高考作文满分秘集2014辽宁卷.doc

高考作文满分秘集2014辽宁卷 经典命题（满分25分）假定你是学生会主席李华。学校将举办一次以“校园生活，创意无限”（innovations on campus）为主题的创意作品展评活动。请你根据以下图示，以短文形式用英语写一份书面通知。注意：1词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。3. 开头及结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。w&#w%参考词汇：校园campus 创意作品innovation 颁奖prize-givingNotice An exciting event “Innovations on Campus” is around the corner._ Come on, everybody! Its your show time.Student Union名师解析 试题解读该篇书面表达的命题思路采用的是应用文的考查形式，是图画类作文，其写作内容以一则海报的形式给出，要求考生根据该海报所提供的信息写一则通知，通知是日常生活中较为常用的一种文体，考查该应用文体，体现了高考命题对英语语言考查侧重于实用性的特点。从测试内容上来看，本次通知的主题是“校园生活，创意无限”，以校园为切入点，以创意为主要内容，从而提醒考生要关注校园生活，并注意培养自己的创造性思维，从而创造更加美好的校园。从提示上来看，海报上给出了通知的具体内容，从作品的要求、展出地点时间、颁奖时间到联系人及联系方式一应俱全，提示内容的详实便于考生动笔，但考生仍然需要就海报的内容进行分析整合，从而合理安排好写作顺序，同时各个写作方面的具体内容有一定的开放性，需要考生认真思考，从而使写作内容得以充实。试题中已经写好了开头和结尾，考生不必考虑和担心通知的格式问题，可以直接按照材料提示的有关内容进行写作，这有利于帮助消除考生因格式而引起的内心疑虑，从而更好地进行答题。 写作要点 介绍通知主题“校园生活，创意无限”； 号召同学们踊跃参加； 参赛作品要求； 作品展出时间：体育馆； 联系人和其电话。 可用素材 词汇create, ability, imagination, hand in, explain, collect, deadline, gym, contribute to, win the prize 句式Its a good chance for you to show your talent. All your works should be about our campus. Excellent works will be shown in the gym from June 16 to 18.Grasp the chance and youll be the best. 注意事项 注意文章应写成通知，而非信件； 仔细观察图画，写作要点不可遗漏，尤其是创意说明容易漏掉。满分文展示1Notice An exciting event “Innovations on Campus” is around the corner. We are expecting you to take part of it!Before handing in your innovation, there are several things that you should bear in mind. First, your work must be closely related to campus life. Second, you need to include a report explaining where you get the idea from and how your innovation works.The exhibition of all the innovations will take place from June 16 to June 18 in the school gym and the prize-giving ceremony will be held in the same place from 15:00 to 17:00 on June 18. Its a golden chance to show your creativity, so dont let it slip away! For further information, please call Li Hua at 44876655. Come on, everybody! Its your show time.Student Union 旁批：以before连接的时间状语开始，用以提醒读者关注参加这一活动的注意事项，that引导一个定语从句，其中bear in mind相当于remember，使用前者自然使得语言显得有其独到之处，而非人云亦云。 be related to表示“和有关”，该短语使用贴切，用about也可表达，但前者更为高级。 这是一个现在分词作定语的用法，后面的where you get the idea from and how your innovation works则是一个并列的宾语从句。【小贴士】此现在分词还可以这样表达：that /which explains where you get the idea from and how your innovation worksand it explains where you get the idea from and how your innovation works 这是一个长句，其中有and并列连词，连接了两个分句，构成了并列句，明确地介绍了活动的举办地点及颁奖仪式的相关事宜。 该句是由so连接的并列句，前一分句中it为形式主语，后一分句则用了一个祈使句，该句有着很强的号召性，突出了通知的用意。其中slip away一词为文章中的传神之笔，展示了作者用词的独到之处。 满分揭秘：该篇习作在认真研读所给图表的基础上对主要写作要点进行了周密的安排，合理地组织了写作内容，语言符合通知这一文体的写作特点，注意到了长短句结合及主动句和被动句相结合，用词尤为考究，其中的bear in mind, be related to, a golden chance, slip away等都使用得十分贴切，且不落俗套, 加之非谓语动词的准确使用，并列句的合理使用及定语从句的恰当使用，无不突显了作者扎实的英语语言运用能力的交际水平。 满分文展示2Notice An exciting event “Innovations on Campus” is around the corner. Here comes your opportunity to show your creativity! To take part in the event, you should make sure that your innovation has to do with campus life. Besides, a report to explain the detailed information about your innovation is also required.All the works will be on exhibition from June 16 to June 18 in the school gym. Dont forget to attend the prize-giving ceremony, which will be held from 15:00 to 17:00 on June 18. You could be one of the winners! This is such a meaningful and interesting event that you can in no way miss it! For more information, please feel free to call Li Hua at 44876655. Come on, everybody! Its your show time.Student Union 旁批：文章开头一段使用一个将here放在句首的完全倒装句，极具号召力，增强了语言的表达效果。该句中动词不定式作状语，表示目的，后面的that引导的是一个宾语从句，而其中的has to do with campus life表示创造的主题，运用贴切。该句是一个简单句，却明确地表明了作品的展出时间及地点。这是一个定语从句，其中使用了被动语态，符合通知这一文体的句式使用特点，很好地表达了颁奖仪式的举行时间。该句为主从复合句，含有suchthat引导的结果状语从句，其中in no way提高了表达效果，增强了语言的感染力。【小贴士】此句还可以这样表达：This event is so meaningful and interesting that you can in no way miss it!This is so meaningful and interesting an event that you can in no way miss it! 满分揭秘：该篇习作按照写作任务的要求，明确地介绍了“校园生活，创意无限”这一活动的相关要求，让读者明确了活动的作品创意说明、展评时间地点、联系人及联系方式等相关内容。达到了通知的目的。文章以简单句为主，穿插使用了定语从句、宾语从句及状语从句等长句，同时使用了部分祈使句及被动句，均符合通知这一文体的句式要求，同时祈使句的合理使用及in no way等词的准确运用都增强了文章语言的号召力和感染力。总之，这是一篇不可多得的高考满分作文。标准范文Notice An exciting event “Innovations on Campus” is around the corner. Every one of you is expected to be part of the event which encourages creative minds and gives full play to your DIY skills.Note that your innovations must be school things. Along with your wonderful innovation, you need to hand in a report, explaining how the idea occurs to you and what materials you use.来&%源:中教网All the collections will be on show from June 16 to 18 in the gym. Looking forward to the prize-giving ceremony? Sure! Itll b