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p272OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately副词放句首,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake时间状语从句,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom结果状语从句,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.☆Unfortunately强调副词,ontheway介词短语anunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystarted并列动词toquarrel.

Withnopathtofollow复合结构,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace时间状语从句,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake现在分词作状语.Tohersurprise介词短语放句首,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyondasnowcapped过去分词作定语

mountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost宾语从句.

“Tom!"shecried.“Help!”☆Shesuddenly时间副词

realizedthatshewaslost宾语从句.

Noreply省略句.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom虚拟语气.Janekeptmoving动名词作宾语

butthefarthershewalked,themore句式confusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall.Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight结果状语从句.Lyingawakeinthedark现在分词作状语,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily不定式作宾语.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty形容词表状态,说明主语情况.Shecouldhearwatertrickling现在分词作宾补(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy介词短语放句首shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.

Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter倒装句.Feeling现在分词作状语

strongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.☆

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty表感觉的形容词并列dawn

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream时间状语从句,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeit形式宾语

impossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinking现在分词作状语thatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthem宾语从句iftheycamebackagain条件状语从句.☆Asshepickedherwaycarefully方式状语alongthestream状语从句,Janeheardahelicopter.☆Unfortunately强调副词,thetreesmadeit形式宾语

impossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.

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Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup文体:故事类,记叙文

材料字数:332+18主题:人与自然;人与自我故事情节:Jane和丈夫露营时因争吵而出走。后Jane在野外迷路,独自过夜,最终获救。有惊无险又温馨的故事.合理性:基于外国人生活的p13分析when时间,where地点,who人物,what事件,why原因,how怎样发展

划线词：Jane,Tom,lake,walk,climb,atadistance,tohergreatjoy,helicopter,yellowblouse环境：forest,stream,rock,berry,valley,steep,cave,lake,waterfall

(人口、环境与自然)困难：hunger,starve,thirsty,injure,broken,blood,panic,shelter,survive(survival),suffer,

cold,severe(天气与自然灾害)活动:walk,climb,fall,crawl,taste,attempt,struggletoone’sfeet,makeone’swayto,pick

up

(人体与动作)情绪：toone’sgreatjoy,breakdown救援：rescueteam,searchfor,spot

(天气与自然灾害)意志品质：calm,courage,will(性格与行为特征)评价：amazing,makeit第一段段首句Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.p17预设情节:

第二段段首句ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup结尾句:升华主题盲目抒情、缺乏依据地升华、无端提炼会产生说空话、套话的现象，甚至脱离主题。其实，Jane全可用画面感的描述来代替评论，如:TomjumpedoffthehelicopterandrushedtowardsJane.Theyhuggedeachothertightlyandburstintotears.或者ThemomentJanewasreunitedwithherhusband,hertearscloudedhervision.Theyhuggedeachothertightlyinthewarmlightofthemorningsun此时无声胜有声!

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdark

again.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Althoughshefeltalittlesad,shedidn’tgetfearful.Shethoughtabout

Tom.“Hemusthavecalledforthose

helicopters.Maybehewasinoneofthemandwillcomebackagain!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.”She

fellasleepanddreamedofseeingTom.

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Sheatesomeberriesandthen

walked

alongthe

stream,hopingtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Fortunately,shesawahugeflatrockinanopenarea

atadistance.Sherushedtotherock,

climbed

ontoitandwaited.

Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterappearedagain.Theneareritgot,themoresheflaggedthe

yellowblouse.Luckily,thehelicopterdidn’tmissJanethistimeanditlandednearthebigrockslowly.TomjumpedoffthehelicopterandrantowardsJane.Shebrokedownandburstintotears.

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Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,absolutedarknessruledtheforest.“lfitweren'tforthatstupidquarrel,Iwouldn'tbetrappedhere,”shethoughttoherself,regretfultearscloudinghereyes.

Surroundedbyfearandtiredness,Janefeltexhaustedandfinallyslidinto

sleep.Inherdream,shesawTomextendinghisarmstowardsheratadistance.“Tom,isthatyou?”shemurmured.“Tom,help!”

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet挣扎着站了起来,continuingsearchingforassistance.Tohergreatjoy,ahelicopterwasflyingoverheadagain.Eagerandexcited,sheflaggedheryellowblouseandsparednoefforttoyell

soastoattractattention.Fortunately,shewaseventuallynoticedandbroughtintothehelicopter.TherewasTom,wearinganexpressionofrelief.Shewastoothrilledtosayanything,andonlyhuggedhimtightly

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Amid被环绕thedreadfuldarkness,

strangesoundsofdifferentinsectswereheard.Exhaustedandscared,Janelaydownnearabigrock,missingherfamily.Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn'thelp

crying.“Hadn'tIquarreledwithTomandwalkedaway,Iwouldn’tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confronted面对withthedangerofdying.”Accompaniedwithendlessregretandanxiety,shefellasleepwithshiningtearsonhereyelashes

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.AfterwashingherfaceJanecontinuedtoforceherwayahead.Aftertheboundlesssearch,shefounditimpossibletofindawayout,which

threwherintodesperation.Fortunately,ahelicopterflewoverheadjustatthatmoment.InnotimedidJanerushtotherock,climbontoitandwaveheryellowblousemadly.Tohergreatjoy,thistime,thehelicopterspottedher.Tomjumpedoffthehelicopterandtheyhuggedeachothertightlyinthewarmlightofthemorningsun.

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janetriedtofindshelterfromthenightcold.Butunfortunately,sheslippedoverandbrokeherleg.Withtheextremepain,Janemanagedtomakeherwaytoarockforshelter.Undertherock,Janestayedwideawake,knowingshemightnotbeabletogettothelakewithabrokenleg.“Don’tbeafraid.Tommustbesearchingforme.Andthehelicoptewillcomebacktomorrow,”shethoughttoherself.Afterquiteawhile,Janefellasleep.

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shestruggledtoherfeetandheadedforthestream.Afterhavingsomeberriesandstreamwater,Janewalkedslowlytoanopenareatowaitforherrescue.Tohergreatjoy.shesoonheardthehelicopter.Janemadlywavedheryellowblousewhenitcameintosight.Sadly,thehelicopterflewawayagain.However,sooncametherescueteam,togetherwithTom,whohadfoundJane’slocationfromthehelicopter.Janewassaved.

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.HowfrustratedJanewas!Shewalkedalongthestream,slowlyandhopelessly.Lookingback,JanehasbeenusedtodependingonTomeverything.Nowshewasatalossanddidn’tknowwhattodo.Shewalkedonandon

untilshewasttiredtofallasleep.Inherdream,shemetTomwhodrovethehelicoptertosaveherandtheyhuggedeachherforalongtimeandmadeapromisetoeachotherthattheywouldneverquarrelagainforanything

IwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthestream,hoping

tofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Suddenly,shespottedahugeflatrock.Shemanagedto

climbontoitandwaitedwithpatience.Afteramomentthehelicopterappearedagain.Theneareritgotthemoredesperately

shewavedtheyellowblouse.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterdidn’tmissJanethistimeandJanewassaved.

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Desperateandhopeless,Jane