高一英语作文复习和讲评课件

1、英语作文评分细则对比表档次规定任务覆盖内容要点语法结构、词汇复杂结构、高级词汇连接成分与结构写作目的完成情况第五档（2125分）完全完成覆盖所有应用较多尽力使用（语法结构或词汇有些许错误）有效使用连接，全文结构紧凑完全达到第四档（1620分）较完全完成覆盖所有，漏掉有一两个次要点满足任务要求语法结构或词汇方面基本准确，些许错误是尝试复杂结构和高级词汇所致简单使用连接全文结构紧凑达到第三档（1115分）基本完成覆盖所有，但漏掉一些内容基本满足任务要求语法结构或词汇方面的错误有一些，但不影响理解， 简单使用连接全文内容连贯基本达到第二档（610分）未恰当完成漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了无关内

2、容语法单调，词汇有限语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，语言语法错误影响对写作内容的理解较少使用连接成分，内容缺少连贯信息未能清楚地传达给读者第一档（15分）未完成明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容语法单调，词汇有限语法结构或词汇方面错误较多，影响对写作内容的理解缺乏连接成分，内容不连贯信息未能传达给读者第零档未完成与要点内容无关内容太少无无未能传达任何信息附：如果书写书面较差，将作文降一个档次。评分标准及分析（一）评分标准分析英语作文高分的“关键因素”: 1.内容: 要点完整，观点阐述清晰，思想积极向上。2.结构: 段落层次分明紧凑，逻辑清晰，衔接自然连贯。3.遣词造句: 词汇丰富（避免一词多用），

3、语法结构多样（如：定于从句、状语从句、名词性从句，并列句和非谓语等），衔接过渡词的恰当有效运用。4. 卷面：美观性（卷面书写规范，清楚，干净、整洁）但 “先无错，再精彩”！尽量高级词句，书写训练：（1）重要性： A. 优秀作文，书写在先。没有良好的书写，文章再好，也难以博得阅卷老师 的青睐，尤其是网上阅卷，电脑屏幕容易使人产生疲倦；此外老师也无法做一定勾画。那么，字迹清秀整齐漂亮的文章肯定会使阅卷老师在紧张的阅卷中产生一种愉悦；相反，难以辨认的字迹和混乱的卷面，会令阅卷者心烦气躁，即使你作文表达的较好，也会因为书写而少得分或得低分。 B.英语教学大纲对书写也提出具体要求： 能用书写体熟练，清楚

4、地书写大小写，词句，标点等运用正确、规范。 C.英语作文评分标准：如果书写书面较差，将作文降一个档次。（2）书写较差的学生，从大小写字母开始练习，然后抄写词、句、段和篇章，最后自由书写。 写作流程指导（四步法）审题：成文：草稿：检查：作文题目要求是什么？是否要写标题？是什么体裁？有哪些要点？应分几段来写？用什么人称和时态？有无特殊要求？（重要信息，最好用铅笔勾下来，以免出错） 2.结构（写几段，每段写什么，哪段转哪段承哪段） 关键词（关键单词和短语） 句式 （高级句式）1.注意语言的自然流畅，清楚正确地表达。2.注意书写和卷面的美观性（规范，清楚，干净、整洁） 检查是否有单词拼写，大小写，标点

5、等错误。（消除过失错误，避免自杀行为）1.不建议：全草稿和不打草稿。遣词造句审题：现象解释型议论文，可以不写标题，三段式作文（列的三个要点），特别要求 120词左右。草稿：(1)结构:（Para1: 结合题干，开门见山指出“越来越多的中学开设”， Para2：结合自己，具体分析选修课受到欢迎的原因， Para3: 谈谈自己对选修课的看法。） ( 2) 关键词：a wide range of selective courses, choose from ,be popular with, enjoy a colorful and meaningful life, to acquire more

6、knowledge，get fully developed, enrich school life, get well-prepared for the job hunting, develop/extend interests, make up for, be beneficial to, limited, in order to, future career, broaden our horizons, find a satisfactory job. (3)句式：There exists, The reasons accounting for. are listed as follows

7、. The reason why.is that., There is no doubt that., As far as Im concerned, which 非限定从.，成文：Firstly,. Besides, Moreover, If so, Thus,., 检查： .写作流程实例分析：eg. 为了更好满足学生需求，丰富学生的校园生活，现在很多中学都开设了课外选修课，请你根据以下要点，写一篇120词左右的英语短文。1. 越来越多的中学开设了课外选修课；2.分析选修课受到欢迎的原因；3. 以你自己为例谈谈自己的看法；使用正确简单句表达内容（先无错）:五大基本句型：1）主语+ 不及物动词

