写作技巧点拨系列(四).ppt

写作技巧点拨系列(四) 巧妙遣词造句, 实现升级策略 【语语篇锤炼锤炼 】 (2012江西高考)I like reading. Reading is my favorite hobby(我最喜欢欢的爱爱好). I can never stop the love for reading because books are like wise teachers as well as good friends(像 良师师益友)in my life. As we know, books are the source of knowledge(知识识的源泉). I benefit a great deal from(受益匪浅 )reading. There are a variety of(各种各样样)books for us to choose from, like history books, science books, literary books and so on. But what interests me most is literary books, especially those by famous writers. For one thing, they help to improve my writing skills and broaden my horizons(拓宽宽我的视视野). For another, they can enrich my life(丰富我的生活)and provide me with great fun. Isnt it a pleasure to have great calm in mind(内心巨大平静)while you are reading? 点拨拨: 1. 巧用词汇词汇 : my favorite hobby, source, benefit a great deal, broaden my horizons, enrich my life 2. 妙用短语语: as well as, a variety of, for one thing, for another, have great calm in mind 3. 复杂杂句式: because原因状语语从句, for us to choose from 不定式复合结结构, what名词词性从句, while时间时间 状语语从句。 【核心点拨拨】 高考书书面表达最高档次的评评分标标准中, 要求“词汇词汇 丰富, 有修辞意识识, 显显示出较较强的语语言运用能力”。因此要想在高考 英语语写作中取得高分, 就必须须使用一定的高级词汇级词汇 及复杂杂句 式, 为为文章增加闪闪光点, 从而提高文章的档次。 1. 遣词词方面: (1)措辞要贴贴切具体 试试比较较下面句子: 一个人正在街上闲闲逛。 A man is walking down the street. A man is wandering down the street. 通过过比较较可以看出, 前一句不如后一句表达得具体、生动动。一 个词词如果内涵越具体, 那么在特定的场场景中恰当地使用它, 就 会收到意想不到的效果。 (2)要善于运用短语语 短语语用得好, 会给评给评 卷老师师留下深刻印象。例如: When he was a child, he wanted to learn everything. (普通) When he was a child, he had a strong appetite(胃口)for knowledge. (高级级) 2. 造句方面: (1)巧用非谓语动词谓语动词 运用非谓语动词谓语动词 , 可使文句看起来更简洁简洁 , 使语语言更加丰富多 彩, 重点更加突出, 增加文采。 I covered my ears, trying to keep the noise out, but failed. (2)巧用with复合结结构 “with+名词词/代词词+现现在分词词/过过去分词词/形容词词/副词词/介词词”结结 构, 常作伴随状语语以增加被描绘绘内容的生动动性和情感性, 使文 章读读起来更简洁简洁 明了。试试比较较: He slept all the night and the window was open. (一般) He slept all the night with the window open. (高级级) (3)巧用复合句 评评分标标准中强调调使用语语法结结构的数量和复杂杂性, 鼓励考生尽 量使用较较复杂杂的结结构, 并且对对由此产产生的错误错误 采取了宽宽容的 态态度。如果恰当运用各类类从句, 就会增加文章的亮点。 Soon I became one of the top students in my class, which greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated. (定语语 从句) (4)巧用倒装句、感叹叹句、强调调句、虚拟语拟语 气句等 使用这这些句式可使文章化平淡为为生动动, 加强语语气, 使评评卷老师师 感受作者的强烈情感, 起到升级级文章的作用。 Disappointed as I felt at the shabby campus and the poorly- equipped classroom, I found the teachers patient and considerate. (倒装句) (5)巧用排比等句式 如能运用一个个排比句、对对偶句、不定式或短语语, 可使文章增 色不少, 会给评给评 卷老师师眼前一亮的感觉觉。 The purpose of the program is to make our school more beautiful, to make the air cleaner and fresher, and to turn our school into a better place for us to study and live in. 【写作指导导】 1. 巧妙遣词词中的忌讳讳 (1)避免使用自己没有把握的词汇词汇 、句式等, 导导致弄巧成拙; (2)避免受汉语汉语 思维维的影响, 用词词要符合英语语表达习惯习惯 , 语语言 要地道, 如某些名词词和动词动词 搭配已约约定俗成, 不能随意打乱其 搭配习惯习惯 , 否则则会显显得生硬和词词不达意。如汉语汉语 中的“学到知 识识”, 英语语中就不能说说learn knowledge, 而要说说acquire knowledge(获获得知识识)。类类似的动宾结动宾结 构还还有achieve success 获获得成功, gain reputation获获得声誉, attain ones end达到目的 等。 2. 遣词词造句的关键键 遣词词造句是为优质语为优质语 篇打基础础, 其关键键就是: (1)用词词要准确, 词义词义 要得当; (2)采用“曲线线救国”克服生僻要点表达; (3)防止拼写错误错误 , 用自己最有把握、最贴贴切的词汇词汇 、句式来 表达要点; (4)避免受汉语汉语 干扰扰, 尽量用较为较为 复杂杂的句式来增加文章的亮 点, 从而实现实现 高分目标标; (5)在表达时时可以采取多种手法, 只要词词能达意, 没有语语法问题问题 即为为好的表达; (6)熟练练运用基本句型, 适当运用复合句式, 注重语语言表达的灵 活性就能造句生动动。 【对对点训练训练 】 . 请标请标 出下面作文的亮点句式 How we can build up a harmonious family A harmonious family is essential to our personal development and our physical and mental health. A harmonious family is always full of warmth, love and laughter. Parents and children love and show concern for each other. They also respect and understand each other. If a child grows up in a harmonious family, he is more likely to be cheerful and optimistic. Otherwise , he may be miserable and pessimistic. Meanwhile , parents in a harmonious family are sure to live more happily and healthily. Since a harmonious family plays a very important role in our life, it is up to every family member to contribute to the building of such a family. First of all, parents should be a role model for their children and pay more attention to their own words and behavior. Besides, they must trust their children and often communicate with them. As children of the family, we should also respect and understand our parents, and try to share their burdens. If we do so, our family will always be harmonious. . 巧用遣词词造句, 升级级下面文章 留意一下我们们的周边边, 可以发现发现 陪读现读现 象很普遍。请请你 根据以下要点写一篇短文, 内容应应包括: 1. 简简要描述陪读现读现 象; 2. 分析父母陪读读的原因(2至3个); 3. 发发表你对对此的看法。 注意: 1. 词词数100个左右。 2. 标题标题 已给给出, 不计计入总词总词 数。 Should Our Parents Accompany Us in Studying at School _ _ _ 【参考范文】 Should Our Parents Accompany Us in Studying at School In recent years, many parents choose to accompany their children in studying, which has aroused a wide concern. These parents are willing to leave their hometown, even quit their jobs to follow their children into the campus. Most of them rent an apartment nearby so as to take good care of their children. Parents consider it necessary to offer a better living condition to their children. Meanwhile, it enables them to keep track of their childrens academic performance. Nevertheless, what they have ignored is that it will get the