2025届新高考英语精准冲刺复习读后续写指导

2025届新高考英语精准冲刺复习

读后续写指导如何透过现象看本质？情节：跌宕起伏Para.1,Para.2,conclusion阅读以下材料，完成写作任务1

Jatin

and

his

younger

sister,Neha,

lived

with

their

parents

in

a

poor

neighborhood.Their

mother

was

very

sick

and

their

father

was

struggling

to

find

a

job,

and

they

had

only

a

little

money

with

which

to

buy

food.

As

they

had

not

paidthe

rentfor

several

months,the

landlord

was

breathingdown

their

necks(盯着他们）．2Oneday,JatintookNeha'sshoestoashoerepairmantobefixed.buthelostthemonthewayhome.Itwasn'tuntilhegothomethatherealizedhehadlosttheshoes.Hewasafraidthathisparentswouldbeangryanddisappointed,sohebeggedhissistertokeepitsecret.NehaagreedandthetwodecidedtoshareJatin'srunningshoes.Neha'sschoolhourswereinthemorning,soshewouldwearthemfirst.Afterschool,shewouldrushbackandgivethemtoJatin.Hecouldthenruntohisschool,whichbeganintheafternoon.Althoughheranasfastashecould,Jatinoftenarrivedlateandwaswarnedytheschool.3.

Along

distance

race

wasgoingtobeheldforboysin

the

city.

When

Jatinlearned

that

the

third

prize

was

a

new

pair

of

shoes,

he

decided

to

take

part.

He

ran

home

excitedly

and

promised

his

sister

that

he

wouldwin

her

the

new

shoes.4.

The

day

of

the

race

arrived.

Jatin

had

a

strong

start,but

halfway

through

the

race

he

began

to

get

tired

and

his

legs

began

to

ache.

Getting

more

and

more

exhausted(筋疲力尽）,he

thought

only

of

Neha

and

his

promise

to

her.

Dreaming

of

the

new

shoes

he

would

win

for

his

sister

gave

him

strength,and

he

stayed

right

behind

the

two

fastest

runners,determined

to

finish

third.

Suddenly,as

the

finish

line

drew

near,

another

runner

collided(碰撞）with

Jatinfrom

behind

and

Jatin

crashed

to

the

ground.续写两段开头：Jatinlookedupandsawtheotherboysrushingahead.____________________________________________________________________________________________________Filledwithpleasure,Jatinwalkedhomequickly.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

世界著名认知科学家哈佛大学心理系教授斯蒂芬·平克曾说过：“写作之难，在于把网状的思考，用树状结构，体现在线性展开的语句里。”本次续写虽有进步，但也暴露出些许问题。

续写要读写并重；续写不是另起炉灶；续写要注意句子数量的分配。现从以下几方面梳理：一、逻辑问题续写逻辑可以说是个多视角逻辑，囊括了1、原文的逻辑衔接；2、段首句的逻辑衔接;3、续写内容之间的逻辑衔接二、结尾问题我们可以把结尾粗略分成三结尾：1、哲理性结尾；2、自然而然的结尾；3、聚焦景色结尾三、选词方面----用词方面必须注意几个问题：1、你的语句可读性强吗？2、语句用词是易懂的还是晦涩的？3、要学会名词形式的活用或者说能否找到一个足够强大的动词，让动词独立起作用，从而省略掉副词。4、用具体代替抽象（Verbs

drives

sentences

whereas

nouns

slow

them

down）例如:

bridge

---连接，沟通The

parents

are

trying

to

bridge

the

generation

with

their

children.

flood---充满My

e-mail

box

is

flooded

with

junk

mail.father--

为人父（to

beget

a

child）He

has

fathered

two

children

before

his

remarriage.

summer---去某地度假we

have

summered.friend--交朋友，加为好友May

I

friend

you

?类似的用法还有很多，如：cup,boss,box,brief,pride,carpet,cap,picture,brave,ship等原文信息知多少？poorlostshoeswaswarnedraceforthirdprize,but...disqualifytheawardgotthethirdlove1

Jatin

and

his

younger

sister,Neha,

lived

with

their

parents

in

a

poor

neighborhood.Their

mother

was

very

sick

and

their

father

was

struggling

to

find

a

job,

and

they

had

only

a

little

money

with

which

to

buy

food.

