打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型15课件

MyDad'sBestFlowerMyDad'sBestFlower1如何读？如何读？2InterpretationoftheText文本解读AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatInterpretationoftheText文本解3InterpretationoftheText文本解读(Who)MariaMomLoveandtakecareofFlowerDaughterDaughterDadElderSister“I”InterpretationoftheText文本解4InterpretationoftheText文本解读(When)Whenmymomwasbusyinthekitchen,sheletmestayonthebalconywatchingthekidsplayinginthestreet.母亲忙的时候会让我呆在阳台，这也是我渐渐发现父亲爱好的时间点当父亲回来时看到了花已经枯萎了。Oneday,myeldersister,wholoveddadverymuch,hadagreatidea.Whenmydadarrived,hewentasusual,straighttothebalconyandsawhisflowerslyingonthefloorlikedeadanimals.一天，姐姐产生了一个想法。引发了后面花枯萎的事件。InterpretationoftheText文本解5InterpretationoftheText文本解读(How)Thewaydadtookcareofhiscarnationswithsomuchloveanddevotion.(Para.2)Hedealtcarefullywithhisflowerslikeamothertakingcareofherbaby.

(Para.2)Hewaswateringthemeveryday,cleaningthebalconyfloor,changingthepottingsoilandwhenthestems(茎)werethick,strongandhighenough,hestartedhisimprovementoperationlikeadoctor.

(Para.3)InterpretationoftheText文本解读6Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读(G-N策略）

1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Oneday,myeldersister,wholoveddadverymuch,hadagreatidea.

GivenInformation（Maria）OnthatbalconyIplayedsometimeswithmyeldersister,Maria.(Para.1）Shewassevenyearsoldandwhenmymomwasabsentshewaslikeamothertome.

(Para.1)Interpretationofunderlinedw7Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Oneday,myeldersister,wholoveddadverymuch,hadagreatidea.

NewInformationWhatwasthegreatidea?Howdidwecarryoutthegreatidea? Andwhatdidwedowiththeflowers?WhatwasMom’sreactiontowhatwedid/haddone/weredoing?Whatdidwedoafterwards?Interpretationofunderlinedw8Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para2.Whenmydadarrived,hewentasusual,straighttothebalconyandsawhisflowerslyingonthefloorlikedeadanimals.①Whatmadetheflowerslieonthefloorlikedeadanimals?②Howdidthefatherfeel?③Howdidthedaughtersfeel?④Howcanwerelateittothetitle?NewInformationInterpretationofunderlinedw9Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读(G-N策略）

1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para2.Whenmydadarrived,hewentasusual,straighttothebalconyandsawhisflowerslyingonthefloorlikedeadanimals.

Information（Maria）OnthatbalconyIplayedsometimeswithmyeldersister,Maria.(Para.1）Shewassevenyearsoldandwhenmymomwasabsentshewaslikeamothertome.

(Para.1)Interpretationofunderlinedw10

2.Interpretationofunderlinedwords下划线词解读：balcony,mom,street,Maria,appreciate,flowers,lovely,madeasharpcut,touch,fascinatingCharactersPlacesPlotdevelopmentmom,Maria,flowersbalcony,streetappreciate,madeasharpcut;lovely,fascinatingInterpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读2.Interpretationofunder11Interpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读Idea1:madeasharpcutto“I”

bandagedthestemwithasmallbandageMomFlowerMaria

makeagiftofflowersformakeagiftofflowersforDadAngryandglaredatAngryandglaredatInterpretationofwritingidea12Interpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读Idea2:pickthebestoutof“I”

FlowerMaria

heldtheflowerstightlyandgentlyDadaccidentallyfellwaitednervouslygotannoyedandstormedintoourroomInterpretationofwritingidea13词的积累：形容词：happy,glad,delighted,thrilled名词：happiness,joy,pleasure,delight,thrill动词：delight,thrill在续写文本中，记叙文的续写经常存在着字数不足，信息量不够，表达干瘪的缺点，无法准确传达故事类文章的情感因素。我们可以通过情绪情感、心理活动、具体动作、对话独白、场景描写以及修辞更多种方式使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。TheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：之动作神态：人物喜乐篇词的积累：在续写文本中，记叙文的续写经常存在着字数不足，信息14II.句的积累：

