润色文采 完美亮卷 学案-高考英语读后续写专题　

读后续写专题润色文采完美亮卷读后续写多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。因为该题型具有一定的开放性，不仅要发挥想象力、创造性思维构思情节，注意行文通顺与连贯、过渡与衔接等，还要对文章进行润色，尝试使用高级词汇和复杂句式，运用修辞手法，以增加文章的亮点。一、词汇1．注意区分同义词、近义词的细微差异。alittleboy小男孩(侧重年龄小)asmallboy小男孩(侧重体型小)restroom厕所(不是休息室)Whatashame!多可惜，真遗憾！(不是真可耻)2．恰当使用限定词用词准确，从另一个角度来讲就是要使论述客观、适度，这就需要考生适当使用一些限定词，以避免观点的绝对化，从而提高说服力和可信度；或根据需要加以强调，增强感染力。Heisthetopstudentinourclass.→Heisoneofthetopstudentsinourclass.HeistheteacherwhoknowsFrenchinourschool.→HeistheonlyoneoftheteacherswhoknowsFrenchinourschool.3．使用较正式的书面语，避开口语化的表达。Thisisthebesthotelyoucanfindhere.Youcan'tfindabetterhotelhere.或Nowhereelsecanyoufindabetterhotel.二、句式1．恰当运用连词和句型，变简单句为并列句或复合句。Naturalresourcesareverylimited.Theywillbeexhaustedinthenearfuture.Itisnottrue.Butitbecomesamajorconcernaroundtheworld.Thisisawidelyacceptedfact.→Itisawidelyacceptedfactthatthereisamajorconcernaroundtheworldfortheexhaustionoflimitednaturalresourcesinthenearfuture，thoughitisunlikelytobetrue.2．借用关键词汇(介词，不定式等)压缩句子长度，提升句子品位。Theflathasanareaof25squaremetresandthereisabedroom，abathroom，andakitcheninit.Theflathasanareaof25squaremetreswithabedroom，abathroomandakitchen.3．转换语态，主动变被动。Someonesawhimstudyinghardinhisstudy.→Hewasseenstudyinghardinhisstudy.4．运用倒装，调整语序。Thescholardidn'twriteasinglepaperthewholeterm.→Notasinglepaperdidthescholarwritethewholeterm.Theraincamedownandtheumbrellaswentup.→Downcametherainandupwenttheumbrellas.5．巧妙强调，增强震撼力。Hedidn'trealizehismistakeuntilthewholecasecametolight.→Itwasnotuntilthewholecasecametolightthatherealizedhismistake.Youmustwritetomewhenyougetthere.→Doremembertowritetomewhenyougetthere.6．感叹、省略，精炼有力。Timeflieslikeanarrow.→Howtimeflies!Lookoutforcarswhenyouarecrossingthestreet.→Lookoutforcarswhencrossingthestreet.7．虚拟语气，娓娓道来。Youdidn'ttakemyadvice，soyoufailedintheexam.→Ifyouhadtakenmyadvice，youwouldn'thavefailedintheexam.8．非谓语动词，提升品位。Theysangandlaughedastheywentbacktoschool.→Singingandlaughing，theywentbacktoschool.9．运用插入语，活泼跳脱。Ithinkthebookiswellworthreading.→Thebook，inmyopinion，iswellworthreading.10．格言警句，入情入理。(1)Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.有志者事竟成。(2)Nopains,nogains.没有付出就没有收获。(3)Constantdrippingwearsawayastone.水滴石穿，绳锯木断。(4)Careanddiligencebringluck.谨慎和勤奋才能抓住机遇。(5)Geniusisnothingbutlaboranddiligence.天才不过是勤奋而已。(6)Greathopesmakegreatman.伟大的抱负造就伟大的人物。(7)Industryistheparentofsuccess.勤奋是成功之母。(8)Norosewithoutathorn.没有不带刺的玫瑰。(9)Thereisnoroyalroadtolearning.书山有路勤为径，学海无涯苦作舟。(10)Successbelongstothepersevering.坚持就是胜利。三、修辞手法1．比喻(like,as,as...as,asif,of,comparedto,besimilarto等)Thesceneryalongthejourneyisjustlikeabreath－takinglandscapepainting.沿路的风景就像一幅美丽的山水画卷。Thesmileonherfacewasasvibrantasthesunonasummerday.她脸上的笑容和夏天的太阳一样充满活力。Herhairgrewgreyerandgreyer,asif(itwere)coveredwithsnowandfrost.他的头发越来越白了，简直像盖了一头皑皑的霜雪。2．拟人Fearseized/swallowedhim.恐惧把他吞噬了。Thebreezegentlykissedhercheeks.微风轻柔地亲吻着她的脸庞。Birdsonthetreearesingingabeautifulsong.树上的小鸟在树上唱着美妙的歌曲。Thefeatherysnowflakesdancedinthenightair,makingabeautifulpicture.鹅毛般的雪花在空中飞舞，像一幅美丽的图画。3．夸张IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.我感觉自己像漂浮在悲伤的海洋中。Myheartbrokeinaboutamillionpieces.