2024年广东深圳高三二模英语读后续写试题讲评课件

授课人：张某某学校：XX学校读后续写2024深圳二模01原文回顾原文回顾Ididn'tlikeDelsomuch.Healwayscalledmethenickname"Germy,"whichmeant"dirty,"insteadofmyrealname"Jamie."Besides,hewasknownasatrouble-makerinschool.SowhentheheadteacherMr.SmithaskedDeltocometohisoffice,InaturallythoughtthatDelhaddonesomethingmeantosomeone.Throughthewindow,Icaughtsightofasmallerboycrying.Delseemedunhappy,too.原文回顾Hedidnotreturntoclassthatday.Allofuswerediscussingwhathadhappenedtohim.Whatelsecouldsuchanannoyingboydo?"Hemusthavehittheboyandwassenthome,"1whisperedtomyfriends.Theireyeswidened.ItfeltgoodtoseethemsointerestedinwhatIsaid.原文回顾Thenextmorning,thewholeschoolwastalkingaboutDelbeingexpelled(开除)

forbeatingupakid.Iwassurprisedthatmyassumptionswerepassedonsoquickly.SowhenDelwalkedintotheclassroom,allthekidswereshocked.Thekidsnexttohimshiftedtheirdesksaway."What'syourproblem?"Delasked.“Idon'twantyoutoattackme,"onekidsaid.Somelaughed."Yeah,Imight,"saidDel.Icouldtellhewasjoking,butmanykidsthoughtheadmittedhedidbeatupsomeone.原文回顾Duringrecess(课间休息)，Deltriedtojointhekickballgame."Neitherteamwantsyou,"oneoftheplayerssaid.“Why?"Delasked,lookingconfused.

“Ialwaysplaywithyouguys."Theyignoredhimandwentonplaying.Delsatbyhimselfwhiletherestofthe

schoolenjoyedtheirrecessawayfromhim.Dellookedlonelyandsad,muchdifferentfrombefore.Istartedtofeelsorryforhim.原文回顾Laterthatday,

Ilearnedwhatreallyhappened.ThekidwasDel'slittlebrotherandhewascryingbecausetheirmotherfellillandwassenttohospital.IfeltevensorrierforwhatIsaidbefore.

Istartedarumor(谣言).情节概括_______(who)wasatroublemaker.Iwas_______(how)whenhecalledmemynicknamewithhumiliatingmeanings.Onedayhewascalledinto____________(where)andasmallerboywas_____(what).Itookitforgrantedthathe______________________________________(what)andtoldthisassumptiontootherkids,whobeganto________(what)Delthenextmorning.Delcouldn't_____________(what)byotherkids,feelingrather____________(how).WhenIsawthescene,Ifelt______(how).Ifelteven________(how)whenIknewthetruththat____________________________(what).That'swhyhewasintheoffice.DelannoyedMrSmith'sofficecryingmusthavebeatenupthisboyandbesenthomeestrangegetincludedlonelyandsadsorrysorrierhismomfellillandwasinhospital02写作流程设计情节设计【文末：】IfeltevensorrierforwhatIsaidbefore.

Istartedarumor(谣言).【Para1:】Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.【Para2:】NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecesswasover.DelsorrierrumoraloneDelhadforgivenmedomore抱歉的我，孤独的他，错误的谣言，“破碎的家”，我该做点什么？我能再做点什么？情节设计P1:Atrecessthenextday,IsawDelsittingalonewatchingthekickballgame.

MymixedfeelingsP2:NowthatDelhadforgivenme,Idecidedtodomorebeforetherecesswasover.

MyapologytoDelDel’schange/attitude/reflectionKid’sreactiontoDelMyclarificationtokidsMyreflectionontheissueThetheme(故事主旨）Wordshavethepowertohurtandheal!写作练习1、Mymixedfeelings我讨厌“Germy”这个绰号，但是看到他被孤立也不是我想要的。Ihatedthenickname“Germy”,butseeinghimisolatedwasalsonotwhatIwanted.转折情绪愧疚又汗颜，我深深吸了一口气，鼓起勇气，走到Del面前。Guiltyandashamed,Itookadeepbreath,summonedmycourageandwalkeduptoDel.情绪描写+动作链写作练习2、MyapologytoDelDel问：“你想要什么？”他的声音听起来受伤多于生气“Whatdoyouwant,Gerry?”Delasked,andhisvoicesoundedmorehurtthanangry.并列句我坐在他身边解释了整件事情是如何从我的猜测变成了一个糟糕的谣言。Isatnexttohimandgraduallyutteredhowthewholethingaretransformedfrommyhastyassumptionintosuchaterriblerumor.宾语从句写作练习2、MyapologytoDel“我很抱歉，我本不应该这样做的。”我向他道歉，却不敢看他的眼睛。“I’msorry.Ishouldn’thavedonethis.”Iapologized,daringnottolookintohiseyes.虚拟语气+精准动词写作练习3、Del’change/attitude/reflection恼怒和惊讶从他的脸上一闪而过。Annoyanceandsurpriseflickeredacrosshisface.物称主语但是几秒钟后，他低下头，轻声说：“没关系。我想我对你也不够好”。Butsecondslater,heloweredhisheadandsaidquietly,“It’sokay.IguessIwasn’tverynicetoyou,either.”写作练习3、Del’change/attitude/reflection他的话安慰了我，但是我觉得他依然很难过Hiswordssoothedme,butIcouldfeelhewasstillsad.写作练习4、Myclarificationtokids我跑向那群足球员并引起他们的注意。所有人都惊讶地停了下来。Iruntowardsthekickballplayersandcalledfortheirattention。Everyonestoppedinsurprise.“Del没有欺负任何人。”我说到，并且解释发生了什么“Deldidn’tbeatupanyone,”Istated,explainingwhatactuallyhappened.写作练习5、Kids’reactiontoDel惊讶的讨论声传开，最终一位运动员说到：“好了，Del,你要加入我们吗？”Whispersofastonishmentspreadandfinallyoneplayershouted,“Alright,Del,doyouwanttojoinmyteam?”Del忧郁的脸上闪过一丝微笑，“当然，我希望Jamie也一起加入。”AsmilebrokethroughDel’sgloomyface,“Yes,andIwantJamietojoinus,too.”写作练习6、Myreflectionontheissue他害羞地扫过我，而我明白他在用这种方式向我道歉。Heglanc