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3、3349 h 91. 范文 1题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades encourage student to learn? Use specific reasons and examples to support your idea.开头段： (1)Having a glimpse of the current situation in education around the globe, we may marvel at the large variety of examinations stude

4、nts must take each semester. (2)Apparently, giving grades is considered the most common method to evaluate the performance of a student. （3）The entire teaching system cannot do without it. (4) In a sense, pursuing high grades is indeed an essential stimulus for students to concentrate on their textb

5、ooks. (5) It is admitted that marks really encourage the students to learn, but their importance should not be exaggerated.(1)(2)(3) 背景描述（4）（5）自己观点主体段一：（1）Evidently, the grading system urges students to study hard for the “top one”, a sacred position in their eyes. （2）No one wishes to fall behind. （

6、3）Thus, once a competition is started among the classmates, learning efficiency might be enhanced. （4）Those who win will make greater efforts to safeguard their superior results, whereas those who lose in the competition will work harder to erase past mistakes and continue the fight for a better out

7、come next time.（5） It is due to such a mental state that students gain the initiative to learn. （6）Researchers at China Academy of social science conducted a survey in 10 key high schools in Shanghai. （7）They drafted a list of questions centering on motives to study hard at school and asked the stud

8、ents to fill out the questionnaire. （8）Among the 2,000 students who wrote out their answers, over half of them mentioned the desire to gain high grades in the National College Entrance Examination. （1）主题句（2）（3）（4）（5）解释中的因果论证（6）（7）（8） 举例主体段二：（1）Grades also help reveal a students shortcoming in studie

9、s. （2）Whenever a new round of assessment in done and the final grades are announced, students will have the opportunity to discover their weak points on some subjects. （3）They may go all out to find the reasons for the loss of marks. （4）After a brief review, it is natural for them to finally notice

10、what has been neglected previously and obtain an objective attitude toward their school performance. （5）From then on, their attention might be focused on those drawbacks indicated in the test. （6）As a common notion suggests, learning from past mistakes helps avoid future ones. If such a function wor

11、ks, progress can be made.（1）主题句（2）（3）（4）（5）（6）解释中的因果论证主体段三：（1）Nevertheless, “high grade, low ability” has become an undesirable feature in some students. (2)Meanwhile, lower grades might also lead to the complete loss of confidence in studies. (3)As a result, schools ought to avoid such two extremes

12、. (4)The learning process is a comprehensive one that involves more than obtaining grades and passing examinations. (5)For instance, starting a large variety of programs aimed at broadening the mind and cultivating interests, offering students to take part-time jobs increase experience, organizing c

13、olorful activities, all these enjoyable opportunities to learn may encourage better academic performance and prepare them for future challenges upon entry into the work force. （1）主题句（2）（3）（4）因果论证 (5）举例结尾：(1) Consequently, as long as the grading system in managed appropriately at schools, students wi

14、ll always cherish the dream of gaining high marks and thus have the impetus to fight for it. (2)Concerning all the details mentioned above, there is very reason to believe that grades contribute much to stimulating a students passion for learning. （1）提出建议 （2）总结观点2. 段落结构 & 写作思路：开头段（背景描述+作者观点）背景描述（1-3

15、句）教育现状+重要性+作用作者观点（4-5句）技巧：重述题目论题主体段（主题句+解释+举例）主体段一 主题句（第1句）分数是学生学习的动力 解释（2-5句）素材：竞争使人进步 举例（6-8句）主体段二 主题句（第1句）分数可以检验学习效果 解释（2-6句）素材:弥补不足之处主体段三(让步段) 主题句（第1句）过度关注分数的不良后果 解释（2-4句）素材：培养兴趣爱好，锻炼能力 举例（第5句） 结尾段（总结观点+提出建议）总结观点（第2句） 技巧：重述题目论题提出建议（可省略）3. 素材应用：3.1 开头段思维方向，素材应用：描述教育现状，其他领域现状；某事物的重要性和作用如何应用在其他题目的背

16、景描述中：示例1. 学生有没有必要每天做家庭作业 （教育类话题）(1)Having a glimpse of the current situation in education in China, we may notice that students have to do a lot of homework everyday. (2)Apparently, giving grades is considered one of the most important methods to review what they have learnt during the class. （3）The

17、 entire teaching system cannot do without it.示例2. 电脑使人们的生活越来越简单，还是越来越复杂？（科技类的话题） (1)Having a glimpse of the current situation in technological development around the globe, we may marvel at the fact that the computer is so widely used in many aspects of our life. (2)Apparently, the computer is consi

