初中英语九年级主题作文【知识框架+佳作赏析+能力提升】突发事件

主题：突发事件导读本单元的主题是用英语谈论过去的突发事件,由此引导同学们学会及时从容应对,培养正确看待事物的积极心态.与此关联的话题通常是用英语描述日常生活中一次难忘的、尴尬的、幸运的或特别的经历.这类作文通常采用记叙文体裁.写作时,要讲清事情发生的时间、地点、经过和结果等.同时,主题要明确,文章所有内容应紧紧围绕主题展开.同时,可适当抒发自己的情感.可适用于本单元的主题有很多,如Myunluckyday,Anunforgettableday等.题目回放生活中总是充满不可预料的事情.相信同学们在日常生活中一定有过愉快的、沮丧的、失望的甚至愤怒的经历.假设你叫李华,请自拟标题,写一篇英语短文,描述自己经历过的一次预料之外的事情.写作要点：1.你经历了什么事情；2.描述你当时的感受和体会.写作要求：1.不得出现你的真实姓名和校名；2.词数90左右.审题指引1审体裁：本文要求叙述一件自己经历过的意外之事,属于记叙文.2审内容：第一段引出要叙述的话题,第二段描述自己经历的意外事情,第三段发表感想和体会.3审时态：以一般过去时和过去完成时为主,可适当使用一般现在时.4审人称：以第一人称为主.框架设计开头：第一段引出话题.中间：主体段落描述自己生活或学习中遇到的意外经历.结尾：最后发表自己的感悟和体会.段落素描1.Firstparagraph:IamLiHua,ajuniorhighschoolstudent.Iexperiencedsomethingunexpectedinmylife.(IamLiHua,astudentofClassOne,GradeNine.Asweknow,lifeisfullofunexpectedness.Iclearlyremember...)(...)2.Thebody:Oneday,whenI...,Iwasattractedby...However,whenI...,Ifound...Evenworse,...IrealizedthatIhadbeencheated.(...)3.Lastparagraph:Indeed,lifeisfilledwithunexpectedthings.Wehavetofacethembravelyandcalmly.(Indeed,lifeisfullofunexpectedthings.Wearesupposedtofacethem...Hopefully,measureswillbetakento...)(...)范本淬炼ALifeisfullofunexpectednessIamLiHua,ajuniorhighschoolstudent.I①experiencedsomethingunexpectedinmylife.Oneday,whenIturnedontheTVtorelaxforalittlewhile,I②wasattractedbyanexcitingadvertisementforatoy,whichwasjusttherightthing③Ihaddreamedofallthetime.Imadeaphonecallandorderedthetoy.However,whenIreceivedthetoy,Ifounditwasnotasbeautifulastheone④introducedintheadvertisement.Evenworse,itwasexpensiveandoflowquality.Bythen,Irealizedthat⑤Ihadbeencheated.Indeed,life⑥isfilledwithunexpectedthings.Wehavetofacethembravelyandcalmly.①experience,经历,遭遇.②wasattracted是一般过去时的被动语态.③Ihaddreamedof...是定语从句.④introduced是过去分词充当后置定语,修饰one.⑤Ihadbeencheated,此处在宾语从句中使用了过去完成时的被动语态.⑥befilledwith,充满.亮点点评1.开头直接点题,简要说明自己经历的一件预测之外的事,主体段落展开叙事,结尾总结并谈感想.要点齐全,段落清晰,条理分明.2.句式多样,使用了状语从句、被动语态、定语从句、宾语从句等,使文章句式富于变化,增强了文章的可读性.3.使用了一些衔接语,如however,evenworse,bythen,indeed等,使文章衔接顺畅.4.使用了一些亮眼词语,如attract,dreamof,expensive,bravely,calmly等.BLifeisfullofunexpectednessIamLiHua,①astudentofClassOne,GradeNine.Asweknow,lifeisshortandfullofunexpectedness.Iclearlyrememberanunexpectedthing②thathappenedtome.Oneday,throughanadvertisementIorderedanonlinetoythatIhad③beeneagertohaveforalongtime.However,whenIreceivedthetoy,Iwasshockedtofinditwas④completelydifferentfromwhattheadvertisementhaddescribed.Itwashighlypriced,andoflowquality.I⑤cametorealizethatIhadbeencheatedbytheadvertisement.Indeed,lifeiffullofunexpectedthings.Wearesupposedtofacethembravelyandcalmly.Hopefully,⑥measureswillbetakentopreventsuchbadthingsfromhappeningagain.①astudentofClassOne是LiHua的同位语.②that引导定语从句.③beeagertodosth.,渴望做某事.④completely,完全地,副词,修饰different.⑤cometorealize,逐渐认识到.⑥measure,措施.亮点点评1.文章段落设计合理,逻辑清晰.开头引出主题,中间主体段落举例说明,结尾总结并提出建议.2.本文句式富于变化,表达流畅,能灵活运用定语从句、时间状语从句、宾语从句等句式丰富文章内容.3.比起上一篇文章,本文用词更丰富,如使用eager,shock,completely,cometorealize,prevent...from等,增加了文章的感染力.