（朱宇峰）广州质检读后续写

读后续写海沧实验中学

朱宇峰1.思维训练充分阅读+提取信息+合理推断Wediscussedpushingthembacktotheshore,butweweretoofarout.

Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwokidswereingoodcondition.

成功营救的过程如何写？医院传来好消息后写什么？成功营救的过程如何写？写什么？Withoutthinking,Irandownintothestreet,holdingmybodyboard(冲浪板)onthewayandshoutedatastrangertocallthecoastguard(海岸警卫).阅读+提取信息合理推断Thefourwouldfinallybesavedbythecoastguard.Thenwhereshallitbeplaced?Inthemiddleoftheparagraphorattheend?Whichwayismorereasonable?Ifitisputattheendoftheparagraph,moredetailsabouttheirstruggleatseahastobeinvolved.Thepossibilitiesmaybeasfollows.tirednessfiercewaves(washtheboyofftheboard?)dyingkidsinnerthoughts(holdon,bedesperate,giveup?hopeful?)

...医院传来好消息后写什么？Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwokidswereingoodcondition.

hospital阅读+提取信息19Iwantedtoimpresseveryone,adeallikethatcanseemlikeagoodopportunitytoshowoff.impresseveryoneshowoff学生版的推理2.融合度

推理结果融合度不高怎样弥补？推断wenttothehospitalimmediatelywasthankedagainandagainbeinterviewedbysomereporterswaitingthereRatherthanfeellikeahero,Ibelieveanyonewhocouldswimwouldhavedonethesamething.弥补方式：结尾回归传统价值观提升融合度

Onepossibleversion:

Wediscussedpushingthembacktotheshore,butweweretoofarout.

Wehadtowait,tryingtokeepthemonthebodyboards.Pattingtheirfacestowakethemup,wecontinuouslytoldthemtobestrong.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifeltextremelyexhaustedwhileswimminghardtokeepmyselfafloat.CastingalookatTom,Icouldtellhewasalsoapparentlyworn-out.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseofhorrorsurgingthroughmywholebody.Saltstinging(刺痛)myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.ButIstillshoutedinmyhead:focus.Insheerdesperation(在绝望中),Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsusinthedistance.Thankyou,Lord.Quitesoon,Ifeltstrongarmspullmeoutoftheseaontotheboard,andthetwokidsweresenttothehospitalwithoutdelay.

Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwokidswereingoodcondition.

Sighinginrelief,Icouldn’tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.ObviouslyIhaddoneabigdealwhichissurelyagoodopportunitytoshowoff.Ihadexpectedtoexperiencesomesortofsenseofwellbeingorgreatness,butnoneofthatcame.Ratherthanfeellikeahero,Ibelieveanyonewhocouldswimwouldhavedonethesamething.3.情节哪个情节更胜一筹？哪个情节更胜一筹？TheonlypersonIcouldthinkofwasMort.______Icalmlyhandedthemanthemoney.__________如何编织情节更精彩？ThatnightIwastheheroofmyfamily与标题TheRealHero相符吗？

哪个情节更胜一筹？ThatnightIwastheheroofmyfamily与标题TheRealHero相符吗？

哪个情节更胜一筹？哪个情节更胜一筹？各有千秋！本人更倾向于故事24.融合

故事2WithMortstandingbesideme,Ibecamemorecourageous.Icalmlyhandedthemanthemoney.故事1“Thankyou,”Isaidinatremblingvoice,tryingtofightbackmytears.ThenIhurriedbackhome.Icalmlyhandedthatmanthemoney.homethatmanhurriedbackhandedcourageouscalmstandinghandedThatnightIwastheheroofmyfamily与标题TheRealHero相符吗？

情节融合度不够高怎样弥补？5.思路

没有思路怎么办？

不知道写什么怎么办？2021年广州市一模Themothersaid,“Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”__________________Nowwithsomechocolatesinhandtheboy’sbadattitudedisappeared._____________________chocolatechocolates仔细审题利用好名词没有思路怎么办？