As

they

had

not

paidthe

rentfor

several

months,the

landlord

was

breathingdown

their

necks(盯着他们）．Backgroundinformation1---穷1.住在贫民区，母亲生病，父亲没有工作；2.有很少的钱，不够支付房租，只够买食物；3.从以上两点，我们可以判断，他们不是一般的穷，根本没有能力再拿钱去做别的事情。所以有些同学续写的第二段，说父母还帮买鞋子的事，绝对是瞎扯淡，不符合原文逻辑！2Oneday,JatintookNeha'sshoestoashoerepairmantobefixed.buthelostthemonthewayhome.Itwasn'tuntilhegothomethatherealizedhehadlosttheshoes.Hewasafraidthathisparentswouldbeangryanddisappointed,sohebeggedhissistertokeepitsecret.NehaagreedandthetwodecidedtoshareJatin'srunningshoes.Neha'sschoolhourswereinthemorning,soshewouldwearthemfirst.Afterschool,shewouldrushbackandgivethemtoJatin.Hecouldthenruntohisschool,whichbeganintheafternoon.Althoughheranasfastashecould,Jatinoftenarrivedlateandwaswarnedbytheschool.Backgroundinformation2---祸不单行，也是加深了下一段想参加比赛的迫切需要3.

Along

distance

race

wasgoingtobeheldforboysin

the

city.

When

Jatinlearned

that

the

third

prize

was

a

new

pair

of

shoes,

he

decided

to

take

part.

He

ran

home

excitedly

and

promised

his

sister

that

he

wouldwin

her

the

new

shoes.Backgroundinformation3——妹妹知情，哥哥要去比赛1.前文提到哥哥把妹妹的鞋子弄丢了。为了获得鞋子，哥哥肯定是要参加比赛的。2.哥哥向妹妹承诺，一定要赢得这双鞋子。所以妹妹是知情的。所以，有些同学后边续写妹妹问哥哥这双新鞋子是哪里来的，也是完全不符合原文逻辑的。4.

The

day

of

the

race

arrived.

Jatin

had

a

strong

start,but

halfway

through

the

race

he

began

to

get

tired

and

his

legs

began

to

ache.

Getting

more

and

more

exhausted(筋疲力尽）,he

thought

only

of

Neha

and

his

promise

to

her.

Dreaming

of

the

new

shoes

he

would

win

for

his

sister

gave

him

strength,and

he

stayed

right

behind

the

two

fastest

runners,determined

to

finish

third.

Suddenly,as

the

finish

line

drew

near,

another

runner

collided(碰撞）with

Jatinfrom

behind

and

Jatin

crashed

to

the

ground.Backgroundinformation4——第三名化为泡影Backgroundinformation4——第三名化为泡影？1.从tired和ache以及碰撞摔倒可知有伏笔，Jatin是不可能一开始就如愿以偿，获得第三名的。大部分同学第一段续写，几乎都写Jatin忍着疼痛冲刺，终于获得第三名，显然，不符合本段内容隐含的逻辑（如果能自圆其说，也可以接受，但分不高）2.正因为他被撞倒了，才有了故事的转折点。这需要我们明白一件事：我们都应该树立正确的三观，要相信比赛的公平公正。对方撞人，肯定属于违规行为，被取消获奖资格，第三名自然落到Jatin身上。当然这也是Jatin万万没有想到的，所以他也算因祸得福，运气不错。3.有些同学第一段续写提到，那个撞倒Jatin的选手，跟他道歉，并愿意把第三名让给他，也把鞋子给他。请问：比赛这么随意吗？对方撞倒你就是想超越你，他会主动给你？另外，获奖要光明正大，这种名不正言不顺的行为，你会接受吗？S1：

Jatin

looked

up

and

saw

the

other

boys

rushing

ahead.

He

felt

too

miserable

and

drowsy.

The

judge

came

to

Jatinand

asked,

"how

are

you?"

Can

I

help

you?

Jatinsmiled

and

shook

his

head.

He

stood

up

with

all

his

strength.

With

their

encouragement，Justin

ran

to

the

end.

He

won

the

fifth

place.Filled

with

pleasure,

Jatin

walked

home

quickly.

Jatin

said

to

his

sister:

he

broke

his

promise.He

was

about

to

talk

about

the

experience

of

the

race

when

judges

and

journalists

entered.

They

said

Jatin

won

the

third

place

because

the

boy

bumping

into

him

broke

the

rules.

He

felt

excited

at

the

good

news.

But

the

boy

didn't

even

apologize

for

what

he

did.

In

the

end,

he

won

a

new

pair

of

shoes.下划线句子显示此学生的段落续接存在逻辑问题。S1明显在第一段结尾和第二段开头段落链接时出现问题：Jatin

得了第五名，没有赢得心心念的鞋子，他怎么会高兴呢？和第二段开头Filled

with

pleasure,

Jatin

walked

home

quickly有断点，没有起到承上启下的过渡作用。另外，第二段才提到Jatin获得第三名，不符合故事发展的顺序逻辑了。S2

:Jatin

looked

up

and

saw

the

other

boys

rushing

ahead.

