专题05上海高考应用文类作文（原题版）

►专题05上海高考应用文类作文_________________________________________________________________________________________考点精考点精讲【考情链接】应用文是一种与日常生活、学习或工作密切相关,实用性很强的文体,包括书信、电子邮件、日记、通知、发言稿和读后感等,每种类别的应用文都有各自的结构和行文特点。书信是应用文中使用最广泛的文体；其中建议信、申请信和推荐信考察最频繁。【典例剖析】（2021.6

上海高考）

假设你是明启高三学生李华，收到外国朋友Bill的邮件，告诉你他准备开始学习汉语，现有两门汉语课程供他选择（课程信息下表所示），但他对课程选择有些茫然，想听取你的建议。给Bill

回复一封邮件，在邮件中你必须：推荐其中一门课程通过比较两门课程的信息，说明你推荐该门课程的理由。课程名称汉语听说汉语读写课程内容日常会话故事读写安排每周一、四晚7:00-8:30，共8周每周五晚7:00-8:30，共16周语言全中文中英双语一、框架梳理交代背景（问候语+写信的目的）I'veheardthat…Iamexcited/thrilled/delightedtohearfrom…Hearingthat…Ihighlyremend……youarepreparingto…andtherearetwocoursesforyoutochoosefrom……youaregoingtolearnChinesebutthatyouarefacingatoughchoice,Iamwritingtoyoutosharemyhumbleopinions.…youaretornbetweentwocourses…I’dliketovoicemyremendation.…youarepreparingtolearnChinesebutareatapletelossaboutwhichcoursetotake,Icanhardlywaittowritethise-mailtoyou,sharingmyopinions.SoelatedamIthatI’vereceivedyoure-mailwhereyoumentionedthatyouhavebeenpreparingforlearningChinese,butthealternativesofcurriculumstillconfusedyouandmadeyouhesitant.表明选择（推荐其中一门课程）AccordingtomyexperienceasanEnglishlearner.Iwouldadviseyouto…IfIwereyou,Iwouldenterfor…ratherthan…Aftercarefulparisonbetweenthetwocoursesandtakingintoconsiderationyourpersonalsituation,Ibelieve…ismoresuitableforyou.Allthingsconsidered,Istronglyremendyoutochoose…Considering…,…canbettersatisfyyourrequirementsthan….Between…and…,Imaintainthattheformerismoresuitableforyouandtheremendationwillbejustifiedasthefollowingreasons.Basedonyourpersonalsituation,IconsidertheChineselisteningandspeakingcourseisabetterchoiceforyou.选择理由（比较两门课程的信息）Firstandforemost,Ibelievethatitscontent,whichmainlyincludesreadingandwritingstories,mayarouseyourinterestinChinese.First,paredtoreadingandwriting,listeningandspeakingiseasierandmoreusefulindailylife.Meanwhile,Audio-OralChinesestandsoutwithitsgoodpaceforanovicelikeyou.Second,thiscoursegoesinabilingualform.What’smore,paredwiththecoursearrangementofChineseListeningandSpeaking,Inthefirstplace,astothescheduleofthecourse,readingandwritingcourseisarrangedmorereasonably.Inparisonoftwocourses,theyconcentrateon“dailyconversation”and“readingandwriting”respectively,…What’smore,whenitestothetimeplan,sinceyou’vebeenburdenedwithheavyworkloadinweekdays,Fridaynightmightbemoresuitableforyou.Intermsofthewaythecourseispresented,bilingualeducationseemsmorefriendlytoabeginner.Intermsofpracticaluseforashorttrip,Audio-OralChineseoutshinesChineseLiteracy.StudentstakingthiscoursecanhaveaccesstovariousChinesestories,whichnotonlyservestofostertheirgreatinterestinlearningChinesebutalsoenablesthemtounderstandChineseculturedeeply.Inaddition,there’snodoubtthatit’llbetoughforyoutoacclimatizeamidtheatmosphereofall-ChineseteachingwithoutEnglishparedtotheotherone.Whereas,theformer’sscheduleistootightandhectic,whichismoredemandingthanthelatter.Firstandforemost,theformercoursefeaturesstoriescreativewriting,whoseinnerideadowninsidetheteachingplanposesabiginvitationforpeoplewholovegettinganinsightintothebeautyofalanguagebesidessimplymasteringit,justlikeyou.总结希望Goodluckwithwhicheveryouwillchoose.IamlookingforwardtohearingfromyouassoonaspossibleandtalkwithyouinChinese!Ihopemyideascouldcontributealittle,andlookforwardtoyourreply.IsincerelyhopethatyouwouldtakemyadviceintoaccountandgainalotfromtheexperienceofChineselearning.Ihopemyremendationcouldbehelpful.That’sallmyreasonswhyIremendyoutochoosethesecondcourse.二、正文的部分语言汇总分析：比较两种课程的特点，做出选择TopicExamples选听说课程Therefore,itisagoodchoiceforyoutotakethecourseofAudio-OralChineseasitfeaturesdailyconversationwhiletheotherfocusesonChinesestoryreadingandwriting.Forexample,whenyoudineout,asabeginner,Ithinkitessentialtolearnsomeusefulexpressionstomunicatewiththewaitress.Thisfrequencyallowsyousufficienttimetopracticeandtheintervalwon’tbetoolongastoforgetabouttheknowledgelearntatlastclass.选择读写课程Ibelievethatitscontent,whichmainlyincludesreadingandwritingstories,mayarouseyourinterestinChinese.Thesestories,varyingfromancientlegendstononfiction,wellshowcasetheprofound5000-year-oldChineseculture.ByexposingyourselftothepioneeringideasmanifestedbyscholarsthroughoutChinesehistory,drawinginspirationfromtheteachingsofConfuciusandLaozi,perhapsyou’llacquireanewperspectiveonlife.NotonlycanitenableyoutoperceivethecharmofChineseasalanguage,butitmayalsocultivateyourthinkinginChinese,whichisveryimportantforalanguagelearner.TheteachingmethodofthiscourseisbilingualwhilemonolingualteachingmodeisemployedinChineseListeningandSpeaking.Inmyopinion,bilingualeducationhelpstofacilitatestudents’mandofChinesebetterespeciallyforanewlearner.StudentstakingthiscoursecanhaveaccesstovariousChinesestories,whichnotonlyservestofostertheirgreatinterestinlearningChinesebutalsoenablesthemtounderstandChineseculturedeeply.paredwiththecontentofdailymunicationwhichisintendedforseniorlearners,thestoryreadingandwritingcannotonlyexpandyourvocabularybutalsoenrichyourunderstandingoftheChineseculture.Intermsofthewaythecourseispresented,bilingualeducationseemstobemorefriendlytoabeginner.Creative

