初中英语九年级主题作文【知识框架+佳作赏析+能力提升】发明物品

主题：发明物品导读本单元的主题是物品发明.通过用英语谈论某些物品及其发明的时间、地点、发明人、发明过程、用途等,掌握被动语态的用法,同时在思维方面激发想象力,培养创造力.本单元的关联话题有很多,如Howwas...invented?Iwanttoinventaflyingbicycle等.题目回放我们的日常生活中有很多发明,其中一些发明改变了我们的生活方式.如果你是一个发明家,你最想发明什么?它会给我们带来什么样的好处和便利?请以Iwanttoinvent...为题,用英语写一篇文章.写作要求：1.把题目补充完整；2.文章中不得出现你的真实姓名和校名；3.词数90左右.审题指引1审体裁：介绍发明的物品,属于说明文.2审内容：先点题说明想发明的物品,接着阐述此发明给我们带来的好处和便利,结尾简单谈谈感受.3审时态：主体时态为一般现在时和一般将来时.4审人称：以第一人称为主.框架设计开头：点题,介绍想发明的物品是什么.中间：写出所发明物品的作用.结尾：表达对实现梦想的期盼.段落素描1.Firstparagraph:Withthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology,...playsanimportantrolein...NowIwanttoinvent...(...)2.Thebody:First,...Besides,...Mostimportantly,...(...)3.Lastparagraph:...sb.'sdreamcometrue...makeeffortstodo...Ihopethat...(...)范本淬炼AIwanttoinventaflyingbicycle①Thereisnodoubtthatbicyclesplayanimportantroleinourdailylife.NowIwanttoinventaflyingbicycle,②whichisexpectedtobemoreusefulinourlife.Theflyingbicyclewillhavetwowheelsandapairofwings.Wecanrideitontheground,orflywithitintheair,whichwillhelpusgotoour③destinationsmuchfaster.Whatismore,theflyingbicyclewillbelightersothatwecancarryitconveniently.Inaword,thedesignfortheflyingbicyclewill④betechnologicallypracticable,andIbelievethatitwillbepopularinthefuture.①Thereisnodoubtthat...用此亮点句式点题,写出本发明的重要性.②which引导非限制性定语从句.③destination,目的地.④betechnologicallypracticable,在技术上行得通.亮点点评1.本文框架设计合理,要点全面,条理清晰.2.文中能适当运用街接词,如whatismore,inaword等,使文章语言流畅,过渡自然.3.本文句式多样,如运用了定语从句、目的状语从句和宾语从句.BIwanttoinventaflyingbike①Withtherapidsocialdevelopment,environmentalpollutionisbecomingincreasinglyserious.Therefore,Iwanttoinventanenergy-savingflyingbike.Firstofall,theflyingbikeis②designedtohavetwowheelsandtwowingssothatwecaneitherrideitonthegroundorflywithitinthesky.Thiswillhelpus③reachourdestinationsmuchfaster.④Anotherpointworthmentioningisthatitwillbeabletoprotectourenvironmentbecauseitusessolarpowertosaveenergy.Whatismore,thereisanumbrellaonthebike.Ifitrains,wewillnotgetwet.Inall,Ilovemyinvention,andIwishitto⑤bringconveniencetopeopleinthefuture.①withtherapidsocialdevelopment,随着社会的快速发展.②design,设计.③reachourdestinations,抵达我们的目的地.④anotherpointworthmentioningisthat,值得一提的另外一点是.⑤bringconveniencetopeople,为人们带来便利.亮点点评1.本文结构完整,逻辑清晰,从发明飞行自行车的必要性到其具有的功能等,一气呵成,可读性强.2.句式富于变化,恰当使用了目的状语从句、表语从句、原因状语从句、条件状语从句等,表达流畅.3.文章衔接自然,使用了firstofall,anotherpointworthmentioning,whatismore等衔接语,前后衔接紧密,显示了作者较强的语言驾驭能力.4.词汇运用丰富,遣词造句恰当准确,如使用了rapidsocialdevelopment,environmentalpollution,increasinglyserious,energy-saving,design,reachsb.'sdestination,worthmentioning,bringconvenienceto等,彰显了作者较强的语言运用能力.比起上一篇作文,本文衔接更自然,用词和句式更丰富.佳作赏析AIwanttoinventaspecialkindofmedicine①Owingtoinfectiousdiseasesoccurringsometimesacrosstheglobe,manypeopleareingreattrouble.Therefore,Iwanttoinventaspecialkindofmedicinethatcan②actonthosepeoplesufferingfromthisdisease.First,thismedicine③willbeusedtocurepatientswithinfectiousdiseases.Second,itcanpreventhealthypeoplefromsufferingfromsuchdiseases.Indeed,④itwillbedifficultformetoinventthismedicine,butIwillworkhardtoachievemydream.①owingto,由于.②acton,作用于.③willbeused是一般将来时的被动语态.④it是形式主语,真正的主语是后面的动词不定式复合结构formeto...medicine.亮点点评1.本文立意新颖,结合现实,表达了自己对社会问题的关注.2.文章思路清晰.从点题到发明物的用途,再到如何实现发明梦想,层层递进,首尾呼应,构思严谨.3.行文流畅,含定语从句等的复合句与简单句穿插自如.4.使用了一些亮点用语,如infectiousdisease,ingreattrouble,acton,sufferfrom,prevent...from等,为文章增色.BIwanttoinventaspecialmaskTherearemanygreatinventions①thatarehelpfultopeople.NowIwanttoinventaspecialmask②toprotectpeoplefromcatchingvirus.First,thisspecialmaskcan③isolateanykindofvirusfrompeoplewithinfectiousdiseases.Second,itcanpurifydirtyair.Ifwewearit,wecanbreathecleanandfreshairanywhereandanytime.④Mostimportantly,itismadeofmaterialthatis⑤environmentallyfriendly.Hopefully,thisspecialmaskwillbeproduced,and⑥servepeopleinthenearfuture.