【读后续写公开课】动作描写课件

1、读后续写动作描写Continuation Writing Description of Action目录CONTENTS壹写作方法指导贰续写文本回顾叁学以致用肆学生成果展示Guidance of the MethodsOne方法一构建动作链 Action-chainOnePre-actionTransit- actionPost-actionAction先前动作过渡动作后续动作动作链时间轴瞄准扔绳索套住牛套住牛？先前动作过渡动作后续动作动作链Tie the calf？拦下车上车告知司机目的地拦一辆车？先前动作过渡动作后续动作动作链Stop a car？冲过去蹲下来一把抱住抱儿子？先前动作过渡动

2、作后续动作动作链hug the son？他瞄准小牛脖子，扔去绳索，套住了小牛。使用A, B and C.连动谓语句他拦下车，坐上汽车，告诉司机目的地。她冲过去，蹲下来，一把抱住儿子。He aimed at the calfs neck, threw the rope and tied the calf successfully.He stopped the texi, got into it and told the driver his destination.She dashed forward, squatted down and gathered his son into her ar

3、ms. 动作链他瞄准小牛脖子，扔去绳索，套住了小牛。灵活使用非谓语句He aimed at the calfs neck, threw the rope and tied the calf successfully.Having aimed at the calfs neck, he threw the rope, tying the calf successfully.(前后非谓语)动作链老师放下书，按摩了下女孩肩膀，让她站起来，然后教她 “防困操”。The teacher put down her textbook, massaged the girls shoulders, told h

4、er to stand up and then taught her to do the anti-sleep exercises. 使用A, B，C and D.连动谓语句One他蹲下来，轻轻地拎起猫咪来，踱步到了列车出口。He squatted down, carefully lifted off the cat, and paced slowly to the exit of the bullet train.使用A, B and C.连动谓语句One甘道夫停下马，看了下敌人，便带着千军万马从山谷上冲了下来。Gandalf pulled up the horse, took a look

5、 at the enemy, and led thousands of armed troops to dash down from the valley.使用A, B and C.连动谓语句One听到音乐，孩子们当即停下了吃饭，开始摇头晃脑，手舞足蹈。Hearing the music, the children stopped their lunch and began shaking their heads and bodies to dance. 使用Doing., A and B. 句式One收到魔法学院的录取通知后，哈利波特兴奋地跑起来躲避着愤怒的叔叔。Having receive

6、d the letter of admission from the Magic Academy, Harry rushed to his feet excitedly to escape from his angry uncle. 使用Having done., A. 句式One在女孩们的指引下，她翻到明信片的背面，发现背后画着年少的自己。Under the girls guidance, she turned over the post card, only to find a drawing of her youth on the back.使用A，only to. . 句式One被法院

7、宣判后，他坐进了囚车，意外发现人们在外面等待着送别他。Having been sentenced by court, he sat in the prison van, only to find people waiting outside to see him off. 使用Having been done, A，only to.句式One方法二构建动作面Action-sceneOne一个动作镜头1肢体动作描写：手部，脚部，身体的动作。动作面镜头2面部神态描写：表情，眼睛，耳鼻口的动作。镜头3语言描写：主人公所表达的口头语言。镜头4心理描写：主人公内心的思索活动。颁奖时感谢Bob镜头1肢体动

8、作描写：拿着奖品动作面镜头2面部神态描写：看了一眼奖品镜头3语言描写：说“感谢Bob！”镜头4心理描写：感到兴奋举手回答问题镜头1肢体动作描写：举手动作面镜头2面部神态描写：微笑镜头3语言描写：小声说“我来！”镜头4心理描写：被老师鼓舞她感到兴奋，手里捧着奖品，看了一眼后，说，“谢谢, Bob！”灵活使用非谓语受到老师的鼓励，她举了手，微笑着小声说，“我来！”Feeling excited, she held and glanced at the prize, saying, “Thank you, Bob!” Encouraged by the teachers words, she rai

