写作专题讲座.ppt

1、,Welcome to our class!,Writing skills,(II),How to make your writing more beautiful,Comparison,Step 1,On hearing a terrible noise, Tom, a seven-year-old boy ,who was watching TV in the living room, rushed out immediately, only to find it was a daydream.,Tom is a boy.He is seven years old.He was watch

2、ing TV in the living room when he heard a terrible noise. He rushed out immediately. He found it was just a daydream.,句式单调 结构松散,断断续续 吞吞吐吐,句式灵活 结构紧凑,上下连贯 一气呵成,Our monitor is a girl.She is responsible for her work and takes good care of her classmates. She studies very hard.She is good at all the subj

3、ects.Her maths is especially good.She likes sports.she is a key member of our volleyball team.She has set a good example to us.,行文松散 不连贯,Our monitor is a girl,who is responsible for her work and takes good care of her classmates. She studies so hard that She is good at all the subjects,especially he

4、r maths.Whats more,She likes sports.she is a key member of our volleyball team.In a word,She has set a good example to us.,行文连贯 表达流畅,What characteristics do you think well-written essays share?,Summary,英语高分书面表达的特点： 1.准确性（不跑题，要点全，表达准确） 2.条理性（合理布局文章结构，层次清楚） 3.简洁多样性（语言简洁，句式多样） 4.流畅性（行文连贯） 5.美观性（书写规范整洁）

5、,4.流畅性（行文连贯）,3.简洁多样性（语言简洁，句式多样）,Practice,Step 2,展示个性亮而出众,Section 1 Try to make the following sentences more advanced.,1.The teacher speaks very fast.I cant follow her. The teacher speaks so fast that I cant follow So fast does the teacher speak that I cant ,展示个性亮而出众,2.Exercise can build up our body.

6、It can also reduce diseases. Exercise can not only build up but also reduce Not only can exercise build up but it can also reduce,展示个性亮而出众,3.Scrooge was very rich,but he was unhappy. Although Scrooge was very rich,he was unhappy. Rich as/though Scrooge was,he was unhappy. Despite the fact that Scroo

7、ge was rich,he Inspite of/Despite his richness,Scrooge was Scrooge was very rich;he was unhappy,though.,展示个性亮而出众,5.A terrible earthquake hit Wenchuan.It caused enormous economic losses and countless deaths. A Wenchuan,which caused AWenchuan, causing enormous economic losses and killing countless peo

8、ple. AWenchuan,causinglosses and with countless people killed. AWenchuan.As a consequence,countless people got killed and many more became homeless.,展示个性亮而出众,4.The Chinese athletes won so many gold medals.It excited us all. The Chinesemedals,which exited us all. What excited us all is that That the

9、Chineseexcited us all. To our excitement,the Chinese athletes won The Chinese athletes won so many gold medals that it exited us all.,展示个性亮而出众,6.We can develop our society without worrying about polluting the environment only in this way. Only in this way can we developwithout Only by taking regular

10、 exercise can we keep fit. Only if we takecan we,展示个性亮而出众,7.My mother was very busy.I had to help her. My mother was very busy,so I had As my mother was very busy,I had to Mother being very busy,I had to ,展示个性亮而出众,8.As soon as I got home,I wrote down what I had seen and heard. The moment/minute/inst

11、ant I got home, I Immediately/Directly/Instantly I got home,I Upon /On getting home,I,展示个性亮而出众,9.I didnt get her letter.I had to write again. I didnt get her letter,so I had Because/As I didnt,I had to Not having got ,I had to,展示个性亮而出众,10.I saw an old lady.She lay on the ground.I went over to help h

12、er. _an old lady _on the ground,I,Seeing,lying,As time goes on,we have learned more and more. _time _on,we have.,With,going,温馨提示（1）,老用简单句 表达不高级 老用复合句 费力不流畅 怎样来提升 长短相结合 长句是红花 短句是绿叶 红花配绿叶 定能得高分,在追求高级表达的同时,务必注意语言的得体性,即所用句式及内容要与该文体相吻合。,June 13th,2003 Friday Fine With the development of society,peoples l

13、iving conditions are improving a lot.As a result,an increasing number of people own private cars. On my way to school this morning,I witnessed a traffic accident:a car hit an old man ,温馨提示（2）,Section 2 Choose proper transitional expressions to complete the following two passages.,Practice,1 _, some

14、students cheat in examinations at school.As students, we often take examinations, 2_ sometimes we have too many examinations which are too difficult for us. 3_, some of us are lazy and dont work hard at their lessons. 4_ when taking examinations, they sometimes cheat in order to get better result to

15、 please their parents and teachers. 5_ , it is wrong to cheat in examinations 6_it breaks the rules of schools. We students should be honest and try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in examinations. 7_ ，we should improve our study methods and get well prepared for examination

16、s.,but,On the othe hand,So,In my opinion,because,In addition,As is known to all,I will spend this summer holiday in the countryside. Modern and convenient as the city is, therere still some problems, 1_ air pollution,crowdedness and noise. 2_, I can enjoy a comfortable and quiet life in the countrys

17、ide, where the air is fresh and the water is clean.I can go boating,fishing,and swimming in the lake.3_,I can also climb the hills.All this will be interesting and good for my health.4_,I can learn more about nature. 1.A.for example B.for instance C.such as 2.A.Therefore B.In this way C.As you know

18、3.A.Whats more B.Whats worse C.On the contrary 4.A.In my opinion B.More importantly C.To be honest,C,C,A,B,常用过渡语分类 *开头语 1.As is known to all, 2.It is known to all that 3.As you know， 4.nowadays, recently, at present,currently 5.with the development of ,Summary,常用过渡语分类 *总结语 1.all in all / in a word /

19、 to sum up 2.in brief/in short 3.in my opinion/ as far as Im concerned 4,常用过渡语分类 *转折语 1.however, 2.on the contrary 3.to ones surprise regret disappointment joy/delight ,常用过渡语分类 *表递进 1.besides/whats more/moreover/furthermore/ in addition 2.whats worse/worse still/to make things worse 3.what surprised

20、 me most is that 4.more importantly,常用过渡语分类 *表因果 1.as a result(of) 2.as a consequence(of) 3.thanks to 4.due to. 5. ,高考书面表达第五档评分标准 分数： 21-25 分 要求：完全完成了试题规定的任务 *覆盖所有内容要点 *应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 *语法结构或词汇有些许错误，但为尽量使用较复 杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言应用 能力 *有效的使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构 紧凑 完全达到了预期的写作目的,高考书面表达第四档评分标准 分数： 16-20 分 要求：完全

21、完成了试题规定的任务 *虽漏掉1-2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容 *应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 *语法结构或词汇应用基本准确，有些许错误主要 因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致 *利用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 达到了预期的写作目的,第三档 分数： 11-15 分 第二档 分数： 6-10 分 第一档 分数： 1-5分,Remember： Rome isnt built in a day.The more you read，accumulate and practise，the better your writing will be！,Wish everyone progress in writing!,北京市有大量的出租车司机，他们每天全心全意为乘客服务，对北京市的交通起着重要作用。他们起早贪黑，赚钱养家糊口。有一次我不小心把手机忘在了车上，但当我与司机联系上之后，他立即开车将手机送给了我，我真感动不已。,段落练笔,Thank you!,There are a large number of taxi drivers in Beijing，serving passengers heart and soul and playing a very