①that引导定语从句.②toprotect...,动词不定式充当后置定语,修饰mask.③isolate,隔离.④mostimportantly,最重要的是.⑤environmentallyfriendly,环境友好的.⑥serve,服务于.亮点点评1.本文立意新颖,框架清晰,逻辑性强.先介绍想发明的东西,接着说明其作用,最后表达自己的愿望.2.本文使用了衔接语,如first,second,mostimportantly,hopefully等,过渡自然,行文流畅.3.句式运用准确,如使用了定语从句、动词不定式充当后置定语、条件状语从句等.4.词汇和短语丰富,语言表达能力较强,如使用了protectsb.fromdoingsth.,isolatefrom,purify,environmentallyfriendly,produce,serve等用语.CIwanttoinventaspecialbedAtpresent,wearelivinginaneweraofintelligence.①Tomeettheneedsoftheera,Iwanttoinventaspecialbedwithmanyfunctions.Firstofall,thebedwillwakeusupontimeinthemorning②sothatwewillnotworryaboutbeinglateforschoolorwork.Besides,duringwinter,thebedwillheatthebedroomto③acomfortabletemperatureatnight.Moreover,whenwearetired,itwillplaymusictomakeusrelaxed.Hopefully,thisinvention④willbemadesoon,andservepeopleinthenearfuture.①tomeettheneedsoftheera,为满足时代需要,此处动词不定式短语充当目的状语.②sothat引导目的状语从句.③acomfortabletemperature,舒适的温度.④willbemade是一般将来时的被动语态.亮点点评1.本文紧扣主题,段落设计合理,详略得当.首段点明想发明的东西即一种特殊的床,中间主体段落叙述该发明物的功用,尾段提出期望.2.本文衔接自然,使用了firstofall,besides,moreover等衔接语.3.语言生动活泼,描写细致,运用了一些亮点词汇和短语,如eraofintelligence,meettheneedsof,function等.素材宝库1.好词妙语Thereisnodoubtthat...毫无疑问···...Thereisnodenyingthefactthat...不可否认,·....Itisclearthat...清楚的是,·....playanimportantrolein...在···中起重要作用notonly...butalso...不但·····而且·....becauseof因为beofgreatbenefit大有裨益atpresent目前makeeffortstodosth.尽力做某事achievesb.'sdream实现某人的梦想devoteoneselfto献身于makeupsb.'smindtodosth.决心做某事Itisbelievedthat...大家相信···.·2.提分佳句Itisbelievedthatinventionsplayanimportantroleinourdailylife.众所周知,发明在我们的日常生活中起着很重要的作用.Withtherapiddevelopmentofscienceandtechnology,therewillbemoreandmorepopularinventions.随着科技的快速发展,将会有越来越多广受欢迎的发明.Thoughitisdifficultformetoinventitatpresent,Ihavemadeupmymindtodevotemyselftotheresearchintotheinvention.尽管目前我发明它有困难,但我已下定决心致力于此发明的研究.Ibelievethatitwillbeinventedsomedayinthefutureandusedinourdailylife.我相信将来某一天它会被发明出来并运用到我们的日常生活中.ThatiswhyIwanttoinventtheflyingbike.这就是我想发明飞行自行车的原因.写作预热1.句子改错1)Iwanttoinventspecialpen.____________________________________________________________________________________________2)Itcantellwhatclothesyouhadbettertoweartoday.____________________________________________________________________________________________3)Thepencanpointoutmymistakesandhelpmecorrectit.____________________________________________________________________________________________4)Let'smeintroduceittoyou.____________________________________________________________________________________________5)Thereisnodoubtthatdohouseworkisatiringandhardjob.____________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1)special前面加a2)去掉to3)it改为them4)Let's改为Let5)do改为doing2.句子翻译1)我想发明一辆既环保又方便的飞行自行车.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2)另外值得一提的一点是它不仅跑得快,而且能保护我们的环境.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3)它可以选择你需要吃的东西帮你保持健康.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4)你的父母需花时间放松而不是每天都感到疲惫不堪.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5)那是因为我想实现坐在学校就像躺在家里的梦想.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1)Iwanttoinventaflyingbikewhichisenvironmentallyfriendlyandconvenient.2)Anotherpointworthmentioningisthatitcannotonlyrunfastbutalsoprotectourenvironment.3)Itcanchoosewhatyouneedtoeattohelpyoukeephealthy.4)Yourparentsneedtotaketimetorelaxinsteadoffeelingtiredeveryday.5)ThatisbecauseIwanttoachievemydreamofsittingatschoollikelyingathome.实战练笔中国是一个历史悠久的国家,其古老的四大发明改变了世界.随着科技的发展,新“四大发明”即支付宝(Alipay)、共享单车(sharedbike)、网上购物(shoppingonline)、高铁(high-speedtrain)又让世界刮目相看.请以新“四大发明”为题写一篇英语短文.写作内容：1.新“四大发明”是什么?2.其中你最喜欢的是什么?3.你喜欢它的原因是什么?写作要求：1.语言流畅通顺、思路清晰；2.文章中不得出现你的真实姓名和校名；3.词数90左右_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________