高考总复习优化设计二轮用书英语(新高考)专题6 NO.2　题型微技法•突破读后续写3技法

高考总复习优化设计GAOKAOZONGFUXIYOUHUASHEJI2024专题六读后续写NO.2题型微技法•突破读后续写3技法技法1技法2目录索引0102技法303技法1高分开头5妙招如何写好读后续写,在高考中博取阅卷老师的眼球,获得梦寐以求的高分?如何让学生的作品在高考中脱颖而出?这是很多老师和学生一直不懈努力的课题。一个好的故事开头就好比是一个香味十足的诱饵,诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地读完。

而一个拙劣的故事开头,一定会让读者大倒胃口,恹恹欲睡。“Wellbegunishalfdone!”可见写好一个故事的开头是多么重要。下面教你五招高分开头的方式。①Disappointed

and

frustrated,Davidhunghishead,tryingtoavoideyecontactwithme.(2022新高考全国Ⅰ卷)大卫又失望又沮丧,低下头,尽量避免和我有眼神接触。②Happily

and

excitedly,theywenttothesupermarketforwhattheyneeded.他们高兴且兴奋地去超市买他们需要的东西。妙招1巧用形容词/副词短语①Seeing

his

face

filled

with

anxiety,Ifeltsad,decidingtotalksomethingwithhim.(2022新高考全国Ⅰ卷)看到他满脸焦虑,我感到很难过,决定和他谈谈。②Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.Hurrying

home,hecouldn’twaittoseehisoldfriendPoppy.(2020浙江1月卷)几个星期后,男孩从大学回到家里。匆忙回家,他迫不及待地想见到他的老朋友波比。妙招2巧用分词(短语)①Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Mybrothercameupwithanideathat

he

could

cut

the

pumpkin

with

a

knife.(同位语从句)(2021浙江1月卷)我被困了五六分钟,虽然感觉要长得多。我的弟弟想出了一个主意,他可以用小刀把南瓜切开。②Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Ithoveredoverthecamp,causingstrongwindthat

blew

the

bear

unsteady

on

his

feet.(非谓语动词+定语从句)(2020浙江7月卷)就在这时,直升机到了。它在营地上空盘旋,刮起大风,把熊吹得双脚不稳。妙招3巧用高级句式Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Hardly

had

the

little

dog

comeoutwhenPoppycameovertolickitasifitwerealong-lostfriend.(2020浙江1月卷)爸爸打开盒子,一只可爱的小狗出现了。小狗刚出来,波比就过来舔它,好像它是一个失散多年的朋友。妙招4巧用倒装结构ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.It

wasmybrotherwhodidthatforamusement.(2021浙江1月卷)那段视频是在万圣节前一天发布的。那是我弟弟为了消遣才那样做的。妙招5巧用强调句结构课堂应用完成下列句子1.回答不出老师的问题,所有学生都保持沉默。(形容词短语作状语)

,allthestudentskeptsilent.

2.但当他向旁边看时,他立刻发现那根本不是一只狗,而是一只狼,它很快就要追上他。(时间状语从句和副词)But

,hesaw

thatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,

catchingupwithhim.

Unabletoanswertheteacher’squestionwhenhelookedtothesideinstantlyquickly3.一团鲜红的云笼罩着这只动物,让马克松了一口气的是,它向后一退,摇着头。(分词作状语)Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,

.

4.爸爸建议我们沿着这条河走,它可能会把我们带到农舍,似乎没有什么比这更好的了。(宾语从句和定语从句)Dadproposed_______________________________________________________________andnothingseemedbetterthanthat.

shakingitsheadthatweshouldwalkalongtheriverwhichmayleadustothefarmhouse5.Poppy如此兴奋,她想靠得更近,结果不小心撞倒了盒子。(倒装结构)

thatsheaccidentallyknockedovertheboxinanattempttogetcloser.

6.果然,仅仅过了一会儿,这个毛球就从盒子里抬起头来,偷看它的新家和新朋友。(强调句)Sureenough,

theballoffurlifteditsheadoutoftheboxtopeekatitsnewhomeanditsnewfriend.

SoexcitedwasPoppyitwasonlymomentslaterthat技法2创造续写故事高潮2技巧故事中的高潮(climax)是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机点”。有时候,它只是达到了关键时刻或者转折点,发生了一些事情,或者主角必须做出决定,从而导致一个结果或其他。

我们在分析叙事类故事或者小说故事的时候常常用下面的图表来表示故事情节。增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。(1)角色之间的冲突[典例]Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupatentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.分析

开车找旅馆——徒劳无功——母亲建议在他人后院搭帐篷——David和“我”倍感紧张,心有不悦(母子的观点不统一)技巧1增加外部冲突(2)角色与环境之间的冲突[典例]ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim...hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped...hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater...Thenit...tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellback...分析

