高考英语写作提升课堂：读后续写中刻画人物心理的五种方法（附最新模拟题实战及答案）

1、读后续写中刻画人物心理的五种方法（以性格魔水语料为例，以最新模拟题实战）如何让续写更加走心？我认为激发读者的情感共鸣是最关键的。最便捷也是最常 用的手法就是对心理活动的刻画。我以小说personality portion为例，谈谈刻画心理活 动的五种途径。最后再实战一篇最新的模拟题。第一种：虚幻法一一用梦幻，巧妙地发出心灵的呼唤梦幻法，是借助梦境和幻觉的描绘来组织编写故事情节，表现渲染人物的内心世 界，刻画和塑造人物形象的一种技法。梦境和幻觉表面上是荒唐的，短暂的，费解的， 是违背客观事理的意念，实际上却是客观现实在人的思想意识中的一种折光反照，它 所表达的内容和情景是深刻的，有着丰富的内含。

2、举例：she wiped another one. the match was on fire and there was a light. the light fell on the wall, where it suddenly became as transparent as gauze, and she could see the room all the time. the table was covered with snow-white tablecloths, delicate plates and bowls, and the roast goose filled with

3、apples and plums was smelling.even better, the goose jumped off the plate, with knives and forks on its back, and swayed across the floor, all the way to the poor little girl then the match went out again, and there was only a thick and cold wall in front of her.她又擦了一根。火柴燃起来了，发出亮光来了。亮光落在墙上，那儿忽然变得像 薄

4、纱那么透明，她可以一直看到屋里.桌上铺着雪白的台布，摆着精致的盘子和碗， 肚子里填满了苹果和梅子的烤鹅正冒着香气。更妙的是这只鹅从盘子里跳下来，背上插着刀和叉，摇摇摆摆地在地板上走着， 一直向这个穷苦的小女孩走来。这时候，火柴又灭了，她面前只有一堵又厚又冷的墙。卖火柴的小女孩虚幻法我细分为两种：1 .想到和看到什么虚幻的景象。一个人的想象基本是被视觉触发的，正如上面的例子。（即：视觉，想法）2. 想到和感受到什么虚幻的景象。一个人的想象可能触发到身体部位的感受（即:视觉，感觉，触觉，嗅觉）。以小说 personality portion 为例：1. in his imagination, he

5、 pictured what would happen next if he was kit kane.kit stood up and pulled wicks out of his seat by his jacket."why doncha pick on someone your own size, dogsbreath?' he drawled."d-d-don 7 hurt me,' stammered wicks.点评：danny被人欺负后，幻想自己是书中的主句kit会怎么猛揍wickso2. he began to imagine himse

6、lf in the part of bugsy. he'd borrow his dad's old suit and wear a hat pulled down over one eye. he'd chew gum and talk in his kit kane accent.点评：danny幻想自己能担任校园剧的主角后的模样。3. danny felt scared but also reckless. it was as if the potion had released a cork inside him.点评：danny想象魔水发挥了作用了。用了句型：

7、it was as if.4. he walked away feeling two metres tall he had spoken to laura mills. after a whole year, he'd finally spoken to her. and she hadn't laughed at him; she'd talked back.点评：danny想象自己两米高，并且想到和心爱的女神说话，那种开心无以言表。5. danny was next but one to read. he fingered the potion nervously.

