高三英语一轮复习渐进写作训练- 读后续写

高三英语一轮复习渐进写作训练读后续写【题型解读】读后续写题型提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标注关键词进行续写(150词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。读后续写题型主要关注学生以下四个方面的能力：1．把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力学生需要了解给定短文的主要内容，清楚其关键词和语言结构的使用情况，并通过续写短文表现出来。2．语言运用的准确性和丰富性学生能准确、恰当地使用所学词汇和语言结构，还能够根据内容需要使用较多、较复杂的词汇和语言结构。3．对语篇结构的把控能力学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系，所续写的短文语句连贯、有序。4．创造性思维能力学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容，包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。【应试技巧】1．在读懂原文的基础上，紧扣原文中心，以原文的结局为起点，写出故事情节的发展和变化。2．对原文故事没有写出的情节展开合理的推想，打开思路。多角度地想象出几种情况或结局，并从中加以最优选择。3．要注意前后照应，符合逻辑，防止自相矛盾。必须与上文紧密联系，使上下文融为一体。4．原文的主要角色，续文中都要安排“戏”，但不要引进影响事件结局的新角色。5．注意确保四个一致：要与原文的主题或作者的本来意图保持一致。要与原文的体裁、结构、写作手法保持一致。要与原文的语言特点和叙事风格保持一致。主要人物的思想行为、性格特点要与原文保持一致。r写作步骤】1．分析原文做读后续写题首先要做的就是“读”。“读”的目的是确定文章的主题，明确篇章结构。读的时候要特别关注文中画线的关键词，也就是故事中的时间、地点、人物和事件四要素，特别要标记能描述事件发展过程的词和短语。按照四要素对关键词进行分类可以帮助我们理清文章脉络，为合理想象故事的发展提供线索。2．推理情节先仔细阅读续写部分所给出的两段开头语，明确其中所包含的四要素信息并将其延伸，推断出这段中要写的情节，也就是后面故事的四要素。续写段中的四要素应包含两部分：一部分沿用所给材料中表示四要素的关键词，一部分是自己通过合理想象新发展的关键词。3．串接要素把上一步中确定好的四要素加以串接，并增加细节描写（内心情感、态度、表情描述），从而形成完整的段落。两段加起来要能写出8到15个句子，以满足续写的词数要求。串接时要注意选用合适的衔接词，并保证至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语。4．升级词句初稿完成后，要对续写段进行润色，即对其中的用词和句式进行升级。用词升级的三大方向：新颖化、短语优先、善用形容词和副词等修饰词。句式升级可通过使用特殊句式、复合结构、虚拟语气等来完成。5．检查定稿学生可通读所给材料和自己续写的内容，既要确保不出现与原材料相矛盾的地方，又要做到内容上前后连贯，语句通顺。此外，还要检查有无拼写错误、标点符号错误、大小写错误等，检查词数和画线词是否符合要求等。碘例剖析】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。MynameisJohnandImustsharewithyouaneventwhichtookplaceonFlight1533outofDCA.MywifeandIweretravelingtoMiamitocelebrateanachievementforherandasyoucanimagine，wewerelookingforwardtofun，sunandlaughter.Weboardedtheaircraft,withoutacareintheworld.ltwascoldinWashingtonandwewerereadyforFlorida.Shortlyaftertakingmyseat,Ibegantofeelsick.Iknewsomethingwasn'trightbutIjustcouldn'tfigureoutwhatwashappening.Beingadoctorandastubbornman，Iresistedeffortsbymywifetocallforassistance.Astheaircraftbeganitsdeparturerol,lIlostconsciousnessforashortamountoftime.AsIcamearoundIquicklyrealizedafewthings.Firstlysomethingverybadhadhappenedtome.Secondly，theaircraftwastooheavywithfueltogobackhome.Thirdly，mylossofconsciousnesshadbeensodeepthatIfoundmyselfoutofcontrol.SonotonlydidIhaveamedicalissuetodealwithbutIalsohadtofigureouthowtodealwithanembarrassingexperience.MywifegatheredthecrewassoonasitwassafetomoveaboutandImademywaytothewashroomtoattempttocleanup.Ididmybestandtheflightcrewmembersweresosupportive，checkingonmeoftenandreassuringmethattherewasnothingtobeembarrassedabout.Itwastheirsympathyandsupportthathelpedmesomuch.DuringtheflighttheykeptwatchingovermeandIsuddenlyhadasmallgroupofnurses，bringingblankets，food，drinksandcaringandsmile.Iwasthankfultothem.1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1：Uponlanding,Iremainedinmyseat,allowingotherpeopletogofirst.Paragraph2：Hearingthat,thecaptainleftandreturnedacoupleofminuteslaterwithapairofhisownbluejeans.一、分析原文细读所给材料，确定文章为记叙文，讲述了John在飞机上身体不适被抢救的故事。2．画线关键词分类：地点：Miami，theaircraft，myseat人物：mywife事件：care，things，outofcontrol，medicalissue，experience，gathered3•故事的三要素都已明确，再根据短文开头可知，故事发生在John搭乘的去Miami的飞机上，故四要素俱全。二、推理情节根据已给出的续写部分每段的开头语并展开合理想象可推断：第一段应主要讲述John在飞机着陆之后与机长的对话，其中应包括人物的心理活动。第二段应该根据首句提示进一步描述有关牛仔裤的话题。可根据自己的想象构建故事情节续写两段的四要素如下：Paragraph1Paragraph2时间：uponlanding地点：inmyseat人物：I,thecaptain事件：standingwithawarmsmile，asked，fUllofcare，replied时间：acoupleofminuteslater地点：theexit人物：thecaptain，I，mywife事件：gaveastrangerhispants，smiled，said，hiskindness中4：立rFR三、串接要素将已确定的四要素串接，并增加细节描写，可完成续写初稿Paragraph1：Uponlanding,Iremainedinmyseat,allowingotherpeopletogofirst.AsIwasinmyseat,Isawthecaptainstandingwithawarmsmile.