北京市海淀区高三英语期中考试写作分析 新课标

高三英语期中考试

写作分析编辑ppt评分标准：【情景作文】18–20优秀要点齐全；行文流畅；逻辑清晰；用词准确；句式丰富；结构紧凑。15–17良好要点齐全；用词较准确；衔接与过度自然（连接词）12–14及格能完成规定任务（写出异同），表达清楚，可懂。9–11错误多。个别句子不懂。6–8错误多。个别句子可懂。1–5相关单词编辑ppt出题意图：紧密结合教材（Unit3TheLandDownUnder）。内容熟悉。复习和应用所学词汇。编辑pptI.审题：

提示中所有信息。“介绍澳大利亚和新西兰两国的异同”。1.确定文体——议论文2.分析素材：对表格进行分析，找出相同与不同点。编辑ppt

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不同 Both……and…… ComparedwithB,Aislarger. Like…… Unlike….. Similarto…… Differentfrom…… also while Sois/does…. Itisthesamewith landform:consistof,bemadeupof location:liein,belocatedin3.应用词汇：对比编辑pptII.篇章结构纵向比较：逐个国家地说明，要点顺序可调整。(样文1)横向比较：（样文2）Para1Similarity:ThetwocountryarebothlocatedintheSouthPacificandtheyhavealotincommon.(the1stfourpoints)Para2Difference:However,therearesomedifferencebetweenthetwocountries.(thelasttwopoints)编辑ppt学生习作1)

BothAustraliaandNewZealandareverybeautifulcountriesintheworldandalsotheyhavealotofthingsincommon.LocatedinSouthPacific,AustraliaandNewZealandarebothmadeupoftwoislands,wheretheofficiallanguageisEnglish.Besides,AustraliaandNewZealandhavelargesheeppopulationandwoolindustry,fromwhichpeoplecanbenefitalot.编辑pptOntheotherhand,thetwocountriesaredifferent.Australiahasthepopulationofabout20,000,000,muchlargerthanNewZealand’s,whichisonly4,500,000.Apartfrompopulation,Australiahaslargearea,whileNewZealand’sisnotaslargeasAustralia.AlthoughAustraliaandNewZealandhavetheirowncharacteristics,theyarebothwonderfullands.(18分)编辑ppt2)LyingintheSouthPacificOcean,AustraliaandNewZealandhavealotofthingsincommon.Bothofthemaremadeupoftwoislands,andpeoplewholiveinthesetwocountriesspeakEnglishastheirofficiallanguage.BeingsimilartoAustralia,NewZealandhasalargesheeppopulationanditisfamousforwoolindustrytoo. 编辑pptHowever,therearesomedifferencebetweenthetwocountries.Australiacoversalargeareaandhasapopulation(of)about20,000,000.Buttheotherone(NewZealand)isnotaslargeasit,withapopulation(of)onlyabout4,500,000.(16)编辑ppt3)AustraliaandNewZealandarebothlocatedintheSouthPacific,buttherearestillsomedifferenceandsimilaritiesbetweenthem. BothNewZealandandAustraliaaremadeupoftwoislands,butAustraliaislargerthanNewZealand.However,thepopulationofNewZealandislargerthanAustralia.Australia’spopulationisabout20,000,000,whiletheNewZealand’sisabout4,500,000.

编辑pptThetwocountriesbothspeakEnglish.Besides,becauseofthesimilarclimate,thetwocountriesbothhavethelargesheeppopulationandwoolindustry.(12)编辑ppt4)AustraliaandNewZealandareliketoeachotherinmanyways.Suchaslandform,location,languageandsheepindustry.Forexample,theybothhavetwoislands,arelocatedintheSouthPacificandspeakEnglishintheirdailylife.Theyalsohavelargesheeppopulationandwoolindustryintheirownarea.While,thetwocountrieshavedifference,too.Australiahasapopulationoftwentymillion,butitisonlyfourpointfivemillioninNewZealand.AndtheareaofAustraliaisalsolargerthan∧NewZealand.That’sallIwanttointroduceforyou.(9)编辑ppt5)DoyouknowAustralia,anddoyoualsoknowNewZealand?Iwillintroducethistwocountriesforyours. AustraliaandNewZealandhavealotofsamethings.Suchastheyhavetwoislands.TheylocateonSouthPacific,theylanguageisEnglishandtheyalsohavelargesheeppopulationandwoolindustry.Thedifferentbetweenthemhavetwopoints.Australiahasabout20,000,000peoplebutNewZealandhasabout4,500,000people.AndAustraliahaslargearea.NewZealandhasnotaslargeasAustralia.(7)编辑ppt存在问题：

材料归类能力欠缺。编辑ppt【开放作文】审题：Whatwillyouwanttoknow?(提出问题)；Giveyourreasons.（说明原因）编辑ppt评分标准：13–15完全完成所规定的任务。体现出准确的遣词造句的能力、清晰的逻辑和新颖的立意。9–12提出问题并阐述原因，语言通顺。4–8未切题。未考虑交际对象（人称有误）;错误多，影响理解。1–3词不达意。编辑ppt

存在问题1）文体不对2）跑题：Ihopetheycouldhaveagoodrest.Iwanttoknowiftheywerenotastronauts,whattheywoulddo.编辑ppt3）逻辑不清Iwanttoknowabouttheirfeelinginspace.BecauseIdreamttobeanastronautwhenIwasalittleboy.NowIknowthatthedreamwasdifficulttocometrue.SoIwanttoknowhowtheyfeelinspace.Asaresult,IwonderiftheirfeelingislikewhatIthoughtornot.编辑ppt学生习作1)ItwillbemygreathonorifIhavethechancetotalkwiththem.Iwillaskthemhowtobecalmandconfidentwhentheyfacedsuchimportanttask,becauseIwilltakepartintheexaminationwhichissoimportantthatwhetherIcangotoauniversitydependsonit.AndIamveryanxiousaboutit.Sincetheyhavesuccessfullydonethetask,Iadmirethemsomuch,Ibelievetheirexperiencescanhelpmealot.（13分）编辑ppt2)First,Iwanttoaskabouttheirfeelingswhenfirstsentintospaceandwhethertheywerenervousornot,becauseIthinkitwasthegreathonourtobesentintospaceandtheymusthavethoughtaboutmanythings.ThenIwillaskabouttheirtraining.Iamwonderingwhatkindoftrainingtheyhadandhowharditwaswhilepreparingforthemission.(12分)

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