8、 （S+Vi.）2）主语+及物动词+宾语 （S+Vt.+O）3）主语+及物动词+间宾+直宾（S+Vt.+O+O）4）主语+系动词+表语（S+Link-V+P）5）主语+及物动词+宾语+宾补（S+Vt.+O+C）强调： 一个句子至少要有“主语+谓语” （除特殊句式外，如祈使句，省略句等）eg. There have some students scribble and litter here and there. ( ) We should against food waste. ( )问题:时态语态问题 Beijing will host the 29th Olympic Games. Bei

9、jing hosted the 29th Olympic Games. The dream has been come true. The dream has come true. We have realized our dream.2. 主谓一致问题 Everyone were exciting. Everyone was excited.3. 逐字翻译问题 The athletes tried their best encouraged us.The athletes tried their best, which encouraged us.问题:4. 词性混淆问题The Olympi

10、cs were hosted successful.The Olympics were successfully hosted.5. 介词短语的运用问题 Im proud of China is strong. Im proud that China is strong. We have looked forward to host the Olympics.We have looked forward to hosting the Olympics.(1). 非谓语在写作中的运用to do (作目的状语，作后定表动作未发生) doing （表伴随，原因和结果，方式状语，作后定表动作正在 进行

11、） 主动关系done （ 表原因和方式状语， 作后定表示被动或完成） 被动关系 eg. With a lot of work to do, he worked from morning to night. Faced with so much school work, we have to stay up late. When meeting problems, we can turn to teachers for help. 简单句到高级亮点句的蜕变（再精彩）(2). 并列句在写作中的运用 两个或两个以上的简单句用“连词”连在一起构成的句子，叫做并列句，各个并列句中的各简单句意义同等重要，

12、相互之间没有从属关系，它们之间用连词连接。常用连接词如下： （1） and/or/or else/but/so /for/ as well as/ both.and/ not.but. not only.but (also), neither.nor , either.or., （2）however/therefore/otherwise/ while/ still/yet等连用。 eg. He is our teacher. He is also our friend. He is not only our teacher but also (he is) our friend. Not o

13、nly is he our friend, but also (he is) our friend. eg. Our teachers shouldnt be too kind or strict . Our teachers should be neither too kind nor (they are) too strict . Neither should our teachers be too kind t nor (they are) too strict. (3).复合句在作文中的运用 复合句由就是主句或几个从句，由关联词相连接，如定于从句,状语从句或名词性从句。复合句的使用不仅

14、能使句子结构清晰，层次分明，上下文更加流畅，同时也能充分展示作者运用较复杂语法结构的能力。如： 1) Water is important because man cant live without it. Water, without which man cant live , is of great importance. (定从) 2) Protecting our environment is very important. Im firmly convinced that protecting our environment is very important.（宾从） There

15、is no doubt that protecting our environment is very important. （同从） Its important that protecting our environment is very important. (主从)3) The life of Senior 3 is busy and hard .We should persist in studying hard. Even though the life of Senior 3 is busy and hard ,we should persist in studying hard

16、. （让步状从）4) You study hard and you can succeed . You efforts can pay off on condition that you persist in studying hard. ( 条件状从)(4).其它固定句式（强调，倒装，感叹，祈使句，复合结构）固定句式可以使文章的语言充满层次感，从而较好地反映考生的语言运用能力。如：1) We can only lead a happy life when everyone takes care of the environment. Only when everyone takes care

17、 of the environment can we only lead a happy life. (倒装句)2) Im lucky to be his student. How lucky Im to be his student. (感叹句) 3)We make great progress with Mr Wangs help and encouragement. Its with Mr Wangs help and encouragement that we make great progress . (强调句）4) We should turn off the light when

18、 we leave the classroom.Make sure to form the habit of turning off whenever we leave the classroom. (祈使句)5) There is too much homework to do, so we stay up late at night. With too much work to do, we stay up late at night. (with 的复合结构)6) When some people are taking a shower, they make water run all

19、the time. Some people are taking a shower, with water running all the time. (with 的复合结构)(5). 高级、亮点词汇的运用在作文写作中，除多用复杂句式外，多运用高级、亮点词汇同样能让你文章出彩和与众不同，给阅卷老师留下深刻印象。如：1. A good relationship between teachers and students is good for our study.2. Its very important to protect our environment.3. I think only in

20、 this way can we get on well with our teachers. 4. I think we will realize our dream if we study hard. From my point of view, our dream will be realized through our diligence and persistence.is beneficial to/bebefits of great significance/importance Im firmly convinced that.be on good terms with(5).