不知道写什么怎么办？Shesaidwhilehewascomingthroughthevillage,somewickedboysthrewstonesathim.Hisunclewentuptohim,butquicklystartingback,hecried,_________________________.仔细阅读利用好人物&名词Father,Mother,Sister+Presents6.标题及其作用PassingHappinessonSincethenI’vedecidedtopreparemorecards,ashappinessisonethingthatreallydeservestobepassedonfromonetoanother.TheRealHeroFinally,Ipaidoffthedebt.ItwasMr.Robinwhomadetheworldabetterplaceforme.标题及其作用TheHiddenTreasure

TheRudeBoyItcuredhimentirelyofhislowandinsolent/rudemanners.Weshallliveandpassonhismessage–tobeamanwithakindheart.However,heleftusahiddentreasure–hiskindheart,whichshallneverdieawaywiththepassageoftime.7.结尾&主题1.Sometimesoursmallactioncanmakeagreatdifferencetoothers.(2020年7月山东高考爆米花)Evenasmallactofkindnesscanmaketheworldbetter.2.Surprisedandoverjoyed,Janeheldhimtightlyandtoldhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Atthemoment,themountainwasfilledwithlove.(2016年10月浙江高考夫妻野营吵架)Theminutetheymet,theyhuggedtogetherfirmlyasiftheywouldneverseparateagain.Theygothomeandhaveledahappylifeeversince.3.Indeed,onlywhenweopenupthedoorofourheartcanwebebathedinthebrilliantsunshineandenjoythewarmthofloveandcare.(ALittleBoy以真情感到孤独老人)4.Weshallliveandpassonhismessage--tobeamanwithakindheart.However,heleftusahiddentreasure--hiskindheart/hiskindness,whichshallneverdieawaywiththepassageoftime.(TheHiddenTreasure)5.Finally,Ipaidoffthedebt.ItwasMr.Robinwhomadetheworldabetterplaceforme.(TheRealHero熟食店老板借钱帮作者还清追讨上门债主的钱)续写如何结尾Relieved,shegavehimabighugandsaid,"Goodboy!Yourcouragetocorrectmistakesmattersmorethanthevase."Indeed,honestyisthebestpolicy.Tohissurprise,however,hismotherplacedthewholebagofchocolateinhishand,smiling.“Honestydeservesthebestreward,mydear.”Forher,nothingismorepreciousthantheinvaluablehonestyofherson.

高考卷多数无标题，考生自己概括，结尾处点题并升华主题8.句型训练和故事编织8.句型训练和故事编织1.ALittleBoyThehousewasveryoldandshabbyandtheownerhardlyevercameout.(环境描写)Theoldmannevertalkedwithhisneighbours,whichmadehimalonelysoul.Staringattheboywithanger,theoldmanshoutedathim.Theboyknockedonthedoorandwaited,sweatingfromfearoftheoldman.(心理描写)Theboystoodmotionlessatthedoor,hishandsclutchingadogfigurine.Thethoughtofknockingattheoldman’sdoorfilledtheboywithfear.Thinkingofknockingattheoldman’sdoor,theboyfeltveryfrightened.Theinstant/momenthethoughtofknockingattheoldman’sdoor,theboyfeltveryfrightened.Dustfoundtheboylingering(流连,徘徊)onandhesitatingwhattodo.Dustfoundtheboycryinginthestreetbecausehewashungry.

