【课件】新高考读后续写课件+2024届高考英语一轮复习

读后续写EnglishContinuationWriting2021年新高考考情分析能基本读懂故事，对原文本分析不够具体到位。写作情节偏离，逻辑混乱，衔接不恰当。写出的文章句式简单、描写生硬。教学目标通过阅读圈，引导学生从主题语境，篇章结构，故事情节词汇处理等多角度去深度解析文本，帮助学生理顺情节发展，抓住人物核心性格，确保学生续写情节符合逻辑。通过主述位推进帮助学生搭建文章逻辑结构，解决学生无话可写的问题。通过提供语料，作文互批表，明确批改润色要求，反复练习，指导学生写出更自然合理、衔接得当的作文。文本分析part1Brainstorm:Whatimpressyoumostinthevideo?

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo. 01AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.02AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISENext,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.02AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.03AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEJennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.03AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE阅读小组长DiscussionLeader组织小组讨论，并针对阅读内容提问。篇章大师PassagePerson讲解阅读内容中有意思、重要或较难的段落。生活实际联结者Connector将阅读内容与生活实际相联系，分享经验。单词大师WordMaster讲解阅读内容中的生词、重点单词及词组。篇章概括者Summarizer用自己的话概括篇章的主要内容。文化采集者CultureCollector寻找阅读内容中与自己国家文化相同或不同之处。ReadingCirclesv.（在水或泥里）下沉；

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灭火；把火扑灭记叙文ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.篇章大师PassagePerson文体一般过去时第三人称时态人称AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE篇章大师PassagePersonThebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture...rang,wentdownthestairsquietly,

o...,broke,addin,found...动作描写:

篇章大师PassagePersontomakebreakfastforMotheronMother’sDaylovebetweenfamiliesThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.明线:

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篇章大师PassagePersontomakebreakfastforMotheronMother’sDayThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.事件：亲情，母爱人与社会阅读小组长（DiscussionLeader)人物分析情节发展主题语境主旨Rereadthestoryandfigureouttheplot.ThetwinsmadebreakfastformomonMother’sDay.(thetwins)excitedThetwinsgotupearlytomakebreakfast.Theporriageboiledover;thebreadturnedblack(thetwins)panickedandworriedDidFathercometohelp?(thetwins)happy?Excited?本文情节线setting环境risingaction发展fallingaction(遭遇挫折）climax高潮人物时间地点母亲节到了，双胞胎悄悄起床为母亲做早餐。火太大，吐司烤糊了。粥溢出来了、手烫了、吐司再次烤糊了。本文情感线Resolution解决Ending尾声Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitement...Jennapanicked.Jeffstayedcalm...

(worried)续写部分续写部分climax高潮beginiing开端ThetwinsThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.excitedThetwinsHowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.deeploveforMotherconsiderate行为ThetwinsThepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.considerateThetwinsJeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.cooperative行为JennaThistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.helpfulpersistent行为JeffNext,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.calmsensitivehelpful行为生活实际联结者ConnectorDoyouwanttoprepareagiftforyourmomonthenextMother’sDay?Whatwillyouchoose?篇章概括者Summarizer母亲节要到了，双胞胎计划给母亲一个惊喜，做一顿早餐给母亲。但做饭时，烤焦了吐司，粥溢出来了，Jeff手也烫了，把厨房弄得一团糟...Mother’sDaywascoming.ThetwinsplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridgeforMotherasasuprise.However,thebreadturnedblack.Theporridgeboiledover.ThehotburnerburnedJeff’shand...写作构架part2平行性延续性三种叙述模式新高考2021年6月Paragraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Paragraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.01feltunhappyatfirst,thenfeltmoved02helpedthetwinsmakebreakfast03madebreakfastsuccessfullyParagraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.PlotDesignParagraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Thefatherfeltunhappyandaskedthem:“Whathappened?”Thetwinssaidthewholestorytofather.Fatherhuggedthemtightlyandsaid:“Let’smakebreakfasttogether!”Thetwinsfeltveryexcited.Thistime,thetwinsmadeFrenchtoastandchickenporridgequicklyandsafelyundertheirfather’sguidance.Sincethebreakfastwasready,thetwinsdecidedtoletmotherenjoythedeliciousfoodatonce.交叉叙述010203040506Thefatherfeltunhappyandaskedthem:“Whathappened?”Thetwinssaidthewholestorytofather.

