高中英语书面表达讲评赢取高分技巧与策略课件-程峰-西飞一中.ppt

书面表达 之 赢取高分技巧与策略,Welcome to our class,某天，你班贴出了一张通知。请根据通知、内容要点和要求写一篇英语发言稿。 Notice Our monitor suggests that we have “Friday News Hour”. But some classmates do not agree. We will have a class meeting in English tomorrow afternoon to discuss this suggestion. Please prepare your talk and take an active part. May 6th, 2008 内容要点： 你对“周五读报活动”的看法： 陈述你的理由(可举例说明)： 你的具体建议。 要求： 短文填写在答题卡的指定区域 短文词数不少于80(不含已写好的部分) 内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯。 书写须清楚、工整。,English Horizons 第25卷 总228（5/2007）期 编者按：本期刊出Lora的来信，欢迎读者就信中谈到的问题进 行分析并提出建议。 Dear editor， Im a senior high school student, and I want to work part-time this summer. I think it is good to do so, but my parents dont agree with me I just cant understand them . I need your advice. Lara 要求： 1.短文须写在答题卡的指定区域。 2.短文词数不少于80（不含已写好的部分）。 3.内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯。 4.书写须清晰、工整。 提纲： 第1段：Lora利用暑假打工的理由 第2段：Lora父母不同意的理由 第3段：你给Lora的具体建议 （2007）,书面表达：,2008年陕西英语高考试题书面表达： 难度0.53，区分度0.47，平均分15.94。,命题特点： 属于半开放式作文，灵活，形式不拘一格。符合依提示自由发挥观点的作文均可。07、08基本一个形式，即英文提示。图、文、纲等提示均可。写作自由空间大。,1、考查要求： （1）、一定范围内的遣词造句技能。 （2）、运用不同的语法形式来表达意义的技 能。 （3）、语篇的整合技能。 （4）、根据不同的交际目的得体地发挥语段的 交际技能。 （5）、运用逻辑关联手段清楚地传达信息的技 能。 （6）、运用写作策略的技能。,2、优秀作文的评分标准 （1）、覆盖所有内容要点。 （2）、应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致。 （3）、具有较强的语言运用能力。有效使用了语句间的连接成分，全文结构完整，语言得体。 （4）、卷面整洁。 在高考作文备考复习中教师必须让学生明确高考作文考查要求和评分标准，并按要求和标准有的放矢地对学生进行作文训练。,3.考生在高考作文中出现的典型问题 1)、审题不认真 2)、语言不地道 3)、结构不紧凑 Some exchange students need a home to live in. My family has a good condition to welcome our guest. The house condition is very well. Our home has a good atmosphere. My father understands English, so the language is not the problem.,4. 如何提高高考英语书面表达能力 英语书面表达题的训练方法 夯实自己的语言基本功。（积累常用句型） 训练用英语进行思维。 注重写作训练形式的多样化。 背诵好句、默写范文。 注重写作训练的规范化。,显示作文亮点的两点重要做法 一、 避免句式单一，恰当使用高级词汇和复杂结构 方法1. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档 方法2. 巧用多种结构增强句子的表现力 方法3. 使用高级词汇，词组以增加文采 二、 适当的过渡语使句子更美,比如 用于陈述个人观点 / 想法的常用句型 My own experience tells me that In my opinion, we should attach more importance to As for my own idea about I believe As far as I am concerned, I plan to Personally, I prefer In my view, both sides are partly right in that But for me, I would rather My own point of view is that In conclusion, I support the statement that As regards me, I tend to choose ,用于书信写作的常用句型 Thank you for your letter of It is a pleasure for me to invite you on behalf of to accept Thanks so much for your letter, which arrived I am writing to tell you ,用于书信写作的常用句型 I would be grateful if you could / would I would like to know some information on It will be appreciated it if you can / could I would also like to know if you can / could I look forward to hearing from you.,使用恰当的过渡词 从行文需要出发选用恰当的连接词、过渡语同样可以给文章增色。使用恰当的连接词对写一篇有“英语”的文章很重要，它能够使整篇文章衔接自然、浑然一体、文句流畅。