如何润色英语作文

作文的核心任务：在15秒内取悦阅卷老师优秀作文应具备的六个基本特征：1、层次不乱2、句式多变3、亮点若干4、巧妙串联5、蠢错不犯6、整洁卷面作文上光第一招：肃清愚蠢语言错误13种常见的语言错误（1）主谓不一致

FatherandIamgoingtovisither.Myuncleoftengotothecinemahimself.(2)时态、语态混用

Themovieissogoodthatweallenjoyeditverymuch.Theoldmanknockeddownbythecarandinjuredbadly.

(3)句子成分残缺

Butthecarwhichpaintedreddidn’tstop.Theyoungmanrunninginthestreetfast.

(4)习惯搭配乱用

IverylikethenovelThenwesetoffdigging,plantingandwatering.

(5)汉式英语

Thecarisyellowcolor.Nextmonthhaveasportsmeeting.

(6)名词单、复数不分

HewillgiveusatalkonAmericanfilm.Heisoneofthebestplayerinourschool.

(7)赘词现象严重

Atlast,thelostboyreturnedback.Ononeday,hewenttothecinema.

(8)用词不当

Hedoesn’twanttosaysomethingaboutthismatter.Ihopeyoutohelpthegirlwithherhomework.

(9)拼写和词形变化错误

Thecarhittedtheoldmananddrivedaway.Onhiswaytoschool,hesewalittlegirl.

(10)前后人称不一致

Swimmingandfootballarehisfavoritesports,andhelikesitallhislife.Thelittlegirlusuallygoestoschoolat7inthemorning,buttodayhewaslateforschool.(11)分词作状语、逻辑主语不一致Havingheardthenews,herheartbeatfasterandfaster.Preparingdinner,thedoorbellrang.(12)动词原形作主语Walkisgoodforyouhealth.Drinkwinesisharmful.(13)一个简单句出现两个谓语Therewasnobus,wehadtowalkhome.Therearealotofstudentslikethismovie.LastsummerIgotoAmericaandstudiedatalanguageschool.Ihadmanywonderfulexperience,butIalsohadasadone.Oneday,theschoolheldparty,whereIinvitedtotalkaboutTianjin.AfterthattheyaskedmealotofthingsaboutChina.ButIcouldn’texplainthemwithEnglishclearly.Ifeltsadly.Ilearntalessonfromthisexperience.IhavealreadystudiedEnglishforeightyears,Ican’tuseitverygood.ImustworkhardtoimprovemyspokenEnglishsothatIwillnotbeabletocommunicatefreelywithforeigners.IhopeIcanbeabridgebetweenChinaandotherscountriesinthefuture.∧∧∧TheStoryaboutGrowthismyfavoriteAmericanTVplaybecauseitisveryinterested.Theplay76.

tellshumorousstoriesthathappenintheGreen’s77.

family.Withsuchstoriesitmakepeoplethink78.

aboutlife,butthereforeattractstheaudience.Itis79.

alsoawindowwhichwecanlearnaboutAmerican80.

society.Andthereweremanymeaningfulthingsthat81.

areworththinkof,suchastherelationshipbetween82.

parentsandchildreninalotofAmericanfamily.It83.

isquitedifferentfromthoseinChina.Theplayis84.

verypopular.We’dbetternottomissthechance85.

