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continuationwritingZhuXiaolingLuxunHighSchoolauction拍卖会auctioneer拍卖师bidder竞拍者bidforauctionitems拍卖物1.Whowerementionedinthepassage?3.Whatunluckythingshappenedtotheauthor?2.Wherewastheauthortaken?Toanauctionattheartgallerydowntown.Theauthor,hisparents,auctioneer4.Howdidtheauthorfeel?Stressedandembarrassed.Answerthequestions:Step1:

Readthoroughly5.What’s

thetone(口吻)ofthestory?Tip2:Focusonthemainplots:who,where,what,howlogical+creativethekeywordsthetwogivensentencesStep2:

Plotcreatively(构思)Tip3:Classifythekeywordstoplotauction

parents

snacksanddrinks

keychain

vase

dropped

myhand

stuck

pull

auctioneer

_________________________________________________________________________________Characters:Scene:Incident:

auction

parentsauctioneervasekeychainmyhandstuckpulldroppedParagraph1:Everyonewaswalkingtowardme,includingmyparents.Paragraph2:Mydadleanedincloseandwhisperedintheauctioneer’sear.Everyone:I:Myparents:surprised/doubtful/laugh/whisper/….embarrassed/regretful/anxious/saysorryto/lowerone’shead/redface/begintocry/tellthefacttomyparents…surprised/worried/askmewhathappened/calmmedown/…Inpara1,Itoldmyparents(dad)thatIwasintrouble.Peoplehaddifferentresponse.Makeadescriptionofpeople'spossiblethoughts,wordsandactionsTip4:UsethetwogivensentencestoplotPara1:Everyonewaswalkingtowardme,includingmyparents.Theywereverysurprisedwhentheysawme.Theywhispered.IfeltveryembarrassedandnervoussoIcried.Mydadcametomeandaskedmewhathadhappened.Itoldmydadthefactthatmyhandswerestuckinthevase.Theywereworried.Good?Contentislogical.Languageisnotvivid(生动的).Step3：Draftswiftly(拟稿）surprisedanxioustellthefacttomyparentsworriedaskmewhathappenedTip5:UseadverbsflexiblyTip6:UsevariousexpressionsTip7:UseadvancedsentencestructuresTip8:UsepropertransitionalwordsTipstomakeyourlanguageanddescriptionvividStep4Polishcarefully(润色）Tip5:Useadverbsflexibly1Myparentswere_________________surprisedatthefactthatmyhandswerestuck.2Hearingthat,I

____________calmeddown.3Theywerewhispering___________whyIwastherewiththevase.4Myfatherthoughtforawhileandwalked______________towardtheauctioneer.extremely/greatlygraduallycuriouslydirect/straightTip6:Usevariousexpressions4.Istoodthereanxiouslyjustwithtearswellingupinmyeyes.2.Iloweredmyheadwithanxiety,standingtherelikeafool.

3.Iwas

so

anxiousthatmyheartwasbeatingveryfast.5.Awaveofanxietysweptover

myredface.

1.

Overwhelmedwithanxiety,

Iburstoutcrying.Ifeltveryembarrassedandnervous.Tip7:UseadvancedsentencestructuresWiththeentireroomstaringatmeinsurprise,theywerewhisperingwhyIwasholdingthevase.Surprisedatthescenethatmyhandswerestuckinthevase,theybegantowhispertoeachother.(–ing/-edformastheadverbial/…)(prepositionphraseastheadverbial/…)Themomenttheysawmyhandsstuckinthevase,theyfeltsosurprisedthattheywhisperedtoeachother.(theadverbialclause)Theywereverysurprisedwhentheysawme.Theywhispered.Paragraph1:Everyonewaswalkingtowardsme,includingmyparents.Withtheentireroomstaringatme,theywerewhisperinginsurprisewhyIwasholdingthevase.___________,Iloweredmyheadwithembarrassment,standingtherelikeafool.___________,Iwassonervousthatmyheartwasbeatingveryfast.______mydadmadehiswaytomeandasked“Whatareyoudoing?”“Myhandisstuck,”Isaidinalowvoice.“Oh,dear,”mymomcried.Tip8:UsepropertransitionalwordsAsaresultMeanwhileThenRemember:Logicalcontentandvividlanguagetogethermakeagoodcontinuationarticle!InPara2,someonegotmeoutoftrouble.Paragraph2:Mydadleanedincloseandwhisperedintheauctioneer’sear.Who?OneofbiddersIWhoMydadITheauctioneerOneoftheothersDiscussionChooseoneanddiscussthesolutionofthetroubleingroupsoffour.Howbuy/dipsoapwater/oil…runtotheW.C.to…getpermission/…buy/send/break…positiveandcreativesolutionsThemeintelligence/..bravery/calmness/kindness/..kindness/…Itdepends！Finishthestoryinyourownversionafterclass!Step5：CopyneatlyCopyneatlyanddon’tforgettounderlinethewordsHomeworkFinishthestoryinyourownversion.Accumulateadvancedwords,phrasesandsentencestructures.Theauctionchosethevaseasthefirstpieceforsale.Hehopedtheauctioneerwouldstartwiththepaintings.Hishandwasstuck.Hetrieddesperatelytogetthekeychainout.Hepulled