专题01 校园生活-备战2022年上海中考英语书面表达满分攻略（解析版）

（2021年长宁区一模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“________leftmeanewimpression.”（请以“________给我留下一个新印象”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）你身边有熟悉的同学、朋友、老师……，有一天可能因为某件事让你对她（他）改变了原有的看法。请补全标题，并结合这个事例谈谈她（他）给你留下的这个新的印象。（注意：文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）________leftmeanewimpression.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】范文：Theteacherleftmeanewimpression.OnceI wasnotinterestedinEnglish.That wasMissWangwhochangedme.Oneday,ourteachertolduswewouldhaveanEnglishspeechcompetitiontwomonthslater.Everyonewashappy exceptme,becauseIcouldn'tdaretospeakEnglishinpublic.MyEnglishteachercamewitha smileandencouragedme.Fromthenon,Ipracticedeveryday.Thedaycame,Igotthefirstprizeatlast.FromMissWang,Iknowthatifyoudecidetodosomethingandputyourheartintoit,youwillsucceed.Theteacherleftmeanewimpression.【解析】【分析】【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作。在写作时首先补全标题，并且根据汉语提示，叙述因为某件事让你对她（他）改变了原有的看法，给你留下了新的印象。2.写作指导：本文应该用第三人称为主来叙述故事内容；时态采用一般过去时；描述故事时，力求描写细致，故事发生的背景、起因等叙述完整，保证条例清晰。（二）（2021年奉贤一模）64.Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation（根据以下情景写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点不占格。）Mr.Smith用特殊的方式给他的学生上了“精彩一课”。你的老师一定也以他/她独特的方式给你留下过深刻的印象。他/她或许组织过精彩的活动，他/她或许讲述过精彩的故事，他/她或许……请以“Awonderfullesson（精彩一课）”为题，记录老师给你上过的精彩一课。Awonderfullesson_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文：AwonderfullessonWehavemanyclasseseveryday,butIthinkthemostwonderfulclassisyesterday’sChineseclass.OurChineseteacherisMissLi.Althoughsheisveryyoung,sheknowsalot.Shealwaystellsusaboutthecultureandcustomsofdifferentplacesandsoon.YesterdayintheChineseclass,MissLididnottaketheChinesebookbuttookseveralpicturesthatlookedverybad.Onthesepictures,somechildrenstandedinthefieldlookingatthedistance,somechildrenevenpickedupthingstoeatfromthetrashcans.Allofusweresurprisedanddidn'tknowwhatMissLimeant.Byexplainingthecontentofeachpictureandthestorybehindit,MissLiletusknowthattherearestillmanychildreninmanyareaswhodonothavefoodorgotoschool,sothatweknowhowtocherisheverydayofschool,andalsoletussympathizewiththosechildrenmore.Sincethen,everytimeIhavefinishedreadingbooks,Iwilldonatethemtothecommunityworkstation,hopingtogivethemtothosechildrenwhodonothavebookstoread.【解析】【分析】【详解】1.

题干解读：文章属于话题作文，主要是以“Awonderfullesson”为主题展开描写，内容可以按照自身的情况适当的发挥，写作时要运用正确的英语表达，要选用恰当的词汇和短语。

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写作指导：文章主要用一般现在时和一般过去时，人称用第一和第三人称展开描述。主要是介绍自己的精彩的课堂以及为什么是精彩的，从中学到了什么等。写作时语言要简单易懂，文章结构要完整，多使用简单词语表达，意思要通俗易懂。（三）（2020年浦东新区一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic"LearnfromYesterday"回首过往,在十几年的人生中,你学习、运动、旅游、交友、玩耍......其中你有收获、有遗憾,会欣喜、会难过.......请结合发生在你身上的一个事例,谈谈你从中得到的启示。（注意：短文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名及其它相关信息,否则不予评分。）LearnfromYesterday________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文LearnfromYesterdayAgoodstudentshouldadoptapositiveattitudetowardslife.Inthepast,IhadalotoftroubleinlearningEnglish.Itriedmanywaystoimproveit,butIwasstillpoorinmyEnglish.IaskedmyEnglishteacherforhelp.Shesaidthatmyhardworkwouldbeuseful.Afterafewmonths,ImadegreatprogressinmyEnglish.SoIknowthatIshouldlearnfromyesterday,Icangetusefullessonsfrommyexperience.IfIlearnfromthepast,Ishouldbepositivetolifeandstudy.【解析】【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于议论文写作，写作时要按议论文格式写。在写作时开头介绍好学生应该积极地对待生活；接下来介绍我学习英语的经历；最后介绍我从自己过去的经历中学到的东西。2.例文点评：例文采用一段式；用第一、三人称来叙述内容；时态采用一般过去时为主，描述故事时，故事发生的背景、起因和过程等叙述完整且条理清晰。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。3.高分亮点：短语：havealotoftroubleindoingsth；bepoorin；asksbforhelp；makegreatprogress；learnfrom。句型：宾语从句thatmyhardworkwouldbeuseful；结果状语从句SoIknowthatIshouldlearnfromyesterday；条件状语从句IfIlearnfromthepast。（四）（2021年奉贤区二模）84.Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation.(根据以下情景写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）王老师是你们学校的一名退休教师。他非常期待收到学生们的来信。请你写一封信给他，你可以告诉他学校发生的变化、开展的活动、或者任何关于校园生活的点点滴滴。(注意：1.短文中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。2.照抄阅读语篇不得分。）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】DearWang,

