-2024届高三英语二轮复习读后续写练习写作 An experience in the lift 讲义

Anexperienceinthelift电梯惊魂试题呈现：Whenwewerefinallydismissedfromthelastclassoftheday,thestudentsstreamedoutoftheclassrooms.Itwasanotherboringdayafterschool.IdraggedmyfeethomeasIsighed.Yetanotheruneventfulday,Ithought.LittledidIknowthatthedaywouldtakeaturnfortheworse.Theliftlobby(电梯间)

ofmyflatwasoldanddirty.Thewalls,whichwerepaintedwhite,hadbeendirtiedovermanyyears.Ireachedmyflat’slobby,andpressedtheliftbuttonandwentin.Justthen,Mrs.

Lim,myelderlyneighbour,hobbled

(蹒跚)

in.Shelookedancientwithtissuepaperwhitehair,wearingafadedold-fashioneddress.Iheldtheliftdooropen,

flashingafriendlysmile,andpolitelygreetedher.Iaskedherhowshefeltthatdayandpressedthebuttons.Shethankedmeforbeingsopolite,thenweweresilentfortherestoftheride.Theliftfelldownincreasinglyfast.Therewereloudclankingsoundshereandtherewhiletheliftgrewslowerandslower.Myheartbeathardandfastasmyhandsturnedcoldand

wetwithsweat.Unfortunately,theliftcametoanabruptstopatthefifthfloor.Ipressedthebuttonshardseveraltimes,butitwasofnohelp.Thelightsonthebuttonshadgoneout.Itsoondawnedonmethatweweretrapped.

Anicyfearcreptupmyspine.Mrs.

Limwashysterical

(歇斯底里的).“Wewillnevergetout!”shecriedwithherfacepale.Ithadbecomeacolourlessmask.Ihadnotimetolose.Ipressedthebellintheliftimmediately.Thesoundwassurelydeafening,butwhatotherchoicedidIhave?Mrs.

Limburstintotears.Itriedmyverybesttocomforther,tellingherthateverythingwouldbeallrightandthatweneededtofindouthowtogetoutsafely.Mrs.

Limbeganhavingtroublebreathing,andIimmediatelyhelpedhersitdownandloosenedhercollar.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:

Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Paragraph2:

Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.写作指导

1.

确定人称：第三人称2.

梳理原文情节：3.

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文章主旨？：4.

构思情节Paragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.【P1】似乎没东西可写，按照我们之前讲过的构思技巧，可逐一通过主人公场景来添加，也可以用上遇险类求助无果套句，所以P1并不难。①【衔接1】场景描写：电梯里笼罩着可怕的氛围②

Mrs.Lim的反应：虚弱，不断啜泣

发抖③

我的反应：尽力安抚Mrs.Lim+自己，表现得平静④

我的反应：敲电梯门求助，but

无果⑤【衔接2】随着时间流逝，心态要崩了。

Paragraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.①【衔接3】我的反应：大喊，“快救救我们

+

里面有老人”②

firefighters

的回应：让我们保持镇定+等待救援③

我的反应：转头安抚Mrs.Lim，营救人员来了④

过了一会门终于开了，我们也获救了⑤【结尾】回应下开头：回到家瘫在沙发上，回想着这不安稳的一天，珍惜平凡普通的一天。【下水作文】Paragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Theelevatorwasenvelopedinaterrifyingatmosphere,thedimlightanddeadlysilenceaddingtoourmountingfear.Mrs.Lim,myelderlyneighbor,wasapictureofdespair,herbodytremblingasshecontinuouslysobbedandgaspedforair.Despitethefearthatgrippedme,Iputonabraveface,tryingtocomfortherwithreassuringwordsandagentlepatonhershoulder.Ithenturnedmyeffortstotheliftdoors,poundingandshoutingforassistance,yettheonlyresponsewastheechoofmyowndesperatecallsbouncingoffthecoldmetalwalls.Astimeworeon,thetensionbecameunbearable,andIcouldfeelmycomposurebeginningtofrayattheedges.Paragraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.

"Pleasehelpus!There'sanelderlywomaninhere!"Iyelledatthetopofmylung,myvoicetingedwithrenewedhopeandrelief.Thefirefightersrespondedwithcalmingwords,instructingustoremaincomposedandassuringusthatrescuewasimminent.TurningbacktoMrs.Lim,Iconveyedthegoodnews,comfortingherthathelphadarrivedandwewouldsoonbesafe.Afterwhatseemedlikeaneternity,thedoorfinallycreakedopen,andwewereusheredintothewelcomingarmsofourrescuers.Backhome,Icollapsedontothecouch,reflectingontheday'seventsandremindingmyselftocherishtheordinary,seeminglyunremarkabledays.【参考范文】Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Theair-conditioninghaddiedout,andtheliftbecamereallystuffy.Weweresweatingbuckets.Wetriedtoringtheemergencyalarmagain.Everysecondthatpassedwaspainful."Help!!!"Iscreamedatthetopofmylungs,tryingtogetsomeone'sattention.Awaveofdespairwashedoverme.Ifeltlikewewouldnevermakeit.Inonelasteffort,Itriedbangingonthedoors.Thenextfewminutesfeltlikehoursaswewaitedincompletesilence.Bang!Myhopeswereliftedwhen1heardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.Helpwasfinallyhere!Thebravefirefightershitthedoorsopenusingtheirtools.Itfeltlikeahundredpoundweightwasliftedoffme,andMrsLimthankedtheheavensthats