读后续写：The+first+hunting+讲义高三英语写作专项

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Hisfathersaid,“Allset,boy?”andJeremynodded,pickinguphisgunwithawkwardglovedhands.Hisfatherpushedopenthedoorandtheywentoutintothefreezingdawntogether.OrdinarilyJeremywouldtakeouthiscameratorecordthescenery,butnotthismorning.Thiswasthemorning,particularlysacred,when14-year-oldJeremywouldgoduckhuntingforthefirsttime.However,hehatedit,andhadhatedthewholeideasincehisfatherboughthimagun.ButhewasdeterminedtogothroughwithitHelovedhisfather,andwantedhisapprovalmorethananythingintheworld.Theycametoanarrowandhiddenplacefacingthebay.Jeremysatdownnervouslyandwaited.Toreducefear,hetookapictureofhisfatheragainstthecleanwater.Thenheputthecamerahurriedlyonthegrassandpickeduphisgun.Jeremygothisgunready.'TIIletyoushootfirst,〃hisfathersaid,loadinghisowngun."Youknow,Tvebeenwaitingforalongtimeforthisday.Justthetwoofus…〃Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed."There'sasmallflightheadingthiswaynow.Keepyourheaddown.Illgiveyoutheword.”Thesuncameout.Jeremycouldseeeverythingclearly:hisfather'sface,tenseandeager;thewhitefrostonthegun.Hisheartwasbeatingwildly.Heprayed,"Don'tletthemcome,please!〃Buttheykeptcoming."Fourblack/7hisfathersaid.Z/Onemallard（绿头鸭）."Highabove,Jeremyheardthepulsingwhistleofwingsastheflightbegantocircle.Themallardwasleading,hisfeetdroppingdown,reachingforthesilver-coloredwater.Closer,closer...z,Getset,〃hisfatherwhispered./zNow!〃criedJeremyfsfather."Takethem!〃Jeremyfelthisbodyobey.Hestoodup,holdingthegun.Inthesameinstant,thewildduckssawthegunnersandflew,“Shoot!"saidsomethingsharplyinJeremy'sbrain.Butupwentthemallardhigherstill,untilsuddenlyhecaughtthefullforceofthewindandflewaway,outofrange.注意：.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?”Paragraph2:ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.主要人物：Jeremy喜欢摄影、讨厌打猎、爱父亲、渴望得到父亲的认可Father喜欢打猎、期待跟儿子一起打猎（以为儿子也喜欢打猎）时间地点:时间：atdawn寸苗述：freezing;sacred;thesuncomeout;thewhitefrostonthegun.地点：nearthecleanwater帮助：户外情景运用环境描写，呼应时间地点相关描述细节shoot的双重含义：shoot一语双关含义1：射击；含义2：拍摄文章主要矛盾/问题表面上的矛盾：Jeremy是否该开枪打猎深层次的矛盾：1）Jeremy该坚持自己的兴趣（拍照）还是为了获得爸爸的认可而选择打猎2）父亲和儿子的相处之道：父亲喜欢的东西，儿子是否一定要听从和喜欢有第二段开头可推出第一段的内容：第二段开头ToJeremy'ssurprise可知，第一段结尾可以写Jeremy讲完自己的为什么不开枪的原因后的心理描写，他以为父亲会生气。词语积累：请找出以下中文对应的英文表达。续写题目：.推开门:pushopenthedoor.极冷的:freezing.第——次:forthefirsttime.完成（或做完）艰难（或令人不快）的事：gothroughwith.（给武器）装弹药：load.他停止说话，向前弯下腰，眯起眼睛：Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed..紧张的:tense.翅膀搏动的呼啸声:pulsingwhistleofwings.（声音）突然而响亮地：sharply参考范文：.从…中判断：judgefrom.勃然（大怒）：explode.一想到…某人就有一种…感觉：Atthethoughtof...,sbwasovercomewithasenseof..….眼里闪着光，嘴角露出微笑：Eyesglintandlipscurveintoabigsmile.把某人揽入怀中：gathersbintoone'sarms.溜达、散步：stroll.模糊的双眼：mistyeyes.沐浴在灿烂的阳光下：bebathedintheradiantglowofsun.鸟鸣声:thechirpsofthebirdsPossibleversionl:Paragraph1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,7/Whydidnrtyoushoot?”"BecausetheyweresoalivevJeremyexplained,withhislipsshaking.Hesatonthegrass,buriedhisfaceinhishandsandburstintotears.Allhopeofpleasinghisfatherwasgone.Foralongmoment,hisfatherwassilent.ThenJeremyfelthimkneeldownbesidehimandpathimontheshouldergently.Suddenly,hisfathershouted,nGetready!HFeelingcoldmetaltouchinghishand,Jeremylookedup.Paragraph2:ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim./zHerecomesanotherduckAbeautifulwildduckflewcloser,itswhitebreastshininginthesunshine.Jeremyhelduphiscameraimmediately/7Igothim广Abroadsmilelituphisface.Hisfathergavehimathumbs-up.Jeremydiscoveredtherewasnodisappointmentinhiseyes,onlyprideandlove，"It'sokay,son.Iloveshooting,butthatdoesn'tmeanyouhaveto.HHepausedandsaid,Z/Couldyouteachmehowtousethatcamera?nPossibleversion2:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,/7Whydidnrtyoushoot?”"I,I'msorry/7Jeremymurmuredwithhisheadlow,beingtotallyataloss（独立主格结构，非谓语动词）.Hedidwanttoshoottheduckandgethisfather'sapproval.（强调句,回扣原文）However,whenheheldhisgunandaimedattheflyingmallard（学以致用，新概念3L9）,hismindwentblank—heknewhecouldn'tkillthebeautifulcreatureinsuchacruelway.Hestruggledforalongtime.Finally,hegatheredallhisbraveryandlookedupintohisfather'scrosseyes."Dad,"hesaid,nIhategunsandkillings.CanIquithunting?"（反映主题：人与动物和谐相处）Hisfatherwentsilentandturnedaround.ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.Hetookoverhiscameraunbelievablywithhismouthopenedwide.（独立主格结构）Amusedbyhisaction,非谓语动词hisfatherlookedathimaffectionately（学以致用,新概念3L9）andexplained,nIknowyoulovephotography,however,Iwantyoutotakeove