I’maseniorhighschoolstudentnamedLiHua.Itisgreathonortotellyouthechangesinourschool.

Therearelotsofchangeshappenedinourschool,oneofthemisthesportschanging.Forexample,nowwecanhavemoretimetodosomesportsafterclasstorelaxourselves.Tobemoreconcrete,timewehavesportscomparedwithpastdaysthataddedforaboutonehour.Nowwehavepingpang,soccerandbaseballgames.Thatreallymadeourstudentshealthierandstudybetterthanbefore.Itmadeourschoolspirited.Andtherelationshipofstudentsandteacherbecomebetterandbetter.

Wearealllookingforwardingtoseeingyou.Bestwishesforyou!（五）（2020年杨浦一模）In60-100words,makeupatwo-turndialogueaccordingtothegivensituation（根据所给情境编一篇60-100词的两个轮次的对话。标点符号不占格，对话的开头和结尾已给出。）Situation:TomeBrown,a40-year-oldP.E.teacher,savedaboyfrombeingknockeddownbyacar.Crystalschoolreporterwantedtowriteanarticleabouthisgooddeed（事迹）.SheinterviewedTomBrown.Theinterviewbeginslikethis:Crystal:Mr.Brown,MayIaskyouafewquestions?TomBrown:Sure.Pleasegoahead.Crystal:TomBrown:Crystal:TomBrown:Crystal:Thankyouforyoutime!It’snicetalkingtoyou.（注意：文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）【答案】Crystal:Mr.Brown,MayIaskyouafewquestions?TomBrown:Sure.Pleasegoahead.Crystal:Whenandwheretheaccidenthappened?TomBrown:Atabout8:30,IwaswalkingonOceanRoadwhenaboyonabikepassedmequickly.Theroadwasemptyatthattimesotheboykeptridinginthemiddle.Crystal:Howdidtheaccidenthappened?TomBrown:Theboywaslisteningtomusicwithearplugsandhedidn’thearthewarning.Suddenlythecarspeededupandpassedtheboy.Unfortunately,ithittheboy.Theboyfelloffhisbikeontotheroad,butthecardidn’tstop.Crystal:Whatdidyoudothen?TomBrown:ThenumberplateofthecarwassodirtythatIcouldn’tseethenumberclearly.TheboywasbadlyhurtsoIsenthimtotheoffice.ThenIcalledthepolice.Crystal:Thankyouforyoutime!It’snicetalkingtoyou.【解析】【详解】1.题干解读：本文属于对话，主要表达校记者需要写一个关于体育老师救了一个被车撞了的小孩的事迹而进行的一个采访。注意时态的准确运用，询问当时发生的事情以及体育老师描述当时的情景需要使用一般过去时。并灵活使用所学的单词、短语以及句型使文章更加生动。2.这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。3.高分亮点：单词短语：atthattime,keepdoing,listento,with,speedup以及falloff。高分句型：IwaswalkingonOceanRoadwhenaboyonabikepassedmequickly中使用了bedoing...when...结构；ThenumberplateofthecarwassodirtythatIcouldn’tseethenumberclearly中so...that...引导结果状语从句。【点睛】首先认真审题，看清题目中的要求和要点；然后根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个要点中可能要用到的表达，例如atthattime,keepdoing,listento,with,speedup,falloff,bedoing...when以及so...that引导的结果状语从句等；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作，在写作过程中，要注意句与句、段与段之间的过渡，必要时可适当运用表示转折、因果、并列、比较等关系的连词，使文章过渡平稳，自然流畅；最后，要仔细检查有无单词拼写错误、标点符号误用等，还要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。（六）（2020年徐汇一模）Writeatleast60wordstointroducetheelectiveyouhaveattendedatschool.请以“Myfavoriteelective”（我最喜欢的选修课）为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文介绍你在学校参加过的印象深刻的选修课。谈谈该课程的学习内容以及你的学习体会。（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。