高考英语读后续写素材积累-《追风筝的人》讲义

高考读后续写素材积累---《追风筝的人》Hassan'sfacebrightened."Good,"hesaid.Heliftedourkite,redwithyellowborders,and,justbeneathwherethecentralandcrosssparsmet,markedwithSaifo'sunmistakablesignature.Helickedhisfingerandhelditup,

testedthewind,thenraninitsdirection—onthoserareoccasionsweflewkitesinthesummer,he'dkickupdusttoseewhichwaythewindblewit.ThespoolrolledinmyhandsuntilHassanstopped,aboutfiftyfeetaway.Heheldthekitehighoverhishead,likeanOlympicathleteshowinghisgoldmedal.Ijerkedthestringtwice,ourusualsignal,andHassantossedthekite.

CaughtbetweenBabaandthemullahsatschool,Istillhadn'tmadeupmymindaboutGod.ButwhenaKoranayatIhadlearnedinmydiniyatclassrosetomylips,Imutteredit.Itookadeepbreath,exhaled,andpulledonthe

string.Withinaminute,mykitewasrocketingtothesky.Itmadeasoundlikeapaperbirdflappingitswings.Hassanclappedhishands,whistled,andranbacktome.Ihandedhimthespool,holdingontothestring,andhespunitquicklytorolltheloosestringbackon.

Atleasttwodozenkitesalreadyhunginthesky,likepapersharksroamingforprey.Withinanhour,thenumberdoubled,andred,blue,andyellowkitesglidedandspuninthesky.Acoldbreezewaftedthroughmyhair.Thewindwasperfectforkiteflying,blowingjusthardenoughtogivesomelift,

makethesweepseasier.Nexttome,Hassanheldthespool,hishandsalreadybloodiedbythestring.

Soon,thecuttingstartedandthefirstofthedefeatedkiteswhirledoutofcontrol.Theyfellfromtheskylikeshootingstarswithbrilliant,ripplingtails,showeringtheneighborhoodsbelowwithprizesforthekiterunners.Icouldheartherunnersnow,holleringastheyranthestreets.Someoneshoutedreportsofafightbreakingouttwostreetsdown.

IkeptstealingglancesatBabasittingwithRahimKhanontheroof,wonderedwhathewasthinking.Washecheeringforme?Ordidapartof

himEnjoywatchingmefail?Thatwasthethingaboutkiteflying:Yourminddriftedwiththekite.

Theywerecomingdownallovertheplacenow,Thekites,andIwasstillflying.Iwasstillflying.MyeyeskeptwanderingovertoBaba,bundledupinhiswoolsweater.WashesurprisedIhadlastedaslongasIhad?Youdon'tkeepyoureyestothesky,youwon'tlastmuchlonger.Isnappedmygazebacktothesky.Aredkitewasclosinginonme--I'dcaughtitjustintime.Itangledabitwithit,endedupbestinghimwhenhebecameimpatientandtriedtocutmefrombelow.(478words)

设计问题1.Inthefirsttwoparagraphs,howdidtheyflykites?(设计意图：前面两段出现了大量的放风筝的动作描写，很生动很形象，设计这个题目能让学生去找去品味那些丰富的动作细节描写，感受语言的美）2.Whydidtheauthorkeep

glancingatBaba?（挖掘作者动作背后的含义，他的动作是他的心理活动的体现，也是他性格的体现。让学生根据表层的文字的阅读学会剖析人物性格，养成批判性思维能力）参考答案1.Theyflewkitesverywell.Hassan:lickedhisfinger;helditup,testedthewind,

raninitsdirectionheldthekitehighoverhishead.,tossedthekite.spunitquicklytorolltheloosestringbackon....I:jerkedthestringtwice,ourusualsignal,andHassantossedthekite....tookadeepbreath,exhaled,andpulledonthestring....clappedhishands,whistled,.ranbacktome;handedhimthespool,holdingontothestring...2.Hewonderedwhetherhisfatherwassatisfiedwithhisperformance.Hewasnotaconfidentboy,buthewaseagerforhisfather’sacceptance.细节分类：11句动作描写1.Wehoppedthefencethatsurroundedthebarracks,skippedoveralittlecreek,andbrokeintotheopendirtfieldwhereold,abandonedtankscollecteddust.（动作）Agroupofsoldiershuddledintheshadeofoneofthosetanks,smokingcigarettesandplayingcards.2.Iwaswalkingbehindhim,humming,tryingtoimitatehiswalk.Iwatchedhimswinghisscraggyleginasweepingarc,watchedhiswholebodytiltimpossiblytotherighteverytimeheplantedthatfoot.3.Atparties,whenallsix-foot-fiveofhimthunderedintotheroom,attentionshiftedtohimlikesunflowersturningtothesun.4.Icriedallthewaybackhome.IrememberhowBaba'shandsclenchedaroundthesteeringwheel.Clenchedandunclenched.Mostly,IwillneverforgetBaba'svaliant（勇敢的）effortstoconcealthedisgustedlookonhisfaceashedroveinsilence.5.Ipressedmyeartothecloseddoor.6.Herosetohisfeetandwalkedafewpacestohisleft.7BecauseHassanstoodwithhisarmswideopen,smiling,waitingforthekite.