8、 the bottle felt hot and sticky.点评：danny很紧张，感受到瓶子很烫手。6. danny tried to think about the words. but they seemed to swim around like tadpoles on the page. without the personality potion, he knew he couldn't do it. he couldn't even speak. his throat was dry and his face was burning up.点评：danny读剧

9、本时非常紧张，感到文字就跟蝌蚪一样游来游去的，此时他觉 得没有魔水，他什么也做不了，脸通红的。这段不仅仅是虚幻想象，还有神情描写。第二种：旁观从旁叙述中采用第三人称的方式描写人物心理。在这种写法中，作者可以是“全知 全能''的。因此，这种方式较少受到时间和空间的约束，作者可以根据自己想法的需要 叙述。用第三人称写人物心理时，作者是站在观察者的角度来写的，所以对人物的情 感倾向会表现得相对鲜明些，甚至可以进行即时的议论。比如以项链为例，文中有这样一段话：but sometimes, when her husband was at the office, she sat down

10、near the window and she thought of that gay evening of long ago, of that ball where she had been so beautiful and so admired.what would have happened if she had not lost that necklace?who knows? who knows?how strange and changeful is life ! how small a thing is needed to make or ruin us !但是有时候，她丈夫办公

11、去了，她一个人坐在窗前，就回想起当年那个舞会来， 那个晚上，她多么美丽，多么使人倾倒啊！要是那时候没有丢掉那挂项链，她现在是怎样一个境况呢？谁知道呢？谁知道呢？ 人生是多么奇怪，多么变幻无常啊，极细小的一件事可以败坏你，也可以成全你！这里采用了从旁叙述的方式表现玛蒂尔德对以往的回忆与内心的起伏。请注意这 样精彩的议论：“人生是多么奇怪，多么变幻无常啊，极细小的一件事可以败坏你，也 可以或全你！ ”以小说 personality portion 为例：1. danny didn't know why he'd said that. he just felt angry insid

12、e. angry with wicks. angry with himself for looking stupid in front of everyone else.2. it was a great idea. but it wouldn't work, mainly because he knew he hadn't the nerve to try for the part. the thought of standing up in front of everyone made him feel sick inside.3. there was no doubt s

13、omething had happened to him. his head didn't droop and his eyes were brighter than usual. he didn't even feel worried about the day ahead at school.4. danny didn't have any time to think. quickly, he fumbled for the personality potion and took a drink. if it really worked, he desperatel

14、y needed it now.第三种：直叙法我分为两种：直接描写、内心独白内心独白：一般使用第一人称，犹如电影中人物思考时的画外音，是直接倾吐衷 肠、透露”心曲”的一个重要手段。有时会用“我感到."、"我觉得."、“我认为.”、 “我想到."、"我想"、"我回忆."、“我思索着.”、“我想起.”等带有标 志性的词语来表达。但现在更多是没有这种标志了，通常是感叹句和疑问句等。比如在莎士比亚的哈姆雷特中，哈姆雷特那段著名的“生存还是毁灭”的内心独白， 是他对于“生”和“死”的思考，表现了他内心的困惑，极具哲理性。以小

15、说 personality portion 为例:1. danny thought about it all week. what could uncle hal do to help him get the part of bugsy malone?2. he was wondering whether he looked different to other people. the personality potion was in his pocket just in case he needed it again.3. he looked over at laura mills. co

16、uld she see any change in him?4. 'do i seem different to you?' he asked sparrow suddenly.5. danny watched him go. it was incredible. he had stood up to wicks and survived. the potion really worked. it changed him into a different person, someone who could do or say anything.6. even worse, he

17、'd said he was going for the main part. the part of bugsy. how could his mouth have landed him in so much trouble?7. the last person before danny was wicks. he thought he was just the person to play a gangster.以下例子主要是内心独白8. danny's gaze shifted to laura mills. she was glaring at wicks. then

18、she looked straight at him and nodded. "go on!' she mouthed. danny was amazed. why should she care that he was making an idiot of himself? he shut his eyes. he tried to think how kit kane would have read the part. then he took a deep breath and started to read.9. he was amazed at the words

19、he'd just spoken. it must have been the potion speaking.第四种：动作、神态、表情法人的动作、行为总是受心理活动的支配，从行动中刻画人物的心理活动，揭示人 物在特定环境下的内心世界，是心理描写的又一表现形式应该说这种方法同学们是最为熟悉的，不再赘述。以小说 personality portion 为例：1. uncle hal raised one eyebrow. 'so what's so bad about this play?'2. "personality potion?' dan