toenjoyit.s∧作文上光第二招：让句式多变起来1.长短句的变化Ifyouworkhard,you’llmakegreatprogress.Workhardandyou’llmakegreatprogress.Thathehadwonthegamedelightedhisparents.Hiswinningthegamedelightedhisparents.Afterhehaddonehishomework,hebegantoplaycomputergames.Havingdonehishomework,hebegantoplay…BecauseIdidn’tknowwhattodonext,Iwanttoaskyouforadvice.Notknowingwhattodonext,…ThoughhehaslivedinCanadaforthreeyears,hestillcannotspeakEnglishwell.HavinglivedinCanadaforthreeyears,he…2.主动式被动式的交替使用Peoplebelievethatitwillbepossibleformantoliveonanotherplanetinthefuture.Itisbelievedthatitwon’tbeimpossibleformanto…3.肯定式与否定式的交替使用Ishallgothereifitdoesn’train.Ishallgothereunlessitrains.Iwilltrymybestnottoletthemdown.Iwilltrymybesttoliveuptotheirexpectations.Hedidn’tpasstheexam.Hefailedtheexam.4.插入行成分的灵活位置利用However,theyrefusedit.Theyrefusedit,though.They,however,didn’tacceptit.5.正常语序与倒装语序的交替使用Wecanachieveourgoalinthisway.Onlyinthiswaycanweachieveourgoal.

Ididn’trealizethefactuntilIgotback.NotuntilIgotbackdidIrealizethefact.

作文上光第三招：适当使用复杂句主从复合句虚拟语气倒装句强调句非谓语动词结构并列句作文上光第四招：巧妙使用连接成分1.表示时间顺序的：

atthesametime,afterward,allofasudden,atlast,finallythen.2.表示空间顺序的：

above,around,beyond,ontheleft,oppositeto,inthedistance,nextto3.表示分析：

asaresult,atlast,finally,furthermore,therefore,moreover,forinstance,Onthecontrary,inaddition,insummary,inanutshell,ontheotherhand,inthiscase.4.表示比较的：

Besides,inthesameway,infactequally,similarly,inadditionto5.表示对比的：

Differentfrom,onthecontrary,inspiteof,some…others,nevertheless.Notonly…butalso,theformer….thelatter,ontheonehand…ontheotherhand.6.表示选择的：

either…or,neither…nor,ratherthan,insteadof,not…but.7.表示因果的：

therefore,asaresultof,nowthat,aslongas,since,sothat,dueto/owingto,thanksto,onaccountof.8.表示总结的：

tosumup,onthewhole,inall,briefly,inconclusion,insummary,inshort/brief,inaword,toconclude.---听说你中彩票了。---恰恰相反，我被罚了。幸亏你的及时帮助，我才顺利地通过了驾驶考试。一方面，我们需要工业，而另一方面，我又痛恨它带来的污染。总而言之，我们的国家还不富裕。这件衣服样子太老了，另外，颜色也不适合我。作文上光第五招：有选择地背诵经典句型一、开头句型Asfaras…isconcerned,Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…Itcanbesaidwithcertaintythat…Astheproverbgoes….It’slikelythat….I’mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IhatetosayitthatIcan’tmakeitto….Whataninspiringpictureitis!二、衔接句型Asisoftenthecase,…Buttheproblemisnotsosimple.…Butitisapitythat….Inspiteofthefactthat….,they….However,….Inaddition,….Similarly,….Ashasbeenmentionedabove,…Onthecontrary,….Ontheotherhand,….三、举例句型：Let’stake…asanexample.Hereisonemoreexample.Thisoffersatypicalexampleof….Justthinkof….四、结尾句型Iwillconcludebysaying…Therefore,webelievethat…Witheverythingtakenintoconsideration,weItmaybesafelysaidthat….Inshort,….Tosumup,…Inmyopinion,….Allinall,….Briefly,….五、常用谚语：Speechissilver,silenceisgold.Easiersaidthandone.Everymanhashisweakside.Honestyisthebestpolicy.Everycoinhastwosides.Oneman’smeatisanotherman’spoison.Loveme,lovemydog.Seeingisbelieving.Wellbeganishalfdone.WheninRome,doasRomansdo.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.Nopains,nogains.Strikewhiletheironishot.Thereisnosmokewithoutfire.It’snevertoolatetomend.Knowledgeispower.Practicemakesperfect.AllroadsleadtoRome.Manyhandsmakelightwork.Morehaste,lessspeed.六：as句型Asisknowntoall,….Sheissuchafoolastobelievewhathesaid.