21、储备一些固定句型结构如何多样化表达不同看法 1）People _doing voluntary work 2）People _ doing voluntary work 3）People _doing voluntary work 4）_ doing voluntary work is worthwhile_ doing voluntary work is a waste of time . _ doing voluntary work. Every coin has two sides.have（take，adopt，assume ) different attitudes towardsh

22、ave different opinions ontake different views ofSome people believe thatOthers argue thatOpinions are divided on 如何表示赞成?70% of the students approve of doing voluntary work.70% of the students _ doing voluntary work.70% of the students _ doing voluntary work.70% of the students _voluntary work_.70% o

23、f the students _doing voluntary work. are in favor of are forthink ofpositively support如何表示反对25% of the students disapprove of doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ d

24、oing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work _. are againstobject toopposethink of negativelyare opposed to 在写作中除了使用以上谈到的重点句型外，还应该注意文章的逻辑结构和五种过渡词的使用。例如： 1.表示举例时使用： for example, such as, take .for example, another example of, here are a few examples, namely等。 2.表示列举时使用： firstly, sec

25、ondly, thirdly.finally; to begin with, for one thing, for another等。 如何表达个人看法I think each of us should make a contribution to society._, each of us should make a contribution to society._, each of us should make a contribution to society._, each of us should make a contribution to society._each of us

26、 should make a contribution to society.In my opinionAs far as I am concerned PersonallyI hold the view that 3.表示归纳总结时使用： in a word, in conclusion, to sum up, in brief, in short等。 4.要加强句与句之间的连贯时使用： in addition ,whats more ,furthermore, on top of that, besides, moreover等。 5.表示转折时使用： however,while,on t

27、he contrary,nevertheless等。6. 表原因： because of、thanks to、due to、 owing to，as a result of ,etc 7. 表结果： therefore、thus、as a result、so，etc 开头方法一：名人名言经典句型：A proverb says, “ You are only young once.” （适用于已记住的名言）It goes without saying that we cannot be young forever. （适用于自编名言） 更多经典句型： As everyone knows, No

28、one can deny that开头方法二：数字统计 要想更有说服力，就应该用实际的数字来说明。所以不妨试用下面的句型：According to a recent survey, about 70 of the college students wanted to further their study after their graduation. A recent statistics shows that 作文题：Honesty根据最近的一项统计调查显示，大学生向老师请假的理由当中50都是假的。 作文题： Youth根据最近的一项统计调查显示，在某个大学，学生的课余时间的70都是在休闲

29、娱乐。结尾方法一：结论说完了，毕竟要归纳一番，开头很好，也必然要有一个精彩的结尾，让读者眼前一亮，这样，你就可以拿高分了！比如下面的例子：Obviously（此为过渡短语）, we can draw the conclusion that good manners arise from politeness and respect for others.更多过渡短语：in conclusion, in brief, thus， it can be concluded that, Therefore, we can find that ，to sum up, 结尾方法二：建议Obviously,

30、 it is high time that we took some measures to solve the problem.经典的虚拟语气的句型！ 更多句型：Accordingly（因此）, I recommend that some measures be taken. Consequently （因此）, to solve the problem, some measures should be taken.范文1（关于主题句）Report on the Survey about our School Uniform Recently I did a survey about our

31、 school uniform. I interviewed groups of students what they thought about our school uniform. The result is as following. 60% of the students interviewed expressed their satisfaction with it. Wearing the fashionable uniform of a good colour, they can prove themselves students and feel very tidy. The

32、 uniform also shows they are equal and there is no need for themselves to follow the fashion. Most of them considered it to be a symbol for students. On the contrary, about 30% of the students held different opinions. They thought it had an ugly colour and wore uncomfortably. Besides, they thought i

33、t unfashionable and had a dull style. 10% had no idea about it. In general, our school uniform is popular with most of the students, but it still needs some improvement.Report on the survey about our school uniform Recently, a student made a survey about our school uniform. 60% of them students like

34、 the school uniform. They though the school uniforms whose color is good made them look tidy and handsome, and it also tells others that they were students. Besides, wearing it means not following fashion, because everyone is equal. However, 30% of the students are the other way around. In their opi

35、nion, it is uncomfortable. What they dont like is that they old-style and the unpleasant color. 10% of the students have no idea about it. All above is about the survey. Everyone has different idea. It is hard to say who is right.关于失学（表原因） Now more and more children in the countryside are out of sch

36、ool. One of the reasons is that their parents havent much money to afford their school. They have to stay at home to earn money to support their families. What a pity! And another reason is that many parents think it is useless for girls to study and they would not like them to go to school. On the

37、other hand, some children are not interested in their lessons and would not like to go to school. I think all the children, including girls, should have the right to receive education. We have the duty to lend them a hand when they are in trouble. All the people should pay attention to the education

38、 of children who will play a very important part in the future of our country.网吧 With the development of the Intenet（with结构）, the net bar plays an important role in peoples life. More and more people, especially students, like to go to net bars. They are absorbed in playing video games, making bad friends and having a chat with “Meimei” on the net in the bar. Some students often go on playi