1.bewild/overwhelmedwithjoy,cry/jump/burstwithjoy,①Sheworeasmilingsmileonherface.②Sheshedtearsofjoy/regret/relief.③She

was

overflowing

with

happiness.④I

was

floating

on

air./I'montopoftheworld.2.Hiseyesshone/beamed/twinkledwithpleasure/delight.①Hiseyestwinkled/dancedwithpleasure/delight.②Hereyeslitup.③Hiseyesdancedwithjoyandsweetness.Myheartswellswithhappiness/joy.II.句的积累：

1.bewild/overwhelme15Haveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.听说他在这次灾难中幸存下来了，我们都开心死了。Learningthathesurvivedthedisaster,_____________________________________________________.②_____________________________________________________atthenewsthathesurvivedthedisaster.Wewereoverwhelmedwithjoy;Wecried/jumped/withjoyWewereoverwhelmedwithjoy;wecried/jumped/withjoyHaveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换Wewe16Haveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.听说他在这次灾难中幸存下来了，我们都开心死了。③Thenewsthathesurvivedthedisaster________________________________________________________________________________.④Whenwelearnedthathesurvivedthedisaster,_____________________________________________________________________________________.wewereoverwhelmedwithjoy;oureyesshonewithdelight;oureyeslitup;delightedus;madeusdelighted;mademyeyeslightup;mademyheartswellwithhappinessHaveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换wewe172.我从未见过如此可爱的小动物，欣喜若狂地追了上去。①________________________________________________Iwaswildwithjoyandfolloweditstrack.(运用such…that…句型)②_______________________________________________,Iwaswildwithjoyandfolloweditstrack.(运用倒装句)IhadneverseensuchalovelycreatureinmylifethatNeverhadIseensuchalovelycreatureinmylife2.我从未见过如此可爱的小动物，欣喜若狂地追了上去。Ih18①(两个简单句)_________________________________________________________________________———————————-——————-——————-—-②(时间状语从句)_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________③(分词做状语)_____________________________________________________________________________—————————————————妈妈在厨房里做饭。她让我呆在阳台上看别的孩子在街上玩耍。①

Momwascookinginthekitchen.Sheletmestayonthebalconywatchingthekidsplayinginthestreet.

②Whilemomwascookinginthekitchen,sheletmestayonthebalconywatchingthekidsplayinginthestreet.③Momwascookinginthekitchen,leavingmestayonthebalconywatchingthekidsplayinginthestreet.写作时，把句子写对是最基本的要求。我们不但要会写正确的简单句，也要尝试长句子和复杂句子的灵活驾驭,。长短句交错，读起来抑扬顿挫。动词是一个句子的核心，在表达时一定要遵循“现在/过去、主动/被动、做了/在做”这三条线。在读后续写中，谓语动词的过去形式占主要部分。①(两个简单句)____________________193.一个场景的描写，需要动作、情感、心理活动等全数参与，使读者产生生动形象的画面感。

请按照提示给以下句子进行扩写。Momwasbusyinthekitchen.①具体动作：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________②情绪情感：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________③心理活动：_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Momwasbusyinthekitchen,lookingafterwhatwasbeingcookedonthestovewhilelookingoutnowandthentomakesurethatwekidswerebehavingourselves.Momwasbusyinthekitchen,worriedwhetherthedishesshehadmadewouldsatisfytheguestsandatthesametime,delightedthatsomanyfriendscametoherhousefortheparty.Momwasbusyinthekitchen，withthehopethatthedishesshewasmakingwouldsatisfytheguestsandatthesametime,expectingthatahelpinghandwouldcomein.3.一个场景的描写，需要动作、情感、心理活动等全数参与，使20Possibleversion1

Oneday,myeldersister,wholoveddadverymuch,hadagreatidea.WantingtohelpDad,shecuttheflowersfromtheirstemsandarrangedthemonthefloor.ShebelievedthatDadwouldbeverypleasedtoseethemthatway.WhenMomrealizedwhatmysisterhaddone,shedidn'tsayaword.Mysisterdidn’tunderstandwhyweweresoquietwithoutawordofappreciation.