标点符号不占格）Myfavoriteelective________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文MyfavoriteelectiveMyfavoriteelectiveisself-defensecourse.Itisoneofthemostpopularelectivesinourschool.Itteachesushowtoprotectourselvesintimeofdanger.Inmyopinion,it’susefulandnecessaryforusstudents,especiallyforgirlstomasterself-defenseskills.Besides,studentscantaketheopportunitytobuilduptheirstrength.AsfarasIknow,manymorestudentsplantotakeself-defensecoursenextterm.【解析】【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于话题作文，要求根据题目要求写一篇短文，讲讲自己最喜欢的选修课。写作内容涵盖课程的学习内容及自己的学习体会并紧扣主题适当发挥。2.例文点评：这是一篇优秀的例文，例文开篇点题，说明自己最喜欢的选修课是什么，接下来讲述了该课程的学习内容，之后又发表了自己对该课程的一些看法，并结合题目要求做了适当发挥。例文结构清晰，行文连贯，恰当地运用了副词和连词等用以过渡，增强了整篇文章的逻辑关系。3.高分亮点：单词和短语：especially；besides；inone’sopinion；intimeof；taketheopportunitytodosth.；buildup；asfarasIknow。句型：宾语从句；it’s+adj.+forsb.todosth.句式。（七）（2021年静安区二模）84.Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation.(根据所给情境写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）美国拉斯维加斯的不少学生参加了户外花园教室项目，在活动中收获了很多。你在校内外参加过什么有趣有益的项目，并给你留下了深刻的映像。请以“Makinglearningfun(乐中学)”为题，分享你的经历或感想。(注意:1.短文中不得出现考生姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不子评分。2.照抄阅读语篇不得分。)Makinglearningfun________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】MakinglearningfunI’vejoinedinvariousafter-classmeaningfulactivities,ofwhichthevolunteeroneinthelocalnursinghouseisthemostimpressive.SeveralclassmatesandIvolunteeredthereeveryweekendlastyear.Wedidsomecleaning,chattedwiththeoldandreadnewspaperstothem.Afterfinishingthewholeactivity,IbenefitedalotbecauseIgotmeaningfullessonsandfun.First,cleaningthenursinghousedevelopsmyabilityofdoingchore,whichpreparesmeforlivingindependentlyinfuture.Second,talkingwiththeoldandreadingnewspaperstothemimprovemycommunicationskillsandbringmemuchfun.Therefore,thisactivityoffersmesomanybenefitsthatit’sreallyimpressiveandunforgettable.（八）假如你是国际学校的学生李华，学校正在为一年一度的艺术节招募表演者和志愿服务者。请你根据自己的意愿，给负责人Mr.Smith写一封邮件推荐自己，并为学校艺术节提出1～2条合理建议。内容包括：●意愿及理由●具体打算●合理建议要求∶1.文中不得出现真实的人名和校名;2.词数80词左右，开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数。DearMr.Smith,I’mwritingtotellyouwhatIwanttodofortheartfestival.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookforwardtoyourreplysoon.Yours,LiHua【答案】DearMr.Smith,I’mwritingtotellyouwhatIwanttodofortheartfestival.First,Iwanttorecommendmyselftotakepartintheactivity.Iwanttobeavolunteer.Iamkindandoutgoing.Ioftenvolunteertojoininsomeactivitiesliketalentshows.Second,Iwanttosharemyplanswithyou.Iwillkeeporder,andcleantheschoolhallaftertheactivity.Finally,Iwanttogivemysuggestionsabouttheactivity.Atthebeginningoftheactivity,weshoulddecoratetheschoolhall.Attheendoftheactivity,wevolunteersandplayersshouldtakephotostogether.Lookforwardtoyourreplysoon.Yours,LiHua【详解】1.题干解读：本文是一篇材料作文。给艺术节的负责人Mr.Smith写一封邮件推荐自己。2.写作指导：本文主要采用一般将来时和一般现在时。分为三段式：第一段引出出题；第二段描述自荐的理由；具体打算以及合理建议；第三段表达期待对方的回信。写作时保持主谓一致性，逻辑性要强，无语法和标点错误。（九）初中三年，我们都有一些难以忘怀的经历。学校英语俱乐部将组织题为“AnUnforgettableExperience”的征文比赛。请根据提示，写一篇短文参赛。1.Whatwastheexperience?2.Whathaveyoulearnedfromit?注意事项：（1）词数：100词左右（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）；（2）文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信息；（3）文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺。