【读后续写公开课】读后续写《The-Last-Delivery》课件

ContinuationWriting

ContinuationWriting1TheLastDeliveryTheLastDelivery2InterpretationoftheText(6elements)AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatInterpretationoftheText(63arichcoupleTheporterInterpretationoftheText文本解读(Who)StrangersarichcoupleTheporterInterp4ReadforthethreecluesTimePlotEmotionsReadforthethreecluesTime5Task1:Readingforthetime(when)1._______purchasingeverythingtheywanted2._______,hesettledfor$15.3.____________passed,___________passed.4.____________,theywentbacktothemarkettoinquire5._______hearingthat,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesAfterFinallyOnehourtwohoursUponImmediatelyHappySatisfiedAnxiousAfraid,AnxiousShocked,AshameTask1:Readingforthetime(6Task2:Readingfortheplot(summary)Arichcouplewas______(throw)abigpartyattheirhouse,sotheywentshoppingatthemarket.After_________(purchase)everythingtheywanted,theycalledaporter______wasanoldage,unhealthylooking______(carry)theirstufftotheirhouseforamere$15.Theywaited_________(anxious)fortheirstuff,_______theoldporterdidn’tappearallthetime.Theytook______forgrantedthattheoldporterwasathief.Uponhearingthenewsfromanotherporter,theywerestruckdeadwith_____________(embarrass),feelingtheblood_________(rush)totheirface.throwingpurchasing

whoitbuttocarryanxiouslyembarrassment

rushingTask2:Readingfortheplot(s7Task3:ReadingforEmotions(T/F)Theoldporter:Theoldporterwasunwillingtodeliverthestuffforamere$15thoughhewaspoorandunhealthy.()Therichcouple:1.Therichcoupledidn’tmindpayingalotfortheparty.()2.Therichcoupleshowedgreatsympathytotheoldporterandpaidhimimmediately.()3.Therichcoupleregardedtheoldportertobeathiefwhenhecouldn’tappearintime.()TTFFTask3:ReadingforEmotions(T/8

Let’sdiscuss!1.Discusswithyourpartnersandraisesomereasonablequestionsaccordingtothegivensentences.2.Discusswithyourpartnersandformyourwritingideas.

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Task1:Interpretationofthegivensentences(首句解读)NewInformation④Whydidtheoldporteraskthenewporter

tohelpdeliverthegoods?

Para.1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”①Whatwasthenewporter’sreactionwhenhearingtheangrywife’swords?②Wherewastheoldporter?③Whathappenedtotheoldporter?Task1:Interpretationoft10Interpretationofthegiveninformation(首句解读)NewInformation③Whatalifelessondidthewifelearn?Para.2Uponhearingthat,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.①Whatdidthehusbandsaytohiswife?②Howdidthewifereacttoherhusband’swords?Interpretationofthegivenin11Whatlessoncanwegetfromthestory?Weshouldrespecteveryoneregardlessoftheirfinancialandsocialstatus.Wecan’tjudgeabookbyitscover.Whatlessoncanwegetfromth12arichcoupleTheporterTask2:Interpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读(1)glaringather

resentfullywasabouttoaddmorecontemptuouscommentswasstruck

dead

with

shamearichcoupleTheporterTask2:13arichcoupleTheporterInterpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读(2)confused,respondedatonce,regretted,stoodthereembarrassedsmiledandcontinuedhisdeliveringinthesunarichcoupleTheporterInterp14TheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting：1.又累又饿，老人在灼热的大中午再也走不动了。①Theold______________________________goanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.(运用..too...to...句型))②___________________,theoldportercouldn’tgoanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.(运用形容词作主语补足语)wastootiredandhungrytoTiredandhungry2.妻子尴尬地站在那里，满脸涨得通红。①Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(运用并列句结构)②Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(运用现在分词作状语)③Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(运用介词with的复合结构)④Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(运用独立主格结构)andshefeltthebloodrushingtoherfacefeelingthebloodrushingtoherfacewiththebloodrushingtoherfacethebloodrushingtoherfaceTheMicro-skillsTraininginw15老人诚实的品质让妻子深受触动，脸上写满了愧疚之情。①_____________________________________________________,

guiltwritteninherredface.(运用…so...that...结构)②_____________________________________________________,

guiltwritteninherredface.(运用So...that放句首的倒装句型)③____________________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(运用强调谓语动词句型)()④_______________________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(运用强调句句型)ThehonestyoftheoldporterdidstrikethewifeagreatdealSohonestwastheoldporterthatthewifewasstruckagreatdealItwasthehonestyoftheoldporterthatstruckthewifeagreatdealTheoldporterwassohonestthatthewifewasstruckagreatdeal老人诚实的品质让妻子深受触动，脸上写满了愧疚之情。Theh164.那时，她才意识到不能以貌取人。①________________________thatwecan’tjudgeabookbyitscover.(运用“only+状语”放句首的倒装句句型)②__________________________thatwecan’tjudgeabookbyitscover.(运用“Notuntil”放句首的倒装句句型)③_____________________________

thatwecan’tjudgeabookbyitscover.(运用“Itwasnotuntil...that...”的强调句型)

