读后续写语篇训练第一节人与自我一家庭生活

添加标题添加副标题汇报人姓名个人成长CONTENTS目录01工作与职业家庭生活02语篇演练校园生活03情感情绪Pleaseaddcontent304饮食与健康Pleaseaddcontent405计划与愿望Pleaseaddcontent406个人成长Pleaseaddcontent6一、家庭生活四、自然灾害语篇训练1：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Itwasinthemiddleofwinter,aboutthirtyyearsago.IwasayoungfatherwiththreelittlechildrenandIwasworkinginasawmill(锯木厂)forjustabovetheminimumwage.AsIgotreadytogotowork,Iwrappedband-aids(创可贴)aroundmyfingersandputmoreinmypockets.Cuttingandpilingupthewoodforeighthoursadayhadcausedmyfingerstosplitandbleedattheirtipsinthecold,drywinterair.ThenIwalkeddowntomycarinthesnowandhopeditwouldstart.Thatdayatworkwasharderthannormal.Themachineskeptbreakingdown.Andwehadtorushtocatchbackupasthewoodwaspiledup.Ontopofitalltheheatersinthebuildingweren’tworkingandwecouldseeourbreathaswespenthourschopping,piling,carrying,andpackagingthehardwoodflooringtobeshippedout.Whentheworkdayfinallyended,Iwalkedtiredlytowardsthetimeclock,tookoffmyworkglovesandinspectedmyachingfingers.ThesplitswereworsethaneverandIhadbledthroughtheband-aidsagain.ItriedtostraightenoutbutIsufferedseverecramps(抽筋)inmyback.Istartedmycaranddrovebackhome.Ilookedatthesnowandblinkedbacktears.IwonderedhowlongIcouldkeepdoingthis,ifthingswouldevergetanybetter,andwhylifewassohard.ItriedtoputasmileonmyfaceasIopenedmyfrontdoor,butinsteadoneappearednaturally.Mydaughterranuptome,yelled“Daddy,”andwrappedherlittlearmsaroundmyneck.Iliftedherupandmyheartexplodedwithlove.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Mytiredbodydidn’tfeelsotiredanymore.

“Happybirthday!”mywifegreetedmewarmly.

Step1读懂大意，理清脉络Who

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1.ReadforinformationI,mydaughter,mywifeItwasinthemiddleofwinter,aboutthirtyyearsago.AthomeIworkedinasawmill.Ihadaharderworkdaythannormal.Themachineskeptbreakingdown.Thewarmthandhappinessfrommyfamilymademefeelitwasworthwhiletoworkformyfamily.Step1读懂大意，理清脉络2.ReadforplotsA.Ihadaharderworkdaythannormalbecausethemachineskeptbreakingdown.Mybleedingfingersandachingbackmademewonderwhythelifewassohard.B.Mywifewishedmehappybirthday.C.MydaughterhuggedmeimmediatelyIgothome.D.Iworkedinasawmillforjustabovetheminimumwage.①Beginning

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DACBStep1读懂大意，理清脉络3.ReadforemotionalchangesPlotHowdidtheauthorfeel?Iworkedinasawmillforjustabovetheminimumwage.

Themachineskeptbreakingdown.

Myfingersbledandmybackached.

Mydaughterhuggedme.