我的心成了碎片。Ialmostlaughedmyheadoff.我都快笑死了。正是这些语言能力的充分体现，词汇句法的准确与复杂程度，细节描写的生动性，让故事更加立体饱满。考生在写作练习中要多次修改，精益求精，使得续写段落在各个语言层次的表达风格上和原文保持一致，达到水乳交融的效果。多积累、勤练习，定会收到满意的效果。四、学以致用阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。[2020年浙江卷读后续写改写]“I'mgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy，”saidthetall,thinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotions(情绪)getthebetterofhim.Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.Thefamilyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmile.“Iguessthisisit，”hesaid.“I'llseeyoubackhomeinamonth,okay”Hisparentsnodded,andtheywatchedashewalkedoutofsightintothecrowdsofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboy'smotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.”Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidn'tseeminterestedinherdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebacktovisit.Poppydidn't.Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirljustwasn'therusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried.“WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup”askedDad.“We'vetriedeverything.”“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy，”smiledMom.“Withoutanybodyleftinthehousebutus,thisplacecoulduseabitoffun.Let'sgetalittledogforPoppy.”Itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhomeasusual,butwhenshesawthebox,shestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging(摆动)eversoslowly,thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.注意：1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________读后续写的部分写作片段：1．初写①Poppywasfascinatedbytheadorablepuppy.②Shestaredathimfeverishly.③Thenshebouncedaroundwithenergyonthesoftpads.润色：Fascinatedbytheadorablepuppy,Poppystaredathimfeverishly,bouncingaroundwithenergyonthesoftpads.2．初写①PoppySpottedthepuppy.②Shewasoverjoyed.③Hereyesbecamemellowandaffectionate.润色：Spottingthepuppy,Poppywasoverjoyed,withhereyesbecomingmellowandaffectionate.3．初写：Poppystaredatthelittledog.Thelittledogalsostaredather,too.Thepoppysharedherdinnerandherfavoritetoywiththelittledog.润色：Poppystaredatthelittledogincuriosity,wagginghertailinacheerfulspirittoshowherwelcome.Thelittledogalsostaredathercautiouslywithhiscrystal­blueeyeswhichweresoadorableandthenletoutasoftbarkasiftogreetPoppy.Afterabriefsniffing,thetwodogsseemedtoenjoyeachother'scompany,barking,chasingeachotheraroundthelivingroomhappily.Poppyevensharedherdinnerandherfavoritetoywiththelittledog.4．翻译：令父母开心的是这只大眼睛小狗的到来成功地为这个一直闷闷不乐的Poppy带来了欢乐。初写：Totheparents'delight,thearrivalofthepuppybroughthappinesstoPoppy.润色：Totheparents'delight,thearrivalofthepuppywithbigeyessuccessfullybroughthappinesstoPoppywhohadbeenunhappyforalongtime.5．润色之后的读后续写Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Poppystaredatthelittledogincuriosity,wagginghertailinacheerfulspirittoshowherwelcome.Thelittledogalsostaredathercautiouslywithhiscrystal­blueeyeswhichweresoadorableandthenletoutasoftbarkasiftogreetPoppy.Afterabriefsniffing,thetwodogsseemedtoenjoyeachother'scompany,barking,chasingeachotheraroundthelivingroomhappily.Poppy