高考英语读后续写个人成长类-一次难忘的赛马+讲义

阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头连续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ARuntoRememberThirteencanbeachallengingage.NotonlydidIhave

toadapttomychangingbody.

I

alsohadtodealwithmyparents'bitterdivorce,

anewfamilyandtheupsettingmovefrommycountryhometoacrowdedsuburb.Whenwemoved,mybelovedcompanion,asmallbrownpony(小马)，hadtobe

sold.Feelinghelplessandalone.Icouldn'tcatorsleep,andI

criedallofthetime.

Imissedmyfamily,myhomeandmypony.

Finally,myfather,

realizinghowmuchImissedmypony,purchasedanoldredhorseforme

atalocalmarket.Myhorse,

Cowboy,

waswithout

adoubttheugliesthorseintheworld.

He

waspigeon-toedandknock-kneed.

ButIdidn'tcareabouthisfaults.Ilovedhimbeyondallreasons.IjoinedaridingclubandfacedrudecommentsandmeansnickersaboutCowboy'slooks.IneverletonhowIfelt,butdeepdowninside,

myheartwasbreaking.The

othermembersrodebeautifulregisteredhorses.WhenCowboyandIenteredtheeventswherethehorseisjudgedonappearance.wewerequicklyoutofthegame.Ifinallyrealizedthatmyonlychancetocompetewouldbeinthetimed-speed

events.

Ichosebarrelracing（绕桶赛），aneventinwhichahorseanditsriderattempttocompleteatriangularpatternaroundthreebarrelsinthefastesttime.OnegirlnamedBeckyrodeabigbrownhorseintheraceevents.Shealwayswontheblueribbons.Needlesstosay,

shedidn'tfeelthreatenedwhenIcompetedagainstheratthenextshow.Shedidn'tneedto.

Icame

innexttolast.ThebittermemoryofBecky'ssmirks(得意的笑)mademedeterminedtobeather.Forthewholenextmonth,

Iwoke

upearlyeverydayandrodeCowboyfivemilestothearena(运动场地).WepracticedforhoursinthehotsunandthenIwouldwalkCowboyhome.OnthewayhomeIwouldbeso

tired;

thosefivemilesseemedtwiceaslong.Allofourhardworkdidn'tmakemefeelconfidentbythetimetheshowcame.

Isatathe

gateandsweateditoutwhileIwatchedBeckyandherhorse

chargethroughthepatternofbarrels,

finishingthecoursewithease.

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Myturnfinallycame.Nocheersfilledtheairwhenfinishedmyshow.文本解析：本文主要讲述了作者13岁就承受着家庭的变故，搬离家乡来到拥堵陌生的城镇，失去了宠物小马驹的陪伴很孤独。后来其貌不扬的Cowboy参加赛马比赛，成了黑马。作者通过这次比赛领悟到：只要自己足够努力，就可以主宰自己的命运。续写第一段的首句：Myturnfinallycame.

根据所给文章第7段ThebittermemoryofBecky'ssmirksmademedeterminedtobeather．Forthewholenextmonth，IwokeupearlyeverydayandrodeCowboyfivemilestothearena．WepracticedforhoursinthehotsunandthenIwouldwalkCowboyhome．OnthewayhomeIwouldbesotired；thosefivemilesseemedtwiceaslong．可以看出为了这次胜算不大的比赛，我和Cowboy勤学苦练。所以后面不难推测应该写比赛过程。读后续写遵循曲折性原则（凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏或矛盾冲突，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。但情节设计不能过于复杂或离奇。）所以本段可以写在赛场上面对劲敌，人和马的努力，克服困难。续写第二段的首句：NocheersfilledtheairwhenIfinishedmyshow．（人们看到结果后都沉默了。）由所给文章第六段“OnegirlnamedBeckyrode.abigbrown

horseintherace

events.Shealwayswontheblueribbons."可见，Becky是众望所归。而且，Cowboy其貌不扬(Myhorse,Cowboy，waswithoutadoubttheugliesthorseintheworld．)，众人都不看好它。人们为什么会沉默呢？根据读后续写的正能量原则，那么本段后面可以接着写Cowboy变成了黑马大大出乎观众们的意料，此时的观众们有何反应?而此时的我领悟到了什么呢？（通过努力可以成为自己命运的主人）

参考范文Myturnfinallycame.

AsIurgedCowboyforward,he

stumbled,andalmostfell,muchtothedelightoftheotherriders.

Ijammedmyhatdownonmyhead,

strokedCowboy'sbigredneckandenteredthearena.

Atthesignal,wedashedtowardthefirstbarrel,

quicklywhippedarounditandwithperfect

precisionroundedthesecondandthunderedontothethird.We

torearoundthefinalcurveandshotforthefinishline.Nocheersfilledtheairwhenfinishedmyshow.

The

endofourrun

wasmetwith

surprisedsilence.

Withthesoundofmyheartpoundinginmyears,

Iheardtheannouncercallourtime.

CowboyandIhadbeatenBeckyandherproudfancyhorse!Igainedmuchmorethana

blueribbon

thatday.

Atthirteen,

IrealizedthatI'dalwayscomeoutawinnerifIwantedsomethingbadlyenoughtoworkforit.

Icanbethemasterofmyowndestiny.好词好句1>

he

stumbled,andalmostfell他被绊了一下，几乎要摔到了2>

I

jammedmyhatdownonmyhead,

strokedCowboy'sbigredneckandenteredthearena.我向下拉了拉我的帽檐，轻抚着Cowboy的红脖子进了赛场。3>

quicklywhippedarounditandwithperfect

precisionroundedthesecondandthunderedontothethird迅猛地绕过了第一个障碍，又精准地过了第二个，接着又冲过了第三个4>

torearoundthefinalcurveandshotforthefinishline绕过最后一个弯道向终点冲刺5>

Withthesoundofmyheartpoundinginmyears

我的心扑通扑通跳的声音传入我的耳中6>

Icanbethemasterofmyowndestiny.我可以成为我命运的主人。

简析

老规矩，首先，简评文章。这篇文章很开放，给了我们很少的限制和很大的自由发挥空间。擅长描写的同学可以在文中运用各种技巧。例文中的情节设置和结尾升华较多地参考了原故事，大家的思路基本上不会与上面的好文相同。但是第一段描写比赛过程，第二段赢得比赛、感悟道理的大致框架是比较显性的要求。接着，我们来看好词好句。这篇文章的好词好句主要集中在第一段的动作描写处。1>中的"stumble"，Alfred之前在语言描写中讲过，大家是否还记得？3>中的"whip"在这里是“猛冲”的意思，但它的常用义是“鞭打”，大家还是记它的常用义，“猛冲”的意思还是不要用。2>中的拉帽檐的情节虽然值得玩味，但还是有一些晦涩。Alfred查了一下原文，发现这个细节是写参考答案的老师自己添加的，不知道Alfred对于这个句子的翻译与解读是否正确，总之大家应该要尽量表达地直观一些。好文中标蓝了一个"blueribbon"，蓝丝带这个细节还是最好出现一下，增加一下续写与原文整体的融洽度。最后是主题升华问题。这篇文章的主题还是很好把握的。“马”不可貌相与“苦心人，天不负”的主题比较明显。好文中对于前一个主题好像并没有怎么提及，但我觉得“马”不可貌相还是比较关键的一个点