dictionary4.储存百万单词和词汇storemillionsofwordsandphraseswithacapacityofmillionsofwordsandphrases实现中英互译performatwo-waytranslation仿真人发音imitate/resemblearealperson’spronunciation7.提供电子书籍下载功能provide/havethefunctionofdownloadingelectronicbooksStep2:listthemainpoints采用20年的研究成果

adopt/applythetechnicalresultaccumulateby20-yearresearch由高级电脑科技控制

controlbyhigh/advancedtechnology

轻金属制成

bemadeoflightmetal11.体小

smallinsize/itsvolumeisverysmall12.易携带

easytocarry/itisconvenienttocarry13.易操作

easytooperate14.价格合理

priceisreasonable/sellatanattractivepriceStep3:makesomesentences:产品名称产地电子词典

NOAH-DICTisanelectronicdictionarymadeinShenzhen.储存百万单词和词汇

Thedictionarycanstore1millionwordsandphrases.3.实现中英互译

Thedictionarycanmakeatwo-waytranslationbetweenChineseandEnglishcometrue.4.仿真人发音

5.提供电子书籍下载功能6.采用20年的研究成果

Itisthetechnicalresultofthecompany’s20-yearresearch.7.由高级电脑科技控制8.轻金属制成体小易携带

Itismadeoflightmetalanditsvolumeissmall,soitisconvenienttocarry.9.易操作价格合理

Itiseasytooperateanditspriceisreasonable.Thedictionarycanimitatearealperson’spronunciation.Italsoprovidesthefunctionofdownloadinge-books.Itiscontrolledbyadvancedcomputertechnology.Step4:Connectthesentencesandmakesomepolishment.Step5:Copyitoutcarefullyandclearly.Onepossibleversion(参考范文)NOAH-DICTisaverypowerfule-dictionarymadeinShenzhen,China.ItisthelatestproductofChengxinCompanyLtd.withalargevocabularyof1millionwordsandtermsstoredinit.SoyoucanlookupanywordyoumeetinyourSeniorperiod.What’smore,thee-dictionarycanperformatwo-waytranslationbetweenChineseandEnglish,whichhelpsyoustudymoreefficiently.Additionally,itcanperfectlyimitatearealperson’spronunciation.Italsoprovidesthefunctionofdownloadinge-books.NOAH-DICTiscontrolledbyadvancedcomputertechnology,whichisthetechnicalresultofthecompany’s20-yearresearch.ThebodyoftheNOAH-DICTismadeoflightmetal.Thereforeitissmallinsizeandveryconvenienttocarry.Besides,itiseasytooperate.Thepriceisreasonable.ItisawisechoiceforEnglishlearners.第五档（很好）：（17-20分）要点完整，表达清楚，无重大语法错误。完全完成了试题规定的任务。--覆盖所有内容要点。--应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。--语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。--有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（好）：（13-16分）表达基本清楚，缺少个别要点，有些语法错误。完成了试题规定的任务。--覆盖主要内容。--应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。--语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因为尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。--应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。达到了预期的写作目的。第三档（适当）：（9-12分）尚能表达，缺少多个要点，语法错误较多。基本完成了试题规定的任务。--基本覆盖主要内容。--应用的语法结构或词汇能基本满足任务的要求。--有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。--应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。高考短文写作评分标准学生作品

AnewproductnamedNOAH-DICThasbeenputonsalelately.ItisakindofelectricaldictionaryproducedbyChengxinCompanyLtd,whichislocatedinShenzhenChina.Thenewproducthasmanyadvantages,oneofwhichisthatthedictionarycontainsmillionsofwordsandphrases,anditcantranslateChineseintoEnglisheachotherinavoicewhichresemblesextremelyrealpeople’svoice.What’smore,moreinformationandbookscanbedownloadedifnecessary.Theproductisresearchedbytwentyyears’efforts,anditisthehightechnologythatcontrolsthedictionary,whichmakesyougetinformationmorequickly.Itisconvienientforyoutotakebecauseitismadeoflightmetalandinsmallsize.Itnotonlycanbeoperatedeasilybutalsothepriceisreasonable.Ibelievethatthenewproductwillbeagoodfriendinyourlife.【高分的理由】1.各种句式及结构的合理运用过去分词作定语的运用定语从句的运用强调句型，表语从句，形式主语句型，宾语从句的运用【高分的理由】2.连接词的适当运用【高分的理由】3.要点全面，时态正确学生作品

AnewproductnamedNOAH-DICThasbeenputonsalelately.ItisakindofelectricaldictionaryproducedbyChengxinCompanyLtd,whichislocatedinShenzhenChina.Thenewproducthasmanyadvantages,oneofwhichisthatthedictionarycontainsmillionsofwordsandphrases,anditcantranslateChineseintoEnglisheachotherinavoicewhichresemblesextremelyrealpeople’svoice.What’smore,moreinformationandbookscanbedownloadedifnecessary.Theproductisresearchedbytwentyyears’efforts,anditisthehightechnologythatcontrolsthedictionary,whichmakesyougetinformationmorequickly.Itisconvienientforyoutotakebecauseitismadeoflightmetalandinsmallsize.Itnotonlycanbeoperatedeasilybutalsothepriceisreasonable.Ibelievethatthenewproductwillbeagoodfriendinyourlife.electrical应改为electronicconvienient的正确书写为convenient【美中不足】部分表达欠准确【分数不理想的原因】1.多处表达或用词不准确2.基础词汇拼写错误3.过渡衔接不自然4.卷面不整洁学生作品佳句欣赏OurcompanyhasproducedanewproductnamedNOAH-DICT,

whichismadeinShenzhen,China.