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Chineseisaprofoundandextensivelanguage,soit'sabetterchoicetolearnreadingandwritingfirst.三、优秀作文分享

DearBill,I’msogladtohearfromyou,andit’sevenmoresurprisingtoknowaboutyourChineselearningplan.It’ssuchapleasuretobeofsomehelptoyouinchoosingthecurriculum.MypersonalremendationisthecourseofChinesereadingandwriting.Firstandforemost,Ibelievethatitscontent,whichmainlyincludesreadingandwritingstories,mayarouseyourinterestinChinese.Thesestories,varyingfromancientlegendstononfiction,wellshowcasetheprofound5000-year-oldChineseculture.Besides,byexposingyourselftothepioneeringideasmanifestedbyscholarsthroughoutChinesehistory,drawinginspirationfromtheteachingsofConfuciusandLaozi,perhapsyou’llacquireanewperspectiveonlife.Onthecontrary,theothercourse,featuringmostlydailyconversations,mayseemmorepractical,yetitcanbemoresuperficialandboring.Second,thiscoursegoesinabilingualform.Afterall,facedwithall-Chineseteaching,apletestrangertothislanguagesuchasyouyourselfmayfeeloverlystressedanddepressed.Inthepresenceofthesenegativeemotions,youroptimallearningpotentialislikelytobepromisedandyourlearningpassionundermined.Lastbutnotleast,thiscourseextendsaslongastwoweeks,withonelessonperweek,whiletheotheronegivesthesamenumberoflessonsinhalfthetime.parativelyslow-paced,youmayhavemoretimetoreviewandaccumulatelanguageuse,thuslayingamuchmoresolidfoundationandbenefitingfuturestudy.Asyoucansee,thecourseofChinesereadingandwritingisofgreatbenefit,andIwouldpickitwithouthesitationifIwereyou.However,whichevercourseyouchoosetoattendintheend,IwillbackyouupinChineselearninglikealways.Yourssincerely,LiHua【真题回顾】（2019.6

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Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120—150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假如你是李敏，在一本英文旅游杂志上，你发现了这样一条信息：某古城景区对当地人收费5美元,对外国人收费15美元,针对这一情况，请你以李敏的口吻给该杂志编辑写一封信，具体要求如下：1.介绍一下你在杂志上看到的内容；2.针对此事自己的态度以及理由。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Deareditor,

I’mastudentandmynameisLiMin.I’mwritingthislettertoreflectuponmyconcernsaboutapieceoftourisminformationinyourmagazine.Accordingtotheinformationonadmissionticket,thehigh-profileattraction“AncientCity”chargesa$15entrancefeeperforeigntourist—amazinglythreefoldthatofthelocals.Icontendthatthispracticeisquiteunreasonable.Firstandforemost,asfortheforeigntouristsingfromafar,thestrikingdifferenceinentrancefeemayresultinresentmentofunfairness.Furthermore,ifforeigntouristsrealizethattheywillhavetopaymuchmoretovisitaworldwidehistoricalandculturalrelics,theywouldperhapsdecidenottogotothecountryonvacation.Tosumup,everyeffortshouldbemadetoattracttouristsfromoverseasandtopromoteculturalrelics.

