结合高考阅卷谈英语作文提升策略课件-高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

结合高考阅卷谈英语作文提升策略高考阅卷续写备考策略应用文备考策略续写阅卷读后续写评价表评价维度 指标评价标准评价(好/不好的表现)内容(What)主题是否与前文一致?是否符合社会主义核心价值观?情节衔接性

(前文与续文、两个段首句与两段续文；第一段续文结尾与第二段首句之间)合理性

(是否违背常识常理?是否违背原文逻辑意义?)完整性

(故事各部分是否齐全?是否续写了高潮、转折、结局

?)创新性

(较高要求，以不违背前三项内容为前提)方法(How)语篇是否呈现出典型的故事语篇特征

(故事结构完整；常使用过去时态；描述性语言；评注性语言；等)语言正确性：语法正确

(句型、用词、搭配、时态、主谓一致、指代一致等)丰富性：使用的语言手段是否丰富多样

(简单句、并列句、复合句、非谓语、逻辑连接手段等)得体性：所使用的语言手段是否符合语境需要?是否地道自然?是否与原文风格一致?流畅性：内容与逻辑是否连贯、流畅?Coordinationin

Mind思想协同Coordinationin

Logic逻辑协同Coordination

inLanguage语言协同Readforthe

theme.（确定主题）Read

forthe

plot.（定位线索）Outlinethepossibleplotsoreventsin

eachparagraph.（构思续写情节，搭建结构支架）Writebasedon

theoutlineand

usesentence

patterns.（运用用句型模板，落笔成文）Stepsforcontinuation

writingStep1 Step2Step3Step4010304按五个档次进行评分虑，具体为：（1）创造内容的质本题总分为25分，量，续写的完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。（2）使用词汇和语法结构的准确性，恰当性和多样性。（3）上下句的衔接性和上下文的连贯性。评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。评分时还应注意（1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右（词数不少于120）；（2）续写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写和词汇用法均可。(3）如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。02阅卷评分时，应内主要涵从内容、语言表达和篇章结构三个方面考颜值2024年新高考一卷原题复现ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ltoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecond

thought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn’theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthe

car.Finally,

with

just

two

minutes

to

spare

we

rolled

into

the

bus

station.Thankfully,

there

was

a

long

queue

(队列)

stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.“Wemadeit,”he

said.JustthenIrealizedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.Afeelingofhelplessnesswashedover

measIsawthebusqueuethinning

out.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,attheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:“Outoforder.Sorry.”注意：1.

续写词数应为

150

左右2.

请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.

1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebad

news..Para.

2Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,I

calledGunteras

promised.

读后续写评分原则（Range

Finder） 评分时，先根据内容、语言、逻辑与篇章结构总体评价初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。具体为：(1)

创造内容的质量，续写的完整性以及与原文情景的融洽度；(2)

使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性；(3)

上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。五档

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0分卷 空白卷；所写内容全部抄自原文与题目要求毫不相关行数：不要求段落均分，只需要完成写作任务即可用词：众词平等，不追求所谓词的高大上注意事项：（1）少于120词，酌情扣分（2）单词拼写和标点符号属于写作规范的重要方面，对交际程度的影响予以考虑

（3）书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分→标记问题卷，由专家组定夺

标准解读 阅卷要求1.

高考阅卷对于续写考查“读写协同”能力，即学生的阅读和学习能力，需要在续写中延续前文风格，包括内容、逻辑和用词三方面；评分时综合考虑内容、语言（词汇语法）和篇章结构三个维度，讲究global

story原则。2.

字数小于120词，酌情给分，不能直接降档处理，仍然按照global

story的评分原则给分。3.

不能因书写不够美观而扣分。书写较差以致影响交际的酌情扣分。4.

零分卷标准：白卷；非英语作答；抄前文/阅读；与主题无关的文字（如果是考前硬背的范文，则按照和高考作文有关的内容给分）；只要有自己的创作（非抄袭）即给分。略策备考具体做法步步为营的专题训练点滴积累的基础训练图片佳句积累改写仿写扩写逻辑衔接润色动作链训练show，don'ttell哲理式结尾1）Mildbreezewipingmyface,asuddenwarmthjusthitme.2）TheguardandIwalkedoutquietly,leavingthemalone.“Whatawonderfulnight!”theguardsaidtomewithgreat