8.Helickedhisfingerandhelditup,testedthewind,thenraninitsdirection-onthoserareoccasionsweflewkitesinthesummer,he'dkickupdusttoseewhichwaythewindblewit.（神态、动作细节描写）9.Ihandedhimthespool,holdingontothestring,andhespunitquicklytorolltheloosestringbackon.10.Heeyedmeupanddown.11.KarimcollapsedonthefloorandrolledaroundfightingforairwhenBabafinallyletgo.细节分类：5句外貌描写1.Hewasasquatlymanwithashavedheadandblackstubbleonhisface.2.Nowhewaswalkingtowardus,handsonhiships,hissneakerskickinguplittlepuffsofdust.3.Hewasdressedinacottonshirtandblueslacks,aredsilktieandshinyblackloafers.Hesmelledofcologneandhisblondhairwasneatlycombedback.4.Hewassotallnow--Istoodonmytoesandstilljustcameuptohischin.TheBamiyansunhadtoughenedhisskin,andturneditseveralshadesdarkerthanIremembered,andhehadlostafewofhisfrontteeth.Thereweresparsestrandsofhaironhischin.Otherthanthat,hehadthosesamenarrowgreeneyes,thatscaronhisupperlip,thatroundface,thataffablesmile.5.Shewasdressedinanolivegreendresswithablackshawlwrappedtightlyaroundherfaceagainstthenightchill.细节分类：1语言描写"You!TheHazara!LookatmewhenI'mtalkingtoyou!?“thesoldierbarked.（语言）Hehandedhiscigarettetotheguynexttohim,madeacirclewiththethumbandindexfingerofonehand.（体现人物当时的态度）细节分类：10句场景描写1.Heturnedbacktothemicrophoneandsaidhehopedthebuildingwassturdierthanhishat,andeveryonelaughedagain.WhenBabaendedhisspeech,peoplestoodupandcheered.Theyclappedforalongtime.Afterward,peopleshookhishand.Someofthemtousledmyhairandshookmyhandtoo.IwassoproudofBaba,ofus.（从他人反应的角度描述主角：他爸爸的演讲是成功的，受人欢迎的）2.Atleasttwodozenkitesalreadyhunginthesky,likepapersharksroamingforprey.Withinanhour,thenumberdoubled,andred,blue,andyellowkitesglidedandspuninthesky.Acoldbreezewaftedthroughmyhair.Thewindwasperfectforkiteflying,blowingjusthardenoughtogivesomelift,makethesweepseasier.（放风筝的场景描写，从各个角度，立体描述）3.

WewereupstairsinBaba'sstudy,thesmokingroom,whenItoldhimwhatMullahFatiullahKhanhadtaughtusinclass.Babawaspouringhimselfawhiskeyfromthebarhehadbuiltinthecorneroftheroom.Helistened,nodded,tookasipfromhisdrink.Thenheloweredhimselfintotheleathersofa,putdownhisdrink,andproppedmeuponhislap.IfeltasifIweresittingonapairoftreetrunks.Hetookadeepbreathandexhaledthroughhisnose,theairhissingthroughhismustacheforwhatseemedaneternityIcouldn'tdecidewhetherIwantedtohughimorleapfromhislapinmortalfear.（动作与场景细节描写：作者回家后与父亲之间的交流）4.Thewaterwasadeepblueandsunlightglitteredonitslookingglass-clearsurface.5.ThenIglancedupandsawapairofkites,redwithlongbluetails,soaringinthesky.Theydancedhighabovethetreesonthewestendofthepark,overthewindmills,floatingsidebysidelikeapairofeyeslookingdownonSanFrancisco,thecityInowcallhome.（场景、比喻）6.Blueskiesstoodtallandfar,thesunlikeabrandingironsearingthebackofyourneck.CreekswhereHassanandIskippedstonesallspringturneddry,andrickshawsstirreddustwhentheysputteredby.（场景、比喻）

7.Somewhere,abranchsnapped,anowlhooted.Thewind,softandcold,clickedthroughtreebranchesandstirredthebushesthatsprinkledtheslope.Andfrombelow,thefaintsoundofwatertumblingthroughthevalley.8.Bythreeo'clock,therainhadstoppedandtheskywasacurdledgrayburdenedwithlumpsofclouds.Acoolbreezeblewthroughthepark.（天气）

9.Thesunwasbeginningtoset,glitteringredthroughthecracksbetweentheramshacklebuildings.（景象）10."Allright.HereIgo.?Itookoffrunning,mysneakerssplashingrainwaterfrompuddles,thehandclutchingthekiteendofthestringheldhighabovemyhead.Ithadbeensolong,somanyyearssinceI'ddonethis,andIwonderedifI'dmakeaspectacleofmyself.IletthespoolrollinmylefthandasIran,feltthestringcutmyrighthandagainasitfedthrough.Thekitewasliftingbehindmyshouldernow,lifting,wheeling,andIranharder.Thespoolspunfasterandtheglassstringtoreanothergashinmyrightpalm.Istoppedandturned.Lookedup.Smiled.Highabove,mykitewastiltingsidetosidelikeapendulum,makingthatoldpaper-bird-flapping-its-wingssoundIalwaysassociatedwithwintermorningsinKabul.Ihadn'tflownakiteinaquarterofacentury,butsuddenlyIwastwelveagainandalltheoldinstinctscamerushingback.（优美段落：再放风筝的场景）细节分类：6句情绪描写1.