9、sed her hand, smiling and whispering, “I volunteer.”动作面一个动作镜头1肢体动作描写动作面镜头2面部神态描写镜头3语言描写镜头4心理描写整体局部Aragorn斩钉截铁，振臂一挥，下令： “放箭！”Wearing a decisive and resolute look, Aragorn waved his hand down, ordering, ”Release the arrows!” 面部肢体语言使用Doing，A，doing. . 句式One她站在空旷的路边，仰望天空，感受着这份珍贵的平静。Standing beside the em

10、pty road, she looked up into the sky， feeling the precious peace from within. 面部肢体心理使用Doing，A，doing. . 句式One 他欣喜若狂，拿着伞，在雨中又唱又跳。面部肢体心理肢体Overwhelmed with joy, he held his umbrella, singing and dancing in the rain. 使用Done，A，doing and doing. . 句式One贝贝坐在泳池边，双臂低垂，眺望远方，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。面部肢体心理肢体(With) his arms

11、 drooping, Beibei sat beside the pool, looking into the distance and wondering whether he was white or black. 使用独立主格，A，doing and doing. . 句式One注意点协调重点详略得当EmphasisOneThe ice wind was cutting AJs face like a sharp knife and he felt so frozen. He straightened his arms with his arms and waist wiggling(扭

12、动) and moved slowly. But as the sunlight gradually became warmer, AJ felt that the surface of the ice became wetter. His dad was so nervous on the bank and cried, “Be quick! The ice is melting.” At that moment, AJ saw an ice far away was being swallowed up by the sunlight and he realized that the ur

13、gency demands immediate actions. When he approached to the cow, he aimed at the calfs neck, threw and tied it successfully. (107)第四档 18.5One救援背景笔墨过多救援动作可以适当再拓展Review of the StoryTwoSummary of the Previous StoryOn a _ morning, Dad and AJ, whose dream is to perform _ and _ calves like a _, was heading

14、 towards their _ to check the cows. Accidentally, they noticed _ coming from a _ lake and were shocked to find a calf _ on the ice. Watching the _ calf, AJ was eager to _ it but Dad refused due to the danger of the situation. After AJ presented an _ plan, Dad finally agreed, and they _. freezingropi

15、ngtyingprofessionalfarma mad cry frozenstuckfrightenedrescueapplicabletook immediate actionTwoParagraph 1Paragraph 2AJ moved closer to the calf. AJ tried to calm himself and the calf. AJ might fail at the first time. AJ made a loop, threw, and tied the calf. AJ returned to the shore.AJ and Dad pulle

16、d the calf back to the shore. The calf returned to the cow group.Dad praised AJs courage. Two动作面动作链详情绪/环境动作链/面详ThreeApplication of the LearningHe moved slowly because he felt the ice would be melt soon. The ice was so cold that he could hardly think anything but to save the calf. Staring at the stru

17、ggling calf, AJ insisted on moving. Finally, he arrived at the middle of the pond. He used the second rope to tie the calf. Successfully, he lied on the ice with the calf tied and smiled.第三档 13.5Three具体笼统壹使用肢体神态词汇贰避免单调和冗杂叁动作描写三原则ThreeHe inched out slowly because he felt the ice would be melt soon. T

18、he ice was so cold that he could hardly think anything but to save the calf. (1)Staring at the struggling calf, AJ insisted on moving. Finally, he arrived at the middle of the pond. (2)He used the second rope to tie the calf. (3)Successfully, he lied on the ice with the calf tied and smiled.第三档 13.5

19、ThreeStaring at the struggling calf, AJ crawled carefully and insisted on moving, refusing to let fear beat him down. He took out the second rope, made a loop, aimed at the calf and threw with all his strength. 动作面He made it! The instant the loop settled around the calfs neck, AJ pulled it tight. Overwhelmed with joy, he lay on the ice and gr