Fatherhuggedthemtightlyandsaid:“Let’smakebreakfasttogether!”.Thetwinsfeltveryexcited.

Thistime,thetwinsmadeFrenchtoastandchickenporridgequicklyandsafelyundertheirfather’sguidance.Sincethebreakfastwasready,thetwinsdecidedtoletmotherenjoythedeliciousfoodatonce.Paragraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.新高考2021年6月Paragraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.01saidHappyMother’sDay02feltsurprisedandmoved03enjoyedthefoodtogetherParagraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.04jumpedwithjoyPlotDesignParagraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Theysaid:“HappyMother’sDay!Iloveyou,Mom!”Motherfeltveryhappyandsurprised,andshehuggedthetwinsimmediately.Thetwinswassoexcitedthattheykissedtheirmotheronthecheek.Thenmotherlookedatfatherandthetwinshappily.Fathersuggested:“Haveatry,darling!Theymadeitforyou!”Mothertastedandpraisedthetwins.Thetwinsjumpedwithjoyandafeelingoflovefilledthewholeroom.延续叙述01020304050607Thetwinswassoexcitedthattheykissedtheirmotheronthecheek.Thenmotherlookedatfatherandthetwinshappily.Mothertastedandpraisedthetwins.

Thetwinsjumpedwithjoyandafeelingoflovefilledthewholeroom.Theysaid:“HappyMother’sDay!Iloveyou,Mom!”Motherfeltveryhappyandsurprised,andshehuggedthetwinsimmediately.

Fathersuggested:“Haveatry,darling!Theymadeitforyou!”润色批改part3词汇润色说

say

以口发出声音utter大叫

yell

建议suggest回复

reply

解释reply低语whisper补充add同意agree承诺promise喃喃低语mutter一般动词细节动词词汇润色看

look(匆匆)一瞥glance偷窥peek

监视monitor眯眼看squint观察observe盯着看stare凝视gaze俯瞰overlook一般动词细节动词词汇润色离开、走leave,go

走出walkoutof迈出stepoutof冲出去rushout走来走去walkaround不安地走pacerestlessly一般动词细节动词词汇润色不开心/悲伤(情绪)frownwithdispleasureloseone’sspiritstearspuddingineyesseizedbyaburstofsadness情绪状态身体表征词汇润色激动/兴奋/喜悦/感动(情绪)awideexcitementtookholdofsb.eyestwinkledwithpleasureeyesdancedwithjoyandsweetnesstoucheddeeply/immenselytearsfillingineyes情绪状态身体表征词汇润色halfsurprised,halfconcernedthetwinswereoverjoyed缺少形容丰富形容词汇润色beforehecouldquestionAllofasudden,thetwins’faces...ThemomentMomopenedhereyes...Inthemeanwhile,aplate...Justatthatmoment,thefathercamein...缺少衔接丰富连词词汇润色withtheirheadnoddingfirmlytheyeventuallymadeitExpectantly,thepair...副词单一状语多样状语词汇润色withtheirheadnoddingfirmlywithtwobowlsofporridge介词短语单一状语多样状语词汇润色Spottingthemess...withtheirheadnoddingfirmlyGatheringthem

intoherarms...delightspreadingthroughthehouse.非谓语动词单一状语多样状语词汇润色

Beforehecouldquestionthekids,Jennathrew...ThemomentMomopenedhereyes,thetwinsyelled...状语从句单一状语多样状语Paragraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.【1】Spottingthemess,Dadfrowned.【2】Beforehecouldquestionthekids,Jennathrewherselfathim,tearspuddinginhereyes,“Dad,wefailedtopreparethegiftforMom!”【3】Halfsurprised,halfconcerned,asenseofresponsibilityofcaringaboutthekidsdrovefathertowipeawayhertears,“Let’sdoittogether.”【4】Allofasudden,thetwins’faceslitupwiththeirheadnoddingfirmly.【5】Thenextmomentwitnessedtheireffortstomakethebreakfastandtheyeventuallymadeit.【6】“TakethesetoMom’sroom.”Daddirected.【7】Expectantly,thepairsteppedoutofthekitchen.多样状语非谓语：

SpottingSpottingthemess,Dadfrowned.