Thenightwasfallingandtheboywashungry,whichmadehimcryinthestreet.Thenightwasfallingandtheboywashungry,makinghimcryinthestreet.Theneighboursalwaysfoundtheoldmanhangingoutandsmilingateveryone.8.句型训练和故事编织Theboythenfeltsorryfortheman(beingsoaloneinthehousethatheowned),asitseemedthathewasaverylonelysoul.Takingthefigurinefromtheboy’shands,thelonelysoulwaswassoastonishedthatwordsfailedtoconveyhisemotions,tearswellingupinhiseyes.Itseemedthatitwasthecompanyofthedogthatledthelonelysouloutofdarknessandloneliness.Theboyrushedtotheoldman’shouse,hisfacecoveredwithsweat.Uponseeingtheboyforasecondtime,theoldmancouldn’tbringhisangerundercontrolanylonger.Seeingtheboyholdingawell-wrappeddogfigurine,helookedveryastonishedbutstillglaredathimwithoutaword.Deeplymovedbytheboy’sbehavour,theoldmanwentuptohugtheboytightly.Deeplymovedbyalltheboydid,theoldmancouldsaynothingbuttohughimtightly,tearsofappreciationwellingup.Theoldmanchangedalotinthewayhetreatedhisneighbours,winningtheirpraise.Theoldman,whousedtobealonelysoul,isnowfittinginwellwithhisneighbours.Butnow,hewasn’tdrownedinthesorrowsandlonelinessanymore.9.续写备考

各出奇招自然环境描写——描写波涛汹涌Thecoastlinewashiddenbehindthe______waves(汹涌澎湃的浪涛)withalmostnoonetobeseen.roaring2.AsIfloatedon,__________(一个巨浪)_________(呼啸而来)andapproachedus.ahugewavewhistled3.Thebigwind___________________(在耳边咆哮),andwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.roaredthroughourears4.Allmysensestoldmethatabigwave__________.(即将来临)wasabouttocome5.A_______________(看似猛烈的)wavewas________________.(靠近我们)powerful-lookingcomingtowardsus6.Thefiercewaves_______________________(没有消退的迹象).showednosignofdyingdown人文环境描写——描写声音传来4.Atthatmoment,ashrillwhistle(汽笛声)_____________(划破天空).1.Adistantsound_____________.(传入耳朵)reachedourears2.Asoft,reedy(似笛声的)sound________________.

(漂浮在海上)floatedacrossthesea3.Thesoundoftheboat_______________.(在我们耳内回响)echoedinourearsrippedtheair5.Whenwewereatalossofwhattodo,therewererasping(刺耳的)shouts

____________________

(从远处升起).risingfromthedistance6.Aship's____________

(喇叭声响起).hornsounded人物描写——描写疲倦5.CastingalookatTom,Icouldtellhewasalso_________________(明显地精疲力尽了).1.Drowninthesea,I______________(失去了平衡)butseizedthebodyboardtightly.lostmybalance2.Timepassingus,tiredness________(包围了)uswithmyfeet_________(僵硬/麻木)andshivering.engulfedstiff/numb3.___________________(尽管很累),wedidn’tstop.Grittingoutteeth,wekeptswimming.

Exhaustedaswewere4.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifelt______________(非常累)whileswimminghardtokeepmyselfafloat(漂浮着的).extremelyfatigued

apparentlyworn-out——描写害怕1.Itookadeepbreathand_____________(害怕地咽了口吐沫).2.Watchingtheshoreinthedistance,Ifelt_______(无力的)asifwewerebrokentinyboatsatthemercyofstrongwave.(simile)swallowedhardpowerless3.Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind,whichmademe(难于控制地发抖)__________________________________.quiverwithanuncontrollableterror/horror/fright4.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffear__________________________.(在身体涌动)surgingthroughmywholebody5.Astimetickedby,fear_______________(爬上我心头)andIcouldhardlytellhowlongIcould_______(前行).ploughon人物描写creptuponmyheart——描写挣扎努力1.Tomlooked_________(若有所思)人物描写thoughtful2.“Weneedtothinkoutaway!”Imuttered(喃喃自语),__________________(绞尽脑汁)scratchingmyhead3....,Weswam____________(全力以赴地).toothandnail4.We________________(不遗余力地)toswimtowardstheshore.sparednoeffortto5.We_________________________(互换了坚定的神情),then

ploughedon(继续前行)

__________________(难以置信的速度).exchangedadeterminedlookatanincrediblespeed人物描写——描写如释重负1.Ensuringtheirsafety,I__________________.(感到一阵胜利的喜悦)