读后续写+Race+at+Rivers+Edge+讲义 高三上学期9月月考试题

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。RaceatRiver’sEdgeLikeme,mycousinGabrielisintoridingbikes.He’s16andI’mallowedtojoinhimonlongerridesbecausewe’retrainingforacharitycyclingevent.Oneday,aftercheckingourtires(轮胎),wesetoutforTournus.Uponarrival,GabrielandIparkedourbikesneartheriverandwalkedtothetownsquare.We’djustridden33kilometers,andwewerestarving.WeplannedtogetlunchandthenridetoMâcon,asmallcityinFranceontheSaôneRiver.

Itwasmarketday.Localswerebusyfillingtheirbasketswithgroceries.Touristshuntedforgifts.GabrielandIboughtalong,thinloafofbreadandsomeBrie,asoftcheesewhichtastedawesome.Asweate,InoticedagirlwearingaUSABasketballT-shirt.Shesmiledatus.BasketballisbiginFrancetoo.YoucanevenwatchNBAgamesonTV.Thegirlstoppedtobuysomebreadwithhermum.

Isawthemagainbytheriver.Theysatonabenchenjoyingtheirfoodinfrontofalong,narrowriverboatnamedVoyageur.Thentheyboardedtheboat.Itwaspreparingtoleave.Suddenly,Ispottedacolorfulshoppingbagonthebench.Thegirlhadleftit!Ilookedup.Somepassengersweregatheringontheupperdeck(甲板)oftheriverboat,includingthegirlandhermum.IheldupthebagandwavedittogettheirattentionwhileGabrielcalledtothem.Whenthegirlnoticedthebag,sheopenedhermouthinsurprise.Butherfacefellastheboatstartedtopullawayfromthedock(码头).Shedidn’tthinkshe’dgetthestuffback.Runningalongsidetheboat

Gabriellearnedfromasailorthattheboat’snextstopwasMâcon——ourdestinationaswell.Itwouldtaketheboatjustundertwohoursataspeedof22kilometersperhour.“Whatcanwedothen?”hesaid.

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。P1：“Wehavetofindawaytoreturnit”Ireplied.P2：Thenithappened:pffft!Flattire!故事简介我和表哥Gabriel都喜欢骑自行车，他们正在为慈善骑行活动做准备。在一次骑行中，他们抵达了法国的Tournus小镇，并计划吃完午饭后骑到附近的Mâcon。吃饭时，一个穿着美国篮球队T恤的女孩引起了他的注意。后来我骑行到河边看时到了她上了一艘"Voyageur"的船。我发现她在河边的长椅上遗落了一个购物袋，但船已开始离开码头。Gabriel得知船的下一站正是他们的目的地Mâcon，并且他们有机会把购物袋还给女孩，于是他们决定跟随船只骑行到Mâcon。情节设计：P1："Wehavetofindawaytoreturnit,”Ireplied.P2:Thenithappened:pffft!Flattire!

1.根据conflict-solution原则，从最后情节反向思考：没有能归还购物袋---归还购物袋

如何归还？---骑自行车自行车胎破了---？选择A:跑步B：打车C:搭顺风车D:骑自行车带我E：修好自行车前行F:一人骑自行车前往读后续写的情节设计根本原则在于合理简洁。在考场上要么东拉西扯要么胡编乱造，在于没有经过逻辑思维的训练。上述五个选择中是F项最符合常理。考试中有学生还设计了终于骑到Mâcon,但是没有发现船，正当他失望的时候，船来了，原来船在途中出故障耽搁了。这种情节有可能，但是合理性上不够，而且增加了写作难度。如无必要，不必为制造冲突而强行编造分支情节。选择F选项后还需要进一步思考：是Gabriel骑车前往还是我前往。从上下文呼应角度考虑应该是我前面更为合理。所以情节设计如下：决定骑车去归还---努力骑行---突然爆胎---决定一人骑行前往---终于归还2.情节设计中的细节呼应无必要无细节。这是小说创作中的基本原则。续写中要注意要运用细节来进行前后串联，保证文章的逻辑协同。3.常识合理性游轮每小时22公里，对于自行车专业骑行来说一般可以轻松超过。但是对于青少年来说，特别是已经骑行了33公里后，后续的骑行是比较艰难的。同时要考虑到，骑行的路线可能不是直线，路线可能崎岖不平（所以即使出来时检查了车胎，后面还出现爆胎。）等因素。情节扩写对于考生来说，最怕的就是情节简单，感觉没什么好写,只能东拉西扯硬凑字数。如何扩展情节需要扎实耐心的训练，如何写好扩展的情节需要过硬的知识储备。1.情节的扩展---FACTs2.写好情节---常规句型+精准词汇此篇续写难度在于自行车骑行有关的一些表达。考生要借此收集一些有用的表达，平时也要接触、掌握多方面的生活相关词汇，特别是动词和名词。hadaheadstarttakeashorterroutehoppedontoourbikespoweredthrougheachpedalstroketwistedandturnedpushedourselvestoridefastermybikewobbled.skiddedtoahalt

flattiremybackwheelwobbledspedoffdowntheroadpushedmybikeofftotheside嘉兴参考答案

“Wehavetofindawaytoreturnit,”Ireplied.Withouthesitation,wegrabbedourbikesandquicklycalculatedthetimeitwouldtaketobeattheboattoMâcon.Itwouldbeclose,butifwerodefastenough,wejustmightmakeit.GabrielandIjumpedonourbikesandstartedpedalingashardaswecould.Thewindblewagainstourfacesasweracedalongtheriver’sedge,theboatvisibleinthedistance.Theroadwasnarrowandunevenattimes,butwepushedforward,determinedtoreturnthegirl’sbag.Witheachpassingminute,mylegsburned,butIcouldn’tgiveup.Thesmileonthegirl’sfacekeptflashingthroughmymind,urgingmetoridefaster.

Thenithappened:pffft!Flattire!Ilookeddowninhorrorasmybackwheelwobbleddangerously.“No!Notnow!”Igroaned.Gabrielstoppedandlookedatmewithaworriedexpression.Wehadnotimetofixit.“Yougoonwithoutme!”Iurgedhim.“I’llcatchupsomehow.”Withoutarguing,Gabrielnodded,tookthebagfromme,andspedoffdowntheroad.Iwatchedhimdisappearintothedistance,feelingamixoffrustrationandhope.Iquicklypushedmybikeofftothesideandstartedrunning.Despitethesetback,Iwasn’tgivingup.AsInearedMâcon,IsawGabrielwaitingbythedock,atriumphantgrinonhisface.Theboathadjustarrived,andthegirlwasjoyfullyholdinghershoppingbag,wavingtousingratitude.修改范文P1:"Wehavetofindawaytoreturnit,"Ireplied.GabrielandIquicklyrealizedthatwestillhadachancetobeattheboattoMâconifwerodefastenough.Whiletheriverboatfollowedthewindingwaterway,wecouldtakeashorter,moredirectroutealongtheriverbank.Withoutasecondthought,wehoppedontoourbikesandstartedpedalingfuriously.Theroadtwistedandturnedthroughfieldsandvillages,butwepushedharderwitheachturn.Thegirl’slookofdisappointmentspurreduson,motivatingustorideevenharder.Everypedalstrokefelturgentasweflewpastthesceniccountryside,heartsracing,ouronlygoaltoreachthedockbeforetheboat.P2:Thenithappened:pffft!Flattire!Mybackwheelwobbledwildly,andInea