佳作赏析ALifeisfullofunexpectednessAsweallknow,lifeis①fullofunexpectedness.Iwillneverforgetanunusualwintervacation,whenaseriousinfectiousdisease②brokeoutinmostpartsofmycity.Atfirst,theseriousdiseasespreadfast,and③alargenumberofpeoplehadtostayathomealldayandcouldnotgotowork.④Likewise,moststudentscouldnotgotoschoolandhadtoattendclassesonline.Luckily,thelocalgovernmenttookaction⑤immediately,andhundredsofmedicalworkersrushedtothefrontlineto⑥fightagainsttheinfectiousdisease.Atlast,itwasbroughtundercontrol.Indeed,lifeisfilledwithunexpectedthings,including⑦unpredictabledisasters.However,Iamsureifweworktogether,wewill⑧achievethefinalvictory,①fullof=filledwith,充满.②breakout,爆发.③alargenumberof,大量的.④likewise,同样地.⑤immediately,立即；马上.⑥fightagainst,与··....进行斗争.⑦unpredictabledisasters,不可预测的灾难.⑧achievethefinalvictory.取得最后的胜利.亮点点评1.本文联系生活实际论述主题,立意深刻,观点新颖.2.文中时态切换自如,且句式多变,除恰当运用主动和被动语态外,还使用了when引导的定语从句等复杂句式,彰显了作者较强的语言驾驭能力.3.用atfirst,likewise,atlast,indeed,however等衔接语,使句子和段落过渡自然.4.用丰富的词汇和短语准确表达思想,如用breakout,attendclasses,takeaction,immediately,fightagainst,bring...undercontrol,including,achieve等,使文章内容丰富生动.BAshamefulcheatInourlifetime,someofus①musthavebeencheated,anditisthesamewithme.Lastmonth,InoticedontheInternetamessageabout②charitabledonationsfordisabledpeople.Touchedbythe③miserablelifeofthosedisabledpeople,Idonatedonehundredyuanwithoutanyhesitation.Twoweekslater,Irealizeditwasa④shamefulcheat.Nodoubt,theInternetplaysanimportantroleinourlifetime,butwe⑤shouldnotbemisledbyfalseordeceitfulonlineinformation.①musthavebeencheated,一定曾经被骗过.②charitabledonations,慈善捐赠.③miserablelife,悲惨的生活.④shameful,可耻的.⑤shouldnotbemisled,不应被误导.亮点点评1.文章结合现实生活中时有发生的网络骗局展开叙述,能引发读者共鸣.2.句式多样,使用了过去分词充当状语、宾语从句等句式,避免了句式过于单一的问题.3.用lastmonth,twoweekslater,nodoubt,but等时间词语和衔接语,使文章衔接顺畅.4.用charitabledonations,disabledpeople,touchedby,miserablelife,donate,hesitation,ashamefulcheat,mislead,deceitful等丰富词汇和短语,增加了文章的亮点.CAnunexpectedexperienceMostofushaveunexpectedexperiences①inourlifetime.Letmeintroduceoneofmine.Once,accordingtoanonlineadvertisement,Iboughtadress,whichwas②claimedtobeofhighquality,beautiful,butinexpensive;however,whenIreceivedit,Iwassurprisedtofinditwas③totallydifferentfromwhattheadvertisementhaddescribed.I④wasawarethatIhadbeencheatedbytheadvertisement.ThisunexpectedexperiencetellsmethatIshould⑤keepmyeyesopenwhileshoppingonline,andcannotbecheatedbyfalseadvertisements.①insb.'slifetime,在某人的有生之年.②claim,声称.③totally,完全地.④beawarethat,意识到.......⑤keep...+adj,使······保持某种状态.亮点点评1.文章紧扣主题设计段落,并联系生活事例展开叙述,最后谈了自己的感受.2.文中句式富于变化,简单句、祈使句、非限制性定语从句、状语从句、宾语从句交替使用,行文流畅自然.3.文章灵活运用丰富词汇和短语,如accordingto,claim,ofhighquality,inexpensive,totally,differentfrom,describe,aware等,增强了文章的生动性.素材宝库1.好词妙语rushtothefrontline冲到前线unpredictabledisaster不可预测的灾难theunluckiestday最不幸的一天so(inorder)that以便于·.....unfortunately不幸地allowsb.todosth.允许某人做某事share...with...与······分享.....beawarethat意识到charitabledonations慈善捐赠2.提分佳句Indeed,ourlifeisfilledwithunexpectedthings.的确,我们生活中充满了预料之外的事情.Wearesupposedtofaceuptothechallengesbravely.