delight.情景交融Heartbeatingwildly,MichaelwalkedtoJennyandhuggedher

tightly.自然结尾佳句积累ending1）It’slovethatbringsthemtogether.2）Lovemaybelate,butnever

absent.Itisinevitabletoencounterhardship,butloveiswhatsupportslife

forever.whois

calledwhois

calledRewritethesentenceswithnon-predicateswhen

possible!Tomhas

alovely dog called Seven.We

will

read

a

story

aboutthe

dog

and

a

courier(快递员）called Jack.改写升级：

非谓语

Story Time

（1）非谓语；（2）3段

；

（3）150词

；（4）增加细节。TomhasadogcalledSeven.AcouriercalledJackoftendeliverssomethingtoTom.Beingverylarge,Sevenlookskindofscary.EverytimeJackcame,thedogtriedtobitehim.HavingbeentoldmanytimestostayawayfromSeven,Jackjustdidn'tlistentoit.BittentwicebySeven,JackrefusedtodeliveranythingtoTomunlesshesenthisdogaway.However,havingbittenJack

twice,

Seven

didn't

seem

sorry

about

that

at

all.Oneday,afirebrokeoutinthehouseandSevenwastrapped.Itdidn'tknowwhattodo.SevenbarkedforhelponlytofindJackpassingby.SeeingSeveninthehouse,JackbrokeawindowtoletSevenout.Jack'sbraveactmadeSevengetoutofdanger.Havinggonethroughthefiretogether,SevenandJackbecamefriends.Therewillbeapartytobeheldthisweekendtocelebratetheir

friendship.Now,meetingeachothereverydaymakestheirfriendshipdeeperanddeeper.专题训练一：

衔接点 =

采分点衔接点=采分点专题训练二：润色之：因“状”而美PolishPolish专题训练二：润色之：因“状”而美01.第1种修辞：比喻02.03.第2种修辞：拟人第3种修辞：夸张专题训练二：润色之：修辞Rhetorical

devices目录Simile：Itisafigureofspeechwhichmakesacomparisonbetweentwounlikeelementshavingatleastonequalityorcharacteristicin

common.明喻是比喻修辞的一种，在强调两种事物的相似点的同时，本体、喻体、喻词都出现，且能使语言生动形象。喻词有like,

as,as...as,asif,

comparedto,be

similar

to等。The

girl

looks

like

an

otter(水獭).本体 喻词 喻体Metaphor：Itisafigureofspeechcontaininganimpliedcomparison,inwhichawordorphraseordinarilyandprimarilyusedofonethingisappliedtoanother.Unlikesimile,awordora

phraseor

as.种事物，本喻词。暗thatcomparesone

thing暗喻是比喻修辞体喻体都出现，中间喻的典型形式为：甲toanother,usingthewords

like的一种，用一种事物比喻另一常用喻词“是”等连接，有时不用是乙，而不用like, as等喻词。Personification

拟人：It

gives

human

form

of

feelingstoanimals,

or

le

and

personal

attributes(赋予)

to

inanimate

(无生命的)

objects,

or

to

ideas

and

abstractions(抽象).Personification与汉语拟人完全相同，就是赋予物以人的语言属性。这种拟人化的修辞手法读起来使人感到特别形象生动，富有情趣。Hyperbole：Itisthedeliberateuseofoverstatementorunderstatementtoachieve

emphasis.夸张是比喻修辞的一种，是以言过其实的说法表达强调的目的，它可以加强语势，增加表达效果。Shecriedsolongthatshemadea

lake.她哭了这么久，泪流如河（造出了一个湖）。专题训练三：动作链+动作面动作链在描写动作时，要细化动作，把动作分解成一连串细微的动作，形成 ，这样人物更有画面感，立体感。应对策略：设计由易到难，有控制到开放的活动培养学生细化动作的能力。※

让学生不仅表现“在做什么”，

而要表现

“在怎样做”。读后续写作为记叙文，其核心只有一个，那就是“人”。因此一切的笔墨，都是为了塑造人物形象，使人物更加饱满。Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?最为重要的描写有五类：环境、动作、心理、情绪、语言专题训练三方法一：构建“动作链”比如：上出租车这个动作, Hegotintothe

taxi.【拦车】→【上车】→【告诉司机目的地】Hehailedataxi,gotintoitandtoldthedriverhis

destination.再比如：2017年6月浙江卷读后续写中写到“用肉把狼引开”的情节【拿出肉】→【瞄准狼】→【扔出去】Hetookoutthemeat,aimedatthewolf

andthrewitstraighttothefierce

animal.形成动作链:冲向前 蹲下来 一把抱住Shedashedforward,kneltdownandgatheredhersonintoher

arms.①“动作链”结构1:主+谓1...,

谓2...,

and

谓3....1.

看到走丢的儿子，她将其一把抱住。可以把“抱”这个动作按时间拆分为：1.