AnUnforgettableExperienceLookingbackonthepastthreeyears,everyonehadsomeunforgettableexperiences._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】AnUnforgettableExperienceLookingbackonthepastthreeyears,everyonehadsomeunforgettableexperiences.IwillneverforgettheexperienceofbeingavolunteerfortheAsianGamesheldinourcity.Beingoneofthethreevolunteersselectedfromourschool,Ifeltexcitedandproud.TomakesurethatIcouldprovidethebestservice,Ipracticedinmysparetime,especiallymyspokenEnglish.Whenthedayfinallycame,IfeltalittlebitnervousbecauseIwasafraidofmakinganymistakes.Fortunately,Iperformedwellandwasspokenhighlyofbythevolunteerorganization.Ilearnedthatweshouldbeconfidentandhard-working.ItwasthefirsttimethatIhadbeenavolunteerforsuchanimportantevent,whichmademeproudeversince.【详解】1.题干解读：本文是一篇材料作文。要求以“AnUnforgettableExperience”为题，根据提示问题进行写作，注意要点齐全，可适当发挥。2.写作指导：写作时要以第一人称来行文，时态以一般过去时为主。作文可分为三段，第一段引出话题；第二段介绍令自己难忘的经历；第三段介绍自己的感受和学到了什么。要保证语言连贯，无语法和拼写错误。（十）为助力打造“书香校园”，你校英语社团将举办以“热爱阅读”为主题的征文活动，请以“EnjoyReading,EnjoyLife”为标题写一篇短文介绍你自己的阅读情况并阐述阅读给你带来的好处。要求：1.短文应包括两个要点（阅读情况和阅读好处），可适当发挥，参考词汇仅供选择使用；2.短文不能出现真实的人名和校名；3.词数：90～110。参考词汇：experience,habit,knowledge,pleasureEnjoyReading,EnjoyLife____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Version1EnjoyReading,EnjoyLifeReadingmakesafullman.Ihaveagreatpassionforreadingandithasbecomepartofmylife.Ihaveagoodreadinghabit.Everymorning,Ireadnewspapersforthelatestnews.I’malsofondofnovelsandmagazines.Besides,bookreviewsprovidemewithdifferentideasongreatbooks.Whenreading,Ifeelrelaxedandpleased.It’sthebestmomenttogetknowledgeandpleasureinlife.What’smore,readingopensmyeyesandbroadensmymind.Throughreading,IcanexperiencewhatIhaven’tseenordonebefore.Withadeeploveforreading,Ican’twaittoreadmore.Version2EnjoyReading,EnjoyLifeThereisnodoubtthatreadingplaysanimportantroleinourlife.Baconsaid:“Readingmakesafullman”.Andreadingmakesourlifecolorfultoo.I’vedevelopedagoodreadinghabitsinceIwasachild.Comicsaremyfavorite,like“JourneytotheWest”.Thesefunnybooksgavemegreatpleasureandaccompaniedmethroughahappychildhood.Afterenteringmiddleschool,Ihadawidereadinginvariedfields.Andallthesebooksbroughtmebothvaluableknowledgeandwonderfulexperiences.Booksarehuman’sfriends.Lovethem,andtheywillrewardyoubetter!【详解】Version11.

题干解读：题目要求根据提示词语，写出自己的阅读情况以及阅读的好处是什么，可以适当的发挥，写作时要运用正确的英语表达，要选用恰当的词汇和短语。

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写作指导：写作时要紧扣主题，用第一人称和其他人称相结合来写作，时态以一般现在时为主，要做到要点齐全，无单词拼写和语法错误。（十一）曾经，你们带着求知而来；如今，你们带着收获离开。现在的你即将迈进理想的学校，开始新的生活。初中三年，或兴奋、或失落，一切过往，皆为序章。青春年华，以梦为马。毕业之际，你校将举办一场英语演讲比赛。请你根据以下要点，以“Sharing”为主题，写一篇演讲稿。写作要求：1.词数90左右（开头已经给出，不计入总词数）；2.根据要点提示，可以适当发挥；3.文中不得出现真实的姓名及校名。SharingGoodmorning,mydearteachersandfriends!It’smygreathonortostandheretosharemystory.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】SharingGoodmorning,mydearteachersandfriends!It’smygreathonortostandheretosharemystory.Itisalwayshardtoseparatefromthosewhomyouhavespentsomuchtimewithforthepastthreeyears.However,wearestillexcitedtosetoutonanewjourney.Duringthesethre