Asitwasgettinglate,wehadtoquit.Youngashewas,hemadegreatcontributionstohismotherland.七、seem句型Itseemsthateveryonewassatisfied.

Itseemstomethatsheisright.

Thereseemstobeaheavyrain.

Itseemsasifnothinghadhappenedtohim.八、wouldrather句型Shewouldratherdiethanbemarriedtothatoldman.2.Iwouldratherhavetakenhisadvice.3.IwouldratherIhadworkedharder.4.Iwouldratheryoudidityourself.九、before句型TheboyhadrunoutbeforeIcouldstophim.Itwillbetenyearsbeforeeverythingreturnstonormal.3.Itwasn’ttwoyearsbeforeheleftthecountry.4.LetmetellyoutherulesbeforeIforget.5.IwouldshootmyselfbeforeIapologizetohim.十、强调句型ItwashowIsaiditthatmadehimangry.WasithowIsaiditthatmadehimangry?Whatwasitthatmadehimangry?Canyoutellmewhatitwasthatmadehimangry?十一、感叹句型Whatatiringday!Howtiringaday!HowIwanttoseeyouinNewYork!十二、Not…until句型Hedidn’trealizethetruthuntilhecameback.Notuntilhecamebackdidherealizethetruth.Itwasnotuntilhecamebackthatherealizedthetruth.十三、since句型Hehaslivedheresincehisfathermovedhere.Hemovedherein1988andhaslivedhereeversince.3.ItistenyearssinceIgotmarried.4.ItistenyearssinceIwasmarried.十四、ifonly句型IfonlyMr.Johnsonwerehere!IfonlyIhadtakendownhisaddress!IfonlyIcouldbe18again.十五、Therebe句型Thereisnodoubtthat….Thereisnopointdoing….ThereisamancalledJerrywaitingforyou.Thereisnowaythatonecouldsucceedwithouthardwork.5.Thereisnoneedtobeworriedabouthim.6.Thereisnohurryinreturningthebook.十六、倒装句型Onlythroughhardworkcanyouexpecttoachieveyourgoals.2.Socuriousarethestudentsaboutwildlivesthattheycan’twaittogointotheforest.3.Nevershouldwelie.4.Herecomesthebus.5.Infrontofthehousesatanoldlady.6.Onlyinthiswaycanyouachieveyourgoal.十七、with复合结构Hestaredattheshowwithhismouthopen.Theboystoodthere,withhisheaddown.Hestoodwithhishandsinhispockets.Withnothingtodo,hewentbackhome.Withthenoisegoingon,hecouldn’tconcentrateonhiswork.6.Helayontheground,withhiseyesfixedontheceiling.作文上光第六招：尽量使用高中词汇

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SuddenlyIhadagoodidea.SuddenlyIcameupwithagoodidea.Agoodideacameuponme.Allofasudden,agoodideaoccurtome.作文上光第七招：要害部位使用名言、谚语Speechissilver,silenceisgold.Easiersaidthandone.Everymanhashisweakside.Honestyisthebestpolicy.Everycoinhastwosides.Oneman’smeatisanotherman’spoison.Loveme,lovemydog.Seeingisbelieving.Wellbeganishalfdone.WheninRome,doasRomansdo.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.Nopains,nogains.Strikewhiletheironishot.Thereisnosmokewithoutfire.It’snevertoolatetomend.Knowledgeispower.Practicemakesperfect.AllroadsleadtoRome.Manyhandsmakelightwork.Morehaste,lessspeed.Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.Nothingisimpossibleforawillingheart.Romewasnotbuiltinaday.AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.Lookbeforeyouleap.Itishardtopleaseall.Asthetree,sothefruit.作文上光第八招：无招胜有招20%40%80%60%小学初中高中下图是对某地学生近视率的调查表山东卷高考英语写作的三个特征：1.创设使用英语写作的需要；2.话题与学生认知水平相符；3.有一定的开放性。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，你和在上海上学的英国朋友Tom约好下