读后续写写作分析 海边的神奇贝壳 讲义 高二下学期期末统测英语试题

高二期末统测读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Caitlyn

steppedintothewarmandwetsands.Thewhitewavesracedoverherfeetandupherlegsandthenpulledbackagain.Caitlynwasonvacationwithherfamilyinanearbycoastaltown,andshelovedplayinginthe

ocean

water."Ouch!"criedthegirl,asherfootsteppedonsomethinghard.Shelookeddownanditwasalarge

shell

(贝壳).Caitlynbentdowntopickitup.Itwasaprettypinkshellwithpointsandanopeningthatlookedlikea

horn

(号).Sheheldituptoherear,hopingtohearthewhooshingsound(呼啸声).Instead,sheheardsomethingquitedifferent."Heykid!Wanttoheara

joke?"Caitlynnearlydroppedtheshell.Holdingitbackuptoherear,shetriedagain."Whydon't

fish

playbasketball?"theshellasked."I...Idon'tknow,"Caitlynwhispered."Becausetheyareafraidofthenet!Ha,ha!"laughedtheshell.Caitlynlookedaroundtoseeifanyonewaslookingather.Nobodywas."That's,uh,funny,"shereplied.Shedidn'treallyknowwhatwasgoingon."Whydon't

oysters

(牡蛎)sharetheirpearls?"Itseemedtobewaitingforareply."Uh,I'mnotsure."Caitlynsaid.Wasshedreaming?Theshellanswereditsownjoke."Becausethey're'shellfish'!Ha,ha!"Thegirllaughed.Onandontheshellwent,beingsillyandmakingjokes.Caitlynsatinthe

shallow

waterandlistenedforanhour.Whenhermothercalledtoher,sayingitwastimetogo,thegirllaidtheshellgentlyonthesands.Shepromisedtocomebackthenextday.Andshedid.Onthelastdayofher

vacation,Caitlyndecidedshecouldn'tleavetheshellbehind."You'recominghomewithme,"shesaidtotheprettyshell.Shethoughtitwouldbehappy."My

home

isintheocean,"itreplied,withoutany

laughter

initsvoice.ButCaitlyncouldn'tbeartogohomewithoutit.Paragraph1:

Arrivinghome,sheheldtheshelltoherear—silence._______________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:

Backatthebeach,shetooktheshelldowntotheoceanwaves._______________________________________________________________________________________

中文故事梗概Caitlyn在海滩度假时，踩到一个大贝壳shell。她捡起贝壳放到耳边，期待听到海浪的声音，却听到了贝壳讲的笑话。贝壳问她为什么鱼不打篮球，并自问自答说因为它们怕网；还问为什么牡蛎不分享珍珠，回答是因为它们很“自私”（shellfish）。Caitlyn被逗得哈哈大笑，坐在浅水区听了一个小时的笑话。海边度假的几天里，她每天都回到海滩听贝壳讲笑话，度过了愉快的假期。假期结束时，凯特琳舍不得离开这个会说话的贝壳，尽管贝壳告诉她它的家在海里，她还是决定把贝壳带回家…

主要人物:

Caitlyn

会说话的贝壳shell叙事视角：第三人称视角文本主题分类：人与自然和谐共生续写思路建议第一段，从题目给出的续写首句看，Caitlyn应该是不顾贝壳的意愿，自私地把它带回了家，但贝壳不再说话了。一种合理的续写内容创设是：Caitlyn反复尝试让贝壳说话但都没有成功，于是决定还是把贝壳送回它原本的自然环境中。第二段，应该主要写Caitlyn把贝壳送回到海里之后的情况。一种合理的续写方式是：回到自己的家园的贝壳重新开始讲话了。文末主题升华方面，考生可以紧扣“人与自然”这个主题，把准备好的升华句自然地用起来。写作示范Arrivinghome,sheheldtheshelltoherear—silence.

