ContinuationWriting（11）优化句子结构

ContinuationWriting（11）优化句子结构Miniscenewriting:初阶版Itwastherushhouroftheday.Everyoneontheroadwasinhasteforwork.Suddenly,therecameabig“bang”!Amanwithhismotorcyclecrashedintoawoman.Bothofthemfelltotheground.Althoughthewomanfeltveryangry,shestillendeavoredtorisetoherfeetbutinvain.Shelayflatandgroanedloudly.Itseemedthatshewasinjuredseriously.Themangotaguiltyface.Hesparedeveryefforttohelpthewomangetup.Atthesametime,heapologizedwithsincerity,“I'msosorry!”Thenapolicemancameandsentbothofthemtothenearbyhospital.高阶版Duetotherushhouroftheday,everyoneontheroadwasinhasteforwork.Suddenly,therecameabig“bang”!Amanwithhismotorcyclecrashedintoawoman,bothofwhomfelltotheground.Angryasshefelt,shestillendeavoredtorisetoherfeetbutinvain.Lyingflatandgroaningloudly,sheseemedtohavebeeninjuredseriously.Withaguiltyface,themansparedeveryefforttohelpthewomangetup,apologizingwithsinceritymeanwhile.Thencameapoliceman,whothensentbothofthemtothenearbyhospital.Appreciateabundantsentencepatternsandpracticethem:I.分词做状语他们围坐在篝火旁，有说有笑，非常放松。Version1:Theysataroundthebonfire,chattingandlaughing,feelingratherrelaxed.Version2:Sittingaroundthebonfire,theychattedandlaughed,feelingratherrelaxed.心里充满了忐忑不安，Sheldon站在舞台中间开始轻微地颤抖。Version1:Filledwitheaseandrestlessness,Sheldonstoodonthecentreofthestageandbegantoquiverslightly.Version2:Seizedwitheaseandrestlessness,Sheldonstoodonthestagecenter,beginningtoquiverslightly.practice:我坐在房间里看着雨拍打窗户。___________________________________________________________风卷起雪像一条巨大的毯子围绕着我们，使得很难看清楚。___________________________________________________________除非被邀请说话，你在会议上应该保持安静。___________________________________________________________她的父亲躺在地上，被困在卡车下。___________________________________________________________II.With+O+C做状语1.“With+O+C”结构中，宾补C与宾语O之间,存在主动关系，用doing。溺水的男孩在水中无助地挣扎，他的双手高高地举过头顶。Thedrowningboystruggledinthewaterindespair,withhisbothhandsholdinguphighoverhishead.救上岸之后，男孩紧紧地抱住男人，感激的泪水无声地从脸颊流下来。Afterbeingsaved,theboyhuggedthemanfirmly,withtearsofgratitudestreamingdownhischeeksinsilence.“With+O+C”结构中，宾补C与宾语O之间,存在被动完成关系，用done。葛朗台的妻子病入膏肓了，她的眼睛里含满了泪水Becauseofherincurabledisease,Grandet'swifewashelpless,withhereyesfilledwithtears.然而，葛朗台只是恼怒地咕哝着，眼睛紧盯着闪闪发光的金子——他压根儿不愿意为他妻子的病发一个子儿。However,Grandetgrumbledwithannoyancewithhiseyesgluedtotheglitteringgold——hewasreluctanttowasteasinglepennyforhiswife'sdisease.practice:他争论时脸上出现了一种不情愿的表情。_______________________________________________________________________这个女孩安静地坐在那里，眼睛仍然盯着那个玩具娃娃。_______________________________________________________________________有那个善良的女孩带领我们，我们毫不费劲地找到了图书馆。_______________________________________________________________________这个老人饭后经常带着他的猫散步。_______________________________________________________________________III.独立主格做状语什么是独立主格？非谓语动词作状语，其逻辑主语须与主句主语保持一致。若不一致，非谓语动词形式须另带主语，从而构成复合结构。这种结构称为"独立结构"。1.非谓语动词与逻辑主语形成主动关系，用doing.我根本不知道车开到哪里了，树木包围着我，四下不见任何房子。