Mywife…?dissatisfiedsad&hopelesshappy&warmStep2细读首句，构思框架①由第一段首句“我原本疲惫的身体不再感到如此疲惫。”可知，本段可描写女儿的拥抱让“我”感到快乐、不再疲惫，“我”觉得生活会变好。②由第二段首句“‘生日快乐！’我的妻子热情地问候我。”可知，本段可描写妻子给“我”准备生日大餐，让“我”感到幸福和温暖，认为为了家人工作很值得，继而引出主旨：爱让生活更美好。Step3增加细节，开始写作续写线索：“我”不再疲惫→女儿拥抱驱散悲伤、带来快乐→“我”回应女儿拥抱并感慨→妻子祝“我”生日快乐→妻子准备大餐→“我”感到幸福→“我”对爱的感悟。【分析】本文以人物为线索，主要讲述作者作为一个年轻的父亲，为了养活家人，到锯木厂工作。每天繁重的工作都会让他的手指流血，但是当他回到家感受到了家的温馨和幸福时，他觉得工作的辛苦是值得的。Mytiredbodydidn’tfeelsotiredanymore.Myachesandpainsalmostdisappearedintoherhug.Andthejoyinmyheartchasedthesadnessaway.AtthatmomentIknewIcouldgoonandthingswouldgetbetter.InthatsecondIrememberedagainthatIwashereforlove.Ikissedmylittlegirl’scheek,heldhertight,andthankedGodformylife,eventhoughitwassohard.Step4检查优化，整洁誊写“Happybirthday!”mywifegreetedmewarmly.Shehadpreparedarichmeal.Myheartwasfilledwithhappinessandwarmth.Irealizedthatitwasworthwhiletoworkformyfamily.Ithinkweallhavebleedingfingersandband-aiddaysinourliveshere.Butwithlovewecanmakeitthroughthemall.Afterall,workingmaygiveusaliving,butitislovethatgivesusalife.高分短语句型①消失在……中：disappearinto②赶走：chaseaway③片刻，瞬间：second/moment【出彩语句】语句1：AtthatmomentIknewIcouldgoonandthingswouldgetbetter.（省略that的宾语从句）语句2：Afterall,workingmaygiveusaliving,butitislovethatgivesusalife.（强调句）语篇训练2：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ItwasChristmasEve.Iwasthirteen.IfeltsadbecausetwodaysagomydadtoldmetherewasnotenoughmoneytobuythedressIhadlongedfortoattendmygraduationceremony.Aftersupper,Itookoffmyboots,stretchingoutbythefireplace.Iwasstillfeelingsorryformyselfand,tobehonest,wasn’tinmuchofamoodexpectingwhatgiftIwouldget.Butmydaddidn’tbringanything.Instead,“Comeon,Elizabeth,”hesaideagerly.“Takeyourdowncoat!It’scoldoutside.”Icouldn’tfigureitout—notonlywasn’tIgettingthedress,mydadwasdraggingmeoutinthecold.Iunwillinglyputonmycoatandboots.AsIopenedthedoor,somethingwasup.Outside,Ibecameevenmoredisappointed.There,infrontofthehouse,alreadyputabigsled.Ireluctantlyclimbedupandsatnexttoawoodenbox,thecoldalreadybitingatme.Andwepulledinfrontofthewoodshedandstartedloadingwood—thewoodwe’dspentallsummerhaulingdownfromthemountainandallfallsawingintoblocksandsplitting.FinallyIasked,“Dad,whatareyoudoing”“HaveyoubeentoMrs.Clark’slately”heasked.Mrs.Clarklivedabouttwomilesdowntheroadfromus.Herhusbandhadpassedawaytheyearbefore,leavingherwiththreechildrentoraiseonherown.“Yeah,”Isaid.“Why”“Irodetherejusttwodaysago,”Isaid.“LittleJakewasoutdiggingaroundinthewoodpile(柴火堆),tryingtofindafewchips.They’reoutofwood.”Thatwasallhesaid,andItriedtothinkthroughwhatmydadwasdoing.Wedidhaveabigwoodpile,sowecouldsparethat,butIknewwedidn’thaveanymoney.Mrs.Clarkhadcloserneighborsthanus.WhywasitourconcernNearlyhalfanhourlater,wemadeit.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Thenweunloadedthewoodandknockedonthedoor.

Thewoodenboxwasopened.

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1.ReadforinformationI,mydad,Mrs.ClarkandJakeOnChristmasEveInfrontofthehouseMydadaskedmetohelploadthewood.Mrs.Clarkranoutofwood.Mydaddecidedtosendthe

woodtoMrs.Clark.Step1读懂大意，理清脉络2.ReadforplotsA.Withoutgettingthegift,mydadaskedmetohelploadthewoodandsendittoMrs.Clark.B.WearrivedinfrontofMrs.Clark’sdoorwithawoodenbox.C.Mydad’swordsanddeedsleftmedeeplyconfused.D.Ilongedforadresstoattendmygraduationceremony.①Beginning

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DACBStep1读懂大意，理清脉络3.ReadforemotionalchangesPlotHowdidtheauthorfeelaboutherdad?Ilongedforadress.

Mydadaskedmeout.Isawawoodenbox.

MydaddecidedtosendthewoodenboxtoMrs.Clark.

WearrivedinfrontofMrs.Clark’shouse.?expectantdisappointedconfusedStep2细读首句，构思框架①根据第一段首句“然后我们卸下木头，敲了敲门。”可知，本段可描写“我”见到Mrs.Clark一家时的情景和感想。②根据第二段首句“木箱被打开了。”可知，本段可描写圣诞礼物是什么以及“我”的感悟。Step3增加细节，开始写作续写线索：卸下木头，敲门→Mrs.Clark开门后的所见所感→箱子被打开→分发礼物→“我”的感受→升华主题。【分析】文章以人物为线索展开，讲述作者渴望得到一件圣诞节礼物——一条参加毕业典礼穿的裙子，却被父亲告知没钱买裙子，因此感到很伤心。父亲还叫她一起去一位邻居家送圣诞节礼物，因为自己家也很穷，刚开始很不理解，直到她看到孩子们的窘况，她才意识到自己一开始的想法是错的，最终认为这是她收到的最好的圣诞节礼物——予人玫瑰，手有余香。Thenweunloadedthewoodandknockedonthedoor.Aweakvoicesaid,“Whoisit”Immediatelymydadsmiled,“Christmasgifts!”Shortlyafter,Mrs.Clarkslowlyopenedthedoor.Atthesightofus,shefeltalittleconfusedbuthappy.Obviously,aheavyfreezingcoldblanketedtheroom,andthethreechildrencrowdedtogethertokeepwarminfrontofthelittlefireinthefireplace.Seeingthat,asenseofguiltcameoverme.Justthen,mydadwasreadytoopenthewoodenbox.Step4检查优化，整洁誊写①攫住：comeover/seize③使开始明白，使开始理解：dawnonsb.Step4检查优化，整洁誊写Thewoodenboxwasopened.