NotuntilthendidsherealizeOnlythendidsherealizeItwasnotuntilthenthatsherealized4.那时，她才意识到不能以貌取人。Notuntilth17Shareyourstory!Groupdisscussion.Trytoinferandwritedownkeywords,phrases

orsentencesonthepaperandthenputthemintoacompletestory.Groupdisscussion.Trytoinf18WritingCriteria:1.Yourstoryshouldbecoherent(连贯)，logicalandreasonable.2.Yourwritingshouldberichinvocabularyandsentencepattern.

ContiunationWritingWritingCriteria:Contiunati19Possibleversion1Paragraph1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”Shewasabouttoaddmorecontemptuouscommentsontheoldporterwhenshesuddenlynoticedthatthemanwasglaringather

resentfully.“Madam,pleasecalmdown.Jackisnotathief!”retortedtheporter,“Heisactuallyterriblysickandisn’tabletoearnenoughtoevenhaveasinglemealoftheday.Justnow,onthewaytodeliveryourstuff,hewastooweaktogoanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.Despitefallingdown,heneverforgothispromiseandhandedme$15,keepingtellingmetodeliveritasfastaspossible”

Possibleversion1Paragraph20Possibleversion1Paragraph2Uponhearingthis,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.“Hewashungry,hewaspoor,buthewastrulyanhonestman,”thehusbandadmittedwithtremblingvoice.Atthat,thewifewasstruck

dead

with

shame,heart

beating

painfully

fast

and

banging

against

her

ribs.Howcouldshebeangrywithsuchakindandresponsibleman?Likeachildwhomadeamistake,shehadnocouragetolookintoherhusband’seyes.Throughalltheseunexpectedthings,iteventuallydawnedonherthathonestyhasnoclassandsheshouldrespecteveryoneregardlessoftheirfinancialandsocialstatus.评点：妻子的傲慢与年轻工友的义愤填膺，丈夫的热泪盈眶与妻子的满脸窘迫，这些细节的描写，都使人物的鲜明的性格跃然纸上。“contemptuous”,“resentfully”,“retort”,“struckdeadwithshame”等与情感有关的高级词汇的使用，使文章变得有血有肉，读起来津津有味。最后，妻子的幡然悔悟对文章进行了一个主题上的升华，通过人物的改变给故事画上了圆满的句号。Possibleversion1Paragraph221Possibleversion2Paragraph1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”

Baffled,theporterrespondedatonce,“YoumeanJack?Heisnotathief!HeisthebestguyI’veeverknown.”However,thewifesneered,“Youmustbehisaccomplice,orourstuffcouldn’thaveendedinyourcart.”Theporter,hisfaceflushing

with

irritation,retorted,“Wearenotthieves.Weearnourlivinginanhonestway!ActuallyJackhadacaraccidentafterhesetoffwithyourshopping.Thoughbadlyinjured,heanxiouslycalledmeupandhandedme$15tohelphimdeliveritforyou.”

Possibleversion2Paragraph22Possibleversion2Paragraph2Uponhearingthis,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.“Honey,wedidmisunderstandsuchanhonestman.Weowehimasincereapology,”regrettedthehusband,seekingforhiswife’sadvice.Butthencameadeadsilenceforawhile.Thewifestoodthereembarrassed,thebloodrushingtoherface.Neverdidsherealizesuchapoormanshouldbesohonestandresponsible.Withquiveringvoice,thewifepolitelyapologizedandthendecidedtovisitJackatonce.Gazingaftertherichcoupleuntiltheyvanishedfromhissight,theportersmiledandcontinuedhisdeliveringinthesun.Amazingly,hedidn’tfeelunbearablyhotanylonger.

