“以图助写”的读后续写（2021年1月浙江高考卷制作南瓜灯）课件 高三英语写作专项

“以图助写”的读后续写ContinuationWriting2021年1月浙江卷

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标1.通过抢答、听讲典型错题等解决前置导学中未完成的内容或存在的问题。2.借助思维导图定主旨要义,定故事情节,定续写内容和增加细节描写（elements,plots,continuouswritinganddetailedwriting）。3.小组合作探究并提炼“以图助写”的读后续写写作思路。目录

01.Leadingin（导入）

02.Readforelements(定主旨要义)

03.Readforplots(定故事情节)

04.Readforcontinuationwriting(以增加细节，定续写内容)05.Homework(作业)

01.Leadingin（导入）

01.Leadingin（导入）1.Ispumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenyourfamilytradition?2.Whatwouldyoudo？3.Let’sreadastory—HeadStuckinaPumpkin

pumpkin(南瓜)02.Readforelements(定主旨要义)

读后续写原文基本是记叙文，而记叙文主旨要义通常有六要素，即：时间、地点、人物、事情的起因、经过结果。而且文章主题句一般在文章开头段。02.Readforelements(定主旨要义)I,Dad,Mum,JaksoninthekicthenThisyear...beforeHalloween...Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.Ifailedtopullmyheadoutofthepumpkin.续写内容(待定)Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.Ifailedtopullmyheadoutofthepumpkin.03.Readforplots(定故事情节)

故事情节定为四部分，分别是主要情节的开头(beginning)、主要情节的发展阶段（development），主要情节的高潮（climax）和结局（ending），结局也就是我们的续写部分。利用主谓推进式阅读，画出句子主谓的方式来理清开头、发展和高潮各故事情节大意。Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Readforplots(定故事情节)

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.开头（beginning）compete:familytradition

Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(软木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Readforplots(定故事情节)

Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(软木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.CompetewitheachotherandtoproveIwasthewinner,Iforcedmyheadintomypumpkin.发展阶段（development）Competitive;confident;excited;attemptcompete:familytradition

Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.

Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.Readforplots(定故事情节)

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.CompetewitheachotherandtoproveIwasthewinner,Iforcedmyheadintomypumpkin.Itriedtoremoveoutofthepumpkinbutfailedcompete:familytradition

failed,gotintoapanic

高潮（climax）Competitive;confident;excited;attemptReadforplots(定故事情节)

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.CompetewitheachotherandtoproveIwasthewinner,Iforcedmyheadintomypumpkin.ItriedtoremoveoutofthepumpkinbutfailedIwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.结局（ending）compete:familytradition

Competitive;attempt;excitedfailed,gotintoapanic

04.Readforcontinuationwriting(定续写内容)定续写内容是在前面“二定”对文本理解的基础上，对续写开头语利用主谓推进式进行研读，以开头句主谓内容为基础以问问题（问问题从语言、动作【五官，肢体等】、心理或周围环境角度出发）的形式寻找续写内容的切入点。04.Readforcontinuationwriting(以增加细节，定续写内容)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.1.“Ishouldgetmyheadoutofthepumpkin”“No,mylovelypumpkin”2.triedtopullmyheadout;heardmysister’slaughterandJason’svoice

talkingaboutcuttingthepumpkinopen;myfamilyhelpmerelaxmybody,andpulledthepumpkinoutofmyhead,myheadwasrelaxed;myMumfilmtheevent3.Allofusfeltexcited1.WhatmightIsay?2.WhatfuthereffortdidImake?Whatdidmyfamilydo?whowillhelpmeandhow?whatwastheresult?(mymother)3.HowdidIfeel?本段应该描写如何把南瓜拔出来Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.1.“Lookatmyhead,likeapumpkin.Itisfunny”3.surprised，happy(delighted);Familytraditionsleavewonderfulmemoriesforthechildren.Weshouldstaycalmandacteffectivelywhenfacingtrouble.2.ithad(raised)muchattention;Manypeoplewatchedit,saidsomething(leftcomments)andgavelotsoflikes(点赞).theyalsosharedtheirHalloweenontheinternet.1.WhatdidIsaywhenthevideowasposted?

2.Whatwillhappentothevideo?Whatwasthenetizens’response?3.HowdidIfeel?WhatcanIlearnit?04.Readforcontinuationwriting(以增加细节，定续写内容)本段应该描写视频上传上网后的反馈情况04.Readforcontinuationwriting(定续写内容)提升拓学：总结以图助写的读后续写写作思路时间、地点、人物、起因、经过和结果（续写内容）利用主谓推进式方法进行有效阅读，阅读过程中画出句子主谓的方式来理清开头、发展和高潮各故事情节大意。对续写开头语利用主谓推进式进行研读，以开头句主谓内容为基础以问问题（问问题从语言、动作、心理或周围环境角度出发）的形式寻找续写内容的切入点。主旨要义故事情节故事情节范文欣赏

Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

“Ishouldgetmyheadoutofthepumpkin.”Itriedtopullmyheadoutandheardmysister’slaughterandJason’s

voice

talkingaboutcuttingthepumpkinopen.“No,mylovelypumpkin.”Isaid.Finally,myfatherhelpmerelaxmybody,andpulledthepumpkinoutofmyhead,myheadwasrelaxed.Atthesametime,IrealizedmyMumfilmthewholeevent.Allofusfeltexcited.

ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybeforeHallowee