读后续写人与动物-我的宠物鸭子讲义 高考英语作文复习

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事Themostdelightfulandunusualthing[paidforinthelastsummerwasapairofducklings.OnedayIspottedafriend'sphotooftwotinygoldenducklingsinherlivingroom.Imessagedherimmediately.Shewasfostering(照#)thebabyducksforafarm.Asthefarmexplainsonitswebsite,youcanadoptthenewbornsandparentthemuntiltheygrowintotheir“adulthood”whenyoucouldchoosetokeepthemortakethemback.For$165,thefarmwouldbringuseverythingweneededtofosterducklingsandalsoanactivityforLeo.Thisprogramwouldprovideuswithwhatwe'dbeenlacking:joyandfellowship.“We'regettingducklings!”Iproudlyannounced.About10dayslater,amanfromthefarmarrivedatourhomeandhandedoverashoeboxhousingapairofbabyducks.LeoandIheldtheminourhands,eachoneatiny,almostweightlessparcelofsilkygold.Leoimmediatelycasthimselfastheirfather,andtheducklingsacceptedtherolehappilywaddling(摇摆)athisfeetandslippingonourhardwoodfloors.Leokissedthemontheirbeaks(喙)andtheybithislipslightly,whichheconcludedmeanttheylovedhim.Afterafewweeks,theducklingstripledinsize,andthefairytaletookaturn.Muchaswelovedthem,itwastimetomakethechoice.Theywereabouttoenteradulthood,anditwasgettinginconvenienttokeepthemanylonger.ltwasonlythenthatIrealizedIdidn'tknowwhatwouldhappentothembackatthefarm.Icalledthefarm,andIwastoldthatactuallyourducklingswouldlikelyserveaswonderfulsupper.”注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右:2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好Paragraph1.Now,wecouldn'tkeepthem,butwealsocouldn'ttakethemback.Paragraph2:IwaslosinghopewhenIreceivedanemailfromawomanwholivedonahobbyfarm.原文大意：

我看到朋友分享的在家养小鸭子的可爱照片，也想通过鸭子宠物收获开心和友谊，于是联系农场领养了两只刚出生ducklings，农场承诺等小鸭长大你可以选择继续养或者送回农场。我和Leo都很喜欢这两个小家伙，可随着他们的长大，我们已经不方便再继续养下去，于是询问农场送回之后鸭子会怎样被对待？得知鸭子会成为盘中餐。。。接下来，要我们续写。框架分析：

根据第一段的首句Now,wecouldn’tkeepthem,butwealsocouldn’ttakethemback.可知，情感是纠结的两难的。那该怎么解决呢？所以接下来写how.再看第二段给的首句IwaslosinghopewhenIreceivedanemailfromawomanwholivedonahobbyfarm.中的关键词“anemail”,倒推出第一段中的解决办法应该是网上求助（或发帖或论坛或发邮件等方式）。第二段后面续写内容就自然是发邮件来的这位女性收养我们的鸭子，我们把鸭子送去她的农场。细节分析：

三个衔接处分析完，框架也就出来了，再来看细节和伏笔。细节一：第二段给出的首句中waslosinghope这一细节暗示第一段结尾处的解决办法应该并非很顺利，所以我第一段结尾处写的是：Aweekpassed,andtherewasnomoreresponse.这样和第二段首句waslosinghope这一细节衔接更紧凑。细节二：我也再次利用第二段首句losehope这一词，在第一段网上求助时写到

Withthehopethatitwouldwork,Iposted...,这样两处的hope形成呼应。细节三：第二段首句中的hobbyfarm,是和其他农场不一样的。农场主应该是动物爱好者（范文写的是素食主义者），不会让鸭子成为盘中餐。于是，第二段我描写了这个农场里动物生活舒适和谐的画面，“我”放心把鸭子交给了她。细节四：最后结尾再看看有没有主题可以升华。回到原文第一段结尾句提到我们养鸭子是期望收获我们缺乏的joyandfellowship，我把这个定位为主题，想在续写结尾重复升华下，于是第二段我写到hobby农场主让我们随时可以回来看望鸭子。我的结尾Infact,joyandfellowshipcanstaywithusforever.也就自然点题了。下水文：Now,wecouldn'tkeepthem,butwealsocouldn'ttakethemback.Trappedinsuchadilemma,IfeltatalosswhatIshoulddo.ThenLeosuggested,“Whynotturntothesocialmediaforhelp?”Withthehopethatitwouldwork,Ipostedonlinephotosofmyducklingsanddesiredtofindsomeonewillingtofosterthem.Itturnedoutthatmypostdidreceiveseveralviewersandcomments,onlyshowingaffectionforourlovelyducksbuttheycouldn'tkeepthemeither.Aweekpassed,andtherewasnomoreresponse.IwaslosinghopewhenIreceivedanemailfromawomanwholivedonahobbyfarm.“lamananimalloveranditisconvenientformetoadoptthemonmyfarmandyoucandropinonthemwheneveryouwant.”Withasurgeofexcitementsweepingoverme,ItogetherwithLeotookalongourduckstoherfarm.ThewomannamedMarygaveusawarmwelcomeandshowedusaroundherfarm,hometovariouslivestock,livingfreelyandharmoniouslytogether.Aswesaidgoodbye.wecouldn'twaittoseeeachothernexttime.Infact,joyandfellowshipcanstaywithusforever.附：参考范文No,wecouldn'thelpthem,butitalsocouldn'ttakethemback.Whatadilemma!Allthistime,wehadbeenfosteringthemoutoflove,hadn'twe?Orhadwebeenfatteningthemforafancymealindeed?NeverdidIimaginethatthejoyandfellowshipwehadwouldcometoabrutalbreakup.Plus,Ididn'thavethehearttotellLeotoacceptsuchamiserablefateforhisbelovedducklings.Dreadfullyguilty,Ilaunchedasortofduckadoptionagency,desperatelyemailingandcallinganimalsheltersinthehopeoffindingthemasafehome.IaslosinghopethenIreceivedanemailfromawomanwholivedonahobbyfarm.Shewaslookingformoreducks,andshewasvegetarian,whichmadeheraperfectcandidate.Wecarefullypackedeverythingforourducksbeforeheadingtotheirnewhome.Asweenteredthehobbyfarm,Ifeltasifwehadslippedintoafairytale:bunnieshoppingaroundsunlitgrass,miniaturehorsestrottingontherichpasture,andgrown-upduckswanderingaboutwiththeirwhichfeathersdancingagainstsummerclouds.Reluctantandrejoicedatthesametime,weleftoutducksforthisdreamhouse.反思：下水文和范文的对比学习拜读了范文，框架和思路和范文大致相同，说明下水文分析方向是没有错的。这篇下