Whenmydadarrived,hewentasusual,straighttothebalconyandsawhisflowerslyingonthefloorlikedeadanimals.Helookedtowardsthestreettoseeiftherewasonefromtheneighbors’childrenwhocouldhavedoneit.ThenheenteredthelivingroomandlookedatMominsilence.Weallwaitedforapunishment.Mom,whoalwaystaughtustotellthetruth,lookedatDadandsaid,“Wehavenobadneighborsinourarea.”Thenwithanicetone

shecontinued,“Nooutsiderdidthisgreatjob,onlyourlovelydaughterLinda.Dad’sfacechanged

fromtensetoasmileandthenhesaid,“DoIhaveabetterflowerthanmylovelydaughter?MysistersmiledandgaveDadabighug.”Possibleversion1Oned21评点：该范文情节简洁、合理，较好地延续了原文的思路和语言风格。表达方面兼顾了长短句子的交错运用，让人读起来有抑扬顿挫的感觉。为了使文章更有深度和厚度，作者在合理情节的基础上，较多了运用情感描、心理活动描写等手段，使文章有了感染力。现在分词作状语、修饰性介词前置、定语从句等高级结构的运用，都体现了作者的写作驾驭能力。文章最后的点题，赋予flowers全新的含义，也让文章的立意也达到了新的高度。评点：该范文情节简洁、合理，较好地延续了原文的思路和语言风格22Possibleversion2

Oneday,myeldersister,wholoveddadverymuch,hadagreatidea..SheproposedustopickthebestoutofthecarnationssothatDadcouldappreciateitforeverratherthanhavetoplantithard.Wewenttothebalcony,hopingtoselectoutthebestandmostlovelyone.Whiledoingso,however,Mariaaccidentallyfell,bruisingherknees.Whatwasworse,manyflowerswerealsoknockeddown,leavingthebalconyinamessandthemajorityoftheflowersoutofshape.Despitethis,wemanagedtopicktheveryflowerswewantedandwaitednervouslyanduneasilyforthefather’sarrivalandhisresponse.Possibleversion2Oneday,23Possibleversion2Whenmydadarrived,hewentasusual,straighttothebalconyandsawhisflowerslyingonthefloorlikedeadanimals.Innotime,hegotannoyedandstormedintoourroom,questioningusinglare

whoitwasthatmadesuchamessofhisflowers.Insteadofcrying,braveMariaheldouttheflowersandexplainedwhatwemeanttodoandhowitendedupthisway.ShewasafraidthatDadmightpunishher,

butatthesametimeshehopedthatDadwouldsmileatourwarmactions.

Deeplytouched,Dad

heldtheflowerstightlyandgently,andimmediatelygatheredusintohisarms,saying,“Youaremybestflowers!”Possibleversion2Whenmydad24评点：该范文情节简洁、合理，较好地延续了原文的思路和语言风格。表达方面的亮点在于长短句的交错使用，不同句子结构的灵活运用。较多了运用情感描、心理活动描写等手段，并且赋予多样化的表达，使文章有了感染力,尤其是心理活动的描写时本文的一个亮点。文本很好地遵循了主位推进地写作原则，读起来像流动地乐声一样，顺畅而自然。文章最后的点题，赋予flowers全新的含义，也让文章的立意也达到了新的高度。评点：该范文情节简洁、合理，较好地延续了原文的思路和语言风格25打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型15课件261.第一眼看到你会被那抢眼、近乎妖艳的色彩震撼，更会迷醉于她独特的，蕴涵巫女般迷幻魔力的风格之中。2.她选择以代表强烈欲望的紫色来包装其化妆品系列，以黯紫色为主色的包装，周围布满了红艳的蔷薇，像极了年代妩媚的面粉盒；复古俏丽的化妆品系列让城中女子爱不释手。3.古琦品牌时装一向以高档、豪华、性感而闻名于世，以“身份与财富之象征”品牌形象成为富有的上流社会的消费宠儿，一向被商界人士垂青，时尚之余不失高雅。古琦现在是意大利最大的时装集团。4.继承着法国高级女装的传统，始终保持高级华丽的设计路线，迎合上流社会成熟女性的审美品味，象征着法国时装文化的最高精神。5.多年过去了，这个名字依然引领着世界的流行时尚。然而在这些辉煌的业绩后面，我们所看到的是一个活生生的，他充满着深情，极为害羞，又极为幽默，他便是永远的。6.迪奥的设计，注重的是服装的女性造型线条而并非色彩。他的时装具有鲜明的风格：裙长不再曳地，强调女性隆胸丰臀、腰肢纤细、肩形柔美的曲线，打破了战后女装保守古板的线条。这种风格轰动了巴黎乃至整个西方世界，给人留下深刻的印象。7.服装与其他名牌做法不同，它从不将任何“”或“”等明显的标志放在衣服上，而衣标上的字样，则是其唯一的辨识方法。8.推出的服装款式向顾客传递积极、开放的生活理念,倡导时尚的生活方式。专为成熟时尚的都市女性设计。她们的着装风格典雅、性感；精于对服装款式、颜色、面料及配饰的感谢观看，欢迎指导！1.第一眼看到你会被那抢眼、近乎妖艳的色彩震撼，更会迷醉于她27MyDad'sBestFlowerMyDad'sBestFlower28如何读？如何读？29InterpretationoftheText文本解读AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatInterpretationoftheText文本解30InterpretationoftheText文本解读(Who)MariaMomLoveandtakecareofFlowerDaughterDaughterDadElderSister“I”InterpretationoftheText文本解31InterpretationoftheText文本解读(When)Whenmymomwasbusyinthekitchen,sheletmestayonthebalconywatchingthekidsplayinginthestreet.母亲忙的时候会让我呆在阳台，这也是我渐渐发现父亲爱好的时间点当父亲回来时看到了花已经枯萎了。Oneday,myeldersister,wholoveddadverymuch,hadagreatidea.Whenmydadarrived,hewentasusual,straighttothebalconyandsawhisflowerslyingonthefloorlikedeadanimals.一天，姐姐产生了一个想法。引发了后面花枯萎的事件。InterpretationoftheText文本解32InterpretationoftheText文本解读(How)Thewaydadtookcareofhiscarnationswithsomuchloveanddevotion.(Para.2)Hedealtcarefullywithhisflowerslikeamothertakingcareofherbaby.

