读后续写动作链AMothersSurprise课件高三英语一轮复习

读后续写AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE1.topredictwhatwouldhappennextaccordingtotheplotdevelopmentandtheanalysisoftheplot;2.toenrichtheoutlineofthecontinuousstoryandresolutionpartofthepassage;3.topolishyoursentencesaboutactiondescription.Bytheendofthisperiod,youwillbeabletoexpresstheideasproperlyandvividly.LearningobjectivesDifficultPoints1读后续写“三步走”1.

阅读（3-5mins）

2.构思（3-5mins）

3.行文（10-15mins）负正ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhenthey

broughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.……ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.conflict续写：Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.在父亲的帮助下，早餐顺利做好了！母亲非常惊喜！Howtocontinueastory?①段首句决定故事走向②找到可呼应的细节❓2读后续写评分标准评分档次第一项第二项第三项第四项第五档(21-25分)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义的表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。。第四档(16-20分)与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较合理。内容比较丰富所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义的表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。内容构思语言表达Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.……Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.……Butthestovewasamess

now.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.……Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.Para1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后，没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐父亲的帮助下，早餐顺利做好了！他们非常开心Para2母亲非常惊喜！②找到可呼应的细节Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhenthey

broughtherbreakfastinbed.……原文细节3ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Para1父亲要发火父亲了解情况后，没有发火父亲和他们一起做早餐父亲的帮助下，早餐顺利做好了！他们非常开心Para2双胞胎祝母亲节日快乐母亲非常惊喜！母亲注意到了Jeff的手母亲万分感动！②找到可呼应的细节动作描写动作描写动作描写动作描写Hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshouldersandsaid,“Timeisonourside.Let’sdoittogether.”Havingpreparedeverything,theybegantomakethebreakfasttogether.withthehelpoftheirfather,thebreakfastwasready,givingoffapleasantscent.Para1父亲了解情况后，没有发火(蹲下来，拍着肩膀，说……）父亲和他们一起做早餐（准备好一切，做早餐）父亲的帮助下，早餐顺利做好了(父亲帮助，早餐做好了，散发香味）③行文遣词造句:动作描写sbdid…，did…anddid…(动作链条:A,BandC）Havingdone…,sbdid…（动作链：AandB)非谓语+

谓语+doing(表伴随)①

拿出肉

瞄准狼

扔出去Hepulledoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttotheanimal.②拦下车

上车

告诉司机目的地____________________________________________________________③

抱住儿子

走向前

蹲下来

一把抱住！___________________________________________________________动作链条A,B,CandDShewalkedforward,kneltdownandgatheredhersonintoherarms.Shestoppedataxi,gotintoitandtoldthedriverherdestination.①排了三个小时的队伍，他被告知票卖完了。Havingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthattheticketshadbeensoldout.②

手机已经充好了电，他被告知不允许带手机进俱乐部。____________________________________________________________动作链条havingdone…，sbdid…Havinghisphonecharged,hewastoldthatitwasn’tallowedintheclub.①他站在路边，仰望天空，感受着这份珍贵的宁静。Standingbesidetheroad,helookeduptothesky,feelingthepreciouspeaceinhisheart.②

被老师的话所鼓舞，Lucy举起了手，小声说“我来”。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________③

傍晚来临，Lucy坐在桌前，思考如何打发时间。___________________________________________________________动作面：

非谓语+谓语+doingEncouragedbytheteacher’swords,Lucyraisedherhand,whispering,“Iwanttohaveatry.”Withtheeveningapproaching,Lucysatbesidethedesk,wonderinghowtokillthetime.Havingreceivedthegift,shewassohappythatshewasatalosswhattodo.HavingnoticedJeff’shand,sheunderstoodthewholethingatonce,feelingasenseofwarmthfloodingintoherheart.SheLookedatthegift,tookadeepbreathandutteredsoftly“You’vegrownup,honey!”Para2母亲非常惊喜！(收到礼物，高兴地不知所措）母亲注意到了Jeff的手（注意到Jeff的手，母亲明白了一切，温暖涌上心头）母亲万分感动！（看了看早餐，深吸一口气，说到“宝贝长大了！”）③动作描写小练笔sbdid…，did…anddid…(动作链条:A,BandC）Havingdone…,sbdid…（动作链：AandB)非谓语+

谓语+doing(表伴随)Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Judgingfromhisexpression,Itwasevidentthathewasabouttoexplodeafterseeingthemess.Buttotheirrelief,havinglearnedtheirplan,hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshouldersandsaid.“Timeisonourside.Let'sdoittogether.”Withouttheslightesthesitation,theystartedtheirbattleonceagain.Beforelong,withthehelpoftheirfather,thebreakfastwasready,givingoffpleasantsmell.Tiredthoughtheywere,theirheartswerefilledwithnothingelsebutjoyandpride.Paragraph2:

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup“HappyMother'sDay!