评点：妻子不但怀疑老人是小偷，还怀疑他的工友是同谋，将故事的矛盾激化到了极致，使文章充满了张力。结尾处妻子一改之前傲慢嚣张的脾气，诚挚地道歉，并决定去看望老人。工友看着夫妻两人离去，微微一笑，似乎炎热的天气也变得没有那么热，这些描写使文章变得节奏缓慢，却又触动人心。总之，张弛有度，节奏把握得很好。另外，“baffled”,“sneer”,“flushwithirritation”,“regret”,“quiveringvoice”,“gazeafter”等与情感有关的动作神态的描写，使文章充满画面感，增强了故事的感染力，使人物形象栩栩如生。Possibleversion2Paragraph23Whathavewelearnttoday?Step1:Readthepassageandanswerthe5wquestionstogetthemainidea.Step2:Analyzethefeelingandplotdevelopment.Step3:Infertheendingbythekeywordsandgivensentences.Step4:Begintowrite.Addmoredetails.(feelings,actions,dialogues,etc.)Step5:Polishyourwriting.Whathavewelearnttoday?Step24Writedownyourstoryandpolishyourwritingwithyourpartner.Assignment

Writedownyourstoryandpoli25【读后续写公开课】读后续写《The-Last-Delivery》课件26ContinuationWriting

ContinuationWriting27TheLastDeliveryTheLastDelivery28InterpretationoftheText(6elements)AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatInterpretationoftheText(629arichcoupleTheporterInterpretationoftheText文本解读(Who)StrangersarichcoupleTheporterInterp30ReadforthethreecluesTimePlotEmotionsReadforthethreecluesTime31Task1:Readingforthetime(when)1._______purchasingeverythingtheywanted2._______,hesettledfor$15.3.____________passed,___________passed.4.____________,theywentbacktothemarkettoinquire5._______hearingthat,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesAfterFinallyOnehourtwohoursUponImmediatelyHappySatisfiedAnxiousAfraid,AnxiousShocked,AshameTask1:Readingforthetime(32Task2:Readingfortheplot(summary)Arichcouplewas______(throw)abigpartyattheirhouse,sotheywentshoppingatthemarket.After_________(purchase)everythingtheywanted,theycalledaporter______wasanoldage,unhealthylooking______(carry)theirstufftotheirhouseforamere$15.Theywaited_________(anxious)fortheirstuff,_______theoldporterdidn’tappearallthetime.Theytook______forgrantedthattheoldporterwasathief.Uponhearingthenewsfromanotherporter,theywerestruckdeadwith_____________(embarrass),feelingtheblood_________(rush)totheirface.throwingpurchasing

whoitbuttocarryanxiouslyembarrassment

rushingTask2:Readingfortheplot(s33Task3:ReadingforEmotions(T/F)Theoldporter:Theoldporterwasunwillingtodeliverthestuffforamere$15thoughhewaspoorandunhealthy.()Therichcouple:1.Therichcoupledidn’tmindpayingalotfortheparty.()2.Therichcoupleshowedgreatsympathytotheoldporterandpaidhimimmediately.()3.Therichcoupleregardedtheoldportertobeathiefwhenhecouldn’tappearintime.()TTFFTask3:ReadingforEmotions(T/34

Let’sdiscuss!1.Discusswithyourpartnersandraisesomereasonablequestionsaccordingtothegivensentences.2.Discusswithyourpartnersandformyourwritingideas.

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Task1:Interpretationofthegivensentences(首句解读)NewInformation④Whydidtheoldporteraskthenewporter

tohelpdeliverthegoods?

Para.1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”①Whatwasthenewporter’sreactionwhenhearingtheangrywife’swords?②Wherewastheoldporter?③Whathappenedtotheoldporter?Task1:Interpretationoft36Interpretationofthegiveninformation(首句解读)NewInformation③Whatalifelessondidthewifelearn?Para.2Uponhearingthat,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.①Whatdidthehusbandsaytohiswife?②Howdidthewifereacttoherhusband’swords?Interpretationofthegivenin37Whatlessoncanwegetfromthestory?Weshouldrespecteveryoneregardlessoftheirfinancialandsocialstatus.Wecan’tjudgeabookbyitscover.Whatlessoncanwegetfromth38arichcoupleTheporterTask2:Interpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读(1)glaringather