(Para.2)Hewaswateringthemeveryday,cleaningthebalconyfloor,changingthepottingsoilandwhenthestems(茎)werethick,strongandhighenough,hestartedhisimprovementoperationlikeadoctor.

(Para.3)InterpretationoftheText文本解读33Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读(G-N策略）

1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Oneday,myeldersister,wholoveddadverymuch,hadagreatidea.

GivenInformation（Maria）OnthatbalconyIplayedsometimeswithmyeldersister,Maria.(Para.1）Shewassevenyearsoldandwhenmymomwasabsentshewaslikeamothertome.

(Para.1)Interpretationofunderlinedw34Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Oneday,myeldersister,wholoveddadverymuch,hadagreatidea.

NewInformationWhatwasthegreatidea?Howdidwecarryoutthegreatidea? Andwhatdidwedowiththeflowers?WhatwasMom’sreactiontowhatwedid/haddone/weredoing?Whatdidwedoafterwards?Interpretationofunderlinedw35Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para2.Whenmydadarrived,hewentasusual,straighttothebalconyandsawhisflowerslyingonthefloorlikedeadanimals.①Whatmadetheflowerslieonthefloorlikedeadanimals?②Howdidthefatherfeel?③Howdidthedaughtersfeel?④Howcanwerelateittothetitle?NewInformationInterpretationofunderlinedw36Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读(G-N策略）

1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para2.Whenmydadarrived,hewentasusual,straighttothebalconyandsawhisflowerslyingonthefloorlikedeadanimals.

Information（Maria）OnthatbalconyIplayedsometimeswithmyeldersister,Maria.(Para.1）Shewassevenyearsoldandwhenmymomwasabsentshewaslikeamothertome.

(Para.1)Interpretationofunderlinedw37

2.Interpretationofunderlinedwords下划线词解读：balcony,mom,street,Maria,appreciate,flowers,lovely,madeasharpcut,touch,fascinatingCharactersPlacesPlotdevelopmentmom,Maria,flowersbalcony,streetappreciate,madeasharpcut;lovely,fascinatingInterpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读2.Interpretationofunder38Interpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读Idea1:madeasharpcutto“I”

bandagedthestemwithasmallbandageMomFlowerMaria

makeagiftofflowersformakeagiftofflowersforDadAngryandglaredatAngryandglaredatInterpretationofwritingidea39Interpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读Idea2:pickthebestoutof“I”