受到老师的责备和大家的嘲笑，他感到相当的不安和沮丧。动作1 动作2 动作3Blamed

byhisteacherandlaughedat

by

everyone,hefelt

ratherupsetanddepressed.②“动作链”结构2:doing/done...(分词作状语),

主+谓show，tell“展示而非讲述”是一种可适用于各种文本的写作技巧。是读者通过作者对人物的动作、语言、想法、感官与感觉的描写，甚至包括自然风景、场面气氛等细小环节或情节的烘托，使场景戏剧化。而不是作者的说明或总结来体验故事。是作者提供信息，经常是对事件宽泛的、抽象的总结。“展示而非讲述”意味着一个说故事的人不解释(

interpret)，而是挑选启发性的细节(

select

revealing

details),塑造鲜明的人物角色，让情节扣人心弦。专题训练四：toshow,

not

totellHiswere

sweating;witha

heavy/sinkingpalmsheart;Histightenedwith

tension;Tearswelledupin

histhroateyes/blurredhiseyes.

Hisfaceturnedredwith

shyness.Hisit

up;curvingintoa

smile;Hisface

l lipseyestwinkledwithjoy;He

openedarmswithabroad

smile.postivefeelingsnegativefeelings专题训练四：toshow,

not

totellWritethe1stparagraphabout70wordsincludingtheskills

summarized.Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,

Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthose

times.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlic

bread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.

He

stoodonhis

backlegs

andpushedatthewoodenfenceposts（柱子).Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbefore

it

arrived.Makingthebestof

this

closeencounter（相遇）,

I

tooksomepictures

of

the

bear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray(喷洒).

Thesprayburns

thebears’

eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar,thebearrantothelaketowashhis

eyes.Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoour

camp.

Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopter

arrived

Consolidation 2020浙江省高考7月卷Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime,hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence,tryingtostabuswithhissharpclaws.Panickedaswewere,ElliandIscreamedatthetopofourlungs,andwavedourfistsathiminanattempttoscarehimaway.Toourdisappointment,alltheseeffortswereinvain.Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyontheedgeofcollapsing!IflinchedbackandhuddledwithEllitightlywithourteethchattering.Chillywindswhippingourfaces,Icouldhearnothingbutthesoundofourheartsbeatingviolentlyinour

chests.ReferenceFacialexpressionsPhysicalresponsesNatural

environment专题训练五：续写微专题①小情景微翻译续写微专题：小情景微翻译2.

恰到好处的安慰与鼓励2022年全国卷I

——“我”对打算放弃比赛的David的鼓励（提起过去的付出和众人的认可）I

m_e_n_t_io_n_e_d_lastyear’sCampusMini

Marathon,

which

w

o_n_p_e_o_p_l_e’_s_p_r_a_is_e

fo_r

_h_is

d_et_e_r_m_i_n_a_ti_o_n_a_n_d

p_er_s_e_v_e_ra_n_c_e_.Hisfacebeganto

l_ig_h_t_e_n

.Headdedthateventhecoacheshedidn’tknow_t_h_u_m_b_e_d_u_p__a_th_i_m__.Thewhistlewentoffandthecompetitorsbegantotaketheirplaces.Tomyjoy,Davidslowly_r_o_s_e_t_o_h_i_s_f_e_e_t

.我提到去年的校园迷你马拉松，这场比赛赢得了众人对他的决心和毅力的赞扬。他的脸庞亮了起来。他补充说，甚至他不认识的一位教练都对他竖起了大拇指。哨声响了，参赛者各就各位。让我高兴的是，David慢慢地站了起来。续写微专题：小情景微翻译3.

关于小动物的生动描写浙江卷2023年首考——拯救一只蜂鸟___H_e_a_ri_n_g_a__fa_i_n_t_b_uz_z_i_n_g_s_o_u_n_d____,Iinstantlyturnedtoseethefamiliar

hummingbird__h_o_v_e_ri_n_g_i_n_t_h_e_a_ir____,its__ti_n_y_w_i_n_g_s_b_e_a_ti_n_g_r_a_p_id_l_y_a_s_i_t_su_r_v_e_y_e_d_t_h_e_s_ce_n_e____.With

a__s_qu_e_a_k_i_n_g_c_a_ll__,it__d_iv_e_d__to_w__a_rd_s_m__e___andhoveredbeforemyface.Itseemedasif

thebirdwaswaiting

for

me,

i_ts

b_e_ad_y

e_y_e_s_lo_c_k_e_d

o_n_m

in_e

as

if_t_r_y_in_g

to

c_o_n_v_ey

s_o_m_e

d_e_e_p_,_u_n_s_p_o_k_e_n_g_r_a_ti_tu_d_e__.Icouldn’thelpbutfeel__a__s_u_rg_e__o_f_re_l_ie_f_a_n_d__aw__e__atthesightofthissoundandgrateful

