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三大原则

1原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯2正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法等等。3

曲折性原则凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。2试题文本TWO阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,“Itlookslikeyou’vegotaproblem,”Arthursaid.“I’mafraidso.I’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar.”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.”“Notroubleatall.I’dbegladtohelp.”Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitontheground,heturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery(抢劫)!ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoinedthecrowdinfrontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,“Whathappened?”Buteveryonehadadifferentanswer.Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.“Whyisshelookingatmelikethat?”Hethought.“Thesuitcase！ShethinksI’mthebankthief!”Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”________________________________________ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur...____________________________________________________________3写作过程THREEI.准确理解材料，理清人物事件。

Task1.浅层信息理解

首先要审题：⑴

文体：_______⑵

人称：_________⑶

时态：____________⑷5Ws：who_______，___________________，_______when______________________________where_______________，___________,______what________________________why__________________记叙文第三人称一般过去时theyoungmanpeopleArthuronthewaytoworkonedayParkAvenuethebankcarryingthesuitcasetaxibankrobberyTask2.深层信息理解理清故事的发展线索（How）paragraph（段落）Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para1heardthesound，couldn’tgetthecarmoving，lookedinsideat，

stoppedandaskedArthurwenttoayoungmanwithhiscarintrouble.Task2.深层信息理解理清故事的发展线索（How）paragraph（段落）Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para2，3，4，5&6can’tstart，helpmegetthesesuitcasesinto，gladtohelp，took，

placing，gettheotherone，pickedupthefirstsuitcase，heardanalarmThealarmwentoffasArthurhelpedtocarrythesuitcase.Task2.深层信息理解理清故事的发展线索（How）paragraph（段落）Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para7wasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeople，

joinedthecrowd，asked，hadadifferentanswerAfterthealarmsounded,thecrowdwereinchaos.Para8，9&10lookedat，wassurprised，thinksArthurrealizedthathewasthoughttobearobber.

(1).文章的基调：

funny

人物情感和性格：helpful，brave，honestandimpulsive(易冲动的)

文中感悟：thepolicementhankedhim

(2).梳理故事情节Arthur上班途中在银行附近助人为乐；帮忙提箱子过程中银行警报响起,混乱中一位女士用奇怪的眼神看他，他意识到自己被认为是抢劫犯，Arthur跑了起来……。themaincharacterstheproblemtheyoungmanfacedthehelpArthurofferedthedisturbanceonParkVenueThelookofayoungwomaninfrontofArthurthereactionofArthur:Arthurandayoungman.Hecouldn’tstarthiscar.Hepickedupthesuitcase.Theremightbeabankrobbery.ShelookedatArthurasifhewastherobberHeranawaywithoutasecondthought(3).提炼信息要点Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”1.

OpeningArthurencounteredayoungmanwhocouldn’tstarthiscarandaskedhimtohelpgetthesuitcasesintoataxi.Takingoneofthesuitcasesinhand,Arthurheardaloudalarm.Thepassers-byonthestreetthoughttheremightbeabankrobbery.AyoungwomanArthurranintomistookArthurasthebankthief.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur…2.

Build-up3.

Conflict4.

Resolution5.

Ending(4).完成故事山

II.

研究所给首句，定逻辑与情节Task1：思考以下问题

Paragraph1：Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungman,shoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”

请思考

Q1:

DidArthurstop?

Q2:

WhatwasArthurthinking?

Q3:WhatdidArthurdo?

Q4:

Howcanwewritesomethingtoconnectwith“Taxi”and“PoliceStation”mentionedinthenextPara.?Task2定细节ParaWhowouldbeintheparagraph?Whatwouldtheydo?Howwouldtheyfeel?Para1

Para2

Arthur;theyoungmanArthur;thepoliceman;theyoungmanArthur:run;takeataxi;gotothepolicestationtheyoungman:runafterhimArthur:tellthepolicemanthepoliceman:ask...theyoungman:tellthetruthnervous;frightenedembarrassed;relief;happyIII.推断续写框架，续写具体情节

Paragraph1：[开端]Arthur听到年轻人背后大喊大叫。[发展]

思考年轻人（theyoungman）的表现，

（Arthur）感觉他可能是小偷（thebankthief）

→拦下了一辆出租车（taxi）→告诉司机背后的男人是银行的小偷（thief）。[高潮]

司机开到最近的派出所。III.推断续写框架，续写具体情节。

Paragraph2：[结局]

Arthur向警察描述了公园大道（ParkAvenue）银行（thebank）抢劫（robbery）→那个年轻人坐上了另一辆出租车跟上了Arthur→年轻人是无辜的，原来箱子内的只是一些衣服→Arthur感到尴尬，但警察还是感谢他。IV.增加细节描写，完成读后续写。