18、dered one of the most important inventions in modern times. （3）Nowadays society cannot do without it.示例3. 什么能够帮助你走向成功？（成功类 人际关系）(1)Having a glimpse of the current situation in society, we may notice that there are a lot of opportunities for a person to become successful. (2)Apparently, interpersonal

19、 relationship is considered one of the most important factors for a person to succeed. （3）It seems that achieving ones goal cannot do without it.It is admitted thatbut句型：用法示例1：学生有没有必要每天做家庭作业？It is admitted that homework is of great importance for students, but its amount should not be excessive. 示例2

20、. 学生应不应该兼职It is admitted that part-time jobs can help students to adjust to the society as soon as possible, but they should balance the time spent on their studies and jobs. 相似句型：There is no denying thatbutAdmittedly.howeverIt is true thatnonethelessUndoubtedly.but 3.2主体段素材应用主体段素材的应用段落 主体段一（竞争与进步）主

21、体段二（弥补不足之处/从过去的经验教训中学习）主体段三（培养兴趣、 锻炼能力）题目学生受到老师的影响比受到同学的影响更多吗？学生有必要每天做家庭作业吗？人们为什么上大学？对学生来说最重要的教育是教室里的，而不是教室外的什么能助你走向成功？ （经验）通过学习知识比创新能力更重要什么能帮助你走向成功（学会竞争）在团队写作中，如果一个人无法接受批评，就不可能成功？学生来到新的学校，会遇到困难，学校怎么帮助学生克服这些困难体育运动教给人们人生道理吗？（在竞争中学会不气馁）应该要求所有专业的学生都选修历史课吗不是所有的知识都可以从课本中学来，比较课本知识和经验知识，那个更重要。对体育活动和图书馆建设，大

22、学是否应在资金投入上一视同仁生活中一度痛苦的经历终将成为将来的财富教会学生何谓责任最好的方法团队工作能力和独立工作能力哪个更重要生活中的知识来自于别人的教导还是自己的经验十几岁的小孩做兼职可取吗喜欢独立学习还是小组学习示例1. 学生受到老师的影响比受到同学的影响更多吗？跟同学在一起，能够参与到竞争中，正是竞争是我们有了自主学习的动力使得我们不断进步。（2）No one wishes to fall behind. （3）Thus, once a competition is started among the classmates, learning efficiency might be e

23、nhanced. （4）The students will make greater efforts to safeguard their superior results, whereas they will work harder to erase past mistakes and continue the fight for a better outcome next time if they lose in the competition.（5） It is due to such a mental state that students gain the initiative to

24、 learn and keep making progress. 示例2. 体育运动教给人们什么人生道理（在竞争中积极乐观，永不放弃）竞技体育使我们参与到竞争中去，竞争让我学会正确对待成功和失败以及永不放弃。（2）No one wishes to fall behind. （3）Thus, once a competition is started among the people, they will be spurred on to strive hard to be the winners.（4）People will make greater efforts to safeguard

25、their superior status, whereas they will work harder to erase past mistakes and continue the fight for a better outcome next time if they lose in the competition.（5） It is due to such a mental state that students gain the initiative to keep making progress and improving themselves. 3.3 结尾段素材应用（用在总结观

26、点中）Concerning all the details mentioned above, there is very reason to believe that示例1. 学生应不应该做家庭作业？Concerning all the details mentioned above, there is very reason to believe that homework is a tradition that should be carried out, but it is not supposed to be a heavy daily burden on the students.

27、示例2. 就职于到公司还是小公司？Concerning all the details mentioned above, there is very reason to believe that working for a large company is a better choice to improve a persons working efficiency and ability. 4. 句型分析开头段:现在分词作伴随状语Having a glimpse of the current situation in education around the globe, we may ma

28、rvel at the large variety of examinations students must take each semester.动名词做主语Apparently, giving grades is considered the most common method to evaluate the performance of a student.In a sense, pursuing high grades is indeed an essential stimulus for students to concentrate on their textbooks.让步式

29、的句型It is admitted that marks really encourage the students to learn, but their importance should not be exaggerated.主体段：现在分词做后置定语They drafted a list of questions centering on motives to study hard at school and asked the students to fill out the questionnaire强调句型It is due to such a mental state that students gain the initiative to learn.动名词做主语，现在分词作伴随状语For instance, starting