resentfullywasabouttoaddmorecontemptuouscommentswasstruck

dead

with

shamearichcoupleTheporterTask2:39arichcoupleTheporterInterpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读(2)confused,respondedatonce,regretted,stoodthereembarrassedsmiledandcontinuedhisdeliveringinthesunarichcoupleTheporterInterp40TheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting：1.又累又饿，老人在灼热的大中午再也走不动了。①Theold______________________________goanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.(运用..too...to...句型))②___________________,theoldportercouldn’tgoanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.(运用形容词作主语补足语)wastootiredandhungrytoTiredandhungry2.妻子尴尬地站在那里，满脸涨得通红。①Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(运用并列句结构)②Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(运用现在分词作状语)③Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(运用介词with的复合结构)④Thewifestoodtherewithembarrassment,________________________________________.(运用独立主格结构)andshefeltthebloodrushingtoherfacefeelingthebloodrushingtoherfacewiththebloodrushingtoherfacethebloodrushingtoherfaceTheMicro-skillsTraininginw41老人诚实的品质让妻子深受触动，脸上写满了愧疚之情。①_____________________________________________________,

guiltwritteninherredface.(运用…so...that...结构)②_____________________________________________________,

guiltwritteninherredface.(运用So...that放句首的倒装句型)③____________________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(运用强调谓语动词句型)()④_______________________________________________________,guiltwritteninherredface.(运用强调句句型)ThehonestyoftheoldporterdidstrikethewifeagreatdealSohonestwastheoldporterthatthewifewasstruckagreatdealItwasthehonestyoftheoldporterthatstruckthewifeagreatdealTheoldporterwassohonestthatthewifewasstruckagreatdeal老人诚实的品质让妻子深受触动，脸上写满了愧疚之情。Theh424.那时，她才意识到不能以貌取人。①________________________thatwecan’tjudgeabookbyitscover.(运用“only+状语”放句首的倒装句句型)②__________________________thatwecan’tjudgeabookbyitscover.(运用“Notuntil”放句首的倒装句句型)③_____________________________

thatwecan’tjudgeabookbyitscover.(运用“Itwasnotuntil...that...”的强调句型)

NotuntilthendidsherealizeOnlythendidsherealizeItwasnotuntilthenthatsherealized4.那时，她才意识到不能以貌取人。Notuntilth43Shareyourstory!Groupdisscussion.Trytoinferandwritedownkeywords,phrases

orsentencesonthepaperandthenputthemintoacompletestory.Groupdisscussion.Trytoinf44WritingCriteria:1.Yourstoryshouldbecoherent(连贯)，logicalandreasonable.2.Yourwritingshouldberichinvocabularyandsentencepattern.

ContiunationWritingWritingCriteria:Contiunati45Possibleversion1Paragraph1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”Shewasabouttoaddmorecontemptuouscommentsontheoldporterwhenshesuddenlynoticedthatthemanwasglaringather

resentfully.“Madam,pleasecalmdown.Jackisnotathief!”retortedtheporter,“Heisactuallyterriblysickandisn’tabletoearnenoughtoevenhaveasinglemealoftheday.Justnow,onthewaytodeliveryourstuff,hewastooweaktogoanyfurtherinthisheatofthenoon.Despitefallingdown,heneverforgothispromiseandhandedme$15,keepingtellingmetodeliveritasfastaspossible”

Possibleversion1Paragraph46Possibleversion1Paragraph2Uponhearingthis,thehusbandhadtearsinhiseyesandturnedtohiswife.“Hewashungry,hewaspoor,buthewastrulyanhonestman,”thehusbandadmittedwithtremblingvoice.Atthat,thewifewasstruck

dead

with

shame,heart

beating

painfully

fast

and

banging

against

her

ribs.Howcouldshebeangrywithsuchakindandresponsibleman?Likeachildwhomadeamistake,shehadnocouragetolookintoherhusband’seyes.Throughalltheseunexpectedthings,iteventuallydawnedonherthathonestyhasnoclassandsheshouldrespecteveryoneregardlessoftheirfinancialandsocialstatus.评点：妻子的傲慢与年轻工友的义愤填膺，丈夫的热泪盈眶与妻子的满脸窘迫，这些细节的描写，都使人物的鲜明的性格跃然纸上。“contemptuous”,“resentfully”,“retort”,“struckdeadwithshame”等与情感有关的高级词汇的使用，使文章变得有血有肉，读起来津津有味。最后，妻子的幡然悔悟对文章进行了一个主题上的升华，通过人物的改变给故事画上了圆满的句号。Possibleversion1Paragraph247Possibleversion2Paragraph1Theangrywifeaskedhim,“Whereisthatoldthief?Thisisourstuff.”

Baffled,theporterrespondedatonce,“YoumeanJack?Heisnotathief!Heisthe