Delightedandexcited,mydadannounced,“Christmasgifts!”

Uponhearingwhathesaid,thechildrenjumpedtotheirfeetandtheirfaceslitup,“We’redreaming!”Mydadhandedthemshoesandinthemeanwhile,Iputsomewoodinthefireplace.Weallfeltthewarmthsurgingthroughourbodies.Itdawnedonmethatmydadhadgivenmeagiftmuchgreaterthanadress,anditwasalsohethatshowedmethetruemeaningofgiving.【出彩语句】语句1：Delightedandexcited,mydadannounced,“Christmasgifts!”（形容词作状语）语句2：Uponhearingwhathesaid,thechildrenjumpedtotheirfeetandtheirfaceslitup,“We’redreaming!”（现在分词作状语）语篇训练3：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。“Jordi,wakeup!”Myfather’svoicecallsfromthehallway,andIsitupquickly.Todayistheday!ThedaythatIwillfinallybeaCastellar—acastlebuilder.Mycityishostingtoday’scompetition.Allmylife,I’vewatchedmyparentscompete.ButneverbeforehaveIbeenpartofthetower.It’ssohigh.Anditsometimesfalls.Iwashesitanttobeupthere.Sotoday,forthefirsttimeinacompetition,I’llhelpbuildthetower.Intown,Iseethatthecitycenterisalreadypackedwithpeople.WhileIwaitforourturntocompete,myfriendTommycomestostandwithme.“WhatifI’mnotreadyforthis,Tommy”Tommy’sdarkeyessparkleashesmilesatme.“We’reneverready,Jordi.Noneofuswhocompeteknowsforsurehowitwillgo.”Hegesturestowardsthetowergoingupinfrontofus.“Justlikethosepeople,youmusthavefaithintheothers.Youmusttrustthosebelowwholiftyouup,andyoumusttrustyourself.”Tommypatsmeontheshoulder.“Havefaith.Havefocus.”InodtoshowthatIunderstand.I’lldomybesttofollowhissuggestions.Soon,toosoon,it’sourturn.Myfatherandsixofthestrongestmenstandinacirclefacingeachotherandholdeachotherclosetoformthebaseofourtower.Sixsmallermenclimbontotheirshoulders,formingastrongsecondlevel.Ourtowerisgettinghigherandhigher.Next,Iwatchmymotherandseveralauntsnimblyclimbinguptoformthefifthlevelofthetower.Thensuddenlyitismyturn.TommyandIwillmakeupthesixthlevel.Eachofthecastellerswearsawaistbelt,andI,toe-bare,climboverthebacksandshouldersoftheothersandpassthefirsttwolevelswithoutdifficulty,butasIgohigher,thetowerfeelslesssteady.BythetimeIreachthefifthlevel,nervesmakemyhandssweatandmykneestremble,forI’mveryhighofftheground.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Iplacemyfootintomymother’swaistbeltandtrytostand,butitslipsoff.

TommyandIgraspeachother’sarms.

Step1读懂大意，理清脉络Who

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1.ReadforinformationJordi,Jordi’s

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TommyInacompetitionIntown,inthecitycenterIslipoffwhenIclimbtothefifthlevelofthetower.AsIgohigher,thetowerfeelslesssteady.Ifeelquitenervous.

Step1读懂大意，理清脉络2.ReadforplotsA.Myparentsandotherunclesandauntsformthebaseofthetower.B.Myfootslipsoff.C.TommyandIwillmakeupthesixthlevel.D.Forthefirsttimeinacompetition,I’llhelpbuildthetower.①Beginning

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DACBStep1读懂大意，理清脉络3.ReadforemotionalchangesPlotHowdoesJordifeelaboutthecompetition?I’mwaitingforthecompetition.

Myparentsandotherunclesandauntsformthebaseofthetower.

TommyandIwillmakeupthesixthlevel.

Myfootslipsoff…?unconfidentnervousworried&afraidStep2细读首句，构思框架①由第一段首句“我把脚放进妈妈的腰带里，想站起来，但我的脚滑落了。”可知，本段可描写在出现状况之后，因为母亲的帮助和鼓励，“我”重新调整了心态，最后爬了上去。②由第二段首句“Tom