读后续写+Bopsy的消防员梦想+讲义 高三英语一轮复习

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。The26-year-oldmotherstareddownathersonwhosufferedleukemia(白血病).Althoughherheartwasfilledwithsadness,shealsohadastrongfeelingofdetermination.Likeanyparentshewantedhersontogrowupandfulfillallhisdreams.Nowthatwasnolongerpossible.Theleukemiawouldseetothat.Butshestillwantedherson'sdreamstocometrue.Shetookherson'shandandasked,“Bopsy,didyoueverthinkaboutwhatyouwantedtobewhenyougrewup?Didyoueverdreamandwishaboutwhatyouwoulddowithyourlife?"“Mommy,IalwayswantedtobeafiremanwhenIgrewup."Momsmiledbackandsaid,"Let'sseeifwecanmakeyourwishcometrue."LaterthatdayshewenttoherlocalfiredepartmentinPhoenix,Arizona,whereshemetFiremanBob,whohadaheartasbigasPhoenix.Sheexplainedherson'sfinalwishandaskedifitmightbepossibletogivehersix-year-oldsonaridearoundtheblockonafireengine.FiremanBobsaid,“Look,wecandobetterthanthat.Ifyou'llhaveyoursonreadyatseveno'clockWednesdaymorning,we'llmakehimanhonoraryfiremanforthewholeday.Hecancomedowntothefirestation,eatwithus,gooutonallthefirecalls,thewholenineyards!And,ifyou'llgiveushissizes,we'llgetarealfireuniformmadeforhim,witharealfirehat—notatoyone—withtheemblemofthePhoenixFireDepartmentonit,ayellowslickerlikewewearandrubberboots.They'reallmanufacturedrighthereinPhoenix,sowecangetthemfast.”Threedayslater,FiremanBobpickedupBopsy,dressedhiminhisfireuniformandaccompaniedhimfromhishospitalbedtothewaitinghookandladdertruck.Bopsygottosituponthebackofthetruckandhelpsteeritbacktothefirestation.Hewasinheaven.TherewerethreefirecallsinPhoenixthatdayandBopsygottogooutonallthreecalls.Herodeinthedifferentfireengines,theparamedics'vanandeventhefirechiefscar.Hewasalsovideotapedforthelocalnewsprogram.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。SodeeplytouchedwasBopsythatheresolvedtolivewithperseverance.Allthedoctorsthoughttheboytoasontheedgeoflifeanddeath.文本分析：原文讲述了一个身患白血病的男孩名叫Bopsy,该文也是以男孩名字作为文章题目。故事讲述了Bopsy的母亲在其临终前询问男孩的愿望，男孩自述想做消防员。母亲于是走进亚利桑那菲尼克斯当地的消防局，向消防队长Bob讲述了儿子的愿望。Bob立马答应，而且说可以比男孩母亲的要求做的更好，并且承诺三天后帮助他实现成为消防员的梦想。在这个故事中，我们最直观的感受大致有：男孩的坚强，母爱的伟大，还有消防员的善良。和所有的心灵鸡汤故事一样，里面的人都存有真善美的本性。故事首段交代了背景，男孩命不久矣，和天下所有母亲一样，Bopsy的妈妈想要帮助孩子实现最终的愿望。在二三段的一问一答中，读者知晓了男孩的愿望是成为消防员。在四五段的一求一应中，我们看到了Bob的慷慨大方，他说Wecandobetterthanthat。原文的五段依照人物之间的关系和对话进行推进，涉及到Bopsy，motherandfiremen三方，三个角色各具特色，学生读写中若能有所指则可以写得更出彩。原文的语言也特别适合高中生去赏析和积累。比如描写doctor无奈地告知噩耗：heldoutnohopeforhim,and

predicted

hehadabouttwoweeksleft.

描写母亲对孩子的爱以及帮助实现其愿望的执着：1.stareddownatherson;2.Althoughherheartwasfilledwithsadness,themotheralsohadastrongfeelingofdetermination;3.