Thankyouforyourtimeandreading.Ireallyappreciateyourresponseatyourconvenience.Bestregards,Yourssincerely,LiMin【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生以李敏的口吻给杂志编辑写一封信。【详解】第一步：审题体裁：应用文时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时。结构：总分法总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。要求：1.介绍一下你在杂志上看到的内容；2.针对此事自己的态度以及理由。第二步:列提纲reflectupon，amazingly，contend，firstandforemost，resultin，furthermore，decidetodo，tosumup，makeeffort，appreciate，atyourearliestconvenience第三步：连词成句1.I’mwritingthislettertoreflectuponmyconcernsaboutapieceoftourisminformationinyourmagazine.2.Accordingtotheinformationonadmissionticket,thehigh-profileattraction“AncientCity”chargesa$15entrancefeeperforeigntourist—amazinglythreefoldthatofthelocals.3.Icontendthatthispracticeisquiteunreasonable.4.Firstandforemost,asfortheforeigntouristsingfromafar,thestrikingdifferenceinentrancefeemayresultinresentmentofunfairness.5.Furthermore,ifforeigntouristsrealizethattheywillhavetopaymuchmoretovisitaworldwidehistoricalandculturalrelics,theywouldperhapsdecidenottogotothecountryonvacation.6.Tosumup,everyeffortshouldbemadetoattracttouristsfromoverseasandtopromoteculturalrelics.7.Ireallyappreciateyourresponseatyourconvenience.根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）1.表文章结构顺序：Firstofall,Firstly/First,Secondly/Second…Andthen,Finally,Intheend,Atlast（供参考）2.表并列补充关系：Firstandforemost,Furthermore3.表转折对比关系：However,Onthecontrary,but,Although+clause(从句),Inspiteof+n/doing,Ontheonehand…,Ontheotherhand…Some…,whileothers…,asfor,so…that…（供参考）4.表因果关系：Because,As,So,Thus,Therefore,Asaresult（供参考）连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，【点睛】[高分句型1]Furthermore,ifforeigntouristsrealizethattheywouldhavetopaymuchmoretovisitaworldwidehistoricalandculturalrelics,theywouldperhapsdecidenottogotothecountryonvacation.（使用了条件状语从句，宾语从句和不定式作宾语）[高分句型2]Tosumup,everyeffortshouldbemadetoattracttouristsfromoverseasandtopromoteculturalrelics.（使用了被动语态和不定式短语作目的状语）_____优选操练优选操练演练1：（邮件）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假如你是明启的李明，最近正筹划建立“线上图书馆”，鼓励同学们多读书，读好书。为了更好地为同学们服务，图书馆现向大家征集建议。请你为图书馆负责人写一封邮件。邮件内容须包括：■为线上图书馆提出合理建议；■说明这样做的原因或好处。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________演练2：GuidedWriting（推荐信）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假定你是明启的高生李华。某电视台线上学习节目打算增设两个栏目。初步拟定从“ReadingforFun”、“TextbookLearning”、“HomeworkGuidance”、“OnlineListening”以及“QuestionsandAnswers”五个栏目中选取两个，特此向所有在线学习者征求意见。请你给电视台写封信，推荐两个栏目。内容须包括:1)你推荐的两个栏目；2)你推荐这两个栏目的理由。注意：作文中不得出现你本人的姓名、班级及等真实信息。___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________演练3：（建议信）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.图书馆需要购置一批新书，现向学生征求意见。假如你是王凯，请用英语给图书馆孙老师写一封信，你认为图书馆最需要购置的两类图书，并说明理由。下表所列图书类别可供参考:PopularScienceArtsandrecreationLiteratureputersciencePopularScienceArtsandrecreationLiteraturePhilosophyandpsychologySocialsciences•Language•Historyandgeography•Language________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________好题必好题必测练习1：（电子邮件）Directions:anEnglishpositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假设你是明启的李华，你校外籍教师Chris将在文化周期间做一个有关西方艺术的讲座，现就讲座内容征求你校学生的意见。请给Chris写一封电子邮件，邮件必须包含以下内容：•你喜欢的讲座话题（从音乐、美术、舞蹈、戏剧中任选其一）：•选择该话题的原因及关于该话题你感兴趣的内容；•希望从中有何收获。_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________练习2：（建议信）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假设你们正在向学生征询开设选修课（optionalcourse）的有关事宜。请你写一封建议信给校长，提出你希望开设的选修课的名称，并简要说说这门课应该涉及的主要内容以及开设这门选修课的意义。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________练习3：（申请信）Directions:WriteanEnglishpositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.假如你是明启高三学生李华，最近你校准备创立一个“解忧”社团（AnxietyRelievingClub），旨在帮助同学们排忧减压。你很想成为其中一员，请给社长写封申请信，内容须包括：1.你