DesignedbyChengxincompanyLtd,theelectronicdictionary

namedNOAH-DICTwasproducedinShenzhen,China.

Thenewproductisanelectronicdictionarywhichcanstoremillionsofwordsaswellasexpressions.Thiskindofelectronicdictionarycontainsmillionsofwordsandexpressionswhichareessentialforbothmiddleschoolstudentsandcollegestudents.Twodecadesofhardworkwiththousandsoffailures,ourresearchersmakethebreakthrougheventually,thatis,theNOAH-DICT.

Whatdeservesattentionisthattheproductistheachievementofnearly20years’research.

Itismoreasmallcomputerthananormaldictionary.

It

hassomanyfunctionsthatitisalmostassmartasacomputer.

Downloadinge-booksisalsoavailableforyou.

Itprovidesthefunctionofdownloadingtheelectronicbookstobroadenyourhorizons.

ThevolumeofNOAH-DICTissmall,thusitcanbecarriedandoperatedeasily.

Whereveryougoyoucancarryitconvenientlyforitssmallsize.

What’sthemostimportantisthatitspriceisveryreasonable.

学生作品佳句欣赏Commonmistakesinourwriting(学生出现的集中错误)Driftingoffthetopic（偏题）orleavingoutsomerequiredinformation（要点不全）Simpleanddirecttranslation/ChinglishexpressionsImpropersentencepatternsandimproperwords主要是electric,electrical和electronic的误用Spellingmistakes长单词的正确拼写:convenient,pronunciation易混淆单词的运用:metal&medalprice&prize过去分词的正确拼写:controlledheard双写的“l”书面表达五部曲step1topicexploring审题step2wording构词step3sentencemaking成句step4essaywriting成篇step5improving修订Whatmakesagoodpieceofwriting?

1.neatwriting书写2.content内容3.structure结构4.language语言GoodfirstimpressionWellorganizedandsmoothlydevelopedEverythingrequiredincludedNoChinglishNoGrammatical

mistakesexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatternsFivecharacteristicsofoutstandingwriting:(高分作文的五大特性)1.senseoforder(条理性:段落完整，层次分明）2.accuracy(准确性:语法准确，用词精当）3.fluency(流畅性:层次清晰，行文连贯）4.conciseness&variety(简洁、多样性:语言简洁，不重复）5.ideologicalcontent(思想性:文章立意高，表达个人观点内容积极向上）【反思】Howtogethighmarks?09年高考书面表达（重庆卷）国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括:自我介绍写信目的话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由预祝活动成功注意：1.词数100左右;2.邮件格式已为你给出；3.邮件不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。09年高考书面表达（重庆卷）国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括:自我介绍写信目的话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由预祝活动成功注意：1.词数100左右;2.邮件格式已为你给出；3.邮件中不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。三段式总分总自我介绍写信目的话题（我们应该感恩）列举理由预祝活动成功inbriefindetailinbriefStep2wording

拼写词性近义词同音词单复数冠词大小写Simplemistakesleaveabadimpression!step3sentencing成句1简单句2并列句3复合句4非谓语形式5特殊结构时态，语态别忘了并列连词NoChinglish!!各种从句及连词的正确选择主语一致避生就熟！强调句型；倒装；独立主格结构……1.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.3.Weshouldthankfulisagoodtheme.4.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.5.Ourteacherteachesushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead,weshouldthanktothem.6.Onlywithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.7.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytheme.8.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveasuccessfulend.1.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.IamLihua,(whois)astudentfromXinHuaMiddleschool...Improveyoursentences.Ioftenvisityourwebsite,whereIgotthenewsthatyou’relookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.3.Weshouldbethankfulisagoodtopic.Thatweshouldbegratefulisagoodidea.4.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.Itisourparentswhobroughtusupthroughthickandthin,soweshouldthankthem.Thereasonwhyweshouldbegratefultoourparentsisthattheybroughtusupthroughthickandthin.5.Ourteachersteachushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead.weshouldthankthem.Weoweourteachersthanks,forwecouldn’tbewhowearenowwithouttheirhardwork.6.AsaChinese,weshouldbethankful,andonlywithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.ThankfulnessisalsoourtraditionalChinesevirtue.Onlywithathankfulheart,canwefullyrealizehowbeautifullifeis.7.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytopic.Iwouldreallyappreciateit,ifmytopicischosen.Hopefully,mytopicwillbechosen.8.Iwishtheactivitywillhavean

successfulend.Wishtheactivityagreatsuccess.Wishtheactivitysuccessful.Mayyouractivitysucceed.Step4成篇

Thatweshouldbethankfulisagoodidea.Itisourparentswhobroughtusupthroughthickandthin,soweshouldthankthem.Weoweourteachersthanks,forwecouldn’tbewhowearenowwithouttheirhardwork.ThankfulnessisalsoourtraditionalChinesevirtue.Wherethereisthankfulness,therearehopestomaketheworldbetter.Onlywithathankfulheart,canwefullyrealizehowbeautifullifeis.

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