英语优质课一等奖《 Revision of Writing》精品课件

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每年的8月8日是“全民健身日”(NationalFitnessDay)，为了让这项运动更加深入人心，某英文报纸正在举办有奖征文活动，请你以Doingsportsis_______为题写篇短文（词数80-100），向该报刊投稿。步骤与要点如下:1.确定主题，并在文中说明原因；2.围绕主题，进行叙述；3.讲述一段与主题有关的故事、经历或计划。要求：1.补全标题；(参考词汇:healthy,interesting,useful,helpful…)2.字迹工整，内容完整连贯，语言准确规范；3.鼓励写出真情实感，对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分；4.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不能直接引用原文中的句子；5.作文中不要出现考生的真实校名和姓名。Howcanwewriteagoodcompositon?7stepsofwritingStepsofwriting1.

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第四档优秀（19---15分）1写出全部要点（四个要点）：①补全标题；②围绕观点进行叙述；③说明原因；④举出具体事例1-2点或谈论下你的计划；2语言优美且准确无误，行文连贯，表达清楚，文中使用一些高级词汇、从句、关联词语等可得满分。

第三档好（14---11分）写出四个要点中的三个，语言基本准确，行文基本连贯，表达基本清楚。第二档一般（10---5分）1.写出四个要点中的二个，语言有些错误，尚能表意，定为本档中的上线。2.只写出一个要点，语言错误较多，个别句子可读，或只写出内容要点有关的几个单词，定为本档中的下线。第一档差（4---0分）无标题，语言错误较多，个别句子可读，或只写出内容要点有关的几个单词。

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