,常见的连接成份 逻辑关系合适的过渡性词汇 时间关系:First, then, finally/at last, soon, suddenly, immediately, the moment, meanwhile 空间关系:Here, there, on one sideon the other side, in front of, at the back of, next to 对称关系:For one thing, for the other thing; on one hand, on the other hand,转折关系:But, however, while (虽然), though, otherwise, on the contrary, in spite of, no matter what 因果关系:Because, since, due to, owing to, thanks to, as a result (of), consequently, therefore, thus 条件关系:As long as, so long as, in case, on condition that, if， unless.,递进关系:Whats more, moreover, beside, furthermore, in addition, to make matters worse, whats worse, worse still 举例:For example/instance, such as, that is, namely 总结:In short, in general, in all, to sum up, to conclude, generally speaking, in a word, in conclusion,恰当使用高级词汇： 使用一些很有“洋味”的单词 Thank you for sharing the time with us. The way he views the world is very practical. 避免重复使用某一单词或短语 I like reading while my brother likes watching television. I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.,英语优秀作文十忌 （1）、忌审题不细，匆忙应战，以致“跑题”。 （2）、忌抓不住要点，逐字翻译，以致“抓了芝 麻，丢了西瓜”。 （3）、忌用汉语的思维方式随意编造，词不达 句意，句不达文意。 （4）、忌无限发挥，以致“画蛇添足”。 （5）、忌犯一些低级的语言错误和笔误。 （6）忌说大话，用偏词、难句。切勿以为偏 词、难句就是高级词汇和复杂句子结构。,（7）忌死扣字眼。如果遇到不会表达的词汇可以 换一种表达方式。如：不会写prepare,可以 用get ready to 表达。 （8）忌不打草稿，乱涂乱画。 （9）忌作文时“但求无过”的应试思想。因为高考 作文评分时如果所出现的错误是由于尽力使 用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致，这并不影 响作文得高分。 （10）忌不做检查、修改，草草完成。,今年南京市做出决定，允许居民在春节期间定点燃放烟花爆竹。这一决定受到了大多数人的欢迎，也遭到了部分人的反对。最近，你班就春节期间该不该燃放烟花爆竹进行了一场讨论。请你根据以下信息，给一家英文报纸写一篇短文，客观介绍你们的讨论情况，并就如何安全燃放烟花爆竹提出你的看法。,需要用的词汇：燃放烟花爆竹set off fireworks 要求：1、短文必须包括所给要点；2、短文的开头已为你写好；3、字数100左右。 The government of Nanjing lifted(解除限制等) the ban on fireworks during the 2006 Spring Festival. Recently, ,Recently, our class have discussed whether it should set off fireworks during the Spring Festival. About 60% of us are approve of setting off fireworks. Those who favor the idea think it adds to the festivals atmosphere. Besides, it is the Chinese traditional custom. However, about 40% against the governments decision with several reasons. On one hand, setting off fireworks can put people in dangerous. I f not carefully dealing with, it will probably hurt us. On the other hand, it has bad effects to the environment. In my point of view, I agree with the former because setting off fireworks can take a lot of happiness to us. As you know, seeing fireworks in the sky are really a feast to our eyes.,we,a,are,danger,dealt,on,bring,watching,is,Tips for writing,A good composition shouldnt cover too many mistakes.,词汇,句型 （高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）,1.审题是关键 2. 应用较多的语法结构和词汇,如何写出一篇好文章？,今年南京市做出决定，允许居民在春节期间定点燃放烟花爆竹。这一决定受到了大多数人的欢迎，也遭到了部分人的反对。最近，你班就春节期间该不该燃放烟花爆竹进行了一场讨论。请你根据以下信息，给一家英文报纸写一篇短文，客观介绍你们的讨论情况，并就如何安全燃放烟花爆竹提出你的看法。,需要用的词汇：燃放烟花爆竹set off fireworks 要求：1、短文必须包括所给要点；2、短文的开头已为你写好；3、字数100左右。 The government of Nanjing lifted(解除限制等) the ban on fireworks during the 2006 Spring Festival. Recently, ,2. From the graph we can find out that 60% of us are in favor of it.,1. Recently, opinions are divided on the question.,3.In my opinion, I want to set off fireworks during Spring festival, but no reason! (俞),错误的审题例子,Recently, our class has held a meeting to discuss whether or not fireworks should be banned.,According to the discussion, we can find out that 60% of us are in favor of it.,(黎),Tips for writing,A good composition must cover some advanced words and sentences.,词汇策略,一. 