2023年6月新高考全国一卷读后续写真题 详讲（写作比赛）课件 高考英语作文复习专项

2023年6月新高考全国一卷读后续写写作比赛解析目录一、原文阅读二、情节梳理三、故事情节高潮四、人物性格分析五、根据首局推断故事情节六、参考范文原文阅读WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.WhoWhen/whereWhat我认为你有很好的机会How1Why1原文阅读IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.ThestoryIchoseHowandwhy2原文阅读WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.______________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._________________________________________________________________________________情节梳理5W+1H（who,when,why,where,what,how)Mesocialstudiesteacherwho情节梳理5W+1H（who,when,why,where,what,how)WhenandwhereWhenIwasinmiddleschoolEnterawritingcontestWhat情节梳理5W+1H（who,when,why,where,what,how)HowAtfirstDoesn’tlikewritingCamefromBrazil,Englishwassecondlanguage情节梳理5W+1H（who,when,why,where,what,how)WhyTheteacherEncouragedme情节梳理5W+1H（who,when,why,where,what,how)HowandWhy2WhenwritingWanttoquitButkeepwritingCheckedoverandoveragain故事情节的高潮Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.1、突破自我局限得到成长2、没有退缩、坚持不懈故事情节的梳理文章主旨：我作为一个来自巴西，英语为第二语言的孩子，英语写作特别困难，但在老师的鼓励之下，通过自己的努力获得了写作的乐趣。作者情感的变化：自卑---怀疑自己---坚持不懈---从修改文章中获得乐趣--对赢得比赛没有信心，但对结果并不在乎人物性格分析1.作者开始的时候因为英语写作不好，比较自卑。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?2.在受到老师鼓励的时候，敢于尝试。Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.3.善于思考。Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?人物性格分析4.意志坚强，勤奋努力。Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere'shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.5.苦中作乐。Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.6.

对赢得比赛没有信心，但并不在乎。IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.人物性格分析1.欣赏学生，善于通过不同的方式让学生展示自己的才能。WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.2.善于鼓励学生，给学生以信心。Hisreply:

“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”3.对学生要求严格，一丝不苟。WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”根据段首句推断续写情节Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.______________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._________________________________________________________________________________1、Whatwasthenews?HowdidIfeel?2、DidIwinthecompetition?3、Whatwasthereactionofmyteacherandclassmates?1、WhydidIgototheteacher’soffice?2、WhatwouldIsaytomyteacher?3、Whatwouldmyteacherfeelandsay?开始着手续写

本文使用了大量的心理描写和动作描写，在写作时语言要尽量贴近原文写作风格。如：asherippedthroughthenight,hiscoatsloughingsweat,hiseyeswidewithadrenaline?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?本文还使用了大量的排比句：如：Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Ienlistedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.开始着手续写

除了使用动词shove,enlist,checkout等，本文还使用了大量的动作链。如：myteacherreadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid.此外，文章长短句交替使用，恰到好处地推动了情节的发展，网络参考范文Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwonthefirstplace.Hearingthenews,Istoodthere,frozen.Icouldn'tbelievemyears.HadIheardright?Myclassmatesgavemealookofdisbeliefatfirst,andthencheeredandclappedhappily.WhenIcametomysenses,tearsofexcitementcametomyeyes.Atth