IwasovercomewithsuchsuddenguiltthatIboltedtothebathroomandvomitedinthesink.Becausewhenhewasaround,theoxygenseepedoutoftheroom.MychesttightenedandIcouldn'tdrawenoughair;I'dstandthere,gaspinginmyownlittleairlessbubbleofatmosphere.（情绪的细节描写）2.

Itscaredmealittle,seeingagrownmansob.

3.Iwanttotearmyselffromthisplace,fromthisrealityriseuplikeacloudandfloataway,meltintothishumidsummernightanddissolvesomewherefar,overthehills.ButIamhere,mylegsblocksofconcrete,mylungsemptyofair,mythroatburning.（感受与情绪，具体化）4.Mythroatachesandmyeyesstingwithsweat,eachbreathislikeinhalingfire,andIthinkIamweeping.（哭的描写）5.Ihearawhimperingandrealizeitismine,mylipsaresaltywiththetearstricklingdownmyface.（哭）6.Hesitated.Tookthestring.MyheartquickenedasIspunthespooltogathertheloosestring.Westoodquietlysidebyside.Necksbentup.细节分类：17句神态描写1.Baba'sstonyeyesboreintomineand,justlikethat,Iwasn'tlaughinganymore."Imeantospeaktoyoumantoman.Doyouthinkyoucanhandlethatforonce?“2.Iclosedmyeyes,pressedmyearevenharderagainstthedoor,wantingtohear,notwantingtohear.（神态描写）

3.Thenhepaused,asifonthevergeofaddingsomething.Heweighedhiswordsandclearedhisthroat.（神态描写）4.AlookofsurprisepassedacrossAssef'sface,briefly,anddisappeared.5.Shesmiled,unconvincingly,andblinked.（神态）6.Irememberturningmyfaceuptothesky,squinting,breathingliketheworldwasrunningoutofair.(神态描写）7.Helitacigaretteandtuckeditbetweentheremainingtwofingersofhislefthand,theonerestingonthesteeringwheel.Keepinghisblackeyesontheroad,hestoopedforward,pickedupthescrewdriverlyingbetweenhisfeet,andhandedittome.（神态）

8.Faridopenedhismouth,almostsaidsomething,reconsideredandsaidnothing.Heslumpedagainstthewall,mutteredsomethingunderhisbreath,andcrossedhismutilatedfootoverthegoodone.Hisaccusingeyesneverleftme.（神态）9.Itookthekeys,stunned.（神态）10IforcedmyselftolookatHassan,buthisheadwasdowncast,hisshouldersslumped,hisfingertwirlingaloosestringonthehemofhisshirt.（情绪细节描写）11

Alookofdisgustsweptacrosshisrain-soakedface.Itwasthesamelookhe'dgivemewhen,asakid,I'dfall,scrapemyknees,andcry.Itwasthecryingthatbroughtitonthen,thecryingthatbroughtitonnow."You'retwenty-twoyearsold,Amir!Agrownman!You...?heopenedhismouth,closedit,openeditagain,reconsidered.（表达情绪的优美段落）12

Afewmoreawkwardminutespassed,andalightsweatformedonmybrow,myupperlip.13

Heheldmyglance,thenlookedaway,hisfacesetlikestone.Hiseyeswerestilllightless,Isaw,vacant,thewayIhadfoundthemwhenIhadpulledhimoutofthebathtub.（神态描写）14

Behindtheglasses,tinyeyeslikeblackpeasflittedfrommetoFarid.15

Sensedhimstandingthere,listening,hesitating,caughtbetweensuspicionandhope.

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Hisshouldermusclestightenedundermygripand,foramoment,Ithoughthe'dkeepsqueezingZaman'sneckanyway.

17Hewipedhisfacewiththesleeveofhisshirt.Itburstabubbleofspittlethathadformedonhislips.Heburiedhisfaceinhishandsandweptalongtimebeforehespokeagain.（神态）丰富的语法结构15句1drownedinthedeafeningroar

（分词）2Standinginthecoldbasement,Ifeltwatchedbyeyesblinkinginthedark.（分词）

3Ihearchatter,mutedsobbing,sniffling,someonemoaning,someoneelsesighing,elevatordoorsopeningwithabing,theoperatorpagingsomeoneinUrdu.（平行、分词）4Babapocketedthekeys,pulledmeoutoftherainandunderthebuilding'sstripedawning.（名词动词化）5Istoodo