He

was

surprised

and

scared,

but

he

didn't

think

so

much.

He

only

thought

about

Neha

andhis

promise

to

her.

He

stood

up

soon

and

caught

up

with

the

boy

in

front

of

him.

Dad

encouraged

him

to

run

forward

again

and

be

full

of

energy.

Everyone

praised

him

and

cheered

him

on.

He

is

very

cute.

And

he

is

getting

closer

and

closer

to

third

place.

He

showed

his

youthful

perseverance.

Luckily

he

made

it.

The

sun

illuminated

his

bright

smile.无效信息比较多S3:Justin

looked

up

and

saw

the

other

boys

rushing

ahead.In

the

meanwhile,

he

was

filled

with

despair.When

he

thought

of

his

promise

to

his

sister,

he

ignored

the

pain

in

his

leg.

He

stood

up

quickly

and

ran

desperately.Unfortunately,

he

failed

to

get

to

third

place

and

he

cried

sadly.Unexpectedly,the

referee

gave

him

the

new

pair

of

shoes

because

of

his

will

of

iron

.All

smiled

happily.段落是一个语义链，段内的句子是其中的一节链，一节必须扣住一节，才能形成连贯。每一个句子都要包含一些和上一句相似或有关的东西，才能借此扣住连接起来。由此段落衔接可从以下几个点进行缜密的织网构思与梳理：1、段与段之间的衔接依靠上一段最后一句和下一段第一句的意思上的关联；2、段与段之间的衔接依靠各段中主题句思想的关联；3、段与段之间的衔接依靠全文中心思想来串联；4、段与段之间的衔接靠过渡段的承接或转折。

这种过渡段主要用于一个意思和另一个意思的转折。一、逻辑问题

续写逻辑可以说是个多视角逻辑，囊括了1、原文的逻辑衔接；2、段首句的逻辑衔接;3、续写内容之间的逻辑衔接二、结尾问题

我们可以把结尾粗略分成三结尾：1、哲理性结尾；2、自然而然的结尾；3、聚焦景色结尾。Filled

with

pleasure,Justinwalked

home

quickly.At

this

moment,

he

was

holding

the

new

shoes

in

his

arms

and

constantly

touching

his

hands,

he

had

forgotten

the

pain

caused

by

the

injury.

When

he

got

home,

his

sister

was

shocked

when

he

saw

the

injury

and

quickly

found

the

medicine

kit

to

treat.

In

the

face

of

the

pain

,

Neha

cried

and

was

moved

by

her

brother’s

actions.

She

hugged

Jatin

and

didn’t

calm

down

for

a

long

time.S3的结尾属自然结尾：即顺着所需知识的自然发展，以它的必然结果做结尾，没有套话。回扣这个学生的续写，无论语篇，句式亦或是词语使用上并没有特别加分点，那么最好不使用自然结尾。美联社国际写作指导布鲁斯·德席尔瓦说：”结尾是你把小说的主旨钉在读者的记忆中并回想数天的最后一次机会。”当你努力向读者描绘你的故事从何而来，也该用同样的力量告诉他们故事将去往何处。用一个精彩的结尾把故事钉在读者脑海，就像往平静的水面扔下一个石子。涟漪所至，就是故事的魅力所在。如果以哲理性结尾，明显续写故事就在末端和读者有了情感上的链接。哲理性结尾：用凝练客观的语言表述，提升内化文章中心思想，它即能够使续写故事具有思想含量又能够馈赠读者一份精神财富。阅读下面4种结尾并仔细体会：1)

Although

there

are

unpredictable

ups

and

downs

in

life,

the

love

between

siblings

is

by

far

the

most

permanent

and

priceless,

which

helps

them

brave

everything.2

)Life

is

not

easy

for

them.

Yet

they

are

born

with

love

and

tenacity,

by

which

they

would

always

be

blessed

by

God.3)Nehaisnolongerafraidofanyfearorpain,forthelovefromhisbrotherisaswarmasaspiritualshelter,givinghersufficientenergytobraveeverythingwhetheritisgoodorbad.4)ApparentlythereisatightandwarmbondbetweenJatinandNeha.Nomatterwhatdifficultytheywillbefacedwith,theirtittleshipisboundtogetthroughitandtoheadtothebank.批改本班学生作文练一练范文欣赏1.Jatinlookedupandhesawtheotherboysrushingahead.Refusingto