高中英语续写作文语料库-动作描写 课高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

续写作文语料库--动作描写Howtomaketheactiondescriptionmorevivid?1.分解动作--动作链2.具体动词--忌笼统3.配上表情--带情感4.融入心理--重思维感知:结合语境,如何优化表达?1.Becauseofhislies,shelooked

athim.Becauseof

hislies,she_________athim.2Withonlytwentysecondsleft,Irantotheline.Withonlytwentysecondsleft,I________________totheline.3.Withonlytwominutesleft,heatehismeal.Withonlytwominutesleft.He_______________hismeal.4.Sheheardhermothersayquietly

asshewalked

downthehall,"Don'twakeyourdadup."Sheheardhermother___________asshe________downthe

hall,"Don'twakeyourdadup...glaredrush/dashedswallowed

upwhispered

tiptoed目录

Partone

用精准动词代替笼统动词Parttwo

用恰当短语代替普通动词Partthree

添加介词短语/副词修饰动作Partfour分解动作，形成动作链

Partfive动作描写词汇

PartOne

ChooseAccurateVerbs用精准动词代替笼统动词generalwords(笼统的词笼统词）walkrunlooksay/talkconcretewords(具体词)chat(闲聊);whisper(耳语)weep/sob(啜泣)bite(咬)chew(咀嚼)swallow(吞下)tiptoe(蹑手蹑脚地走)dash/rush(猛冲)glare(怒视);glance(瞥见);stare(凝视)PartTwo

Chooseproperphrases

用恰当短语代替普通动词start/begindecidecryremembertiredseeattractappealto动词动词动词短语动词getdowntodoingmakeupone'smindburst

intotearskeepinmindwornoutcatchsightofPartThree添加介词短语/副词修饰动作动作描写语料库探究→ThefiercewolfstaredatMacwith

its_________________(adj.)teeth.→___________________________(adv.),hejumpedoffthebicycleanddashedintothecar.→Asthehungrywolfwasalmostreachinghim,Mac'seyeswerewideopen_______________________.(in/with+名词)sharp/bloody/frightening/scary/terribleImmediately/Instantly/Hurriedly/Breathlesslyinfear/panic/horror/shockPartFour分解动作，形成动作链Actionchains把动作过程分解成一连串的动作，构造动作链，让你的动作描写既丰富又生动!举例子：她拥抱了Betty.(失散多年的老朋友）Shedashedforward，gatheredBettyintoherarmsandburstintotears.冲上去--抱住她--流下眼泪--dashforwardhug/gatherherintoherarmsburstintotears分析：动作链有哪些？形成句子：举例子：他向狗扔了一块肉。形成句子：Hepickedupapieceofmeat,aimedatthedogandthrewittohim.捡起肉瞄准狗

扔过去

pickupapieceofmeataimatthedogthrowto动作链：

Iputonmycoathurriedly,grabbedmy

bagand

rushedtoschoolthismorning.训练：我早上匆忙去上学。分析动作链：穿外套抓起书包冲去学校putonmycoatgrabbedmybagrushedtoschoo!形成句子：Theboysrushedexcitedlytothelake,tookofftheirclothes

andjumpedintothewater.训练：孩子们跳入湖中嬉戏分析动作链：冲向湖边脱掉衣服跳入水中rushedtothelaketookofftheirclothesjumpedintothewater形成句子：微写作练习Imitatewriting：①Jimscreamed._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________②Heopenedthedoor._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________③Icomfortedhim.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________④Heruntothestartingline.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________⑤打篮球的动作链_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________他运球穿过球场，躲过防守者，快速传球，然后投篮。⑥演讲的动作链_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________他深吸一口气，走上舞台，调整了麦克风，开始对观众讲话。⑦描写读书的情景开始：打开书本，翻开第一页。中间：专注阅读，做记号，沉浸在故事中。结束：合上书，思考所读内容，感受阅读的愉悦_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Jimscreamedatthetopofhisvoice,stormedoutoftheroomandslammedthedoorheavilybehindhim.Heapproachedthedoor,turnedthehandle,andslowly

pusheditopen.Igentlystrokedhishair,heldhishandtightly,andcomfortedhiminasoftvoice.Noddinghishead,hestoodup,clenchedhisfistandstumbledtothestartingline.Dribblingtheballdownthecourt,hedodgeddefenders,madeaquickpass,andtookashotatthebasket.Takingadeepbreath,hesteppedontothestage,adjustedthemicrophone,andbeganaddressingtheaudience.Openingthebook,I'mimmersedinitsworld;theoccasionalpageturnechoesinthesilence,andclosingitleavesalingeringjoy.她站在山顶，仰望天空，感受着这份珍贵的宁静。Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookedintotheskyandfeltthepreciouspeace.如何句式升级？升级句式：（1）句式：doing,主语+谓语,doingStandingontheemptyroad,shelookedintothesky，feeling

thepreciouspeace.Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookedinto

theskyand

feltthepreciouspeace.改写下列句子：（2）主语+谓语，doinganddoingShe

stood

onthetopofthemountain,lookingintotheskyandfeeling

thepreciouspeace.Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookedinto

theskyandfeltthepreciouspeace.改写下列句子：被老师的话所鼓舞，Lucy举起了手，说：我来。Lucywasinspiredbyherteacher’swords,sosheraisedherhandandsaid:“Ivolunteer”.案例分析：如何升级该句子？Lucywasinspiredbyherteacher’swords,sosheraisedherhandandsaid，“Ivolunteer”.（3）

