读后续写：送老人去临终关怀医院 讲义-高三英语写作专项

送老人去临终关怀医院01｜试题呈现Iwasrespondingtoacallfromasmallbrickflat(用砖做的公寓)inaquietpartoftown.IassumedIwasbeingsenttopickupsomeparty-goers，orsomeonewhohadjusthadafightwithalover，oraworkerheadingtoanearlyshiftatsomefactoryfortheindustrialpartoftown.WhenIarrivedat2:30a.m.,the

building

wasdarkexceptforasinglelightinagroundfloorwindow.Undersuchcircumstances,many

drivers

justhonk(按喇叭)onceortwice，waitaminute，thendriveaway.ButIhadseentoomanyweakpeoplewhodependedontaxisastheironlymeansoftransportation.Unlessasituationsmelledofdanger，Ialwayswenttothe

door.Thispassengermightbesomeonewhoneeds

myassistance

，Ireasonedtomyself.SoIwalkedtothedoorandknocked.“Justaminute，”answeredafrail，elderlyvoice.Icouldhearsomethingbeingdraggedacrossthefloor.Afteralongpause，thedooropened.

Asmallwoman

inher80sstoodbeforeme.Shewaswearingaprintdressandapillboxhat，likesomebodyoutofa1940smovie.Byhersidewasasmallnylonsuitcase.Theapartmentlookedasifnoonehadlivedinitforyears.Allthefurniturewascoveredwithsheets.Therewerenoclocksonthewalls,no

equipment

onthecounters.Inthecornerwasacardboardboxfilledwithphotosandglassware.“Wouldyoucarrymybagouttothecar？”shesaid.Itook

thesuitcase

to

thecab,thenreturnedtoassistthewoman.Shetookmyarm,andwewalkedslowlytowardthecab.Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.“It'snothing,”Itoldher.“IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.”注意：1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为二段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:

Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice,sheasked.“Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?”Paragraph2:wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,andit…

02｜写作建议根据两段所给提示句判断，第一段着重描写去临终关怀医院的途中发生的情况。可以描写thesmallwoman的神态、神情、动作、步态、语气等，语文教材中关于“祥林嫂”的枯槁的神情的描述可以用来借鉴；也可描写当时的场景，如昏暗的路灯无精打采地发着微弱的光；又如，thesmallwoman倦怠的神情；又如，night是如何的黑，映衬出thesmallwoman即将不久于人世；也可描写整个ride中让thesmallwoman充满回忆的几个特别重要的地方，如与丈夫一见钟情的地方，结婚的教堂，儿子出生的医院等等等等；也可穿插两人之间的偶尔的几句对话；第二段着重描写到达医院后的情景。可以描写老奶奶对我的感谢，我对感谢的回应（主线）；也可描写医护人员来接老奶奶的动作（辅线）；还可以对关门声进行一个放大处理（特写），把关门声比喻成关闭世界之门的声音。最后结尾可以采用几种常见手法，如思考式结尾,镜头拉远式结尾,对话式结尾,心里独白式收尾,Camera-panandzoom(摄影-全景+放大)等方法收尾。03｜写作素材场景描写素材：寂静的夜晚：asilentnight;aquietnight;astillnight路灯：1.昏暗：dim;faint;dull;adim/faint/dullstreetlight2.没精打采的:gloomya.黑暗的，沮丧的;inanimatea.无生命的，无生气的人物描写素材：我（司机）：本文可以忽略临终老人（乘客）：瘦骨嶙峋的身材：askinnyfigure;abonyfigure布满皱纹的脸：Haveawrinklyface;becoveredwithwrinkles;anoldladywithawrinkle-coveredface空洞的眼神：emptyeyes;anemptylook;holloweyes;ablanklook面无表情的：emotionless一动不动的：motionless凄凉的：fullofgrief孤独的/痛苦的/悲伤的一生：adesolate/miserable/sadlife仿佛木刻似的：likeawoodcutstatue只有那眼珠间或一轮，还可以表示她是一个活物。（借鉴关于祥林嫂的描述）Theoccasionalrollingofherturbid(浑浊的)eyesindicatedshewasstillalivingcreature.动作描写素材：我（司机）：1.Istartedthetaxiandshutoffthemeter.2.Ilookedintherear-viewmirror.Hereyeswereglistering.Iquietlyreachedoverandshutoffthemeter.“Whatroutewouldyoulikemetotake?”Iasked.3.Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme.4.Isloweddownandpaused,tryingtomakeherlookalittlelonger.5.Iopenedthetrunkandtookthesmallsuitcasetothedoor.临终老人（乘客）:1.Infrontofabuilding,shesatinthedarknessforalongtime,sayingnothing.2.Infrontofanotherhouse,shesobbed.Itwaswherehersonhadancaraccident.3.Heremptyeyeslitup/sparkled/glittered/shonelikeaclusterofbrightstars.4.Shemurmuredwithatrembling/shakingvoice,thevolumegraduallyincreasedandherfacesoftened.5.Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.6.Asthefirsthintofsunwascreasingthehorizon,shesuddenlysaid,“I’mtired.Let’sgonow.”7.Thewomanwasalreadyseatedinawheelchair.心理活动描写素材：我（司机）：1.Iamdutybound(义不容辞的)topickupher.Afterall,itwillbeherlastride.2.Itismydutytoprovideemotionalsupporttotheterminallyillinmycab.3.Whatifthatwomanhadgottenanangrydriver,oronewhowasimpatienttoendhisshift?WhatifIhadrefusedtotaketherun,orhadhonkedonce,thendrivenaway?4.Onaquickreview,Idon’tthinkthatIhavedoneanythingmoreimportantinmylife.临终老人（乘客）：本文可以省略途中经由地描写素材：1.并列罗列法：(1).Forthenexttwohourswedrovethroughthecity.Sheshowedmethebuildingwhereshehadonceworked,theneighborhoodwhereshehadlivedandthefurnitureshopthathadoncebeenaballroomwhereshehadgonedancingasagirl.Sometimesshe'daskmetoslowdowninfrontofaparticularbuildingandwouldsitstaringintothedarknesssayingnothing.(2).Wedrovethroughtheneighborhoodwheresheandherhusbandhadlived.Besides,sheaskedmetoslowinfrontofaparticular