“WhatcanIdoforyou？”thecaptainasked.ItoldhimIwasOK.Iwasveryembarrassedandconcernedbecauseofthepreviousthings.Hesaid“Whatsizeofpantsdoyouwea?"HisvoicewasfUllofcare.Ireplied“34X34.Whydoyouaskthis?"Paragraph2：Hearingthat，thecaptainleftandreturnedacoupleofminuteslaterwithapairofhisownbluejeans.Themanopenedhisownluggageandgaveastrangerhispants.Idid'ntknowwhattosay.ThenIlookedatmywife,whosmiledand,withoutsayingaword,letmeknowitwasokay.Iwenttotheexitandhesaid“Changeontheaircraft.lt'sfine."BecauseoftheexperienceIwasthankfultohimforhiskindness.Imadeupmymindtotreatotherswithkindness.四、升级词句初稿完成后从用词和句式两方面升级可增加得分点。Paragraph1：Uponlanding,Iremainedinmyseat,allowingotherpeopletogofirst.AsIwasinmyseat,I[lookedupand|①sawthecaptainstandingwithawarmsmile.“WhatcanIdoforyou?"thecaptainasked.ItoldhimIwasOK.Iwasveryembarrassedandconcernedbecauseofthepreviousthings.Hesaid,“Whatsizeofpantsdoyouwea?"Hisvoicewasfullofcare.I|waspuzzledand②replied,“34X34.Whydoyouaskthis?"Paragraph2：Hearingthatthecaptainleftandreturnedacoupleofminuteslaterwithapairofhisownbluejeans.Themanopenedhisownluggageandgavea〔complete③strangerhispants.Ididn'tknowwhattosay.ThenIlookedatmywife,whosmiledand,withoutsayingaword,letmeknowitwasokay.Imademywaytoward④theexitandhesaid“Changeontheaircraft.lt'sfine."Becauseoftheexperience,Iwasthankfultohimforhiskindness.Imadeupmymindtotreatotherswithkindness.加上lookedupand更符合当时的情境。加上waspuzzledand更能突出作者当时的心理活动。加上complete一词使描述更生动。使用短语mademywaytoward。五、检查定稿通读短文和续写的两段核查词数和画线词的数量避免出现拼写错误等低级错误。【模拟演练】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Danniswaswaitingattheairlineticketcounterwhenhefirstnoticedtheyoungwomanwithshinyblackhairpulledtightlyintoaknot.Sheworeblackbootsofsoftleather.Dannisstruggledtoseeherface；shewasaheadofhiminline，butitwasnotuntilsheboughtherticketandturnedtowalkawaythatherealizedshewasabeautywhowasfairskinnedandbigeyed.Sheseemedawarethathewasstaringatherandloweredhergazeabruptly.Hisflightwasleavinginanhour.Tokilltime，DannissteppedintoanairportbarandorderedaScotch.Whilesippingit，hewatchedtheflowoftravelersthroughtheterminal（航站楼）untilhecaughtsightoftheblackhairedgirlintheleathercoatagain,deepinconversationwithablondegirl（金发女孩）.“Inviteherforadrink?”Dannishesitated.Inanotherinstant,thetwowomenseparated，neitherofwhosedirectionswastowardhim.Whenhesawheragain，Danniswasbuyingamagazineandbecameawaresomeonewaspushinghim.Atfirst,hewasstartled（受惊吓的）thatanyonewouldbesocloseastotouchhimbutwhenhesawwhoitwas,hesmiled.“Busyplace,”Dannissaid.Shelookedupathimandblushed.Wordlessly,shemovedawayandjoinedthecrowdsintheterminal.Danniswasatthecounterwithhismagazinebutwhenhereachedintohispocketforhiswalletthepocketwasempty.WherecouldIhaveleftit?Hismindwasracing，thecreditcards，thecash，theidentificationcard...Hisstomachstirredwithsomethingverylikefear“.Thegirlwhowassoneartome!"hesaidtohimself.Allatonceheunderstoodshehadpickedhispocket.Whatshallhedo?First,findapoliceman,tellhimwhathashappened.Hewouldprobablyneverseehiswalletagain.Dannisgrittedhisteeth.Whenglancingaroundforthepolice,suddenly,hespottedtheblackhairedgirl,seatedagainstafrontwindowoftheterminal.Sheseemedabsorbedinabook.注意：所续写短文的词数应为150左右；至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语己为你写好；续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragrap1：Aseatbesideherwasempty,andDannisoccupiedit.Paragraph2：ThegirlranandDannisranafterher.【参考范文】Aseatb