done(byn),主语+谓语，doingInspiredbyherteacher’swords,Lucyraisedherhand,saying，“Ivolunteer”.改写下列句子：（4）善用with复合结构Lucywasinspiredbyherteacher’swords,Lucyraisedherhandandsaid，“Ivolunteer”.Withteacher’swordsinspiringher,Lucyraisedherhand,saying:“Ivolunteer”.改写下列句子：PartFive

describebodyactionsfrommulti-perspectives从头部手部腿部呼吸心跳等多角度描写肢体动作头嘴腿手臂眼手脚手指动作描写：肢体动作细节类短语--头①drop/lower/bend/bow/hangone'shead低头②put/hold/buryone'sheadinone'shands双手抱头③nodone'shead点头④shakeone'shead摇头⑤restone'sheadon/against把头靠在...上面5⑥scratchone'shead挠了挠头⑦headfor/towards朝走去1.史蒂文低着头，眼里含着泪，慢慢地向公交车走去。______________________________________________________________________________________2.他的朋友John向他点头微笑。______________________________________________________________________________________3.他心情不好，低下头来掩饰，勉强笑了一下。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________既学既练：Stevenwalkedslowlytothebus,hisheaddown,tearsinhiseyes.(独立主格结构)HisfriendJohnnoddedhisheadandsmiledathimThoughhewasinabadmood,hedropped/hung/loweredhisheadtohideitandmanagedasmile.肢体动作细节类短语--眼睛①meetsb'seyes接触某人的目光②stareintoone'seyes凝视③fix/focusone'seyeson盯着④lower/dropone'seyes垂下眼睛⑤raise/liftone'seyes抬起眼睛⑥one'seyesshine/sparkle/glistenwithexcitement眼里闪着兴奋的光芒按要求完成句子、1.约翰坐在窗边，目光紧盯着一本书。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.他看完后，抬眼向窗外望去。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.他高兴地唱着歌,用天真而又好奇的眼睛注视着周围的一切。_______________________________________________________________________________________既学既练：①Johnsatbesidethewindow,andfixed/focusedhiseyesonabook.(并列句)②Johnsatbesidethewindow,withhiseyesfixed/focusedonabook.(with复合结构)Whenhefinishedthebook,heraised/liftedhiseyesandlookedoutofthewindow.Singinghappily,hegazedatthesurroundingswith

innocentandcuriouseyes.肢体动作细节类短语--嘴巴①open-mouthed目瞪口呆的②one'smouthwidens咧开嘴③cup/coverone'smouth捂住某人的嘴④mouthdrops/hangswideopen张大嘴巴⑤one'sheartinone'smouth提心吊胆1.闻到三明治的香味，饥饿的小女孩开始流口水了。_____________________________________________________________________________________________2.她刚要拿起三明治咬一口，突然一只手捂住了她的嘴。_____________________________________________________________________________________________3.她的哥哥一把抢走了三明治放入自己口中。_____________________________________________________________________________________________既学既练：Thehungrygirl'smouthstartedwateringwhenshesmelledthesandwich.(mouth作主语)Shewasabouttopickupthesandwichandtakeabitewhensuddenlyahandcuppedhermouth.Itwasherbrotherwhograbbedthesandwichandputitintohisownmouth.肢体动作细节类短语--手①holdone'shand抓住某人的手②shakehandswith与握手③cup...inone'shands将捧在手心④openone'shands张开双手⑤handinhand手拉手)⑥raise/putupone'shand举手⑦holdoutone'shand伸出手⑧takeone'shand牵某人的手⑨spreadone'shands摊开双手1.一只小蝴蝶，正拼命扇动翅膀却无法从地面上飞起来。_____________________________________________________________________________________2.在它面前是卡车的轮胎。_________________________________________________________________________________3.我不假思索就下了车，举起手不让卡车司机往前走，然后弯下腰去看那只蝴蝶。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________既学既练：Asinglebutterflywascrazilyflutteringitswingsbutcouldnotgetofftheground.Itwasrightinfrontofatruck'stire.WithoutthinkingIgotoutofmycar,heldmyhandupsothetruckdriverwouldn'tmoveforward,andbentdowntolookatthebutterfly.肢体动作细节类短语--腿①shaky/tremblinglegs颤抖的双腿②tiredlegs疲惫的双腿)③crossone'slegs盘腿④dragone'sheavylegs拖着沉重的双腿1.他继续努力向终点跑去，他嘴巴干涩，双腿抖。2.他摔倒了，背部着地，双腿又开。3.他费力地双腿颤抖地站了起来。既学既练：①Hestruggledtoruntowardsthefinishingline.Hismouthwasdryandhislegstrembled.(简单句)②Hestruggledtoruntowardsthefinishingline,withhis(with复合结构)mouthdryandhislegstrembling.Hefellover,flatonhisbackwithhislegswide.(with复合结构)Witheffort,herosetohisfeetonshakylegs.肢体动作细节类短语--腿1.单词:barefootadj.&adv.赤脚的(地)2.短语:getleaptoone'sfeet直起身来/跳起来②)jump/risetoone'sfeet跳起来/站起来③dragone'sfeet拖着脚步④tap/stampone'sfeet跺脚