bsh-16《荷塘月色》英译文赏析

OntheTranslationoftheProse散文翻译原则1、文气贯通,气韵生动英国散文翻译家HilaireBelloc(希莱尔·贝洛克)为文学散文翻译制定了6条原则，认为翻译的本质是异地之魂假借本地之躯的复活(Theessenceoftranslatingistheresurrectionofanalienthinginanativebody),强调散文的翻译不能拘泥于原文之字句,要视段落或部分为整体。翻译要“以意译意(translateintentionby

intention)”2、传神写照———“意,气,文”三位一体

在散文翻译中,我们要想译得曲尽其妙,须得传神地摹写作者的气质神韵。每一个作者有每一个的个性特点、气质精神,着手翻译之前,要先对作者进行深入的研究,把握其时代背景、人生经历、创作风格等,这样的翻译方能做到传神达意,否则,难免貌合神离。PS：文学翻译非文字翻译文学翻译，讲求整体效果，即“神韵”。有些表面忠实的译文，失去了散文的文采、文雅，这样便失去了自身的价值，终究是失败的译文。“美”是散文翻译的重点。美感层面AlongsidetheLotusPondrunsasmallcinderfootpath.Itispeacefulandsecludedhere,aplacenotfrequentedbypedestrianseveninthedaytime;nowatnight,itlooksmoresolitary,inalush,shadyambienceoftreesallaroundthepond.Onthesidewherethepathis,therearewillows,interlacedwithsomeotherswhosenamesIdonotknow.Thefoliage,which,inamoonlessnight,wouldloomsomewhatfrighteninglydark,looksverynicetonight,althoughthemoonlightisnotmorethanathin,greyishveil.（朱纯深译文）动感美：run、frequent、interlace、loom韵味美：peaceful、secluded、solitary、lush、shady

比喻手法：…athin,greyishveil.美感层面Alloverthiswindingstretchofwater,whatmeetstheeyeisasilkenfieldofleaves,reachingratherhighabovethesurface,liketheskirtsofdancinggirlsinalltheirgrace.Hereandthere,layersofleavesaredottedwithwhitelotusblossoms,someindemurebloom,othersinshybud,likescatteringpearls,ortwinklingstars,orbeautiesjustoutofthebath.Abreezestirs,sendingoverbreathsoffragrance,likefaint

singing

drifting

fromadistant

building.Atthismoment,atinythrillshootsthroughtheleavesandflowers,likeastreakoflightning,straightacrosstheforestoflotuses.Theleaves,whichhavebeenstandingshouldertoshoulder,arecaughttremblinginanemerald

heave

ofthepond.Underneath,theexquisitewateriscoveredfromview,andnonecantellitscolour;yettheleavesontopproject

themselvesallthemoreattractively.（朱纯深译文）音韵效果(节奏美）：

stirs---sending---singing；breeze---breaths---building；

fragrance---faint---from；

drifting---distant；

sending---singing--building；leaves---streak；streak---straight；

leaves---like---lightning---lotuses.heave：双关语义emerald：“通感”project：选词确切词汇层面今晚却很好，虽然月光也还是淡淡的。朱纯深译：…althoughthemoonlightisnotmorethanathin，grayishveil．

（veil：将抽象的形容词具体化，生动形象，又不失朦胧的美感。）杨宪益译：…buttonightitwasquiteclear，thoughthemoonlightwaspale．

（pale：表达上有失美感。）句法层面月光如流水一般，静静地泻在这一片叶子和花上。薄薄的青雾浮起在荷塘里。叶子和花仿佛在牛乳中洗过一样；又像笼着轻纱的梦。朱纯深译：Themoonshedsherliquidlightsilentlyovertheleavesandflowers,which,inthefloatingtransparencyofabluishhazefromthepond,lookasiftheyhadjustbeenbathedinmilk,orlikeadreamwrappedinagauzyhood.

（句子的合译）杨宪益译：Moonlightcascadedlikewateroverthelotusleavesandflowers,and

alightbluemistfloatingupfromthepoolmadethemseemwashedinmilkorcaughtinagauzydream.

桃花源东晋大诗人陶渊明的名篇《桃花源记》，描绘了一处世外桃源。这世外桃源究竟在何处?众说纷纭,但是大多数人，尤其是陶渊明故乡的人认为应该是江西星子县城西五里之遥的玉金山。玉金山座坐落在秀丽的庐山和浩渺的鄱阳湖之间。登上玉金山放眼四望，田畴上大小村庄星罗棋布，屋宇相连，阡陌纵横，稻浪起伏。这便是诗人咏赞的“平畴交远风，良苗亦怀新”的画面。

远处碧波万顷，烟云飞出，有一峰兀立，这是诗人誉为“旁无依接，独秀中皋”的“落星”山。再细看，山下农家，炊烟袅袅，谷场水巷之中，鸡鸭成群，顽童嬉戏，田野上人来人往，一派丰衣足食的景象，这不正是《桃花源记》中描写的景象吗?Inhisbrilliantessay“AttheHeadofthePeachBlossomStream”,thegreatpoetoftheEasternJinDynastyTaoYuanmingdescribedalandofpeaceawayfromtheturmoiloftheworld.ButwhereonearthwasthisancientShangri-la?Therehavebeenmayguesses.Mostpeople,especiallythosefromTaoYuanming'snativeplace,believethatitshouldbewhatisnowcalledtheYujingHill,abouttwomileswestofStarChildCounty（XingzaixianinChinese）,JiangxiProvince.TheYujingHilliswedgedbetweenthepicturesqueMountLuandthemist-shroudedPoyangLake.Standingatthesummitofthehillandlookingaround,onewillseedownbelowlevelfieldsstuddedwithhamletsandvillages,wherecottagesstandinneatrows,footpathscrisscrossthefarmland,andriceearswaveinthewinds.Thisisjustthepicturedepictedbythepoetinhislines:

Levelfieldsextendwavilytothefarhorizon;Anewlifeisflowinginlustyyoungseedlings.Lookingfartherintothedistance,onewillseevastexpansesofbluewatersandasolitary,abruptpeaktoweringamidstfloatingmists.ThisistheFallenStarHill（Luoxingshan,inChinese）praisedbythepoetas“asolitaryobjectofbeautythatrisesclearoutofthegroundbesidewaters.”Takingacloselook,onewillseechimneysmokecurlingupfromthecottagesatthefootofthehill,childrenfrolickingonthe