creature.听到微弱的嗡嗡声，我立刻转头，看到了一只熟悉的蜂鸟盘旋在空中，它小巧的翅膀快速拍打着，勘察着现场。它尖叫了一声，随即朝我飞来，盘旋在我面前。这只鸟好像在等着我，他珠子一般晶亮的眼睛锁定着我，仿佛在试着表达一些深刻的、无法言说的感激之情。看到这只安好又感恩的小生物，我不禁感到一阵欣慰和敬畏之感。专题训练五：续写微专题②过程具体化微专题：过程具体化（体育）游泳比赛(Howto

swim?)Ijumpedintothewater,kickedmylegsandstretchedmyarmsasfarasIcould.Thefirstfewlaps(圈)wentsmoothly,butasIapproachedthehalfwaymark,

my

arms

and

legs

were

burning

with

exertion

(费劲),

and

my

breaths

werecoming

in

short

gasps

(气喘吁吁).

Despite

the

physical

discomfort,

I

refused

togive

up.Ipushed

myself

harderandharder,

trying

to

maintainmypace

(保持节奏)and

keep

mystroke

steady(划水稳定).

As

I

mademyfinalturnand

headedforthefinishline,Icouldhearthecheersofthecrowdandtheencouragingshoutsofmycoachandfriend,whichgavemeaboostofenergy.Finally,Ireachedthefinishline.Iwasexhausted,butalsoproudofmyselfforfinishingthe

race.微专题：过程具体化（美育）Snow

Bentley拍摄雪花(Howtoproduceaperfect

photo?)Despitethenew-foundfame,SnowflakeBentleysimplymadeuphismindtoproduceaperfectphoto.Wheneveritsnowed,hewouldwaithoursforjusttherightcrystal.Whileneighborssatbythefireplace,Williestormedoutofhisroom,stoodatthebarndoorandheldouttheblacktraytocatchsnowflakes.Daybyday/Bytrialanderror,hetriednew

experiments

to

adjust

the

angles

and

frame

the

photo

(构图)

inordertocapturethemoststrikingphoto.Oneday,Bentleyworkedhismagicandeventuallydevelopedaperfectlyclear

photograph.微专题：过程具体化（劳动教育）兄妹俩开展沙滩清洁环保行动(Howtoappealtomorepeopletotake

action?)Quicklyfinishingtheirdinner,thepairwentupstairsandstartedplanning.MariaandPeterdecidedtotakeadvantageoftheInternet.“Maybewecanwritean

article

to

arouse

people’s

awareness.”

Maria

proposed

(提议).

“Good

idea!

Wecanalsomakeavideo!”Peteradded.Thenextfewhourswitnessedtheirheateddiscussionandgrowingconfidenceinacleanandbeautifulcoast.Thenextday,theywenttothebeachandfilmedashortvideoshowingplasticbagslyingonthebeachandfloatinginthesea.Peter,whowasgoodatwriting,wroteanarticletalkingaboutthepresentsituationofthebeachandaskingpeopletotakepartinthe

clean-up.微专题：过程具体化（智育）2024年浙江首考：Mind

trick解决实际问题(Howtoapplymind

trick?)Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.Justlikeshehadbrokendownthemileintosmallergoals,sherealizedthatshecouldbreakdowntheschoolbuildingintosmallersections.Insteadoftryingtonavigate

(导航)

the

entire

building

at

once,

she

would

focus

on

one

floor

at

atime.Shemadenoteofwhereherclassroomswere,aswellasthelocationsofthelibrary,cafeteria,andgym.Shecontinuedthisprocessforeachfloorofthebuilding.

(具体描述如何应用

mind

trick)

Over

time,

her

efforts

paid

off.

Bybreakingdownthebuildingintosmallersectionsandusingvariousstrategies,Evahadovercomeherpoorsenseof

direction.受时间/篇幅限制

&

突出重点的需求，牢记一个原则：所有的描写都是服务于主题，把握好描写的度，万千不能面面俱到。平日功夫：1.在经典名著阅读中寻找优美语言，诵读与欣赏。2.在读后续写精彩范例中汲取描写灵感，背诵与仿写。3.在平时的阅读文本中挖掘好词佳句，积累与模仿。4.在日常的读写训练中找到改进方向，打磨与提升。读后续写：教学反拨1.

本题总分为15分，按五个档次进行评分五档

漂漂亮亮

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基本没错，读起来很爽四档

清清楚楚

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