FlowerMaria

heldtheflowerstightlyandgentlyDadaccidentallyfellwaitednervouslygotannoyedandstormedintoourroomInterpretationofwritingidea40词的积累：形容词：happy,glad,delighted,thrilled名词：happiness,joy,pleasure,delight,thrill动词：delight,thrill在续写文本中，记叙文的续写经常存在着字数不足，信息量不够，表达干瘪的缺点，无法准确传达故事类文章的情感因素。我们可以通过情绪情感、心理活动、具体动作、对话独白、场景描写以及修辞更多种方式使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。TheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：之动作神态：人物喜乐篇词的积累：在续写文本中，记叙文的续写经常存在着字数不足，信息41II.句的积累：

1.bewild/overwhelmedwithjoy,cry/jump/burstwithjoy,①Sheworeasmilingsmileonherface.②Sheshedtearsofjoy/regret/relief.③She

was

overflowing

with

happiness.④I

was

floating

on

air./I'montopoftheworld.2.Hiseyesshone/beamed/twinkledwithpleasure/delight.①Hiseyestwinkled/dancedwithpleasure/delight.②Hereyeslitup.③Hiseyesdancedwithjoyandsweetness.Myheartswellswithhappiness/joy.II.句的积累：

1.bewild/overwhelme42Haveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.听说他在这次灾难中幸存下来了，我们都开心死了。Learningthathesurvivedthedisaster,_____________________________________________________.②_____________________________________________________atthenewsthathesurvivedthedisaster.Wewereoverwhelmedwithjoy;Wecried/jumped/withjoyWewereoverwhelmedwithjoy;wecried/jumped/withjoyHaveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换Wewe43Haveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.听说他在这次灾难中幸存下来了，我们都开心死了。③Thenewsthathesurvivedthedisaster________________________________________________________________________________.④Whenwelearnedthathesurvivedthedisaster,_____________________________________________________________________________________.wewereoverwhelmedwithjoy;oureyesshonewithdelight;oureyeslitup;delightedus;madeusdelighted;mademyeyeslightup;mademyheartswellwithhappinessHaveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换wewe442.我从未见过如此可爱的小动物，欣喜若狂地追了上去。①________________________________________________Iwaswildwithjoyandfolloweditstrack.(运用such…that…句型)②_______________________________________________,Iwaswildwithjoyandfolloweditstrack.(运用倒装句)IhadneverseensuchalovelycreatureinmylifethatNeverhadIseensuchalovelycreatureinmylife2.我从未见过如此可爱的小动物，欣喜若狂地追了上去。Ih45①(两个简单句)_________________________________________________________________________———————————-——————-——————-—-②(时间状语从句)_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________③(分词做状语)_____________________________________________________________________________—————————————————妈妈在厨房里做饭。她让我呆在阳台上看别的孩子在街上玩耍。①

Momwascookinginthekitchen.Sheletmestayonthebalconywatchingthekidsplayinginthestreet.

②Whilemomwascookinginthekitchen,sheletmestayonthebalconywatchingthekidsplayinginthestreet.③Momwascookinginthekitchen,leavingmestayonthebalconywatchingthekidsplayinginthestreet.写作时，把句子写对是最基本的要求。我们不但要会写正确的简单句，也要尝试长句子和复杂句子的灵活驾驭,。长短句交错，读起来抑扬顿挫。动词是一个句子的核心，在表达时一定要遵循“现在/过去、主动/被动、做了/在做”这三条线。在读后续写中，谓语动词的过去形式占主要部分。①(两个简单句)____________________463.一个场景的描写，需要动作、情感、心理活动等全数参与，使读者产生生动形象的画面感。

请按照提示给以下句子进行扩写。Momwasbusyinthekitchen.①具体动作：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________②情绪情感：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________③心理活动：_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Momwasbusyinthekitchen,lookingafterwhatwasbeingcookedonthestovewhilelookingoutnowandthentomakesurethatwekidswerebehavingourselves.Momwasbusyinthekitchen,worriedwhetherthedishesshehadmadewouldsatisfytheguestsandatthesametime,delightedthatsomanyfriendscametoherhousefortheparty.Momwasbusyinthekitchen，withthehopethatthedishesshewasmakingwouldsatisfytheguestsandatthesametime,expectingthatahelpinghandwouldcomein.3.一个场景的描写，需要动作、情感、心理活动等全数参与，使47Possibleversion1

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