将已确定好的六要素串联起来，增加细节描写，完成续写第一稿。

Paragraph1：

⑴

他想起这个年轻人表现的方式。Hethoughtof_______________________________.⑵他意识到年轻人可能是小偷。He____________________________________thebankthief.⑶Arthur跑得更快，拦下了一辆出租车。Arthur_________________________ataxi.thewaytheyoungmanhadbehavedrealizedtheyoungmanmightberanfasterandstopped⑷Arthur上了出租车。Arthur_______thetaxi.⑸Arthur告诉司机后面的喊声是银行窃贼发出的。Arthurtold________________________________fromthebankthief.⑹Arthur要求司机把车开到警察局去。Arthurasked___________________________thepolicestation.⑺司机听从Arthur的话把车开走了。Thedriver____________________________________away.gotintothedrivertheshoutsbehindwasthedrivertodrivetofollowedwhatArthursaidanddrove

Paragraph2：

(8)Arthur描述着公园大道银行附近的抢劫案，并向警察报告那个年轻人。Arthur_______________therobberynearthebankonParkAvenue____________theyoungmantothepolice．

(9)Arthur听到外面有个声音喊：“救命!救命!Arthurheard_____________,“Help!Help!”wasdescribingandreportingavoiceoutside(10)令Arthur吃惊的是，是那个年轻人。__________________Arthur,itwastheyoungman.Tothesurpriseof

(11)这个年轻人坐另一辆出租车跟在Arthur后面。Theyoungman____________________________taxi.

(12)他们知道这个年轻人不是小偷。Theyknew_______________________thethief.hadfollowedArthurinanotherthattheyoungmanwasnot(13)箱子里只有一些衣服。________________________justsomeclothes.(14)Arthur感到很尴尬。Arthur______________．(15)警察还是谢了他。Thepolicemen___________anyway.InsidethesuitcaseswerefeltembarrassedthankedhimV.润色加工，升级句式

第一稿完成后，用过渡词句、高级词汇和句式升级，增加得分点。

1.用分词作时间状语，合并Paragraph1中的⑴和⑵句。

___________thewaytheyoungmanhadbehaved,__________theyoungmanmightbethebankthief.Thinkingofherealized2.句⑹增加修饰词nearest，再与句⑸合并，用连接词themoment，改写句⑷引导时间状语从句。

___________hegotintothetaxi,_____thedriverthemanshoutingbehindwasthebankthief__________himtodrivetothe_________policestation.Themomenthetoldandaskednearest3.用justas引导时间状语从句，合并句⑻和句⑼。______ArthurwasdescribingtherobberynearthebankonParkAvenueandreportingtheyoungmantothepolice,________avoiceoutside,‘‘Help!Help!”.4.用Itturnedout和wasinnocent改写句⑿，再并列⒀句。___________________theyoungman_________________________________werejustsomeclothes.

JustasheheardItturnedoutthatwas5.用转折连词but合并句⒁和句⒂。Arthur______________________thepolicemen________himanyway.feltembarrassedbutthanked

innocentandinsidethesuitcases

Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Andalsoatthemoment,athoughtoccurredtoArthur:theyoungmanmightbethebankrobber!Arthurranstraighttoataxianddivedinwiththesuitcase.Heturnedtothedriverandsaid,“Forgoodnesssake,takemetothenearestPoliceStation!Hurryup!Themanchasingbehindisthebankthief!”Thetaxiracedawaylikethewind.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurgrabbedthesuitcaseandalmostfellthroughthedoorintothePoliceStation.JustasArthurwasdescribingwhathadhappenednearthebankontheParkAvenueandreportedtheyoungmantothepolice,heheardavoiceoutside,“Help!Help!”TothesurpriseofArthur,itwastheyoungman.HehadfollowedArthurinanothertaxi.Itturnedoutthattheyoungmanwasinnocentandinsidethesuitcasewerejustsomeclothes.Scratchingthebackofhisheadawkwardly,Arthurapologizedtotheyoungmansincerely.VI.

检查定稿，规范誊写

Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Andalsoatthemoment,athoughtoccurredtoArthur:theyoungmanmightbethebankrobber!Arthurranstraighttoataxianddivedinwiththesuitcase.Heturnedtothedriverandsaid,“Forgoodnesssake,takemetothenearestPoliceStation!Hurryup!Themanchasingbehindisthebankthief!”Thetaxiracedawaylikethewind.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurgrabbedthesuitcaseandalmostfellthroughthedoorintothePoliceStation.JustasArthurwasdescribingwhathadhappenednearthebankontheParkAvenueandreportedtheyoungmantothepolice,heheardavoiceoutside,“Help!Help!”TothesurpriseofArthur,itwastheyoungman.HehadfollowedArthurinanothertaxi.It