Mac骑车独行——路遇恶狼——与之搏斗——险象环生。[人(角色)——狼(环境)大战](3)角色与时间的冲突[典例]Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Getintothecar.”PaulshoutedatMac.MacjumpedoffthebikeandslidintothecarwithoutdelayasthewolfwasjusttwostepsawayandwasabouttotearMacintopieces.Whatanarrowescape!分析

汽车突然停在面前——急喊上车——Mac上车避险——恶狼近在咫尺(此情此景,刻不容缓)技巧2放大内心冲突放大内心冲突(文中角色的内心斗争)也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。现在我们再来看高考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的。[典例]Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janewassotired,hungry,andextremelyfrightened.Shethoughttoherself,“IfonlyIhadnotquarrelledwithTom.WhereisTom?Hemusthavemadetheemergencycall.WhatIneedisenoughcourage.IfIcontinuemyspiritstomorrow,Iwillbelikelytoguidethehelicopter.”Lyingbesidethestream,shefellasleepverysoon.Suddenly,sheheardtheshoutsoftigers,whichmadeherscaredtodeath.Aftersheheldherbreathforafewminutes,everythingwasquietagain.Intheterribledarkness,shesleptagain.分析

夫妇争吵——妻子独自行走——荒野走散,夜色渐黑——独处森林——阴森恐怖——后悔莫及(内心冲突的刻画)——内心独白(往昔对比+虚拟语气的使用+旁白描写是常见技巧之一)课堂应用请根据所给微语境以及下面的汉语提示,按要求续写。1.Havinggotoffatthewrongstop,IfoundmyselfleftaloneatthefootofthemountainatanoonofJuly.(增加外部冲突:角色与环境之间的冲突)____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________炎炎烈日当空,好像要烤焦我。那把金属椅子感觉像个热锅。站在它旁边,我能感觉到它正在散发热量。我可以清楚地理解一条没有水的鱼会经历什么。更糟糕的是,下一班巴士直到下午3点才来。我想喝水!Thesummersunwasglaringovermyheadasiftoscorchme.Themetalchairfeltlikeahotpan.Standingclosetoit,Icouldsensetheheatitwasgivingoff.Icouldclearlyunderstandwhatafishwouldexperiencewithoutwater.Worsestill,thenextbuswouldn’tcomeuntil3pm.Iwasthirstyforwater!2.Lookingaround,Isawnothingbutasmallhut.(放大内心冲突)_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“也许我能在小屋里乘乘凉,”我心想。然后,另一个声音不停地告诉我:“别去那儿,姑娘。如果那里住着一个坏人怎么办?”然而,我开始向它走去。向前走了两步,向后退了一步。“MaybeIcantakeashadeinthehut,”Ithoughttomyself.Thenanothervoicekepttellingme,“Don’tgothere,girl.Whatiftherelivesabadman?”However,Ibegantowalktowardsit.Twostepsforward,onestepback.技法3漂亮结尾2方法精彩的结尾能给读者留下深刻的印象,所以有一个精彩的结尾对于读后续写得分至关重要。文章常见的结尾方式有自然式、点题式、议论式、主题升华式、留白式等。选择合适的结尾方式能凸显文章主题,起到画龙点睛的作用。就考场作文而言,最容易抓住阅卷老师眼球的是点题式和主题升华式。结尾1

点题式点题式结尾是指在续写文章结尾时,通过一两句话点明文章主旨,突出文章的立意。一般可以通过总结阅读材料写出点题式结尾。[典例]Lookingatthebig“F”onmypaper,IstartedtoreflectonwhatIhaddonethesedays.Mylifeseemedinamessthesedays,arisingfrommylooseattitudeandchaoticschedule.Myenergieswerewastedonsomeunimportantmatterswhichhadnothingtodowithmyproject.Outofguilt,Iexplainedtomyteacherandpromisedthiswouldneverhappenagain.Afterthisexperience,Ieventuallyunderstoodtheimportanceoftimemanagement,andbegantoadjustmyschedulewithcaution.Withconfidence,IwasfirmlyconvincedthatIcouldgetasatisfyingscoreinthenextassignment.分析

故事讲述的是作者过于自信,总是把事情拖到最后一刻才去完成。但一件件意料之外的事情让作者把精力浪费在不重要的事情上,导致作者的论文不合格。篇尾“I

eventually

understood

the

importance

of

time

management”点出主题,说明了时间管理的重要性。“began

to

adjust

my

schedule

with

caution”说明了作者的进步。这样的结尾点明了主旨,起到画龙点睛的作用。结尾2

主题升华式主题升华式结尾是指在续写文章结尾时,通过一句高度凝练的话来对主题进行升华,使文章主题上升到一定的高度,给读者以启示。这种话往往是一些名言或谚语。[典例]Ididn’tknowwhenIcrossedtheline.Istillkeptonrunningwhenthunderousapplauseburst.Thekidsofmycampgatheredaroundme.“Wehavewontherace!Wearethechampion!”theyshoutedandcheered.Showeredwithhugsandapplauseandwhistles,Ifeltasurgeofjoy.Tome,