词义要确切,add the festival atmosphere 2. cause wide pollution 3. according to the survey, 4.Besides, children should be companied by adults when setting off fireworks.,add to,severe,discussion,accompanied,词汇策略,二. 用词要通俗易懂,Those who stand for the decision rather than resist it occupy 60% of us all. 2.They argue that what fireworks pose to the environment is a conceivable threat.,are in favor of / favor /support /are for,bring,词汇策略,三. 选词要多样化,1. In their opinion, fireworks should be banned.,We ought to raise the awareness of protecting environment.,forbidden,2. We ought to pay attention to protecting environment.,词汇策略,三. 选词要多样化,3. It may hurt people as well as cause a fire.,It may hurt people as well as contribute to a fire.,It may hurt people as well as give rise to a fire.,词汇策略,四. 适当运用表感情的副词,1. Another 40% take the side of the previous ban.,2. Setting off fireworks can increase the festival atmosphere.,3. Fireworks might cause serious injuries and deaths if set off carelessly,even,firmly,absolutely,句型策略,一. 合并句子,Besides, environmental pollution is a big problem. We must pay attention to it.,Besides, environmental pollution is such a big problem that we must pay attention to it.,二.改变语态,Recently, a meeting has been held in our class to discuss whether or not fireworks should be banned during the spring festival.,1.Recently, our class have held a meeting to discuss whether or not fireworks should be banned during the spring festival.,句型策略,三. 使用省略,It might cause serious injuries and even deaths if set off carelessly,If possible , Id rather this traditional custom could be kept up.,1,We should be careful when setting off fireworks.,四. 使用强调句型,We cannot be careful enough when setting off fireworks.,2.We should emphasize the importance of protecting our environment.,四. 使用强调句型,We cant emphasize the importance of protecting our environment too much.,五. 使用倒装句,1.We can have a happier spring festival when we do it properly.,Only when we do it properly, can we have a happier spring festival.,五. 使用倒装句,Only in this way can we use them to benefit us rather than bring us trouble.,2. We use them to benefit us rather than bring us trouble in this way.,六.使用非人物主语起草句子！,As we all know, many fire catastrophes result from fireworks.,As we all know, fireworks may cause fire accidents.,六.使用非人物主语起草句子！,. 今天早上醒来时我想到了一个好注意,I thought of a great idea when I woke up this morning. A great idea occurred to me when I woke up this morning. A great idea struck me when I woke up this morning.,六.使用非人物主语起草句子！,2.她哭了起来. 3.我说不出话来.,She began to cry. Tears came to her eyes.,Words failed me.,句型策略,七其他一些高级结构,1. whats worse, the number of people hurt by setting off fireworks is increasing rapidly, which is a problem we cant ignore.,2. Bear in mind that we must take account of the danger.,3.People set off fireworks in the hope of having another happy year.,句型策略,七.其他一些高级结构,4.They consider it a risk to set off fireworks especially when they are done near crowded people and old builds.,5. To guarantee safety, it is important to t