我们应勇敢地正视挑战.Itwastheunluckiestdayforme.它对我来说是最不幸的一天.BythetimeIrushedout,theschoolbushadalreadyleft.就在我冲出去的时候,校车已经离开了.Fortunately,hewasnotangrywithmeandallowedmetoentertheclassroom.幸运的是他没有生我的气,让我进教室了.WhatanunluckydayIspent!我度过了多么不幸的一天！Ihada/an...experience.我有一个··..··的经历.When...,Ifound/realizedthat...··..··的时候,我发现／意识到··....Goodthingscometothosewhowait.苍天不负有心人.Youwillneverknowunlessyoutry.除非你去尝试,否则你永远不会知道.Ajourneyofathousandmilesbeginswithonesinglestep.千里之行,始于足下.写作预热1.句子改错1)YesterdayweallwenttotheGreatWallbesidesJenny,whowasillinhospital.____________________________________________________________________________________________2)Ifoundthatdifficulttogetalongwithhim.____________________________________________________________________________________________3)Bytheendoflastyear,shehasworkedinthefactoryfortwentyyears.____________________________________________________________________________________________4)Bytheendoflastmonth,hewascheatedfivetimes.____________________________________________________________________________________________5)Theysaidtheyhavewatchedthefilmthreetimesbefore.____________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1)besides改为except2)that改为it3)has改为had4)was改为hadbeen5)have改为had2.句式变换1)Iboughtaskirt.Itwasclaimedtobeinexpensiveandofhighquality.(改为含定语从句的复合句)____________________________________________________________________________________________2)Irealizethatcourageplaysanimportantroleinmylife.(仿写句子)____________________________________________________________________________________________3)Parentsarethosewhoknowusbest.(仿写句子)____________________________________________________________________________________________4)ThemainreasonwhywelikeMissSmithisthatsheisfriendlyandpatientwitheverystudent.(仿写句子)____________________________________________________________________________________________5)Lindawokeup,andatthattimehermothergotintothebathroom.(用when改为复合句)____________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1)Iboughtaskirt,whichwasclaimedtobeinexpensiveandofhighquality.2)Ithinkthatreadingisveryimportant.(开放性答案)3)Teachersarethosewhoteachusatschool.(开放性答案)4)Themainreasonwhyhebecameoneofthetopstudentswasthathestudiedhardathislessons.(开放性答案)5)WhenLindawokeup,hermothergotintothebathroom.3.短文改错YesterdayIwantedtobuyabook,sosomethingunexpected1)___________happened.WhenIarrivedatthebusstop,IfoundthatIhadleftmywalletathome.Ihadtogobackhometotakeit.Becausethetraffic2)___________jam,ittookmeoneandahalfhourtoreachthebookstore.Unluckily,3)______________thebookIlikedthebesthadsoldout.4)________________WhataunluckydayIhad!5)___________答案：1)so改为but2)Because改为Becauseof3)hour改为hours4)had改为hadbeen5)a改为an实战练笔作为学生,你是否有过这样的经历：早上睡过头了,顾不上吃早饭却还是错过了校车,只能步行上学；到学校后迟到了,而且还忘带课本；去吃午饭时发现没有带饭卡和现金.请根据以上提示,以Myunluckyday为题写一篇英语作文.写作要求：1.语句通顺连贯,不得在文中出现你的真实姓名和校名；2.词数90左右.____________________________________________________________________________