20、ny's eyes widened. 'what's that?'3. 'you mean this can help me get the part in the play?'danny went out into the bright morning light, holding the personality potion tight in his hand.4. wicks stared round at them, his face as red as ketchup.5. danny took the bottle and looke

21、d at it in wonder.6. danny looked down in horror at the green puddle by his feet.7. danny went off in a daze to clear up the broken glass.8. uncle hal looked blank for a moment. then his face lit up.9. he looked at uncle hal who was grinning like a cat thaf s got the cream.10. danny stared at the bo

22、ttles in disbelief. 'you mean it was all a trick? there wasn't really a personality potion?'11. 动作链：he took off the lid and sniffed it. then he took a small sip. the taste was sweet and bitter at the same time. danny drank some more and let it slip down his throat.12. jumping out of bed,

23、 he ran to look in the bathroom mirror.第五种：通过景物衬托，侧面折射内心的感受绘景而显情。作品中出现的景物，往往是”人化的自然”，渗透了人物的特定心情我们是否记得初中学过的语文篇章：我一个人慢慢走在路上。月亮出来了，好似铺了一层厚厚的霜，月光撒在身上， 冷冷的，我不禁打了个寒颤。路上静悄悄的，一点声音也没有。忽然，我听见有人在 喊我的名字，我回过头，只见万芳跑了过来，她把小刀塞到我的手里说：“你拿着，咱 俩还是好朋友。”羚羊木雕在我们读后续写中，如果开头就有环境描写，就要留意在续写中接上它。实战：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事

24、。one saturday morning when susan went, as usual, to thompson's hotel, to receive the price of her mother's washing for the guests, which amounted to five dollars, she found the hotel keeper in the yard.he was apparently in a bad temper with some dealers with whom he had been bargaining. he h

25、eld in his hand an open wallet, full of bills. hardly noticing the child as she made her request, except to swear（骂咧咧）at her for troubling him when he was busy, he handed her a bank note.glad to escape so easily, susan rushed out of the gate, and then, pausing to pin the money safely in the folds of

26、 her worn scarf, she discovered that he had given her two bills instead of one. she looked around. nobody was near to share her discovery, and her first impulse was joy at the unexpected prize.“it is mine, all mine/1 she murmured. "i will buy mother a new coat with it, and she can give her old

27、one to sister mary, and then mary can go to the sunday school with me next winter. i wonder if it will buy a pair of shoes for brother tom, too.”at that moment she realized that the hotel keeper must have given it to her by mistake, and therefore she had no right to it, as she was always told by her

28、 mother the golden rule- what belongs to you is yours, and what doesn't belong to you should not be accepted.but again the voice of temptation whispered "he gave it, and how do you know that he did not intend to make you a present of it? keep it; he will never know it, even if it should be

29、a mistake; he had too many such bills in that great wallet, so it doesn't matter if missing one.”while this conflict was going on in her mind between good and evil, she was hurrying homeward as fast as possibleparagraph 1 yet, before she came in sight of her home, she stopped.paragraph? the hote

30、l keeper looked at susan.大意：主人公susan去替妈妈讨工资，妈妈为旅店客人洗衣（铺垫女孩家庭困难）， 旅店老板正和别人讨价还价，不耐烦地从满是钞票的钱包，抽了钱给女孩。后来女孩 发现老板竟然给了双倍的钱，女孩特别兴奋，幻想着这意外之财该怎么花，同时又心 生不安，因妈妈一直教导自己不可以拿不属于自己的东西。此时，又有诱惑思想在提 醒她这是她该得的，老板有的是钱，不差这多给的一张。思想猛烈争战中，女孩想尽 快回到家。然而，在她看到自己的家之前，她就停了下来.，旅店老板看着她.本文有大量的心理活动描写，因此续写中如何融洽，是需要考虑的。范文yet, before she came in sight of her hom