building

orcornerandwouldsitstaringintothedarkness,sayingnothing.

2.着重举例法：Infrontofanordinarybuilding,heremptyeyeslitup.Shemurmuredwiththetremblingvoice,thevolumegraduallyincreasedandherfacesoftened.Isloweddownandstoppedmycar.Itwasnowatheaterbuthadbeentheplacewhereshegotmarriedwithherhusbandandtheirdearestsonwasborn.结尾：思考式结尾：1.I was completely lost in thought for the rest of the day. What would happen if I had refused to dowhat I did? We always think that there are no great moments in our lives, but great moments are just in what others may think small and unimportant ones! 2.Afterthat,Idroveaimlessly,lostinthought.Peopleusuallybelievethatourlivescenterupongreatmoments.Butgreatmomentsoftencatchusunaware,beautifullywrappedinwhatothersmayconsiderasmallone.3.Peoplemaynotrememberexactlywhatyoudid,orwhatyousaid...buttheywillalwaysrememberhowyoumadethemfeel.Takeamomenttostopandappreciatethememoriesyouhavemade,thememorymakingopportunitiesaroundyouandmakesomeonefeelspecialtoday.镜头拉远式结尾：Theoldladywaswheeledintothehospice,thedoorshutwithabang.Itwasthesoundoftheclosingofalife.Thedaywasbreaking.ButIwastotallylostinthought.Whowillbemynicedrivertoassistmeduringmylastride?对话式结尾:AlmostwithoutthinkingIbentandgaveherahug.Sheheldontotightly.Ourhugendedwithherremark,"Yougaveanoldwomanalittlemomentofjoy."心里独白式收尾：Ihopeeverypersonwouldbetreatedwithtenderness.04｜范文呈现--

ByBlingBling1.下水作文1Paragraph1:

Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice,sheasked.“Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?”

Awareofherintention,Istartedthetaxiandshutoffthemeter.Iamdutyboundtoprovideemotionalsupporttotheterminallyillinmy

cab.Outsidethecab,thegloomystreetlampgaveoutfaintlight,makingthestillnightdarker.Insidethecab,

thesmallwoman,askinnyfigure,satonmybackseat,emotionlessandmotionless,likeawoodcutstatue.Theoccasionalrollingofherturbid(浑浊的)eyesindicatedshewasstillalivingcreature.Infrontofanordinary

building,heremptyeyeslitup.Shemurmuredwiththetremblingvoice,thevolumegraduallyincreasedandherfacesoftened.Isloweddownandstoppedmycar.Itwasnowatheaterbuthadbeentheplacewhereshegotmarriedwithherhusbandandtheirdearestsonwasborn.Asthefirsthintofsunwascreasingthehorizon,shesaid,“I’mtired.Let’sgonow.”Paragraph2:Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,anditwas

abuildingwhichprovidedcareforthoseattheendoftheirlives.Twonursescameoutimmediatelytogreether.Iopenedthetrunkandtookoutherlittle

suitcase.Bythen,shewasseatedinawheelchair.Ibentdownandgaveherahug.Shehuggedmetightandlong.Shekeptthankingmeformykindnessand

assistance.Theoldladywaswheeledintothehospice,thedoorshutwithabang.Itwasthesoundoftheclosingofalife.Thedaywasbreaking.Inthedimmorninglight,Iwastotallylostinthought.Whowillbemynicedrivertoassistmeonmylastride?

(267words)2.下水作文2Paragraph1:

Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice,sheasked.“Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?”Awareofherintention,Iquietlyshutoffthemeter.Outsidethe

cab,thegloomystreetlampgaveoutfaintlight,makingthestillnightdarker.Insidethecab,

thesmallwoman,askinnyfigure,satonmybackseat,emotionlessandmotionless,likea