Shestillwantedherson'sdreamstocometrue;4.

Shetookherson'shand,holdingitfirmly;5.Momsmiledback;6.Sheexplained

herson'sfinalwish.描写男孩Bobsy临终的境况：1.Thesonrepliedinstantly,withatwinkle

inhiseyes;

2.wantedtogrowupand

fulfill

allhisdream;

3.Butthatwasnolongerpossible.

用大量的对白展现消防员Bob的性格：1.

HehadaheartasbigasPhoenix.

2.Wecandobetterthanthat...从第五段的交代可以看出Bob的善良果敢以及心思缜密。故事中也出现了大量和消防相关的语言，如fireman,

ridealaddertruck,savepeopleintrouble,

localfiredepartment,thechieffireman,

givearidearoundtheblockonafireengine,

firestation,

goout

onallthefirecalls,

arealfireuniform,

arealfire

hat,

the

emblemofthe

Phoenix,ayellowslicker,rubberboots.

从服装到警局标志，还有消防局消防员等，可以说很全面了，非常值得学生关注。分析完文章后我们再看续写两段，首段的第一句Threedayslater,Bopsywaitedexcitedlyafterabriefbreakfast.

二段的第一句Onenightafterthreemonths,allofhisvitalsignsbegantofropdramaticallyandbecameweak.

这两段具有比较长的时间跨度，因而学生并不需要将两段之间的关系产生过度的关联，或者说传统的“倒推法”已经不起作用了。这两个应该是独立的自然段。首段主讲Bob所在的消防队帮助Bopsy实现成为消防员的梦想。这一段的关系主要和原文第五段Bob答应男孩母亲的事情产生，如穿上了装备，拉响了警报，乘上了消防车，同时用较多的笔墨去描写男孩Bopsy的心理反应，他一定是特别开心、特别激动的，而他的母亲也应该是很感动的。虽然我们在平时的考试中提醒学生不要将角色写死，但在这个故事中，男孩的死却成了一种必然，因为首句提示三个月后，男孩的生命体征变得微弱。Sir以为这也是这篇续写很大的一个价值所在，就是我们所提倡的积极向上和正能量并不在于生命的存活和死亡，而是这个世界所传递的真善美，这是我们考试时候要去挖掘的。男孩是怎么死的？临死的状态是怎么样的？母亲的反应是怎么样的？消防员这次有没有出现？再回答完这些问题后，提炼相关的主题便能写出一段比较美的文章。男孩死的时候一定是非常平静的，消防员们也应该是陪在身边的，他可以死在母亲的怀里，在消防员的注视下进入了天堂。男孩的预估生命由原先的两周到现在的三个月，这不得不说是一个奇迹，而这个奇迹是由善良的消防员们创造的。PossibleversionSodeeplytouchedwasBopsythatheresolvedtolivewithperseverance.Hisdreamrealized,withhimblessedwithalltheloveandattention,Bobsyfeltthathewasthemostfortunatepersonintheworld.Neverhadtheboyanticipatedsuchagreatdreamcouldberealizedonhim.Thoughintheprocessofterminalleukemia,Bobsystillledalifefullofhopeandbeauty.Itwasthepersonalexperienceofbeingafiremanthatinspiredhisdesiretoliveagoodliferegardlessofthesevereillness.Brimmingwithconfidenceinlife,alongwiththeencouragementofthegreatmother,Bobsywaspositivelyengagedinhistreatment.However,asevereinfectiousvirushithim,whichworsenedhiscondition.Allthedoctorsthoughttheboywasontheedgeoflifeanddeath.However,themotherinsistedonthefactthatfaithcouldcreatethemiracleoflife.Huggingtheboyinherarms,themothercalledthefirechiefandaskedifitwouldbepossibletosendafiremaninuniformtothehospitaltobewithBopsytopullthroughthedangerousperiod.NosoonerhadthefiremancameintothewardthanBobsysmiledasifthefiremanwerehisfutureandallthepainhadgone.Amaz