Ihadtheslightestideawheremycarhadtakenmeto,forestssurroundingmeandnohouseinsight.2.非谓语动词与逻辑主语形成被动完成关系，用done.Susan感到非常难受，她的猫在搬家时走失了。Version1:Susanwasoverwhelmedwithgrief,hercatgettinglostduringthehousemoving.(原因)Version2:Susanoverwhelmedwithgrief,hercatgotlostduringthehousemoving.(结果)2)猫终于找到了，他们告别的邻居,开车走了。Thecatfinallyfound,theysaidgoodbyetotheirneighboranddroveoff.practice:1.牛群分散在田野，有的在吃草，有的静静地躺在阴凉角落里。_______________________________________________________________________2.由于眼睛摔坏了，她看不见黑板上的字。_______________________________________________________________________所有的设备都修好了，他们开始投入工作。任务完成后，他们开了个派对庆祝._______________________________________________________________________IV.两个形容词做状语1.两个形容词作状语表结果，放句尾。1.在妈妈的指导下，我弹了8小时的钢琴，又累又饿。Undermymother'sinstruction,Ispent8hoursplayingthepiano,exhaustedandhungry.由于我思想不集中，连续弹错了好几个音，感到又绝望又自责。Duetomyabsentmind,Icontinuedtoplaysomewrongnotes,desperateanddevastated.2.两个形容词作原因状语，一般放在句首1.又渴又饿，Henry疾步走进了一家小餐厅，想先弄点吃的填饱肚子。Thirstyandhungry,Henryquickenedhispaceintoasmallrestaurantwiththehopeofsomethingtostuffhisstomach.2.势利又傲慢，那个服务员对穿得破破烂烂的Henry的到来视若无睹。Snobbishandarrogant,thewaiterturnedablindeyetoHenrywhowasinrags.practice:放松又解脱,我长长地舒了一口气。_______________________________________________________________________既渴望又兴奋，她挥舞着她的黄色衣服，想要吸引别人的注意。_______________________________________________________________________绝望又无助，Jane跪下来，眼泪顺着脸颊流下来。_______________________________________________________________________欣喜又激动，妈妈紧紧地抱住了Henry,一句话都说不出来。_______________________________________________________________________V.倒装句读后续写中的倒装句，经常使用的有两类，一类是完全倒装句，另一类是部分倒装句。1.完全倒装句1.突然间，门铃响了。(there+Vi+S结构)Allofasudden,therecameadoorbell.2.Jane打开门，门口立着一棵高大的圣诞树，装饰着漂亮的丝带和闪亮的星星(介宾+Vi+S结构)Janeopenedthedoor,infrontofwhichstoodabigChristmastreedecoratedwithbeautifulribbonsandsparklingstars.2.部分倒装句1.他做梦都没想到，他作弊会被老师当场逮住。(否定词放句首倒装)Neverinhiswildestdreamdidheimaginethathewouldbecaughtcheatingintheexamonthespotbytheteacher.2.他是如此地羞愧，以至于他可以感到热血因懊恼而直往脸上冲，心跳加速，膝盖发软。(So...that的倒装)Soashamedwashethathecouldfeeltheboilingbloodrushingtohisfaceinguilt,hisheartracingandhiskneesweakening.practice:1.我们刚到机场，飞机就起飞了(Hardly...when/Nosooner...than...)_______________________________________________________________________2.只有当他回到了家，他才知道发生了什么。(Onlywhen.../Notuntil...)_______________________________________________________________________3.远处有一个废弃的农场。(Therebe...)_______________________________________________________________________4.从山洞冲出一只老虎，看起来异常凶猛。(介宾+Vi+S,which...)_______________________________________________________________________VI.各类从句高中的从句，一般包括名词性从句(主从、表从、宾从和同从)、定语从句和状语从句。1.名词性从句/定语从句我非常喜欢看动画片。让我印象深刻的是哪吒，他是个叛逆但勇敢的孩子。哪吒从来没有经历过害怕的感觉，这部分是因为他很聪明。他相信，我命由我不由天。Ilikewatchingcartoons.WhatimpressesmemostisNezha(主从),whoisarebelliousbutbraveboy(定从).Nezhaneverexperiencedandfear,andthat'spartlybecausehewasparticularlyintelligent(表从).Hebelievesthatheisthemasterofthedestiny(宾从)/Heholdsthebeliefthat