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Tips高考英语书面表达高分标准①覆盖所有内容要点②应用较多的语法结构和词汇③有效地使用语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑假如你是高三(1)班的班长李华，得知美国学生Chris作为交换生，下学期将到你班学习。请你根据以下提示，给他写封邮件。(1)表示欢迎；(2)介绍本班情况及与本地生活相关的信息（如气候，饮食等）；(3)希望Chris做哪些事情，以增进中美学生间的了解和友谊。DearChris, I’mLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, LiHuaI.审题：体裁和格式：人称:写作内容及时态：邮件（属书信体，格式已给出）书面表达

you,I,we一般现在时，一般将来时注意：(1)请勿提及相关的真实信息；(2)可适当加入细节，使内容充实，行文连贯；(3)词数100左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。在作文里不能涉及任何所在地区、学校的信息，否则高考时会被视为作弊行为。字数不能超12行，否则扣2分！转换应试意识表达言简意赅

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佳句背诵1.Knowing/When/Onknowingthenewsthatyou’recomingtobewithusasanexchangestudentthiscomingterm,we

cannotconcealourexcitementandlookforwardtoyourarrival.得知…我们….2.Themomentweknowthenewsthat…wordsfailtodescribeourexcitement）得知…我们…..二.介绍-----同位语，非谓语，定从，with结构1.Ourclassconsistsof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,allofwhomarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.Notonlywilltheymakeacquaintancewithyou,butalsotheywouldliketogiveyouahandwhenyouareinrouble.2.MyClass,abigfamilyconsistingof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,arewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.4.Consistingof50students,ourclassseemslikeabigfamilywitharelaxingandharmoniousatmosphere,whichwillmakeyoufeelathome.3.Consistingof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,myclassisabigfamily,inwhichwelivetogetherinharmony.4.Class1,whereyouaregoingtostudy,isabigfamilyconsistingof50students,allofwhomarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.

5.Mycity,afascinatingharbor/afascinatingcoastalcity,enjoyspleasantweather,withbrightsunshinealltheyearround.6.LocatedinthesouthofChina,ourcityisrich/abundantin/isdistinguishedforseafood,whichIhopeyou’lllike/you’llgetaccustomedto7.ComparedwithAmerica,theweatherheremaybedifferentfromthatinyourhometown.（非谓语)AndhereI’lltellyousomethingaboutthelocallife,whichmaybedifferentfromthatinyourhometown.

8.Weallviewthisasapreciouschanceforustolearnaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,wecanhaveourspokenEnglishimprovedwhenwehavefuntogether.（what引导宾语从句，when引导状语从句。9Indeed,wefeelexcitedabouthavingyouasournewclassmateandwearecuriousaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,youareexpectedtoinvolvedyourselfin….,where….inthisway..ourfriendshipwillsurelybepromoted.

参考范文：

DearChris,

I’mLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve.I’mmorethangladtoknowthatyou’recomingtobewithusasanexchangestudentthiscomingterm.Infact,allmyclassmatesarekindandlookforwardtoyourcoming,andarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofus.

Besides,Ihopethatyou’llhavenodifficultyadaptingtothefoodandweatherhere.Itisgenerallynottoohotinsummerhereandwehaverelativelywarmerwinter,comparedtothatinAmerica.Wehavericeas

ourmainfood,whichIhopeyou’lllike.

Indeed,wefeelexcitedabouthavingyouasournewclassmate.Foronething,wecanhaveabetterknowledgeofAmericancultureandsocialcustomswithyourhelp.Foranother,weviewthisasagoodchanceforustoimproveourEnglish.

Hopetoseeyousoon. Yours, LiHua2.DearChris,I’mLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve.

Hearingthatyou’llcometoourclass,allmyclassmatesfeelexcited.Wearekindandeasytogetalongwith,so

there’snodoubtthatwewillmakeyoufeelathome

onceyou’reherewithus.LifeinChinacanbedifferentfromthatinAmerica.Tobeginwith,wefeedmainlyonrice,whichIhopeyou’llgetaccustomedto.Inaddition,wehavehotsummer,butinwinterit’sgenerallywarmer.Weallseethisasapreciouschanceforustolearnaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,wecanhaveourspokenEnglishimprovedwhenwehavefuntogether.亮点：1.句型结构有：分词作状语和宾补，so连接并列分句，同位语从句，非限制性定语从句，what引导宾语从句，once引导状语从句。2.短语：feelathome,bedifferentfrom,feedon,getaccustomedto,see…as…,havefun。3.使用tobeginwith,inaddition,meanwhile等词语使行文流畅。III.改错：下列句子是写作中易出现的普遍错误，请找出错误并改正。1.Knowthatyou’lljoininusnextterm,Iamglad.2.Therearemanyseafoodinourcity.3.YoucanhelpusinourEnglish.4.Ourclassisconsistedof56students,allofthemarefriendly.5.LifeinChinacanbedifferentfromAmerica.正：Knowingthatyou’lljoinusnextterm,Iamglad.正：Thereismuchseafoodinourcity.正：YoucanhelpuswithourEnglish.正：Ourclassconsistsof…,allofwhomare…正：Life…differentfromthatinAmerica.

6.Iconvincethat….7.Notonlyaretheywillingtomakeacquaintancewithyou,butalsogiveyouahandwhenyouareintrouble.8.Iandmyclassmateswelcomeyoutoourschool.2016广州一模假定你是李华，你要完成一项关于中英学生寒假生活的调查。请给你的英国笔友Bill写一封信，交流相关信息。要点如下：

1．写信的原因；

2．介绍中国学生的寒假生活；

(1)时长：约20天

(2)活动

3．询问英国学生的寒假生活。Howiseverything?

I’mdoingaprojectonhowBritishandChinesestudentsspendtheirwinterholidays.InChina,thewintervacationisusuallyabouttwentydayslong.ItfallsduringtheChineseNewYear,somoststudentstakepartindifferentSpringFestivalactivities,suchasvisitingfamily,eatinglotsoffoods,andmostimportantly,gettingluckymoney!Duringtheholidaymanystudentswillalsogotravellingwiththeirparents.Unfortunatelytheycan’ttravelforlongthoughbecauseChinesestudentsalwayshavealotofhomeworktododuringthisbreak.

Manymustevenattendspecialholidayclasses.WhataboutintheUK?Howdothestudentsspendthewinterholidaysthere?

I’mlookingforwardtoyourreply.

Yours,

LiHuaII.

佳作赏析

1.DearChris,I’mLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve.Knowingthatyou’llstayinoursch