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welcome1/30Writing

ByZhangHui2/30Whatmakesagoodessay?Ⅰ.Discussion3/30感知经典范例4/30感知经典范例——词汇层面1adj.聪明、脑筋好clever→wise→smart→bright→intelligent5/30感知经典范例——词汇层面2adj.令人惊奇surprising→amazing→astonishingexactlyusedandadvancedwords准确利用词汇并使用高级词汇6/30

(not…until)→He______comehere______yesterdayafternoon.

2.Notuntilyesterdayafternoondidhecomehere.

3.

Itwasnotuntilyesterdayafternoonthathecamehere.感知经典范例——句型层面1advancedsentencepatterns使用高级句型nogrammaticalmistakes

没有语法错误Hecamehereyesterdayafternoon.他昨天下午来。didn’t

until

7/30感知经典范例——段落层面Ithink,foruschildren,weshouldoftengohomeandstaytogetherwithourparentsthoughwearebusy.Oursocietyshouldorganizeallkindsofactivitiesfortheseniorstohelpthemlivehappily.Wecanbuildaharmonioussocietyonlywhenallofuscarefortheaged.AsfarasIamconcerned,foruschildren,weshouldoftengohomeandstaytogetherwithourparentshoweverbusyweare.What’smore,oursocietyshouldorganizeallkindsofactivitiesfortheseniorstohelpthemliveahappylife.Onlywhenallofuscarefortheagedcanwebuildaharmonioussocietyproperlinkwords

使用恰当连接词

varioussentencepatterns用较丰富句式8/30感知经典范例——篇章层面1卷面不整齐;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;

得8分9/30感知经典范例——篇章层面2字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息，不得分。10/30

poor——篇章层面3excellentneatandclean卷面整齐wellorganized结构合理thecontentiscomplet内容要完整11/30Conclusion:

Whatmakesagoodessay?1.neatandclean卷面整齐

2.completecontent内容完整3.wellorganized

结构合理4.exactlyusedandadvancedwords

准确利用词汇并使用高级词汇5.properlinkingwords

使用恰当连接词

6.varioussentencepatterns用较丰富

句式12/30假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要那幅中国画，同时问询他是否能够接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985抵达：8月6日早晨11:30Ⅱ.Pre-writing(全国卷)13/30注意：1.

词数100左右2.

能够适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.

开头语和介绍语已为你写好。DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHua14/30Ⅱ.Pre-writing(teamwork)Task1:DecidethepersonandtenseTask2:DecidethestructureTask3:Writedownthekeywordsandsentencepatterns15/30Task1:person(人称)tense（时态）ThefirstpersonThepresentandthefuturetensePerson:Tense:16/30DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHuaBodyTask2:DecidethestructureBeginningEnding17/30假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要那幅中国画。同时问询他是否能够接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985抵达：8月6日早晨11:30Task2:Decidethestructure告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要那幅中国画。同时问询他是否能够接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985抵达：8月6日早晨11:30Body18/30假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要那幅中国画，同时问询他是否能够接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985抵达：8月6日早晨11:30Task3:

writedownthekeywords

开会，带去中国画。接机。航班号抵达戴眼镜19/30

a.tohaveameeting/conferenceb.bringsb.sth.c.Chinesepaintingd.domeafavore.pickhimupf.flightnumberg.arriveath.wearglasses…Task3:thekeywords

20/30Task3:

Sentencepatterns

I’mwritingtotellyouthat…I’dlikeyouto…Wouldyouplease…?Iwonderifyoucan…?…21/30

必要连接词表示递进：besides,aswell,inaddition表示比较：justlike,inthesameway,onthecontrary表示因果：sothat,since,inorderto/that表示强调：

aboveall,withoutanydoubt表示总结：inaword,inshort,inconclusion22/30Ⅲ.while-writing(15mins)

Pleasewritedowntheletterin15minutes.Youcanusethefollowingstructure.

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DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?I’mwritingtotellyouthat___________________________,and__________________________.Also,I’dlikeyoutodomeafavor.Wouldyouplease_____________________________________________________________________________?Thankyouinadvance!______________isCA985,and________________11:30am.August6.Myuncleis_______________________________.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHua24/30Ⅳ.post-writingReviseyourcompositionsinpairs.Then,makeevaluationsforhimorher.25/30写作过程评价标准表写作过程评定表注意：抵达8至10项标准为优异，6至8项为良好；4至6项为合格；4以下为需努力。□大、小写以及标点符合完全正确；□所要包括词汇以及单词拼写完全正确；□固定搭配、代词、名词数、格以及冠词选择基本正确□句子结构符合需要，能准确应用简单句5种基本句型;□句子结构安排合理，符合英语习惯，无汉语思维来安排句子结构；□依据需要会使用正确时态、语态。时态、语态、概念、结构清楚；□有一定遣词组句，将基本句型串联成文能力；□会使用恰当连词、情态动词、修饰语，使句子前后连贯、文章顺通流畅；□能使用复杂句型及各种从句;□内容真实性、趣味性、实用性以及写作创新得到了展现。被评价者姓名_______班级_____日期_________讲课教师________评价内容________评价:优异□良好□合格□需努力□评价者提议：被评价者反馈及打算：

评价者署名：26/30Presentation27/30

DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?I’mwritingtotellyouthatmyuncleLiMingisgoingtoyourcityforaconference,andI’veaskedhimtobringyoutheChinesepaintingyou’veaskedforbefore.Also,