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ContinuationWritingOnabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheyupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)aongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.HehopedtoshowthemthisThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.Man,thatsabigdog!hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasnotadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithMac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMacsbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechaMacwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehill,he'dbeeasyupandthewolfsteethwouldbetearingintohisfleshAtthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidnotthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.astheygotclosertheyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow评分标准criterion对第五档2125作文的描述:1.与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落、开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富,应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义表达;4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑;goodContinuationwritingThemeositiveendingplotStorydescriptionunderlinefeelingReadforthemeaWhoMacMac'sfriendsPaulandBeckyaWhenOnabright,warmJulyafternoonaWhereOnthewaytoAlaskaabeautifulplaceaWhatAwolfquicklycaughtupwithmacWhatisthestoryabout?Macandhisfriendswerecyclingtoalaskawhenoneofhisfriendshadstoppedtorepairthebike,soMaccarriedonalone.allofasuddenhewasfollowedbyawolfandwasverydangerousReadforPlotsandFeelingsClimax(bothterrifiedandrelievedthewolfPaulandBeckychasingandescaping(terrified/afraid/frightenedChappy/relaxed)cyclingBeginningEndingGroupdiscussionfortheplotdevelopmentswithquestionsPara.1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim1.WhatdidMacdowhenhesawthecar?2.WhatdidMacfeelnow3.Wasthewolfstillthere?Oritwentaway?Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Ifthewolfwasstillthere,whatmighthappentothetwofriendsandthemenintheca2.Ifthewolfhadgone,whatmighthappen3.Whatmightbetheending?Keytopolishingyourcontinuationwriting1.Usespecific(具体的)actionverbs2.Usevividdescription3.UseadvancedsentencepatternsNaturewascalmandpeacefulItwasasunny(视觉)daywithabeamigh(视觉inthetrees,andtherewasadelicious(味觉)flavorofgrass.NotaleafmVed(视觉)andnotasounddisturbedthepeace[Student]:Macsaid,"Helpme!Usespecificactionverbs[Polish]yell,shout,chat,talk,scream,crystate,announce,mentionaddwhisper,sigh,reply,respond,argue,swear(发暂,stammer(结巴),mumble(支支吾吾)[Student]:BeckyaskedMactogetintothecar[Polish]:UsespecificactionverbsStudent]Macsawhisfriendsapproachinghim.spotnotice