01Paragraph1细节动作frown与父亲有关的细节动作。细节动作threwherselfathim描写出Jenna对父亲的依赖。身体表征tearspuddinginhereyes描写出Jenna没有顺利做出早餐的伤心。多样状语状语从句：Beforehe...Paragraph1Beforehecouldquestionthekids,Jennathrewherselfathim,tearspuddinginhereyes,“Dad,wefailedtopreparethegiftforMom!”02细节动作wipeaway具体动作多样状语形容词：halfsurprised,halfconcernedHalfsurprised,halfconcerned,asenseofresponsibilityofcaringaboutthekidsdrovethefathertowipeawayhertears,“Let’sdoittogether.”

03Paragraph1细节动作faceslitup;headnodding具体动作身体表征happy问题解决后双胞胎高兴起来。多样状语副词：firmly介词短语：withtheirhead...

Allofasudden,thetwins’faceslitupwiththeirheadnoddingfirmly.04Paragraph1多样状语副词：

eventuallyThenextmomentwitnessedtheireffortstomakethebreakfastandtheyeventuallymadeit.05Paragraph1细节动作direct体现了父亲的指导为下文送饭做铺垫。“TakethesetoMom’sroom.”Daddirected.06Paragraph1Expectantly,thepairsteppedoutofthekitchen.07Paragraph1细节动作stepout为具体动词描写。多样状语expectantly描写出双胞胎期待的心情。Paragraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.【1】ThemomentMomopenedhereyes,thetwinsyelled,“HappyMother’sDay!”【2】Inthemeanwhile,aplateofFrenchtoastplacedonthetablebesidethebedcaughtMom’sattention.【3】“Mom,haveatry.”Jeffsuggested.【4】Momtriedtoconcealheremotion,buttheglitteringtearsfailedher.【5】Gatheringthemintoherarms,shechoked,“Thankyou,mydarling!”【6】Justatthatmoment,fathercameinwithtwobowlsofporridge,“Nowwecansharethebreakfasttogether!”【7】Thetwinswereoverjoyed,delightspreadingthroughthehouse.细节动作openeyes

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yell多样状语状语从句：Themoment...Paragraph2ThemomentMomopenedhereyes,thetwinsyelled,“HappyMother’sDay!”01Paragraph2Inthemeanwhile,aplateofFrenchtoastplacedonthetablebesidethebedcaughtMom’sattention.

02细节动作caughtmom’sattention与mother相关的具体动作多样状语后置定语：placedonthetablebesidethebed非谓语：placedonthetableParagraph2“Mom,haveatry.”Jeffsuggested.

03细节动作suggest具体动作，描写出男孩的期待。Paragraph2Momtriedtoconcealheremotion,buttheglitteringtearsfailedher.

04细节动作triedtoconceal体现妈妈的感动。多样状语形容词：glittering身体表征gather...intoarms;choke体现出母亲内心的触动多样状语非谓语动词：gatheringthemParagraph2Gatheringthemintoherarms,shechoked,“Thankyou,mydarling!”

05细节动作gather...intoarms;

choke具体动作多样状语介词短语：withtwobowlsofporridgeParagraph2Justatthatmoment,thefathercameinwithtwobowlsofporridge,“Nowwecansharethebreakfasttogether!”06细节动作cameinwithtwobowlsofporridge父亲端着粥前来，具体动作多样状语形容词：overjoyed非谓语：spreadingthroughParagraph2Thetwinswereoverjoyed,delightspreadingthroughthehouse.07Spottingthemess,Dadfrowned.Beforehecouldquestionthekids,Jennathrewherselfathim,tearspuddinginhereyes,“Dad,wefailedtopreparethegiftforMom!”0102简单句非谓语作状语时间状语从句非谓语作状语Paragraph1复杂句Halfsurprised,h