Caitlyn

feltapangofdisappointment.Sheshookthe

shell

gently,hopingtohearevenawhisper,buttherewasnothing.Determinednottogiveup,sheplacedtheshellonherbedsidetable,thinkingitmightneedtimetoadjust.Daysturnedintoweeks,andstill,theshellremainedsilent.Missingthe

jokes

and

laughter,shereflectedonhowhappytheshellhadsoundedbythe

ocean.Realizingtheshellneededtobeneartheseatoregainitsvoice,Caitlynknewshehadtotakeitbacktoitstrue

home.

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Backatthebeach,shetooktheshelldowntotheoceanwaves.

Shekneltbythewater'sedgeandgentlyplacedtheshellinthe

shallow

waves."I'msorryfortakingyouaway,"shewhispered.Asthewaveslappedovertheshell,Caitlynheardafaintgiggle.Sheleanedincloser."Heykid!Whydidthecrabnevershare?"Theshellhadstartedtalkingagain."Becausehe's

shellfish

too!"Caitlynanswered,feelinggreatjoy.Inthatmoment,shefinallyunderstoodthatsomethingsaremeanttobefreeandbelongintheirnaturalplace.Asshestoodtoleave,shefeltaconnectionwiththeocean,knowingshehadlearnedalessonaboutrespectandharmonywithnature.

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01写作细节分析Arrivinghome,sheheldtheshelltoherear—silence.

Caitlyn

feltapangofdisappointment.（恰当的情绪描写：失望）Sheshookthe

shell

gently,hopingtohearevenawhisper,buttherewasnothing.（合理的而且必要的动作描写）Determinednottogiveup,sheplacedtheshellonherbedsidetable,thinkingitmightneedtimetoadjust.Daysturnedintoweeks,andstill,theshellremainedsilent.（合理的内容创设：反复尝试）Missingthe

jokes

and

laughter,shereflectedonhowhappytheshellhadsoundedbythe

ocean.Realizingtheshellneededtobeneartheseatoregainitsvoice,Caitlynknewshehadtotakeitbacktoitstrue

home.（和下文给出的第一句合理衔接：决定把贝壳送回大海）

Backatthebeach,shetooktheshelldowntotheoceanwaves.

Shekneltbythewater'sedgeandgentlyplacedtheshellinthe

shallow

waves."I'msorryfortakingyouaway,"shewhispered.（合理的动作和对话描写：knelt、placed、whispered）Asthewaveslappedovertheshell,Caitlynheardafaintgiggle.Sheleanedincloser."Heykid!Whydidthecrabnevershare?"Theshellhadstartedtalkingagain."Becausehe's

shellfish

too!"（shellfish和原文重要概念互动）Caitlynanswered（合理改编创设：这次是Caitlyn自己说出的答案）,feelinggreatjoy.Inthatmoment,shefinallyunderstoodthatsomethingsaremeanttobefreeandbelongintheirnaturalplace.Asshestoodtoleave,shefeltaconnectionwiththeocean,knowingshehadlearnedalessonaboutrespectandharmonywithnature.（升华句的恰当自然使用）

02词汇和表达积累apangofdisappointment

一阵失望reflecton

反思，回想kneel(knelt-knelt)

跪下lapover拍打，轻轻覆盖afaintgiggle

微弱的笑声leanin

靠近respectandharmony

尊重与和谐下水文Arrivinghome,sheheldtheshelltoherear—silence.Caitlyn'sheartsank.Thelivelyjokesandlaughterthatoncefilledherearswerenowreplacedbyaneeriequiet.Shehadgrownsofondoftheshell'scompanyduringhervacation,anditssuddensilencemadeherfeelastrangesenseofloss.Shetrieddifferenttricks,shakingitgently,tappingit,butnothingbroughtbackthejokestervoice.Itwasasifthemagicoftheoceanhadbeenleftbehindwiththeretreatingwaves.Backatthebeach,shetooktheshelldow